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Review of Disease Spreads.  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly, though I was unsure which is actually the "true" title since "Spreading..." within the item felt like a title to me, but did not match the item title.

Sunrise: (Contents)
The free verse form worked well with your words to keep everything moving along. Everything was simple to follow and understand. The flow, however, felt like it could be a little smoother to me...*Blush*

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
The imagery is very vivid; wonderful job there! The emotion comes by way of fear and is definitely heightened by the superb imagery! Great job!

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Bullet*The tense changes from present to past to present a few times which distracted me a bit.
         *Bullet*In Line 6: Comma after "drips"?
         *Bullet*In Line 10: spoke,[ ]" -Missing space
         *Bullet*In Line 18: The first comma felt a bit unnecessary to me. Also, I think your should be you're.

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
This is well-written and very vivid... I'm glad that it's early in the day or this could give me some horrible nightmares! *Blush*

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

Sunrise: (Contents)
The aabb rhyme scheme worked very well with your words to keep everything moving right along without any rhymes feeling forced. Everything was simple to follow and understand, though I did feel a few hiccups in the flow.

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
The personal contents is sure to bring plenty of images to the forefront of the reader's mind while reading --especially those who have a son! The emotion comes through clearly; it is simple to feel the love and admiration in each line. Very well done!

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Bullet*There were a few places (such as Stanza 2, Lines 1/2) where a thought feels broken up by a comma.
         *Bullet*Stanza 4, Line 4: lost,[ ]sad - Missing space.
         *Bullet*I think the main thing that hindered the flow for me is the punctuation. I think that reading this out loud might help with it a bit...

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
This is very touching and well-written. Your sons are so lucky to have such a doting mother! *Wink*

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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TITLE, ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

FORM & FLOW:
The aabb rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep everything moving along at a nice rhythm without any rhymes feeling forced. Everything was simple to follow and understand and flowed smoothly from beginning to end. *Delight*

IMAGERY & EMOTION:
The imagery, I think, will depend on the reader, but the emotion is just spot-on. This had me smiling and mourning, laughing and tearing-up all at once... Tremendous job!

SUGGESTIONS & TYPOS:
         *Bullet*I did not notice any typos nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

OVERALL & RATING:
This is a wonderful tribute to a man that I think everyone loved dearly. I felt good smiling while reading this... I think that's what he would have wanted. You did a magnificent job of carrying on his memory... I really don't know what else I can say.

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Review of Druid Forests  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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TITLE, ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

FORM & FLOW:
First, thank you for the note on the form! *Delight* You stuck well to the form and everything was simple to follow and understand. The flow was smooth from beginning to end and I did not feel any hiccups while reading. *Thumbsup*

IMAGERY & EMOTION:
This definitely stirred my emotions and left me with a strong feeling of mourning, but the imagery is what truly made this poem for me. Not only could I easily envision everything, but it all came to life before my eyes. Very vivid and real!

SUGGESTIONS & TYPOS:
         *Bullet*The only thing that I noticed was in the third line of the second stanza... I counted an extra syllable here; I think it could be because of history which tends to be said like two but is usually three syllables in dictionaries...

OVERALL & RATING:
I absolutely LOVE this poem! The history and imagery are very real and just blew me away. A truly wonderful read!

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genre all fit this poem perfectly (Though I think that the last two "Emotional" could be replaced with other genres... Maybe Personal, Relationship or Experience?).

Sunrise: (Contents)
The flow was smooth, though I did feel like it could have been a little smoother (really, though, I think it's just me and the personal preference of punctuation...). I was surprised that the repeated words did not feel more redundant, which is great! Everything was simple to follow and understand.

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
The imagery, to me, is very reader driven; I think that every reader will be picturing a certain someone as they read. The emotion is simple to detect and feel. I could easily feel the longing behind the words ...great job!

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Bullet*The last line felt just a flat to me. I'm not sure the why exactly, but it just didn't seem to have the same weight as the rest of the poem...

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
This is well-written and I love the emotion throughout this poem!

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review of Room at the End  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem very well, though the title did give me a pause for a second or two. I'm not sure what it is about it, exactly. It doesn't quite sound like a hospital room (maybe because, here, they're all three digits, so that would explain that feeling) or maybe because, in the poem, it feels like the couple might be at home since they seem to share a bed... As I said, not sure exactly, but I thought I should say something. *Wink*

Sunrise: (Contents)
Go you for handling this form like a champ! (It always seems so scary when I read the description... I swear I'll try it ...someday...). You stuck very well to the form and everything flow quite smoothly from beginning to end. Great job!

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
The imagery was vivid throughout, but the emotion was what really stole the show. Not only did you make the prompt your own, but you created a character and told such a story that, I think, it would be impossible for anyone to read this and not have the whole thing yanking on their heartstrings!

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Bullet*I did not notice any typos. The flow felt like it could have been a touch smoother in a few places the first time I read this but, of course, I couldn't find them when I read this through the second [or the third] time... *Blush*

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
This poem is well-written and I think that you handled the subject of Dementia with tact, heart, and gentleness. Your word choice is great and I really enjoyed this poem. Thank you for sharing it!

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review of Gazing  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genre all fit this poem very well, though I do think that the description could use a word or two more insight into the poem and that "Nature" could be another genre... *Wink*

Sunrise: (Contents)
You stuck well to the form, though I did notice one possible missing syllable. The rhymes did not feel forced and everything flowed pretty smoothly from beginning to end. *Delight*

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
This imagery was vivid throughout this poem. I could easily see it all as I read which furthered the feelings that were being stirred inside of me. Great job, Mr. Jace! *Kiss*

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Bullet*In Stanza 2, Line 4, I wonder if a semi-colon might work a touch better than the comma here...
         *Bullet*In Stanza 4, Line 1, the words fires threw off my syllable count. Yes, I say it like it's two syllables two, but it's generally considered as one in dictionaries...

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
I really enjoyed this poem --and greatly appreciate your note on the form! *Smile* This is well-written and took me away. (Thank you... I needed a little vacation!). You captured the image perfectly, but, better than that, I could see it all without the image. A lovely poem, my friend!

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review of A Moment In Life  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Vine1*Hello, Ruwth!*Vine2*


*Quill*FIRST GLANCE
          *Vine1*Title: Fits perfectly.
         *Vine1*Description: *Thumbsup*
          *Vine1*Rating: Appropriate.
         *Vine1*Genre(s): All fit very well.

*Quill*LOOKING DEEPER
          *Vine2*Narrative: I enjoyed the conversation feeling of this piece. Not only could I easily follow and understand everything, but it really felt like we were chatting over coffee.
         *Vine2*Grammar: The grammar is well done, though the first sentence should end with a comma rather than a period. The only other thing that caught my attention is the word "sudsy" being used fairly close together in this short piece; maybe replace one with a synonym (Not bubbly as bubble is used quite a bit as well... Perhaps the first instance of "sudsy" could be something like slick, soapy surface?)
          *Vine2*Flow: This flowed smoothly from beginning to end. The only hiccups I felt were those mentioned above.

*Quill*FEELING THE WORDS
          *Vine1*Imagery: Not only could I envision everything as I read, but I saw an everyday scene in a new way. This was not just seen, but experienced which is wonderful!
          *Vine1*Emotion: This made me feel very relaxed... and regretful for having not read it BEFORE doing dishes today. *Rolleyes* I love that this made an everyday chore a complete and refreshing experience. The outlook throughout this piece really blew me away!
         *Vine1*Characters: Oh, the narrator is a character alright, but this doesn't really apply here, now does it? *Wink*

*Quill*FLYING AWAY
          *Vine2*Overall Thoughts: This is well-written and very creative. I cannot even tell you how much I love what you transformed this simple chore into! It are those simple moments in life that we so rarely stop to appreciate that can encompass so much more than we realize --and you show that here. I will never roll my eyes at a sink of dishes again!
         *Vine2*Rating: I'm going with a 4.5 rating because of those little things mentioned in the grammar section, but I really love love love this piece! GREAT job, my friend!

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Review of Shrug  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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TITLE, ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

FORM & FLOW:
This flowed pretty smoothly, however, I think that the extra line skipped between each line made each one feel a bit detached from the next. The changing rhyme scheme was another thing that, to me, created a bump in the flow. The only rhyme that felt forced was equation/garden, but I'm not fully sure if you even meant for them to rhyme. *Blush* It was all simple to follow and understand, but I think that the somewhat bumpy flow took away from your message fully getting through.

IMAGERY & EMOTION:
The imagery felt mainly reader-driven, making images and memories come to the forefront of my mind while reading. The emotion was primarily thought-provoking which I loved. This not only relayed your own thoughts very well, but also stirred my own pot of thoughts and left me in an incredibly reflective mood. *Delight*

SUGGESTIONS & TYPOS:
         *Bullet*Other than the line-spacing, I think that indenting lines 5 and 8 might help with the change of rhyme scheme.

OVERALL & RATING:
I really love the thought-provoking and reflective feelings that I got from this poem. There's hope in that ending that you rarely find in such poems. I'm going with a 4.0 rating only because of the flow, but the idea is just wonderful!

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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TITLE, ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genre all fit this poem perfectly. (Just so I don't forget to say this later in the review: Thanks, I'll have "Mustang Sally" in my head for the rest of the day now!) *Laugh*

FORM & FLOW:
You stuck very well to the form. I did not count even one misplaced syllable (Don't ask me about the meter, though...Meter and I don't mesh well). No rhymes felt forced which helped to keep everything moving along. Everything was simple to follow and understand. *Delight*

IMAGERY & EMOTION:
The imagery is lovely which added to my smile and laughter at the words! The whole scene --wonderful! This was quite a freeing poem to read; Can I join you in that world? *Wink*

SUGGESTIONS & TYPOS:
         *Bullet*Maybe a comma after yea in the last line (It also felt like having the yea in all capital letters took away from the impact of the me in all caps...)?
         *Bullet*While the flow was fairly smooth, I did feel like it could somehow be smoother... I'm not sure how, though. *Blush*

OVERALL & RATING:
I enjoyed taking this little trip with you! It was a great pick-me-up; thank you for the smiles! I think that you did a great job writing this. I'm going with a 4.5 just because of the suggestions, but I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem! Great job!

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Review of Sea of Humanity  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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TITLE, ETC:
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly. (I was surprised, though, that "Environment" was not one of the chosen genres...)

FORM & FLOW:
Everything was simple to follow and understand. The free verse form worked well with your words to keep everything moving along, however, the flow felt like it could have been a bit smoother.

IMAGERY & EMOTION:
The everyday imagery throughout this poem really made it come to life before my eyes which made it hit home. You described the modern world to a "T". I could feel the loneliness of the words --and felt bad that I generally don't bother to notice the people around me when I'm out and about. *Blush*

SUGGESTIONS & TYPOS:
         *Suitheart*The first line, to me, felt a little awkward. The word tread felt out of place, I guess, since it would mean to walk and, when linked with the word sea, it creates an almost confusing image. I think that a word closer to showing an act related to swimming might work a bit better here...
         *Heart*The fourth line felt a little flat to me. While it did add to the thought of the third line, I think that something was lost a little bit here. Perhaps add a word akin to currents to emphasize the hurry?
         *Suitheart*Line 6 felt very long compared to the others... Maybe start a new line after blackberries?
         *Heart*Since the final line is linked to the ninth, but shows a different action, I think that adding a comma at the end of the ninth line would improve the flow here.

OVERALL & RATING:
I think that there's a lot to be said for this short poem. You managed to capture so much of what has become everyday life in just a few short lines. The way that the hustle and bustle and lack of real contact can have an impact on an individual is not only show here, but you also relay the sadness of what society is becoming; it is becoming cold, technological and quite inhumane. I think that a little edit would really improve this poem, so I'm going with a 4.0 rating, but I really can't tell you how much I love what you've portrayed. Very thought-provoking!

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Review of Lost  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly.

Sunrise: (Contents)
You stuck wonderfully to this tricky [and frustrating!] form. I'm amazed by how the repeated lines never felt redundant; You definitely chose the perfect words to surround them and give them more weight with each repetition. *Delight* No rhymes felt forced, everything was simple to follow and understand, and the flow was smooth from beginning to end. *Thumbsup*

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
The imagery is superb and brought up memories for me which just added even more weight to your words and furthered the emotional impact of the poem. I could feel the sadness and loss behind the words and truly wanted to jump through the computer and hug you! *Blush*

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Sun*I did not notice any typos nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
I really don't know what more I can say about this poem. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it from the first word to well after the last. I think that you did a magnificent job and I love it... Thank you for sharing this poem! *Kiss*

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review of A Day on the Farm  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, description, and chosen genres all fit this item perfectly, however, I think that the rating should be a notch higher due to the content...

Sunrise: (Contents)
Everything was simple to follow and understand. The flow felt like it could be a little smoother, but there were no major hiccups that caused me to have to reread any portion. The thing that caught me the most is that this is written almost like a children's story, but the contents are definitely not suited for a young age group. It made it a bit hard for me to fully know how to take things...

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
It was easy to envision everything and I definitely felt for the roosters, however, I wonder how much of that came from my love of animals rather than the story. The dialogue made them come to life a bit more, but I think that the reader-character connection could be stronger.

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Bullet*Calling the main character Farmer Sam at the beginning made this feel almost like a child's story. Maybe say "Sam" and then refer to him as the farmer in the next mentioning of him. This would also keep away any feelings of redundancy at the beginning.
         *Bullet*Charley changes to Charlie about halfway through the story.
         *Bullet*There are several onomatopoeias used which came through clearly, however, I think that italicizing them might improve the flow and clarity where they are used.
         *Bullet*One question keeps coming to mind: Why would he kill three? That's a lot for one man's dinner!*Blush*

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
I think that this is a good story, though I also think that it could be made better with just a little more attention paid to it. This could definitely be related to several situations in life if taken a different way which is something that I really like. *Thumbsup*

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review of Roses in Heaven  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your work with us on Writing.Com. After reading your piece, these are the thoughts left in my mind:

*ButterflyV*My Initial Reaction:
First of all, I am so sorry for your loss. *Kiss* I truly hope that you found writing this poem to be therapeutic.

*ButterflyB*What I Liked Most:
I love the heartfelt feeling of this poem, as well as the honesty of the words. This truly read like meaningful thought and put tears in my eyes.

*ButterflyV*Suggestions / Typos I noticed:
         *ButterflyB*While the capitalization at the beginning of each line, I know, if a personal preference thing, the word Roses in Line 1 need not be capitalized.
         *ButterflyB*In Line 3, arm's should be arms.
         *ButterflyB*The word funny in Line 6 seemed to have a much different feeling from the rest of the poem, much more lighthearted which made me wonder if it was something between you and your mother or if the word is just out of place...*Blush*

*ButterflyB*How It Made Me Feel:
Sad and mournful, yet comforted. My mother is still with us, but this definitely reminded me of many loved ones who have passed. Such comfort is not always the easiest thing to find, but you really nailed it here.

*ButterflyV*My Overall Thoughts & Rating:
This poem flowed smoothly from beginning to end and no rhymes felt forced. The emotion comes through with every word and I could feel the love and soul in each line. Beautiful job, my dear. While, yeah, a few little things could be tweaked, I cannot deny such an emotional, heartfelt piece a 5 star rating. This definitely said much more than the words on the screen. Thank you for sharing this, Winnie. *Kiss*

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Stephanie Grace*Writing*
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Review of Tradition!  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dawn: (Title, etc)
The title, rating, and chosen genres all fit this item perfectly, as does the description, though I do think the description might take a bit away from the ending... *Blush*

Sunrise: (Contents)
This was simple to follow and understand. The flow was quite smooth with only one or two hiccups that gave me pause...

Noon: (Imagery, Emotion)
I found this to be fun yet very thought-provoking. This definitely works for much more than church, too, which I love! Some traditions just... *Worry* *Laugh* The imagery is good, yet still reader-driven with memories coming to the forefront of the reader's mind. *Thumbsup* Very easy to relate to, I believe!

Sunset: (Suggestions)
         *Star*This could just be me nit-picking, but I think that the note in the beginning might be better placed before the title...
         *Star*Again, this could just be me but I had it drilled into my head that you never start a sentence with the word but, so I figured I should mention it since there are two instances of that in this item.
         *Star*church[,] and on his... - I think that this comma might be better placed after the and since and is needed to make the sentence complete, but on through announced is the added detail.
         *Star*towards - No need for the s at the end of the word...
         *Star*People back.... - This sentence felt a little out of place to me... Perhaps it might feel more natural before the sentence beginning That wall had long...?

Dusk: (Overall thoughts)
I love the message of this piece. It really left me thinking... and I love that I was smiling all the way through this article! It is well-written and just an overall enjoyable read! *Delight* Thank you for sharing it!!!

*Moon*Write On!*Moon*
*RainbowL*Stephanie Grace*RainbowR*

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I can't see how a group could be rated less than a 5.0... Well, I guess I could, but, not this one! I, however, am going to review the stuff before the members list. *Wink*

Everything is very well-organized and it's simple to differentiate one group from the next. I do, however, have a few humble suggestions that popped into head...
         *Bullet*While it's simple to distinguish writers from sponsors, the boldness of a majority of the names does make it a bit blah to look at... What about {indent}ing the sponsors? (Or even putting them in a dropnote beneath each writer's name?).
         *Bullet*This really has nothing to do with the visual appeal or ANYTHING, but what about asking each group to come up with a motto or something for the group? It could help them unite before their endeavor which would help with them cheering each other on, I think...*Blush*

Other than that, all the appropriate links are provided and everything is clearly stated! *Thumbsup*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Folder Name:
Fits the folder perfectly. *Thumbsup*

Description:
Again, fits perfectly --and would definitely pique my interest if I didn't already know what it held! *Laugh* The content rating and chosen genres also fit perfectly.

Organization:
This is organized quite well, though I do think the actual forum should be the first item to appear. *Wink*

Contents:
The contents are all well-suited to this folder and are clearly explained in their descriptions.

Overall Thoughts:
A very self-explanatory folder, but one that didn't have any ratings, so I had to give it one! *Laugh* Very well done, SP Bro! Good organization skills all throughout your port! (Think I can borrow some of those skills sometimes?) *Blush**Laugh*


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Review of Cemetery Hill  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR*The Invitation: (Title, etc)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly

*BalloonB*The Banners: (Contents)
Everything was simple to follow and understand. The aabb rhyme scheme worked very well with your words to keep everything moving along without any rhymes feeling too forced. I found the flow to be very smooth, though I think that it could be just a smidgen smoother in a few places --these minor hiccups, listed below, however, did not take anything away from the poem, in my opinion.

*BalloonR*The Ribbons: (Imagery, Emotion)
The imagery is simple and therefore very easy to envision. The emotion, though, is truly the backbone of this poem. Not only could I feel the love and loss of the words, but I mourned with you with each line. Beautiful!

*BalloonB*The Confetti: (Suggestions)
         *CheckB*In the second line, I felt myself taking a tiny pause after there. Perhaps add a comma? It could just be, though. *Blush*
         *CheckB*In Line 3, there should be a space after Of. Also, maybe commas after course and come?
         *CheckB*Line 5: Comma after peace.
         *CheckB*In the last line, comma after son?

*BalloonR*The Party: (Overall Thoughts)
The love and beauty of this poem is incredibly touching. This is a beautiful testament of the eternal love you feel for your brother. I had tears in my eyes for a while after reading this... Just... Beautifully written!

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Review of Time  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review gifted by your friend, fyn

*ButterflyV*My Initial Reaction:
Very strong message; something I think that many of us can relate to!

*ButterflyB*What I Liked Most:
I love the ease with which I relate to your words as well as relating them to many different instances in life. Great job!

*ButterflyV*Suggestions / Typos I noticed:
I did not notice any typos, however, I felt like something faltered in the fifth line. It did not seem to carry the same tune or weight as the rest of the poem... The same could also be said of line six, I guess, but I think that perhaps line 6 was written to carry out the rhyme scheme? *Blush*

*ButterflyB*How It Made Me Feel:
It made me feel like none of us have enough time and I mourned for those who have run out of it completely. We never know when we won't have anymore at all, do we? *sigh*

*ButterflyV*My Overall Thoughts & Rating:
You stuck very well to the form and the addition of rhyme was really amazing! How in the world does one accomplish a feat like that? *Starstruck* The weight of this poem and reflective mood it left me in truly just floored me. Wonderful job! I'm going with a 4.5 rating because of that tiny little hiccup I felt, but I think this is an awesome poem!

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Review of The Triangle  
Review by Stephanie Grace
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Quill*FIRST GLANCE
          *Vine1*Title: Fits very well! (And, might I add, I appreciate that you did not go with the obvious title choice!).
          *Vine1*Description: Fits perfectly.
          *Vine1*Rating: Appropriate.
          *Vine1*Genre(s): *Thumbsup* on all counts here.

*Quill*LOOKING DEEPER
          *Vine2*Narrative: It was simple to follow everything and the third-person POV worked very well with the story to keep the reader intrigued --It certainly held my attention very well! The simplicity of the language and a tone that felt like it was just stating the facts kept everything simple to understand.
         *Vine2*Grammar: A few minor things poked at me, but nothing too major...
         *Vine1*Paragraph One: advance[,] and... - This comma felt unnecessary as and is only linking two things together. *There were a few instances of such commas before and. *Wink*
         *Vine1*Paragraph 2: man[,] now - See above.
         *Vine1*Paragraph 17: hold [your] breath... - Missing word?
          *Vine2*Flow: This story flowed quite well from beginning to end without too many hiccups bogging my reading! *Wink*

*Quill*FEELING THE WORDS
          *Vine1*Imagery: The simple, everyday settings made it easy to envision everything from beginning to end.
         *Vine1*Emotion: With the very well-written buildup of this story, I was on the edge of my seat! And then got a nice hearty laugh at the end! (And, okay, a *Smirk* too...)
          *Vine1*Characters: The characters are developed quite well though there's not a strong attachment/connection made. My feelings toward them were the same I feel of the people on the crime shows I watch too much. *Bigsmile*

*Quill*FLYING AWAY
          *Vine2*Overall Thoughts: I really enjoyed reading this story and LOVE the ending! Nicely done!!! You wrote yourself some slick characters with this one!
         *Vine2*Rating: I'm going with a 4.5 only because of those little hiccups in the flow which were not many, so perhaps just a minute or of attention to make this a 10.0 story? *Wink*

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Review of A Zephyr's Kiss  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review gifted by your friend, fyn

*ButterflyV*My Initial Reaction:
The wording is beautiful; I found this whole poem quite enchanting!

*ButterflyB*What I Liked Most:
The wording, the message, and the ease with which I could see this poem being related to different experiences and situations in life.

*ButterflyV*Suggestions / Typos I noticed:
I think that adding a few more punctuation marks throughout the poem could make the flow smoother; Perhaps try reading this aloud? The only other thing that caught my attention was the word Bravo! in the last stanza. It seemed to really change the tone and, to me, just didn't seem to fit with the language of the rest of the poem.

*ButterflyB*How It Made Me Feel:
I found a good range of emotions while reading this poem and was left smiling and feeling at peace, relaxed... Beautifully done!

*ButterflyV*My Overall Thoughts & Rating:
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem! Everything was simple to follow and understand and I absolutely love the way it left me feeling. I'm going with a 4.5 rating because I think that the flow could be smoother, but this is truly just a beautiful poem! I love it!

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Review of Boring.  
Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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My Feelings:
The build-up was absolutely terrific! I could feel the yawn behind the words and then... Well, this is a public review, so they'll just have to click to find out! *Pthb* Your word choice is wonderful!

My Suggestions:
*CheckB*The only thing I can think to say here is about the second sentence... Maybe italicize this sentence and replace the preceding with a period with a comma to make this seem more like a thought than observation?
*CheckB*After the third sentence, maybe start a new paragraph to heighten the already very tense suspense?

My Thoughts:
I really enjoyed reading this and think that you did a WONDERFUL job with so few words! It's simple to see why this took first place!


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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Vine1*MESSAGE*Vine2*


*Quill*FIRST GLANCE
          *Vine1*Title: This fits very well, though it felt misleading to me. *Blush* (My brain automatically thought it would be a figurative mask and be something deeply emotional with some weighty message of "this is who I am"; I'm glad it wasn't like that... I wasn't in the mood for that.) *Wink*
          *Vine1*Description: *Thumbsup*
          *Vine1*Rating: 'Tis appropriate.
         *Vine1*Genre(s): All fit perfectly.

*Quill*LOOKING DEEPER
          *Vine2*Narrative: The simple language used throughout the poem kept everything very easy to follow and understand. This definitely felt like a classic tale being told by a storyteller.
         *Vine2*Grammar: The capitalization at every line felt a little awkward to me as it made me look to see if I'd missed a punctuation mark, but I know that's just me and nothing more than preference. In the second stanza, line two, there are two periods at the end.
         *Vine2*Flow: The aabbcc rhyme scheme worked quite well with your words to keep everything moving right along without any rhymes feeling too forced. The flow was pretty smooth throughout, though I did detect a hiccup here and there when I read this poem the first time.

*Quill*FEELING THE WORDS
          *Vine1*Imagery: The imagery is pretty classic and therefore simple to envision.
         *Vine1*Emotion: I felt bad for the sister, but cannot say that I really felt for the actual main character. While I knew her plight and could understand it, I couldn't tell why it seemed to bother her or if it truly bothered her at all.
         *Vine1*Characters: See above.

*Quill*FLYING AWAY
          *Vine2*Overall Thoughts: I really enjoyed this poem, though I think that it could use another minute or two of attention. The sudden change at the end came as a surprise to me as there was nothing really leading to it. Perhaps another line or two of mention to what happened after they me --This could also be because you mention the spell being broken which made me wonder more about why the prince took such an abrupt notice... I guess I just felt like the transition and quickness at the end was a bit jarring... *Blush* Okay, I'll stop talking in circles now. All in all, I thought this was a creative tale and know that any little girl would love to have this poem read to them!
         *Vine2*Rating: I'm saying a 4.5 only because I think that, with another minute or two of attention, this poem could easily be pushed beyond a 5.0!

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Quill*FIRST GLANCE
          *Vine1*Title: Fits very well.
         *Vine1*Description: *Thumbsup*
          *Vine1*Rating: Appropriate. *Smile* (Though the fourth sentence could be taken as a higher-rated comment!) *Wink*
          *Vine1*Genre(s): Perfect fits!

*Quill*LOOKING DEEPER
          *Vine2*Narrative: Everything was simple to follow and understand. The lighthearted yet spooky tone was very well-done! I can just picture little children huddling together while listening to this!
          *Vine2*Grammar: There's wasn't much that caught my attention here, except a stray comma or two as well as an instance or two (as in the fourth sentence) where I felt like an exclamation point might serve the tone of the sentence better than a period.
         *Vine2*Flow: Other than those little nit-picky things above, the flow was quite smooth from beginning to end.

*Quill*FEELING THE WORDS
          *Vine1*Imagery: It was simple for my mind to conjure up some images, but I felt that the imagery could be a little stronger. Being for children, of course, I could see this easily being illustrated, but I still wanted a bit more detail --especially for Jack since I don't think I got the "right" image of him until late in the story. *Cry*
          *Vine1*Emotion: It was simple to understand Jack's feelings as well as feeling for him. I found myself smiling through much of this story which delighted me --especially since you managed to keep my smiling while slipping in a lesson here and there for the kiddos! Slick move, Mr. Wilcox!
         *Vine1*Characters: The first person POV made it easy to develop a connection with Jack while reading. The other characters definitely served their purpose, but there wasn't much connection there --and I don't think there needed to be...

*Quill*FLYING AWAY
          *Vine2*Overall Thoughts: I really enjoyed this story and know that I would have loved it as a child! (Then again, I also loved Freddy and Chucky, so take that for what you will... LOL). I think that this would be a treat for any class to hear at Halloween time!
         *Vine2*Rating: I'm going with a 4.5 because I just feel like another minute or two of attention could push this story to its full bloom, but it certainly wouldn't take much to push this above a 5.0!

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Review by Stephanie Grace
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Thank you for sharing your work with us on Writing.Com. After reading your piece, these are the thoughts left in my mind:

My Initial Reaction:
This was a very cute little tale!

What I Liked Most:
I love the imagination and creativity throughout this poem; it really came to life for me!

Suggestions / Typos I noticed:
*CheckB*While the rhyme scheme kept everything moving along nicely, I did feel that the flow could be a bit smoother. I noticed two periods throughout the poem and really think that adding more punctuation would greatly improve the flow. *Wink*

How It Made Me Feel:
It made me feel like a child again, full of imagination in a world of wonder. Great job!

My Overall Thoughts & Rating:
I really enjoyed this poem and found myself smiling at the end. It was just adorable and I don't think there's a child in this world who wouldn't love to read or hear this poem! I'm going with a 4.5 rating because of the flow but this is definitely a piece that could easily each far above 5.0! *Starstruck*

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Stephanie Grace
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