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Hello BasementKid, how are you? A belated welcome to WDC. I hope you are enjoying your time here. I have just read your item, "Song," which I found on the random reviews, and thought i would leave some comments.
This makes me wonder what song you were listening to. I could not name a favourite song, I have so many.
I like the way you describe the guitars and the bass and how you can not resist that foot tapping.
I do think the piece is a little short, however, I enjoyed what I read.
Hello gaudil0cks , how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, " In The Company Of Great Men," which I found on the random reviews, and thought i would l;eave some comments.
What a great poem. I think all writers can relate to this one. While everyone else sleeps, we are either reading or writing.
I love this verse:
"So in the still of the night
When all are soundly in bed,
I sit here in my library,
In the company of great men."
I love the title, however, we must not forget the great women too.
Hello Brittany James, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, " Embrace Yourself," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I personally, love inspirational poetry. This one is very good and so true. So many people cannot see how powerful they are, if they only got out there and followed their dreams.
Hello Pandora9, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your little poem, " When Words Aren't Enough," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
It is difficult to find the right words when this sort of thing happens, however, you have said it all in just a few words.
Hello internet addiction, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, "The Truth," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I love to read poetry about the wars and write quite a few of them.
I enjoyed your poem very much, however, I would like to see it tightened up a bit, for example the syllable count. You will find it will read much better.
Hello Sharpe as a Tack , how are you. A belated welcome to WDC. I hope you are enjoying your time here. have just read your item, "Sidewalk Troubles," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
Funny little letter to a paving stone. I think, everywhere we walk, there tends to be one uneven stone that everyone trips on. I have tripped many times.
In your first line: "Dear that One Damn Piece of Sidewalk that is Slightly Higher than the rest of it," I am not sure why you have words starting with capitals and not others.
Also I wonder if you could make it a little longer to add to the comedy?
Hello R.D.Page, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your item, " Daddy And Me," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
This is very sad and too often true. "Monster Daddy," or indeed Mummy is probably how most children, in this situation, see them.
Hello WritingWalter, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, "It's A Big World After All, " which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
Long distance relationships, or even friendships are never easy. You describe this well in your poem. The only I did not understand is this one:"Let’s be honest - you can can it." Does canning it mean finishing it?
Hello Moira Amelia Lockhart, how are you? I have just read your poem, " My Sister," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
It is nice to have a sibling, whether younger or older, to have fun with. Your sister sounds like lots of fun.
I liked your poem describing her, however, I not sure about this line: "Tickling me until I pee myself," it sort of makes a tasteful poem not so tasteful. However, that is just my opinion.
Hello Kayde Starfall, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your item, "Universally Void, " which I found on the Random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I understand this is just an introduction as to what you are going to write about. However, you say you will refer to the person whom you have fallen for as, "YKW or that person." Just a little advice, I would make up a name as readers will not want to be read YKW, and will tend to become bored with the story. A name would be much nicer and make the person come to life in the readers mind.
Hello Happily Sad, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your item, "Hope," which I found on the random reviews and thought I would leave some comments.
I agree we should never give up hope. It is also true that boys do not always have to take the first step.
I wonder if you could put a little more into this. Tell us the story of how you got the one you wanted and what or who was trying to ruin it. As it is it just reads like a list rather than a story of inspiration.
Hello rugile, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your story, " My Fear," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
First of all you have this listed as an essay, when it is a little story really.
Charlie was lucky to have woken from the coma.
Suggestions: The first line, "There was a party in a hotel where this little boy's birthday party was."
You have already started by saying there was a party in the hotel and then say the little boys party was there. I think something like," A little boy was having his birthday party in a hotel."
Also this part "His name was Charlie and he's 10 years old." By saying his name was Charlie sounds like he is no longer here. It would read better something like," His name is Charlie and he is ten years old."
Hello Rhychus. how are you? I have just read your poem, "Where Do Ghosts And Ghouls Go," while browsing things to read, and thought i would leave some comments.
I like this it made laugh especially the thought of Wolfman working in a salon in his spare time.
Great rhythm and rhyme and I have no suggestions for improvement.
Hello Kayla_Burns92, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, "Days Go By," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I think at times we all go through these feelings.
A very moving poem, which I believe many could relate to.
Hello HannahChatelier , how are you? I have just read your poem, "The Boy With The Fire In His Eyes," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
What a very sad story of a young runaway boy.
I liked the emotion you put into this, it kept my attention.
The last verse left me wondering if he had died or not.
Hello Audrey, how are you? I have just read your poem, "Bitter Love," which I found on the random reviews and thought I would leave some comments.
It is difficult indeed when we have a love for someone and it is not returned.
I like your poem, however, I do find some lines rather too long. For example this one:
"She was by nature rough, rude and lazy but when Nicholas was near you should have seen how polite she’d pretend."
I think if the syllable count is off as much as this, it makes the rhyme seem out of place.
Hello Murdoc, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your item, "Murdocs Diary," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
Just to let you know you can use your blog for this, depending on what type of membership you have.
Also, if you are going to use the word thingy, it is thingy not thingie and jus is just.
Hello Patty, how are you? I have just read your story, " The Old Man And The Coin," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I love finding a coin, I think it is always lucky.
I enjoyed your little story about the old mans coin. He certainly did have luck!
The only suggestion I have is this line: "(It was like he lost the coin and he found it). I am not sure it needs the brackets, or the explanation perhaps.
Hello Cyanide , how are you? Welcome to WDC, I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your poem, "3/18/15," which I found on the random reviews and thought I would leave some comments.
A tiny poem about time. Yes sometimes it does pass quickly and other times slow. I suppose it depends on what we are doing.
I am little confused by these lines: "
Sometimes quick,
Others like molasses"
Molasses is a syrup that remains after sugar is processed, black treacle. Perhaps you mean that it takes a long time for the process?
Hello Sharpe as a Tack, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here. I have just read your item, "The Silver Lining," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
War is indeed an ugly thing.
Your piece is very short and not very descriptive.
I cannot see what the silver lining is, perhaps you could elaborate?
Hello MaryQuinn, how are you? Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy your time here, I have just read your poem, " Cats," which I found on the random reviews and thought I would leave some comments.
Cats seem to be a popular topic in poetry, I have written a few on cats myself, though mostly humourous.
I like your description of the cat, reminds me of mine, but then, they all behave in that arrogant way.
I am not sure of this line: "sitting there looking so fluffy you been there and not even known it. " I cannot make out what you mean, it does not seem to make sense.
Hello Son Nguyen, how are you? I hope you are enjoying your time on WDC, I have just read your poem, "The Bore," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I can completely relate to this. There is nothing worse than the company you are supposed to be keeping spending all their time on their phone!
While I like the poem and what it is about, I am not sure I like all the thees and thous, I prefer simplicity.
However, it is your poem and this is just my preference.
Hello Irina, how are you? I have just read your poem, " Before You Are A Man Like All The Rest," which I found on the random reviews, and thought I would leave some comments.
I enjoyed this poem, I suppose to the reader it could have a few meanings. I interpreted it as a dream. Someone seen in a dream and the poet not wanting him to be like the rest.
My favourite line is:
"Those little deaths that bring us back to life. "
Thank you for sharing.
Sanita
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