IMPRESSIONS: I find non-fiction interesting to read. Because it has really happened, it it that much more exciting or phenomenal. I found your piece is to be so so smooth. With just the right touch of flavor to it, and where you were from and what your Daddy was like, you appeared to have taken time to write this. It had a voice that was unique and gave us a candid tongue that many pieces get high ratings for. I see where you were coming from. Daddy wasn't always an angel. And Mom knew it. The piece never let up, really. It was packed with action in an informative manner. I love family stories. And this one I just love too!
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: You should be applauded for showing your concern for a death in your family and praised for showing so much love for your father. By the end of this piece, I knew you forgave him for all he might have done wrong.
GRAMMAR: Couldn't see any mistakes. This is what makes this piece a marvel. Excellent spelling, grammatical moves, dialogue.
SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing! You have talent.
Thanks for being a part of First Peoples. I am.
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