Probably one of the best poems I've ever read. What a great job! I liked this, as sad as it was, it was as deeply meaningful also. Everything about it was really great. You also wrote it really well, every word was descriptive and well used. Mistake less and perfect!
A very sweet and heart breaking piece. I liked your main character and I think he had a strong voice and his feelings for Emily and what had happened to him were very clear. I liked the other girl character, Cassidy I think, too. Both of your characters were capturing and lovely to read about. The story overall was beautiful to read. It was full of the right kind of love, one of the sweetest stories I've ever read, and one of the saddest too.
I liked your piece and I think it sounds like it's going to be a very interesting story. So far I like your character, it seems like she's had a rough childhood and is now forced to live with a not very nice "un official" adoptive mother. You left me wondering why she got hit and why she was ungrateful, which was good because it's always a good idea to leave a bit of mystery to later be told.
I think your work needs a read through to patch up some things that you could maybe make sound a lot better, or just fix some points that don't really make sense. You can never check and read your work too much, its good for your writing and good for you readers and most importantly improvement.
A downfall is that this chapter is very short and could possibly not be considered as a chapter. It is still very good, but I think you could have made it a lot more longer, like carrying it on from when she blacked out. Say like a few hours later, or the next day, just in the same chapter as again its very short.
Overall I really like this and would be interested in reading more. So if you do post up more, let me know I'd love to read it and review it for you
I thought this was very good, as you can see by my rating. You did an amazing job of writing this and I especially liked your use of rhyming. I liked how clear you made the feelings and emotions. I like how your poem has excellent flow. I loved the overall idea of your poem being about Valentines day because I absolutely love Valentines day! So I loved loved loved your poem!
I really liked this and I enjoyed reading the letter. The person writing seems to care a lot for Rosie, but it seems like her writes to a lot of people who maybe think that there a little crazy. This piece made me smile.
I think that this piece is beautiful. I love how you describe it and I only wish I could put words together like you do and make them sound as real and as beautiful.
Great job!
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