Thank you for entering my poetry competition. All entries are valued for the time and effort put into writing them, and for my amusement, greatly appreciated.
I may have misread this poem, but to me it sounds like you criticizing and looking down upon he holy matrimony of marriage. Now i am not married, why, i am not even old enough really, to understand what marriage is really like, but surely it can't be that bad. maybe i was wrong,
The last two lines made me feel, to be honest, a little dissapointed. i was expecting to be dazzled by a quirky, stylised couplet that made me feel that, the description, fitted, but with a twist.. and i suppose it is a fitting ending. i just doesn't quite fit with my ideas.
There aren't any technical errors that i can see, and i cant fault the style. I just feel that a new 4 line stanza, maybe giving a positive spin on to marriage would make me more "happy"
But each one's poetry is his own, no matter what others think of it.
Thank you for your entrance into round 3, judgement of which poem I believe to be the winner will happen 2-4 days after the closing date.
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