PLOT AND SETTING: I really liked your character and her dog. Much like other dog stories, the plot goes toward movement and genuine friendship with an animal. I liked the thought that a "challenge" brought on some kind of interesting warning of darkness and windiness that was the crux of that ending. Roscoe is true to form as a true blue good dog who takes on the supernatural perhaps for a moment, to worry of his master.
Grammar/Spelling: Saw no mistakes.
Overall: I think this was meant for a "writer's challenge" and didn't need to go that far. No incredible action happened so the story just doesn't run that way. I understand that. A nice piece with good description is something I always welcome.
PLOT AND SETTING: As in all of your pirate stories, the plot is rich with characters and plotting. I loved the names and the whereabouts of these characters in this story,in which you have featured the character "Olivia". With romance, intrique and pirates fighting, the storyline is unquestionably filled with detail and adventure. The setting follows the high seas and is very exciting.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I only found one mistake:
He has dark eyes and dark eyes and rumor has it
I believe you meant "dark hair and dark eyes"
OVERALL: I love all of your stories from the heart. You have the gift of real storytelling with your items that you offer WDC members. Pirate stories are exceptionally enjoyable.
PLOT AND SETTING: Such a nicely done well-told story that reflects thoughtful people that have loved ones in tough situations. You have answered the question of what it feels like. I have a Mom with Multiple Schlorosis and I address here with care-giving issues with the utmost care. You, too, sound as though you do.
GRAMMER/SPELLING: Saw no mistakes.
OVERALL: I liked your story. Written with good dialogue it conditions us, let's us overhear a real conversation of pride and agony. Nicely moving.
Ideas About Meaning Of Story: Your belief in a Pantheistic God is well-taken. I had studied this, in music as well, and found much support through those who believe in it. Your piece itself gives wonderful detail and examines the subject with finesse. It takes a thoughtful person to give us a look at faith and lets us examine ourselves and how we can motivate ourselves to do with it. Simplistic partly, your piece was easy to read and breathed well. I love spiritual items, at WDC.
Grammar/Spelling: No mistakes seen.
Overall: Even though I was born a Catholic, I know that much of it is too traditional. Without measure of a "God" in Spirit, thinks really don't make much sense. I think perhaps traditional religions of Christianity have places in the heart for such things, however it isn't discussed outrightly. Perhaps, it should be. In such a way, positivity and optimism occurs in our view of Christ, as well.
Form: Your form was very inspiring indeed. Your constant motivation to figure on world problems is so commendable. I only had trouble with slight meaning:
Lust and vain ambition,
Spurred by greed, hate and anger,
Are difficult to win.
Are Lust and vain ambition things we want to win?
Style: I like your style. It is very mesmerizing.
Grammar/Spelling: Saw no mistakes I can speak of.
Overall: Well placed in verse, you are a very good poet. This week's Spiritual Newsletter featured this as it discussed "anger' and "how to cope with it". Very meaningful.
Plot and Setting: What an advantageous plot to read about on a fine Spring day. Its twists and turns that culminate into survival level irony is excellent. You have a very good creation, here. It is active voice and hums along well, and I liked following it. Incidents such as these may be stranger than fiction.
Grammar/Spelling: I saw no mistakes.
Overall: I enjoyed this piece. It was well-written and did not shy away from telling us something rooted in nature and change, and I like that.
Plot and Setting: Carefully plotted, this piece was a joy to read such details. Its candid humor and carefree attitude with a graduation in mind, was pure sedentary amusement for me. Memories like this are bound to jog the
mind and give us the giggles we need to keep our survival level bearable.
Grammar/Spelling: No mistakes I saw.
Overall: I loved your form, a good "woman" story that, perhaps, gave us that perfect "jackknife' on the diving board in a figurative way.
Plot and Setting: It is such an interesting subject to take on our dreams in pieces we do. You had great empathy, you had a heartfelt emotion connected to the piece, and embraced the supernatural in a certain way. I liked its inspirational quality too. A family piece is always stable and well-proven. You moved the story along well, and it came about at the end. Pretty scenes were mentioned in both the dream {although it was a touchingly bad one} and the reality of the piece in a farmhouse setting and I liked their soothing qualities.
Grammar/Spelling: Saw no mistakes.
Overall: It was a great piece. Very well-done, it breathed nicely.
Plot and Setting: I think you know the tricks of the trade for an interesting, eerie story. You set this up differently and in calling it "the hunt" I thought of witches and goblins and of course, your mainstay, that vampire. It moved along well and gave us a nice viewpoint for your purpose.
Grammar/Spelling: Checked for mistakes and didn't find any.
Overall: Wow! A good frightening formula which becomes cleverly mesmerizing.
This poem is very praiseworthy. It speaks of one of the greatest sins that Jesus Christ discussed and dealt with and if he were here today what would He say? I liked your discussion. It was dealt with with mercy and taste. I think it is a very moving piece of work. I found it in this week's Spiritual Newsletter. Thank you. Best Regards.
Content: What a massive statement! You haven't missed yet, and this poem lends to public opinion as well as private opinion with a subjective view of 9/11. I loved it.
Style: Unblemished. You have always had what one calls "style" and with this poem there is no exception. Good, tight phrases and merciful philosophy with certain stanzas that lend to deep human conditions.
Grammar/Spelling: No mistakes what so ever.
Overall: A thoughtful statement. An exellent poem. A joy to read.
Plot: I liked your sympathy for orphanges. You have a good story here, empathic, and descriptive, a little mysterious. It had heart.
Setting: Well-placed, nicely arranged.
Grammar/Spelling: I saw no mistakes.
Overall: A piece like this gives room for thought on children with no homes, and made me think. Interesting ending, with the future of the main character looming up front in the future of the story-line.
One of the funniest stories I've read on WDC. Your humor outdoes itself, as the suspense builds as to how much more food goes into this plot. It was mischievous and enjoyably naive with all of its "full plates". Great description. I read it fast, and it wasn't hard to get through. Candid humor like this is what some of us find incredible here. You have a special talent with your imagination. Best Regards for a great piece!
How heart-warming, bitter-sweet, and emotional this piece is. Such a difficult event that your husband lived through and is yet alive is really wonderful. Jewell must be priceless. I found you described it all well and it was a very readable account. I found this in this week's Spiritual Newsletter. A nice, nice feature. Best Regards.
As a statement, this poem grabs me. It fills a spiritual sense in the reader and becomes "whole" as a statement by the end of the poem. I like it for it's sensibility and logical progression throughout. No spelling/grammar mistakes.
Overall, very good.
Your option to use free verse was well-taken. You came forth with a mighty statement and it speaks of your world and what it means to you. With many problems, such that "the devil" delivers, we see through a storm in order to get
to the calm. You have chosen a good road to travel, that spiritual route. It was featured in this week's Spiritual Newsletter. I liked the title, as well. Best Regards. Have a nice day.
With the world the way it is today, this is a needed statement to realize our greatest fears and state things that are just unheard of because everyone is afraid to say them. I like your vigor, your personal attitude, your thoughtful statements. You have raised "Neoflag of Neotyranny", isn't this interesting. Well-done, thorough item. Best Regards.
Form: {Goodform. Traditional and subjective. Style: Incredible. Just a joy to read. I thought of an oldie in my mind and it give me room to breathe with this. Grammar/Spelling: Perfect. Overall: A gorgeous take on love. You've mastered it for me!
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PLOT: Kind of a prayer, Which is goodl SETTING: An essayistic piece like this stimulates me. I like your positive way of leading me out of a storm with the last statement. {jerimiah29:3} comes to mind. GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No questions.
OVERALL: Warning signs that give me the shivers. I like that. Great piece.
Plot: What a thorough job of the active voice in a recurring nightmare such as a deer in the road. My brother died that way a couple of years ago and we think that's what it was. Every accentual phrase is tight. Great job!
Setting: Dreams like this recurr and you've got a great story! The narrative is excellent at late at night.
Grammar/Spelling: Saw no need for changes.
Overall: I'm impressed. Active words are what moves through great stories for me. I like the dream world consiousness. The possibility of that with a result in a story sounds intriquing.
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vicki
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PLOT AND SETTING: I liked the setting of a museum for this piece. The plot moved well with the mysterious Sophie rather a strong lead character. When her husband arrived at the museum to talk with the narrative, "Alison", I was moved by the comments. Sculpting does strange things to me to. I enjoy them at museums myself. Rodin is a master. The masked storyline about the letter given to Alison and the unveiling of the surprising results was interesting. Who would have guessed?
STYLE: I like your style. The last paragraph had good imagery use. And the dialogue weaved well in and out. It was in the end stylishly romantic with sadness that touched me.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I saw no mistakes.
OVERALL: You gave us a good story. It was interwoven with nice steadfast characters and explained well. Having Alison a bit emotional with the goings on was excellent. I liked it, it was empathic. That "kiss" had more than meets the eye.
Feather Duster
vicki
SETTING: AND PLOT: I liked your setting. You had "her" story and "his" story separated and it was a nice way to write this. Setting it at the airport first was
suspenseful and you wonder if a guy will show up for her. I liked the way you describe. You are detailed somewhat and give us a good picture of the past for he and her. Young teens are fun and intriquing to write about.
STYLE: Your style is a little sloppy yet it probably comes from the heart. A happy ending is a good thing.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I saw no real mistakes that I could speak of. Sorry you had computer problems with your carriage and that some lines didn't justify.
OVERALL: I liked the theme of the drizzling rain as you concentrated in the present tense. Yet, the flashbacks to the back were equally enjoyable. You did fine. Good job!
STYLE: I love your style. You have an inherent gift for giving us a wonderful take on life. My house is not on a hill, but I feel these same emotions about my cat and my garden.
IMAGERY: You have wonderful imagery. You create a world of "color" in your stuff and this is not an exception.
TRADITIONAL USAGE: I like your rhyme and rhythm. You give us a grand scale of this in your work and it's limitless.
{:e:star}OVERALL: HOME is a wonderful place to be. And you certainly make that clear.
This is a marvelous finish to Part I. I really loved Von Pearl. What a romantic man. It really gives you a fantasy you can dream about. The whole story was congruent with Part I. This made for a great ending. Very nice, Megan.
Touching and emotional winning poetry work. I am very excited about the Saga Continuation of Two Worlds Apart. I will buy it when it comes out sometime soon. You are very unforgettable. I hope you don't mind me adding you to my bio along with Cappucine as members I admire most and feel are top game. Thank you, Sherri.
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PLOT AND SETTING: I really liked your character and her dog. Much like other dog stories, the plot goes toward movement and genuine friendship with an animal. I liked the thought that a "challenge" brought on some kind of interesting warning of darkness and windiness that was the crux of that ending. Roscoe is true to form as a true blue good dog who takes on the supernatural perhaps for a moment, to worry of his master.
Grammar/Spelling: Saw no mistakes.
Plot and Setting: Carefully plotted, this piece was a joy to read such details. Its candid humor and carefree attitude with a graduation in mind, was pure sedentary amusement for me. Memories like this are bound to jog the 
