|Thank you for inviting me to review your work. This is my first time reviewing anyone's writing, and it is also my first introduction to can fiction and the Yu-Gi-Oh! world.
I can tell you that technically, I found the story to be very well written and edited. I did not see any errors that jarred me out of the story.
I liked the polyamory aspects, and I was intrigued to see where Joan's story would go next, especially with Mokuba.
I also liked the part of the story with Joan and Marc, but I would have liked to find out more about the sex they had during their weekend. Maybe that is my own personal taste and not the direction this story is going in. Either way, I hope this review is at least a little bit helpful. I do plan to read more of your story.