|Hi Clown, I was honored to give a review on "no guardians" and I will do my best.
I was very impressed, thought you did a great job in its format, use of words
and expression. I felt it hit home, now, for what is happening in our country.
I felt the heart of it tugging at mine. Are we in the "calm before the storm?", yes
I believe we are.
It has a negative feel, but given its message, it must. The first stanza gives us
all a question we, as individuals, must answer. Will we take the challenge? Most won't.
If we avoid a thing maybe it will go away. But people like yourself and me, we will ask
and know we must fine answers; others, look the other way.
The second stanza help relate what is wrong. Broken dreams, not just for you or me, but
for all peoples of the world. But this is a cycle, right? It happens for every generation, the
questions, hopefully some answers, some good results.
Your poem is doing its job, at least for me. Our society, in America, right now have some
difficult questions to ask and answer.
The third stanza is mixed for me. Yes, we march to a beat but I think many are out of step
and do not realize it. Politics have divided us as a nation; what is the answer? To pull us
back in. We cannot give up hope!
Your fourth stanza probably should start with a capital "C". I find no other grammatical errors.
As a believer in our Lord, I challenge your phrase: "...no guardian or protectors left to fight,
it no longer matters what people believe,". This, my friend, is the problem. In this country, we grew as a nation of believers in a higher power. We have become a people who believe in self as creator, independent of our true Creator and have convinced ourselves and others we do not need our Creator and can do it all by ourselves. It truly matters what we believe and through prayer and repentance can turn this mess around. (enough of my belief)
Your have an excellent piece here, I believe, and may even wish to expand on it. I look forward to
more of your writing, especially along these lines.