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Rated: E | (4.5)



IMPRESSIONS: Great variables fill this poem. It creates a lovely and faithful usage of words for faith and hope in God. I like using "a matriarch" for a symbol and someone who you imagine will give us light in heaven.

PRAISE: Let me say that your rhyme scheme was nicely done and just enough stanzas to explain what you want.

SUGGESTIONS: Do you really want to capitalize the first character of all of your lines? There is a semicolon in line 26 that seems out of place.

COMMENT: I liked your poem. I love church and what it can do for you.

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vicki


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Rated: E | (4.5)



IMPRESSIONS: I respect, and encourage you, and feel that this is an honest piece. I am proud to be a Roman Catholic Christian the faith healings of those my father were before he passed away. So many clergymen and clergywomen are wonderful beings of God and can help you change your mind if you cannot see light at the end of the tunnel when you stumble. I thank God I have had these teachers.

PRAISE: Praise God! You have a faith in God. That is wonderful and I follow this piece well for that. You can only testify to such a wonderful savior, I know, I know.

SUGGESTIONS: Enlarge? Only a few small words misspelled and you have given me something to really think about. Parable Of the Seeds that
Jesus tells. Good last line for us to believe in.



Thank you. Thank you. Joy in Christ. Read you from God's Way.

Feather Duster
vicki

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Review of Horseshoe Canyon  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)




FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Firstly, I love that style. Active voice, inspirational movement. How inspiring! I loved the out-of-doors when I was t hirteen or fourteen and it was as you say, a paradise. More than that, you give us a solid memory lane that is enjoyable to read and quite clever.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I think you did well with your contest entry. Good luck!

GRAMMAR: No errors I can see.


SUGGESTIONS: None. Good word count for a nice short item.. Exellent place to speak of as you think back.

Feather Duster
vicki


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


First Impressions: I've noted poems like this one in book stores where the humanity factor is being deeply questioned. I love your pyschology that culminates in a bit of family a bit of romance.

Praise and Applause: I see that you might have felt the rhyme might have been forced but I looked at it as all thoroughly legitimate. It is very clear and glimmering in front of us.

Grammar: The use of pigeons was quite well done. A simile to use, a symbol to contemplate. It drops off pyschologically with the pressure of loneliness of a bench and a wakeup call to knights whereever we can find them. I really loved it.

Suggestions: Passing on the information you did at the end of the end after the poem was a very good idea. We know what you went through and it gave me a reason for giving you a higher rating after I knew you took so much time with it.

Thanks for being featured in Simply Postive this week.

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vicki


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Review of Anniversary Party  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: WIth a piece like this, Jaye P. oh so cleverly shows us illness at it's most defeating. What could have happened to Gerry Lewis? Was it massive heart attacks that Jaye P. wants to warn us about? Was it pills that can be bad? Was it symptoms of serious illnesses that can happen to us that we should be warned about?

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Jaye P.'s items have always been psychologically good for us. She delves, she investigates, she probes. Nothing goes by her in the end. I like her dialogue and it has always been natural. I think Jaye P. Marshall knew life itself. And her death, ironically, has me thinking she is in a better place, knowledgeable about life and at peace.

OTHER COMMENTS: Jaye P. will be missed and I myself am interested in visiting her white case soon to add to those who want to pay her homage. She was one of the best on the site.

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vicki


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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: This is a highly active chapter with lots of action. The knife scene was fascinating and very suspenseful. It proved Contessa's skill as a woman of many ways to cure.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I really like Contessa. She has a personality that shines and does have that healing touch. She is a praisable part of the story. Your other characters follow along well and balance themselves with Contessa.

GRAMMAR: THere were a few mistakes but nothing large. Contessa was spelled Conteesa in line two. In line 12 the word stabbed is spelled stabed. However, when you publish something it has always been flawless and that's what I go by.

SUGGESTIONS: I'm enjoying this. None.


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vicki


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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



Excellent triangle poem. You certainly used the contest words correctly. You have a sweeping manner to this style. Hearts are entwined and minds moving . . . You have always a romance on your mind, it's unique and what I dream and envy others over who grab the gauntlet young when they are young and restless and not in senior years. Take us on a mystical journey next time. These, Bell and Jacob, and Edward must survive the trip, and wow, voila, you enrich your imagery and still have the fashionable poem you have first written.

Love ya so.
Feather Duster
vicki


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Watch out Hollywood. Your book sounds like a great treasure no funning intended. Let me leaf through it and comment later on down the line when I get there. Loose notes here but actually very punctually correct and satisfying for a reader. I LOVE historical romances or adventures. Your coat of armor looks tremendous.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: For giving us so many chapters I will give you gps. You deserve them from a reader. I like your style it is detailed. But will it be detailed enough? I'll look out for that. APPLAUSE! Excellent starting gate.

GRAMMAR: I will condition myself to see the characters and their voices through dialogue. That way I can tell if your grammar has gelled well enough.

SUGGESTIONS: None. What can I say to suggest but to continue on your journey with this piece. Lucky we have you in First Peoples to receive a manuscript like this.

Thanks for the grand good job!

Feather Duster
vicki

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



IMPRESSIONS: What a great storyline for your novel concerning "Contessa". This follows like a really good page-turner. The characters like Contessa, Morning Rain, Amanda, Jack and Tim and Professor Raymond give a showy panacea of emotions and moves in the plot. I love your plots. They intrique me. I like the mention of the Professor at the end. Something that will be going on. Contessa and Tim look foreboding with her nonchalant warding him off. The Pirate Ship scenes are excellent. A lovely storyteller you are!


PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I like your style. Your simple basics and your characters names and sustenance. This is breaking into a "Princess Of Scruples". It looks like a really good novel like that.

GRAMMAR: No mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: Continuation is your greatest feat. Volume will tell. It will all fall into place.

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vicki

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Review of Where are You?  
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: The many questions that this poem examines have a general ending: located in the title. A poem for someone perhaps not known yet, and a wish for a lover.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Interesting lines of endearment for something in waiting. The ghost of someone known already who you love? Someone not known but a star out in the universe who perhaps you will find?

GRAMMAR: Good enough verse.

SUGGESTIONS: None.

Feather Duster
vicki

Thank you for a feature in the Poetry Newseltter.


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Review of Blue Bird  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: I love what you do with a poem. Somehow, you are natural. A true poet. Your batting average has always been high and I commend you for that. Noone would disagree. This poem gives me a wonderful storyline with a poem in passing. One that stands out. One that gives us spring in the air and spirited thoughts of bluebirds. It is very good.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I feel I would love to applaude you for giving us something I noted in the 70's with my Pittsburgh Group of Poets. It is a natural way to write, hip and with free verse versions of good material. Content is meaningful. I like your non-form of too much punctuation with this one. Your motherly instincts even show in it. It becomes a familiar personal moment at one point.

SUGGESTIONS: None. You have achieved a good, good poem.

Feather Duster
vicki
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Review of My Love...  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Impressions. What beautiful images. Much to think and ponder on.

Praise and Applause: Romantically speaking you have embraced a uphoria.

Grammar: I see your grammar as having problems. You need a comma after morning. Then the word "and" cut. After "diamond" a comma and then cut "that is" of the next line. I had a confusion with how "waterfalls" being "swept away" and why with "just one caress?" It should follow perhaps without the word "create" maybe being "crying" or "weeping". A comma after "give you" and add "a" before "paradise". Somehow "broken" to me isn't the correct word perhaps it might be "forsaken". "tears" and suddenly "enchanting kiss" perhaps should eclipse themselves more. They are very opposite.

Suggestions: My grammarical changes are my suggestions. You have beautiful moments that need to be emphasized.

Write on. I'm proud to review you for Simply Positive as a feature.

Feather Duster
vicki


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Review of My Cat Tigger  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


Gee Megan, everyone in First Peoples will just love your story about Tigger. I can't believe you saved her in a fire. I didn't even know your first house burnt down. There is so much in your portfolio that I can always find such treasures that are personal memories and many good and wonderful moments. What I loved about this story again is your heart was on the line when you needed to save your very own best friend Tigger and you did it, you saved her! How brave!

I liked your details for us. You made it a story to remember.


Feather Duster
vicki


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIR*Star*ST}e:star} IMPRESSIONS: This is so original and yes inspirational. You have a high level of knowledge it seems. Your footnotes were very helpful too. I thought of McCartney's plan on "Blackbirds singin' in the edge of night" and loved your poem. It gave me strength and a lean on peace. Just loved it. Your stanzas ran smoothly and had a cut above the rest. I followed the plan and could see it. I also liked the momentary doubt. It brought your words to the ground. To contemplate.

PRAISE*Star**Star* AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I saw excellent free verse in this. Very respectable. Good two last lines to finalize.

GRAMMAR: Nothing, really. No mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: You are taking a very interesting journey in this folder. No suggestions. I'd love to read more of it if I can find time. Write On!


First Peoples Review.
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~~Twilight Rain
vicki

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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)



IMPRESSIONS: What an enjoyable story concerning knights-of-honor. It showed an honorable position of Alain and his world. The language of the piece was done well--good description and excellent story-telling.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I love a willing-suspension-of-disbelief. I feel that in this piece. Nicely secretive. I like your ingenuity with this piece. Nice world of fantasy you have created. I applaude your writing.

GRAMMAR: I have seen no mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing!

Thanks for being a part of First Peoples. It was a pleasure to review you for them.

Feather Duster
~~vicki
Twilight Rain


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Review of Last Breath  
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: I find non-fiction interesting to read. Because it has really happened, it it that much more exciting or phenomenal. I found your piece is to be so so smooth. With just the right touch of flavor to it, and where you were from and what your Daddy was like, you appeared to have taken time to write this. It had a voice that was unique and gave us a candid tongue that many pieces get high ratings for. I see where you were coming from. Daddy wasn't always an angel. And Mom knew it. The piece never let up, really. It was packed with action in an informative manner. I love family stories. And this one I just love too!

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: You should be applauded for showing your concern for a death in your family and praised for showing so much love for your father. By the end of this piece, I knew you forgave him for all he might have done wrong.

GRAMMAR: Couldn't see any mistakes. This is what makes this piece a marvel. Excellent spelling, grammatical moves, dialogue.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing! You have talent.


Thanks for being a part of First Peoples. I am.

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain
~~vicki

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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: I found this an absolute professional website for us to view. Are you Bev? Her accomplishments are well-worth placing on a good web site. I took a look at what was there and
would love to take a look at it closer. Perhaps,for a purcbase.

PRAISE: Thank you, for being a Tribesman in First Peoples. You have a wonderful Portfolio. I just
loved the times I spent reviewing your poetry in the past. Excellent.

Great show!

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain

vicki

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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)


Excellent telling of how Jane Austen books appeal to you. I liked your presentation. It is proud and detailed with quite a few cues to Austen. Anybody reading this might want to go off and try reading her. You and your adventures! They are so swell. I think I would love to read the Michael Ford book. Take-off books like that always send me. Hope you are well. Your reading adventures are always intriguing.

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain
~~Circle Of Sisters
~~vicki


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Review of My Oxygen  
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (4.5)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: An excelllently original poem to review. I like your lines, your premise, your ending. You have captured us "beneath the lid" as it seems. Although it is sealed with mystery in one way, it becomes what you call "oxygen" by the end of the poem. Excellently personal.

PRAISE/APPLAUSE: This piece has oriiginal style. It doesn't muster up words. It writes itself. It can be a mark for the author's higher ground I think.

SUGGESTIONS: None. It was so well done grammatically. And the spelling was flawless.


Feathe Duster
Circle Of Sisters
~~vicki

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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I am a Christian believer and find this poem awesome. I have given it a high mark because I feel it really deserves that
It moves with such Presence and gives every indication to be a thorough prayer for us to think seriously on. I can trust this poem. That is why I feel it is moving and ahead of the crowd.

PRAISE/APPLAUSE: Each line of this poem is lacy and frivolous and gives us a peace of mind. There can be hope then. It doesn't quit and give out a negative message. I was hoping for that. I would much rather have it be a sign of good will and hope when our Savior is concerned. I will as you say, use the last line and "linger near thee". It gives us a breath of good air.


SUGGESTIONS: Great rhyming form. Good style. No suggestions but that to write on!


Feather Duster
Circle of Sisters
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vicki

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Review of BEAUTY IN THE SKY  
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: What lightning-works for a poem! Strong colorful words of dipping into the universe's picture.

PRAISE/APPLAUSE: This mighty poem for a short poem never quits. It's like the energizer bunny. It keeps going and going and going . . .

SUGGESTIONS: Marauders? Who could they be? From where? Write on. Great job.




Feather Duster
Circle Of Sisters
~~vicki


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Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: First of all, I'm glad you have mentioned the One, the One who saves us. I love these kinds of poems. I find compassion and serenity in winter and it may be because of prayer, I don't know. I liked the premise of your poem. Reverently to God, congrats on a good poem.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Will there be promise in Spring? Let us write another poem to insure it may come.

SUGGESTIONS: Spice up your grammar. Make it a little more clearer. Examine your poem and find the best way to read it and then make line endings so that you can be more accurate. And most of all, write on!


Feather Duster
for Simply Positive Forum
Twilight Rain
~~vicki
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Review of A Lost Muse  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: What a classic piece! It skips through the sad moment of losing inspiration and for me it is all too real. It happened to me
when I destroyed a long manuscript early in life. I could never get back what I had. It was a long time until I adjusted myself to writing that emotions
came back to me.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: What excellent stanzas. Resonent and clear. You know the path which you are traveling on. Your wish is clear. Get back, get back. This is a very real occurrence with many. I think this piece plays to an audience. A popular theme.

SUGGESTIONS: Don't do anything with this to improve. It speaks for itself. Fulfilling and thorough.

Feather Duster
for Simply Positive Forum
Twilight Rain
~~vicki
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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I am reviewing a Mod for First Peoples here. It is only one opinion. Take what you can from it. I would say this was most agreeable to read. It thoroughly made me feel good and I tried to picture myself in every setting and scene and felt blown away from the grand picture you shelter here. Your images are very original and precious. I loved each part of this. It was simple to read and yet excellent to understand. I found happiness just reading it. I feel that at times I've been depressed especially with money matters and just to think of these things in a favorite way is a good way to forget your troubles and come up smiling.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: You gave a great effort into this. I can tell it was not done in five minutes. I liked its descriptive detail and its care for the reader. I think you were really thinking of the reader, and I commend you for that.

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No mistakes I can come up with.


Feather Duster
Twilight Rain~vicki


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I found this poem deeply moving. It searches the soul and gives strength of character. I love women poems and this one is special in that it is a woman's military poem. It speaks from honesty and does not gest. It adds to good reason for the military woman. And the imagiac themeof the "silent bugle" is as catchy and clever as you'll get.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Why not accept this poem? WIll everyone? No. Because they are biased. But I really do. I have come to enjoy your poems and pieces and its given me a side to the military I just never read about before coming to WDC. Excellent stuff!

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: I liked your ryhme and rhythm. No spelling mistakes that I can see.

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain~~~vicki
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