Beautifully written, a the reader I can feel the emotions that were written into this piece. It makes me wish it was longer. If I had to give you a tip it would be to continue it and add onto it. Of course you don't have too but that's what I would do but of course you don't have to it is still beautiful either way! Thank you for sharing!
This poem was really touching and quite relatable. It really expresses your closeness with the characters and with poetry that is always the best way to write. Writing from within gives your poem that feeling of closeness and it is easily seen here in this piece. It truly is an amazing poem and I urge you to post it into a contest and see how it goes if you haven't already.
The only thing I'd say to fix which isn't really a mistake or error but some of your vocabulary could be extended and advanced just a bit and I think that would give your piece an even stronger base. But of course that isn't a must. Loved it, cant wait to read more from you!
I don't understand what your talking about improving but I take it as just in general. Improvement is really making something go from good to great and great to amazing. Now some might hate improvement but in a world like ours today nothing would change without improvement. I try to give the best detailed and descriptive improvements that I am able to, to show my support to the other person.
Wow is all I can say honestly, definitely not what I expected from the title. Very well written, I'm glad I read it. I would love to read more of your work.
Though one thing is capitalization of course its a common mistake we sometimes tend to miss during proof reads but other than that amazing piece!