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In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge during this week:
 Reverse Joni Mitchell  (E)
Remembering environmental idealism
#1958138 by Karl Doyle


Impressions: *Check3* Really good essay. I think I know what you are talking about. It's a really big "game" for investors. I know a brand new Mall near Pittsburgh here has had huge projects like a gigantic athletic center and a race-car park, built them, used them, and it has all fallen through and torn down now. More or less, very quickly. The mall has hundreds of acres, and the space of which it has built up businesses is incredible, but slow. At times, no one wants to shop there. And the businesses like Bed, Bath and Beyond, and Macy's has fallen through. The mall itself has empty spaces. I know what you mean.

Grammar, Style, Spelling, of your essay: *Check3* Fine.

Suggestions: *Check3* None.

Last comment to contend with: *Check3* I wonder what will happen next. You know? In keeping with Green today, hope that you agree and go ahead do some recycling. We are at the brink of consciousness with keeping our planet safe and happy. Let's all do our part. Thank you. We all want paradise.


April 22nd is Earth Day!

Feather Duster
aka vicki
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Review of Cleansing Tears  
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge this week:
Cleansing Tears  (E)
If each does a little, the earth will renew. (Form: Strambatto)
#1987999 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


Impressions: *Check3* What an awesome entry for this year! I found your poem relating to Earth Day, Tuesday's proud existence, to be right on target. The valuable message is clear. I heed the call.

Grammar, Spelling, Style: *Check3* Excellent rhyme and rhythm, a nice Ottava Rima. It speaks. It has a nice formula and therefore the style is very viable and good. No spelling errors. An all round
great job.

Suggestions: *Check3* Post it somewhere. It has a message that we need to know that is quite vital.

Last comment to contend with: *Check3* I won't mince words. You are a fine author and your poetry excels. I want to recycle, take my hands and dig in to mulch this spring, believe. Onward Global Warming.


April 22nd is Earth Day!


Feather Duster
aka vicki
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Review of Saving The Earth  
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge this week, the item:
 Saving The Earth  (E)
what can I do to brighten my future?
#1667350 by jaya


Impressions: *Check3* Sadly, I hate to see such a wonderful country like India in such a state. But it is everywhere these days, and not just India that we have planet problems. Earth Day accents this. It tells us that we need to save our planet. That we need to get right down to the nitty gritty and do for it. You have suggested such things as legislation and awareness, which I agree about. New Green methods should happen each day. It should be of utter importance to our U.S.A. and it should come from Green throughout the world. Tuesday was indeed an important day. I must do more, personally, to save our planet.

Suggestions:*Check3* Keep planning for a good Earth Day. Make it important each year. You know? I would love to see progress rather than we all go down on the eve of destruction.


Last comment:*Check3* Nice winning essay I enjoyed your opinion.


April 22nd is Earth Day!

Feather Duster
aka vicki
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Review of Earth's Poem  
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge during this week, your item:
STATIC
Earth's Poem  (ASR)
If The Earth had the words, what would she say? A poem written for Earth Day.
#1986509 by ⭐️Jellyfish⭐️



Impressions: *Check3* I love this poem. It has the ironic twist that animals are your friends and humans? -- Passed living well. Great theme. I feel this way and have a real kin to dolphins, especially, ever since I enjoyed photographing them in southern Florida. Yes, this has an upbeat thought for Earth Day and those that have considered it this Tuesday. I like to see that. If more people considered their friends the animals and their ways, they might consider saving endangered species more and respecting :animals: in general.


Grammar, Spelling, Style: *Check3* Fine grammar, spelling, good rhyme and rhythm in form, excellent line progression and length.

Suggestions: *Check3* None. This is such an excellent Earth Day poem.

Last comment: *Check3* I like this poem. It speaks. It gives rise for controversy and let's us linger on what we need to do to save our animals so that we can love them in return.



April 22nd is Earth Day!

Feather Duster
aka vicki
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Review of Together Forever  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
What an intriguing poem for a winner of Stormy Lady's Weekly Contest. I just loved the variety of words and the magical effect which makes a wholesome, energetic work here. The very essence of poems is a relationship between a man and a woman, at times, and this poem is right on target. I like the movement and that touch of Princess Megan Rose which we always receive when we know it is hers. Reality in fantasy, joy, warmth, good vibes. Great poem! Congrats!


Feather Duster
aka Vicki

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Review of The Ariana Earle  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



I am reviewing
STATIC
The Ariana Earle  (ASR)
A story about a woman Bomber Pilot, her soldier friends, Gizmo and Striper, the Gremlins.
#1976723 by Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox
for Simply Positive Forum.


MY IMPRESSIONS:


*Starstruck* How well it is all played out!


*Starstruck*Loved the characters. I felt like it was a moving video game with action and I used the characters to play it.


*Starstruck*What a story! A military-theme which really has a enjoyable romp to it with this story.


*Starstruck* Names of characters were great. Excellently cast.


*Starstruck* The fact that it moves in and out with fantasy fiction and allows us the reality of the regimented military past events it uses is awesome.


*Starstruck*Using Amelia Earhart as a clincher to the mystery of who is working the storyline is amazing.


*Starstruck*GOOD JOB!


*Starstruck* No negative suggestions.

*Starstruck*Keep up the good work!


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Review of At Duffy's  
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



I am reviewing:
 
STATIC
At Duffy's  (13+)
Davos and such ---A response poem written in Dew Drop Inn
#1530432 by Joy
for "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  as part of your Shower Package. I am one opinion and do not reflect all. Please keep this in mind.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *Check2* I am thrilled to have a chance to review you for this Group. I have always felt your poetry is in taste, varied, high-minded
at times (which is superlative), incredibly original, stingingly poetic, a part of WDC history. This poem relives your goings on at places you have dined. Quite an admirable place to set a scene for a poem. Customers in places to eat and drink have been lauded in poems, cartoons, and everyplace cherished I think. Just like that diner where Lana Turner was found sitting in, there is merit to finding oneself in a place in time where your fantasies can rule about what you have here as a camaraderie of life, I think.

SYNTAX,SPELLING,GRAMMAR: *Check3* Wonderful material that is so personal and meritable. Intimate workings that leave us with ironic pirouettes and heart-fought imagery. Hush to spelling and grammar. Not a comma out of place! The smell of oceanic mist in the distance is what I spy here, where the words are ripe with what I've been told you know best.

FAVORITE LINE:*Check5*


And I question her about the menu,
the pile of steamer clams at the seafood counter,
her kids, her absent husband, the rent she can't pay.

I love the "absent husband", he sounds familiar.


PURPOSE OF POEM: *Check3* I hope I answer correctly here. Was the purpose of the poem a little like flattering your spouse at a time when he just can't be found? It was a stunning example of one of your poems which does just what it always does and that is: gives us material. I love this conversational act in the poem's weave. It's fibers are very knowledgable. You're not ever going wrong here.

STYLE: *Check1* Contemp. True-to-heart. Clues to a woman of interest. What a style!


SUGGESTIONS: *Check2* I have no negativity to pass on. Only a wish to extend my best to you and suggest that you take note of SAOJ. This is such a great Group. I'm proud to be one of many who can give you a "thanks" for giving us items to enjoy.

FINAL COMMENT: *Check4* Women who are Wild and Wise can sometimes say the darnest things. They can also Speak the Truth from sheer memory. It's just a phenomenon. And a great talent.



Feather Duster
aka vicki


Sig made by Hanna from an Auction Package.
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



I am reviewing:
STATIC
FFWriting Newsletter-Werewolves  (ASR)
Short Flair For Writing Newsletter about werewolves.
#1960510 by Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox
this afternoon. Have a good evening tonight, Princess Megan Rose!*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*


IMPRESSIONS: I have always loved FLAIR NEWSLETTER MAG. This one is no different. Through the years, FLAIR has come up with some pretty surprising stuff. It is always fresh and informative, colorful and delightful as well. I love to explore a subject that I am not that familiar with. These newsletters give me a full document of great seasonal discovery. With unusual aspects of Holidays, FLAIR can't be beat. Times and Dates are explained well, characters be them fiction or non-fiction are very throughly shown.

I liked this particular FLAIR about Werewolves very much. Since today is Halloween '14, I liked getting into some material concerning spooky and scary situations. I found out certain things I did not know about Lycanthropy. I remember Michael J. Fox doing a spoof called "I Was A Teenage Werewolf". It was something I always took with a slightly shallow attitude. Werewolves according to Megan Rose and Angel can be very real and are part of history and and are good to read about
.
Love the graphics that Angel came up with.


Glad that you are back on WDC, Megan Rose. I am sure you know that you received lots of support and everyone missed you when you were out of commission.

Have a Happy Halloween!


Feather Duster
aka vicki

A gift from Princess Megan Rose. Made by Leger. Review Sig for Feather Duster


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


I am reviewing for:
GROUP
Showering Acts of Joy Group  (E)
On indefinite hiatus
#1499415 by Pat ~ Rejoice always!
this evening. My opinion is only but one and is not of all of the Group.
I thank you for your time in reflecting on mine.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *Check2* First, I am wowed by the professional attitude you took in coming up with your portfolio. It is thoroughly neat. I took the time to decide on "An Oxford Education" . I am so impressed. It is a piece to be studied and lauded. It has much merit that comes from knowing that it has been carefully prepared.

GOOD LINES: *Check2*I liked the phrase: the whole house was quiet, swathed in the silence of sleep, and the phrase: Storm clouds gathered in his eyes are just two of the pleasing descriptive ones that are part of a piece that is more or less amazing.

PURPOSE OF STORY: *Check2* I might guess that the piece here has purposeful movement in that is a jaunt into a historical fictional time and place and the characters are just charming. I liked their purpose. They were there to state an affair and you did this well. I liked the bit of mystery to just whose was whose and what was what. I liked the flair for undertow too. I,also, liked your valuable way of showing what had gone down here. It is great fiction.

SPELLING,GRAMMAR: *Check2* Perfect spelling. Even though I might have looked up a few words, I gathered it all. It looks good and has a literary style to it that I have always admired. Good grammar here. Excellent shape.

SUGGESTIONS: *Check2* Keep it going. I could forsee this plot. It could last longer and longer. Great source for a novel. No suggestions against it.

LAST FINAL COMMENT: *Check2* Even though the woman here is naïve, I think she is wise. I think she looks like she knows what she is doing. I am thinking all of this like my favorite Soap on TV. I cheered for her. Very nicely done.
*Star*WRITE ON!*Star*
Feather Duster
aka Vicki

Fall image done by Kiyasama
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Review of Pumpkin  
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


I am reviewing for RAOK:
STATIC
Pumpkin  (E)
brief poetry of pumpkins
#1956896 by Tina M. Courtney
for an Autumn Merit Badge.

My opinion is only one, and not the product of any others. I am part of RAOK as a Group.


IMPRESSIONS: *Check2* What a lovely breath of air this poem brings. It is right to the point and gives us a glance at "Pumpkins" and selectly describes that particular tradition of pumpkin-gathering and carving that we all most often do during the autumn season. I liked your anacrostic-style, very clever.


BEST LINE: *Check3*


K indred pumpkins your a gift with a presence of warmth.

I especially liked this line. It was very pleasurable and unique. You might want to change the word "your" to "you're" so that the correct spelling is used.

You, also, can do this in the 6th line. Change "your" to "you're" there too.


SUGGESTIONS:*Check4* None other except, perhaps, something completely different that I could suggest and that is italicize the word Autumn in the last line for emphasis.

ENDING COMMENTS:*Checkb* I enjoyed such a wise poem. It was natural and descriptive and gave us what we wanted: joy of pumpkins. You would do well to keep it carefully in your Portfolio.



*Star*WRITE ON!*Star*

Feather Duster
aka Vicki


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Review of Gatsby  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


I am reviewing:
 Gatsby  (E)
A personal poem revolving around the events of the Great Gatsby.
#1954567 by SQuinn
for you this evening.

GENERAL IMPRESSION: *Check2* I had just read "Gatsby Girls" on my Kindle. I am enthusiast of F. Scott. I found that era so fascinating to read about and of course the classic, Gatsby, is one of his best. You do a contemp thing with your poem here. I like it. It's hip.

STRUCTURE, STYLE, GRAMMAR, SPELLING:*Check2* I liked the structure of it. The style of your poem is like a one-act-play as it plays out a scene with Gatsby and gives us reason
to watch for the glimmering stars in which you speak of as I, assume, NYC gives rise to for you. Grammar and spelling? Fine.

BEST LINE: *Check2*

The parties were a figment




Of a man's imagination, his toys




Were hid away for fear of annihilation.

Gatsby, as you see him. Broadway lights, signals from Time Square? I even think this is an unrequited love poem, with all of the elements of regretting love lost and waiting for love to begin. Wow!

SUGGESTIONS: *Check2* None. You have a viable poem here. The abstractness of it enhances the poem. This is my opinion. I like this kind of thing in a poem.

LAST COMMENT FOR TONIGHT: *Check2* Do not relinquish your powers of the city, they work for you, it is in between the lines. This is something that can work fabulously for you. Glad to see you in the Romance Review Newsletter this week as a feature.


Feather Duster
aka Vicki


A beautiful Rose signature.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review of American Stew  
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing for:
GROUP
Showering Acts of Joy Group  (E)
On indefinite hiatus
#1499415 by Pat ~ Rejoice always!
as part of your shower.

My opinion is only one with others. I do not mean to obligate you to take it as a whole.

*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*


FIRST IMPRESSIONS

At first glance: *Check5* I, first off, wish to to congratulate for a wholesome, wonderful portfolio. To find these piece I read and browsed through . . . I looked. Being that I adore poetry, I wanted to read and review something of your work that might denote your family since it is one of my interests now in writing.com. Your ancestory showed through this. I liked the attitude that you offered. I liked the length, it was full-bodied, and also the good sense to what one might call-- a piece anchored in the past well.

Imaging, Rhythm, Patterns: *Check2* Your family heritage was spoken out here. You claimed some things that really are bold and by the end of the poem I knew you were proud of your greats and your immediate family members. Your lines gelled, I thought. Sensibility in all, of course. And the touch of reminisce that was genuine when it came to detail. I liked your pattern of building this piece out of newspaper articles and it was quite fascinating. Immediately, I liked the title, it drew me to the poem.

Best Lines: *CheckR*

No coward I, but one small pea on a spoon
in America's stew pot


I care not the color of a person's skin,


Excellent themes you have here.


Purpose of the poem: *CheckG* I know that you do not want to be didactic or redundant, and I don't think you were, Fyn. It was purposeful to engage yourself in a challenge like this. I found it satisfying to learn about you poetry-wise.

Syntax, Grammar, Spelling, Style: *CheckB* As I have said, your syntax is excellent as material,
you didn't spell anything wrong, and grammatically it looks like you wanted questions of affairs with this? I think. Style is fine, something even, a certain touch, that I recognize is yours because I have reviewed you before and jumped at the chance again to level my eyes on a good portfolio. My fun in reviewing.

Suggestions: *Check4* None. It was altogether successful.

Last Comment: *Check3* It is a pleasure to be in the company of great portfolios, even thought I honestly feel mine falls short of things and I have problems expressing myself I love to just be included with others such as yourself. Words, mere words. I digress. Poetry will always be an art to me, as it is in history.




*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*

WRITE ON!



Feather Duster
aka Vicki


SAJ Signature gifted by Kasia ~ Spreading Joy
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Rated: E | (5.0)


I am reviewing your poem for Good Deeds Get Cash. Good morning!


FIRST IMPRESSION: *CheckR* I am very pleased to be one of your readers. Your informative, well-founded tribute is a success.

GRAMMAR,STYLE,SPELLING, SYNTAX: *CheckG* Good spelling habits,excellent syntax with what you explained in content. Your grammatical expertise could be improved with some other poem (something you probably have done, I assume). You need to stagger some of the lines less, I think. Your style is a bit young and you might well be a younger member.

IMAGES AND DRAMATIC EFFECT: *CheckB* With the image of your "champagne" I gathered you are celebrating with a toast to the best in the world, and I am from USA and feel the same; however, you might be a tad more specific and including more than one image in a poem. Now. The descriptive senses are very keen. The poem lends to giving us a full picture of a very heroic and honest rhyming view of what USA is keen to tell us all about. I think it is viable to talk about it in this way; but, I suggest you look at what you can include besides "place".

PURPOSE OF POEM: *CheckG* Nice purposeful theme that accomplishes an opinion which I liked hearing about. Very good job of this. Well-done.

LAST COMMENT FOR THIS MORNING: *CheckV* First impressions are always over-kill. I understand. I just want to emphasis that people will read this and be swayed. I think that it does well to give this poem a good standing because there is nothing better than a hero.

*Star*WRITE ON!*Star*


Feather Duster
aka vicki


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


I am reviewing you for:
GROUP
Showering Acts of Joy Group  (E)
On indefinite hiatus
#1499415 by Pat ~ Rejoice always!
as part of your Shower.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS *CheckR* I just loved a peek at your unique portfolio. Photos I browsed were divine. Good camera work. So. The piece I chose to review is well-written, down to earth, a good travelogue with such as I see--an eye for shopping--and excelling description.

BEST LINE:

and I struck up conversations with complete strangers, whom I might not see again, but who for the night, took on the mantle of `best friend`.

Nice way to put a night out with strangers.


IMAGERY AND DRAMATIC EFFECT: *CheckG* You have imagery here! Descriptive travelogues or what you might call this . . . a piece about where to go and what to do . . . have a high mark with me. Yours is hot. No dramatic effect needed with this kind of piece so we will rule that out.

SYNTAX, GRAMMAR & SPELLING, STYLE: *CheckB* Material? The goods? Just beautiful. Such was my fate on a fortnight when the Wedgewood Shop in London caused me to buy china for a friend's baby. I don't think you should be worried about your long sentences. They are well-written and I enjoy this style.

PURPOSE OF PIECE: *CheckV* It is probably a piece that has exciting glitz to many. To stimulate the reader with good images (especially liked: mince pies and savoury bits) is so commendable.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* None. The piece is so satisfying. Good appeal.

LAST COMMENT:*CheckV* Have a nice day! I enjoyed a read.

*Star*Write on!*Star*


Feather Duster
aka Vicki

SAJ Signature gifted by Kasia ~ Spreading Joy
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Review of Talk before sleep  
In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*red*


FIRST IMPRESSION: *CheckV* Liked the title, liked the movement, liked the spiritual attitude, liked the irony of the earth & heaven angle. I have always loved angels in stories and this one is no different. It comes from having trials and given a burden of tragedy in my real life. I think they save people, I think there are miracles. You have added to my wish to find them in lit. You did an excellent job of securing all religions to find this kind of knowledge. I find this piece as well-constructed as any other, your marks were lower perhaps because it is short and sweet and you did not deliver a long enough message for us to follow. That long 2nd & 3rd paragraph might have been broken up because with short dialogue you create nice suspense. It is something that gets a high rating.

RELIGIOUS DRAMATIC EFFECT: *CheckG* Effect is a part of this piece. It has a shine. Angels shine and their paths make glittering effects to which are lives are sometimes changed for the better. I feel you want to add to a person's best interests by bringing up an angel, or at least, that is what I assume. Good signs.

PURPOSE OF STORY: *CheckR* Do you suppose a spiritual purpose from you is here for us? It is not so much just to entertain but to have us reflect on ourselves and take a story with a fictional ending in a way that fantasy gives us a lift at the end. Where are we going from here as readers? Perhaps to another piece from you that enlightens us even more and takes upon the task of living with this man's fortune in heaven.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Tweek it for the next story you write on this theme
and be more thorough and given to a consciousness for the character you speak of.

LAST COMMENT: *CheckB* *Star*Write on! *Star* You have a good worthy piece. Liked it.


Feather Duster
aka Vicki


New Sig for Reviewing Items
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In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



This is a review that is part of your shower from:
GROUP
Showering Acts of Joy Group  (E)
On indefinite hiatus
#1499415 by Pat ~ Rejoice always!
. Good evening!

FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I am so touched as a sister of yours over this piece. As I read it through I recognize the seriousness and emotional importance to you that the piece evolves with. I see that your family has always been your Number 1 Fan, I think. I know that they are the most wonderful human beings in your life. To lose your mother, well, it is a sad and overpowering moment of grief. You spoke to us, for course, in your own style that is so wonderfully deep and given to a place from a special heart. It is like you to pull all stops and give us the freedom of a tragic loss like this in a real and giving manner. You are a talented woman and I chose this piece at random wishing to know more about you, Sherri. I'm glad I did. You give us your wisdom, the wisdom of your generation.

BEST LINE: *CheckV*

God only knows how difficult that is. I’ll never let go of the wonderful memories we shared, nor the love that will burn infinitely within my heart for my mother, my best friend.

This is a line you shall cherish when you keep this page.


WHAT YOU WANT TO ACCOMPLISH WITH THIS PIECE: *CheckR* Sherri, you accomplished much. This is a stand to say your family means the most to you and that your mother who passed on never let you go. You mention you will be with her after death. I feel the same way with my brothers who have passed on. I am very excited to know that if I pray hard enough, they will hear me . . . even as we speak. You gave us a beginning and an ending that was a well-spaced, well- written page from your life. A most extraordinary and talented life of a good, good author. This I take into consideration when I see your accomplishments and I am no less impressed with this piece that I am with "TWO WORLDS APART" books. You do not own a shallow bone in your body when it comes to getting across.

FINAL COMMENT:*CheckV* Let me just say that I am so pleased that from the beginning of your arrival you gained such friends and acquaintances that you are a household name in our writing.com community. I mean that in a complimentary way. People want to become educated and improve their reviewing skills here. You have seen us that believe in your powers become overwhelming enlightened. I know that when a family member passes it is universal to speak of. It is a joy to note your life at that point. And take heed that your writing will never go in vain.


Feather Duster
aka vicki

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Liked it. Yes, sinister, indeed. You gave us the works. Gee. I think you handled this one well.

BEST LINE: *CheckV* Couldn't decide. All lines had a meaningful gait to the unsettling end. You did your job.

METER,RHYME, PATTERN: *CheckG* Good meter, rhyme, rhythm, and pattern to follow.

PURPOSE OF POEM: *CheckB* Wasn't sure of the purpose. It must be like any horror-scary genre this poem ends up in a category that is made for a fearless person who reads. Was your intention to ward off evil spirits?

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* None.

LAST COMMENT *CheckV* I must take a little time like a shot of whiskey to digest this. It follows its own shadow. Quite real. I'm happy. You had a leak of humor with it. It's cool.



Feather Duster
aka Vicki


A new Simply Positive Reviewers Group Signature.
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In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


I am reviewing you, Fyn, for
GROUP
Showering Acts of Joy Group  (E)
On indefinite hiatus
#1499415 by Pat ~ Rejoice always!
for your shower.
Good evening!

FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I wanted to review this humorous poem for the fun in it. My impression is it came upon you, maybe, like a bolt of lightning and you were suddenly inspired and at the same time wanting your audience be amused.
I really enjoyed it.

BEST LINE: *CheckV*
He leapt without thinking--
'twas a long way to fall--
landed, plop in a bucket
still not safe at all.

Here is the crux of your frog's dilemma. So we know in the story-line what has gone and happened and we begin wondering what will happen to him. Your storyline carries a full weight of good story lines. It is rollicking and hilarious for the frog to encounter this situation. I like a light-hearted subject. The lines suggest this.

METER,RHYME, and PATTERN: *CheckG* Even though the meter is not the author's most important intention, the rhyme is fun and well-patterned. This leaves the audience to find a logical pattern, too, of what the story is about. Good show.

PURPOSE OF POEM: *CheckB* Did you mean to give us a frog lesson? I think of the Prince and the Frog and then who Phineas T. Frog might be. A scholarly frog?
It all ends with irony. That is always a nice turn for poems.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* None, really. I don't think the poem was meant to be the classic sonnet of the western world and who cares. It was fun reading it. It didn't make me think too hard. I'd have given it to my great-nephew and he'd be satisfied in understanding it.

LAST COMMENT FOR THE EVENING: *CheckV* When one knows the deep worth of other's WDC ports, one doesn't question a piece so much. Good as gold. I, ultimately like to visit well-known ports even though Newbies can be a nice task.
I just wanted to tell you, I have a large plastic frog as a doorstop in my front room. I'm fond of them. I've watched out for them when I was a child playing in Woods. Take it easy.


*Star*WRITE ON!*Star*


Feather Duster
aka Vicki

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Review of The Fish  
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing:
 The Fish  (E)
Based on a quote by Albert Einstein. Written for "Poetic Journeys" contest.
#1943832 by Thursday--Goodbye Virus!
for Showering Acts Of Joy for you.

FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Firstly, I like a quote, at times, that goes with a poem the author has written. This one explains a fantasy and gives us a wise man's guess at what might go down in the poem to make it work. It, in this case, came off beautifully.

BEST LINE: *CheckV* I liked:For how could he be a genius if he could not climb a tree? for it has checkmated us to a nice thoughtful conclusion. To wit, it is almost humbly giving us the chance to keep our queen in mind. Do not judge a queen, she will back down and acquiesce everytime. Second line: That he would judge another in only one way:
It mattered not how strong or handsome one be
But how deftly and swift one could climb a tree.
The squirrel is the genius here. He is the natural genius. Surely, he is not all.

IMAGERY AND DRAMATIC EFFECT: *CheckG* There are certainly nice effects to this poem. It strikes out with good images and finds its way to a good aphorism. Well-done.

METER, RHYME, AND PATTERN: *CheckV* Brilliant meter, rhyme, rhythm and pattern. Just right.

PURPOSE OF THE POEM: *CheckB* I think your purpose a good, clean, clear purpose: Wisdom speaks in many ways. This you have achieved.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* None. How complete! Good job.

LAST COMMENT FOR THE DAY: *CheckV* Haven't we all been in this situation? Am I going to be like the fish or the squirrel? I've never heard this quote before so I really enjoyed hearing it and lending an ear to it.

*Star*WRITE ON!*Star*

Feather Duster
aka vicki

Part of your shower-Umbrellas by Whome
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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing:
 When Love Touches The Heart  (E)
Staring a little terrier-mix - Support your local SPCA
#1912169 by Chrys O'Shea
. Good morning!


Kristina, I noted you from StoryMistress's General Discussion concerning the OK corral. I found your post very legitimate. I came upon your port that way and am so pleased to be here. I love your tidy manner of getting your work out. The graphics are very wonderful. I
am hoping to get the time to read a novel or two of yours. So, I just dropped in today to make a note of what good things you have to offer.
I believe you have been here for awhile and it seems to be well-provoked with progress in what you write. All your titles are legit and you
found a deeper meaning such as in this particular poem with the terrier and of course, that beloved word love. Sentiment I think is great in the realm of linking our psyche to a deeper tender love. You have all the makings of an excellent published writer and I can't help but say so. Chao for now.


Keep writing on!


Feather Duster
aka Vicki


A beautiful Rose signature.
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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



I am reviewing:
STATIC
Gypsies, Dragons, Magic and a Princess  (ASR)
I chose to do a fantasy Prose/Poem about a Princess, dragon and magic.
#1940160 by Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox


My general impressions for this sweet poem is that it really reiterates all the wise knowledge you, Megan Rose, have got with the subjects you are have made so beloved in the past. I myself am aware of what magic you can do with characters of such breed and birth. It has been my favorite thing with you to reminisce about the most enjoyable rareity of good stories and poems you make with your writings. A winner is very possible. Let me tell you I won't be fooled by those who might call your work difficult or not easy to read. I am a total fan.

You have a few typo mistakes you should fix to try and win. They are:

2nd line, 1st stanza: space between yesteryear and that

3rd line, 1st stanza: the word tree should be three

5th line, 4th stanza:{c:hot pink} should be this way: place hot and pink together for a word to make hotpink

I want to know my suggestions are limited because I want you to show your own freedom with your work. There is nothing you can't do if you try! Can't wait to see Flair Newsletter new edition.




Write from the heart! Show your passion! I agree, Megan.


Feather Duster
aka Vicki


Another New SP Group Sig For Reviewers.
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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)




I am reviewing:
STATIC
The Crickets' Love Song  (E)
A Villanelle poem.
#1937727 by Dave
this evening for you, Dave.

This summer I loved going into Stormy Lady's Poetry Newsletter and seeing some fine writing offered. Knowing that you are a winning feature I immediately chose this one first. She is speaking of a woman in that Newsletter called Louise Bogan. She did some nice cycle poems and as I read a few, I noted this precision of form and the metaphor and faded, ethereal images she left for us.

Your poem is quite unique and I really loved the meaningful comprehension I was able to achieve with this on higher ground. It is laced with good lines that follow a pattern in your villanelle, repetition and yes rhyme. You have been excellent with such a form here. The exceptionally unusually and contemp last stanza reaches out for what you called in the second line: "a quest for a romantic rendevous". I was not fooled by the lines but more enjoyed them and their theme. You know what you've got here, and it "sings" as you tell us about that.

Your grammar was fine. I remember working with Larry, the Kansas Poet, before he died. May he RIP. He was always speaking of good form like villanelles. You, here, didn't just fit one to form. Your content was well-placed in your space in time.

No suggestions. Love it.

Have a nice summer!


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Review of wax and feathers.  
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)



I am reviewing
wax and feathers.  (ASR)
the infamous fall.
#1881481 by playinghouse
for R.A.O.K. in the genre of Mythology. I am but one opinion.

This was such a flawless piece. Well-described and well-planned. I liked thinking back on the myth of Daedalus and Icarus. I haven't heard this story in mythology quite like it is here. It had been a favorite of mine back in high school. Your careful details and your unequivocable style cannot be passed up. It is suspenseful pieces like these that keep me coming back for more.

GRAMMAR MISTAKE: He took a deep breath, and smelled the salt from below him, and the saw the delicate wisps of clouds-- the word the before "saw" must have been an inadvertent mistake and should be "he" or "then"

I have no suggestions to alter this piece. It is very enjoyable though a bit sad in content. But that's the way the story goes!


Feather Duster
aka vicki
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Review of Whisper Of A Name  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing:
Whisper Of A Name  (E)
Have you ever heard a whisper?
#1762923 by C. T. Hill




MY GENERAL IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I like the suspensefulness of this piece. It has lines of true grit to it and also has spiritual brilliance. In that the style is free and loose and gives us mention of the name Gabriel I took my own path to personal interpretation. The revelation of suddenly dying in the end of the short story looks to be a paragraph that is separate from the others. It hangs on that next to last paragraph. What happened to the narrative. It is like the narrative sees her life flash before her and we are hearing the description. We want to wait for "the whisper that is sweet" because this is the title and it gears us up to reckon with the spiritual awakening that this narrative is having. I was a bit confused but only read it twice before I settled with the way the story was told. It was off the conventional in plot and followed a different trail with real words like "love" for us to examine amongst the other of the explanation. It is a very legitimate piece of stuff. I'm glad I saw it in the Spiritual Newsletter.

STYLE,SYNTAX,SPELLING,GRAMMAR: *CheckR* Grammar here is fine, spelling too. With the syntax as it is, the paragraphs consisted of one line or two lines. I am thinking here that this is what you want the style to be. That the piece hinges on that next to the last paragraph murder-rap symbolically or not. So then, the meaning is kept hidden for us to ponder and give us a chance to make our own story about it.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* I liked it as is as many did.

FINAL COMMENTS: *CheckR* Symbolism here is apparent. Spirtuality in pieces can be fullfilled in many ways. I think you examined quite a bit before writing this. Very thought-provoking and heart-felt.

Write on!


Feather Duster
aka vicki

Another New SP Group Sig For Reviewers.
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Review of Vernal Equinox  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)



I am reviewing:
 Vernal Equinox  (E)
My entry in Senior Center Forum Contest - 28 lines
#1922200 by Prosperous Snow celebrating


Good morning to you!


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Selectly true, I'm glad I found this in a recent "Spiritual Newsletter". I really liked your lines and am very impressed with it's message. I wanted to read a spring poem. This one was just my size. I liked your movements and your grace at telling us the goodness in faith. I have been going on a spiritual journey for some time now. Your
poem holds true, very sensible, very collective, sticking to what we can glean from our "paths".


GRAMMAR,STYLE, SYNTAX,SPELLING:*CheckR* NO spelling or grammar mistakes. A short poem, but very viable. Liked it. When we say "New Day", may I use your words?, I think we all have a great reaction to that if we believe in our God. I am a Christian who had lost my faith and has renewed my faith in Christ Jesus. It has brought me home in many ways. I am glad that I now can "proclaim" my faith.



Thank you for passing this one on. Write on!




Feather Duster
aka vicki


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