So far, a very interesting story indeed. The grammar and spelling are very good, I did not detect any mistakes. The story was very well detailed, I could see myself in the room with the two gentlemen. The first character, Colt Tagan, seems to be a very complex person who I suspect will later be full of surprises. The one telling the story seems to know this Colt on a personal level but finds him slightly annoying. I am eager to learn what Colt was working on with all of his equations.
Part Four of this story. I did not expect Tywin to meet the scarred man again; this was a surprise. The author of this story truly knows how to grip a reader's attention, I am impressed so far. I wonder what this scarred man will do, I am eager for the next part to find out.
I just finished reading parts two and three. This is a classic tale of fury through grief, one very well written. I could feel the emotions of both men as if I were standing among them in the hut. It is writing like this that makes a fantastic story as it grips the reader and urges him or her to read on.
Other than two typos in the very beginning, this piece was absolutely brilliant. It caught my attention right away and held it to the end. I am curious who this Wyte is as he or she was not mentioned earlier in this piece. Very well written, I would like to read more.
Incredible story! I loved it! The detail and emotion had me standing right beside the two man crew as they made contact with a new alien race. Great work!
A truly wonderful page you have. Open, honest, and informative. Seeing the pictures on your guest book makes me want to visit Kiribati very soon as I can see myself relaxing my worries away there on the sandy beach. I would love to learn more about Kiribati.
A dark yet very moving poem, Edger Allen Poe would be proud. It especially touches my heart as my father is in the hospital as we speak, fighting for his life against several ailments. We stand by his side but all know the seriousness of his condition. I was honored to read this poem as it gives me comfort to know I'm not the only one going through this.
What a wonderful service, these cNotes! I had not known they existed until I checked out your portfolio, listed on the Transformed for Charity Forum. The pictures are beautiful and reasonably priced. I wonder if one can purchase a cNote for one's outgoing E-Mails. I would certainly buy one.
Everyone dreams of having superpowers and rushing out to 'save the day'. In this story, Super Soccer Players, twelve kids get their wish but not in the way any of them had expected.
Inspired by Giovanni Jana, a 10-year-old soccer player on the Levy Phantoms soccer team in Tallahassee, Florida who plays like he really has super powers, this story follows a team of young soccer players who discover they suddenly have super powers of their own.
Who are these children? What will these powers be? How will they use them? That is up to you, the next person to add to this thrilling adventure where life is the game and the goal is to save the day!
I stumbled upon this short story through a random read and considered myself blessed to have found and read it. The story touched my heart and really made me think of my own loved ones in my own home town.
I hope to find more from this writer as I find his work to be inspiring.
Transformers come to YOUR world. Have you ever watched the new Transformers movie and thought, If I were there, I would do this or that? Well, here is your chance! Dare to enter the world of the Transformers and help the noble Autobots save Earth from the evil Decepticons.
How will you do it? That is for you to decide. Transform and roll out into adventure in this unique thrill ride where you are the star!
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