I was very fond of the beginning! As I moved through it, I was pulled along by well scripted one word events that had me guessing for a few seconds. A small journo. But a quite extensive timeline. I have enjoyed writing several futuristic timelines in the past, never any in the past. This one I really enjoyed! Need more!
I really liked this chapter, kept me into the story with the first line you wrote. I have read much about the Templar lore both fact and fiction and pleased you covered it right from the beginning setting the scene. Such an event that was shared by your characters who witnessed the act was described well and I shall read on...
I feel that my own grammar skills are far to weak to review the piece from that perspective but I liked the story as I read it, and love Historical settings that are well planned for the traveled reader!
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