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Review of From Yesterday  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an exciting story set in a Dungeons & Dragons style universe, you really seem to have a knack for writing in this style. I enjoyed this story, and there seems to be a set-up for a sequel.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this error: “Can’t you? You’re father was one the most powerful warlocks of his kind "You're" should be changed to "your"

What I liked: I liked how seamlessly you put together the different elements of this universe, you made this woirld seem real. I also like how you described coming out of the temple into the sunlight, you are an adept writer, you have the ability to make people visualize your words.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. As a person who is mentally disabled, I'm not required to work for a living because I get a check every month from the social security department. That being said, I found this poem about your daily work life interesting, because after many years at a minimum wage job, it must take a lot out of you when you realize that there is probably more that you could've accomplished in life. I feel your pain, despite not having personally experienced it myself.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't catch any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked your honest approach of listing how you feel about your job, it's obvious that you're just doing what you have to in order to get by. That's something a lot of us would do in your situation, and I'm sure others who are in your shoes can relate to this somewhat.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoyed this poem because I enjoy bowling, though I don't play it very often. It sounds like you have real passion for the sport. The last time I played it I was horrible at it compared to my relatives, but I got some strikes. I'd like to get better. This poem brought back memroies of times I've bowled.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the sense of action and urgency in this poem, I felt like I was there watching it!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You have an interesting sequence of events here, you have the ability to take ordinary events and make them engaging.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: It's amazing that you could take such an every-day concept like putting shoes and socks on and make it interesting!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item on the front page. I'm always interested in reading people's personal accounts of that day. You were young, I was 30, about 4 months away from turning 31. I was riding a bus to college when a lady came on board and informed us that a 747 had crashed into the World Trade Center. I think her exact words were "terrorists crashed 747's into the twin towers."

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked hearing of the genuine reactions and concern of your classmates, and your honesty.
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Review of A Road To Follow  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You did an excellent job of following the prompt, this poem is good in its own right and not just as something vontrived for a writing prompt.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: Thank you for taking the time to explain at the bottom of the page what type of poem this is, I know this is important to poets and others who are trying to learn more about poetry.
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Review of Last Chance  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I learned how to make sonnets when I took a creative writing class a year and a half ago. You did a good job, I enjoyed your sonnet.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the line about using quills from eagles' wings, that made this seem like an old time sonnet.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I like your voyage of discovery at the age of 12 when you first realized you were a writer. We all found out in different ways.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job! I do have a suggestion to add: maybe you can add the experience of family and friends and acquaintances and their reactions when they found out you wanted to be a writer, I know from personal experience when I was 16 and told people that I wanted to write that people who knew me were skeptical that I could do a good job. If you couold add an experience like that to this piece, i think it would improve it.

What I liked: I like how unique your biography is, your experience of realizing you were a writer.
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Review of Phobia Diagnosis  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item on the front page. I like your sense of humor! You did a good job of listing actual phobias straight out of a medical manual, followed by your own creative versions.

Errors/Suggestions: In the actual title, you misspelled "diagnosis" by leaving out the "n"

What I liked: I like the phobias you came up with, you have a good sense of humor that I can appreciate.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I think you did a good job of meeting the demands of the prompt, and you wove together a pretty interesting story. I like science fiction and fantasy, and you did a good job of blending these genres with humor to make a satisfying little story.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the science fiction element, and I enjoyed the innocence and humor of this story.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an interesting concept to write about, it never occurred to me to write about the day before I or anyone else was born; kudos to you for coming up with an original concept.

Errors/Suggestions: I'm not sure, but I think you mispelled chola, you spelled it with two "L's" but I've seen it spelled with only one.

What I liked: I like the scene you described, an Arizona day many years ago.
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Review of That Simple Smile  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an interesting and highly realistic story about a teenage girl and her teenage boyfriend, the tension you established between the father and the girl's boyfriend was intense. I could imagine myself in the teenage boy's shoes, sweating the moment.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked how plausible this scenario was, and the believibality of the characters.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I really enjoyed this, I like poems that tell a story. There was a lot of drama in this story/poem, you did a good job of establishing and maintaining tension until the very end.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like the ending, I wasn't sure if the protagonist was going to survive or not. I also liked the drama and rising tension you managed to establish.
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Review of The Storm  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a beautifully designed poem, I enjoyed it. I could picture the waves and the water around her ankles, you described a beautiful scene.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how this poem made me think of ancient times, with the mention of the lyre. It could also be in modern times, it is up to the interpretation of the individual reader.
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Review of Near the Fountain  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I don't always "get" a lot of poetry, but this one was fairly straight-forward and easy for me to comprehend. The fountain you described seemed like an interesting social gathering places where dynamic events occurred.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the contrasting experiences of the happy people and the couple that were breaking up; this showed that a variety of emotions could be felt at the fountain.
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Review of Turtles in Love  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You did a good job of making the poem rhyme, and at the same time telling a cohesive story. Sometimes it can be hard to make a poem rhyme, and at the same time have it make sense, because a word that rhymes with another word might seem to fit, but it throws off the meaning. You made these turtles seem interesting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: You really have a talent for breathing life into these two turtles and making them seem real.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. It seems you did some pretty rotten things when you were a kid, it makes me feel better because I thought some of the things I did were bad. It would be interesting if you could list the reasons you did some of these things, to see what your train of thought was.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the honesty of this comprehensive list. It took a lot of courage for you to admit these things, and I commend you for it.
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Review of Eyes of a Child  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I am the victim of physical abuse as a child, so I can relate to this somewhat despite not being sexually abused. The guilty adults do say the child lies, that's what people said about me when I tried to tell other adults what they were doing.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked being able to relate to the problems you described here, despite not having the identical issue you were writing about.
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Review of My Idol  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. It was interesting to read about your inspiration, and how you felt betrayed by her over time. We've all had people we looked up to in our youth, and sometimes those people fall short of perfection, but we don't realize that until we're older.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like this because so many people can relate to it, people we looked up to but after time we realized they weren't always there for us. I would be interested in knowing more about this person in a response from you, and what they did to betray you.
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Review of Willow Wonderland  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an interesting story, I find the life stories of real people like this more interesting than fiction.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this error: attempting to catch me in there net. "there" should be changed to "their." You switched from first person to third person perspective quite suddenly, and for the first half of the story I thought the character you were writing about was a boy, you need to go back and edit it and introduce the fact that the main character is female earlier in the story.

What I liked: I'm glad the father decided to become a part of the kid's life instead of abandoning her.
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Review of Under the Gun  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I like poems like this that tell a story, and this was even more interesting because it appeared to be based on a real life experience.

Errors/Suggestions: I found no technical errors of any kind, great job!

What I liked: The ordeal your protagonist went through was chilling, but very realistic and believable. I enjoyed the drama that played out, and I was glad the person survived.
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Review of Autumn Afternoon  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I really like this poem, it reminded me of an area I hiked above Lake Tahoe this summer, you did a good job of putting the reader mentally inside the world you created.

Errors/Suggestions: I found no technical errors of any kind, great job!

What I liked: I liked how I was able to visualize the scene you described with your adept use of the right words.
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Review of Mildred  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This item interested me because it deals with a super hero, but to make it more interesting, Mildred's power borders on what is actually possible; I believe there are people who have abilities like this.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you chose to do this exercise without repeating any of the words twice, that must have been really difficult. I feel you did an outstanding job!
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Review of Brain Fog  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoyed reading this, it's interesting to get a different take on the meaning of life and the universe from several different perspectives.

Errors/Suggestions: I found a misspelled word: controling and another: posotulate

What I liked: I liked reading about different theories about the universe from different sources.
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Review of A Star is Rising  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. It is nice that you are paying tribute to the rising stars of Writing.com, this poem reflected that. I also like the work of a lot of the people on this site, there are some good writers.

Errors/Suggestions: I think I spotted an error: For sharing you life the "you" needs to be changed to "your'

What I liked: I like all the positive things you had to say about the rising stars of Writing.com!
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