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Review of God's Eyes  
In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR*Long are the days when I have feared the devil's wrath. To be there where the Lord lies in truth and civility toward opinions, I can see through these eyes, too. And How Great Thou Art. Thank you.

GRAMMAR, SYNTAX,SPELLING:*CheckR* Material for all time, all ages, all places. Excellent verse lines, steady and traditional. Content material at a balance, no spelling mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Write on!

FINAL COMMENTS: May I keep that last line in mind for my brothers too? It is so appropriate. This is my opinion one day at a ime.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* It is true that when accidents happen God watches over us. In that, I trust. My impressions of your poem are straightforward for you: you have acheived what you want to acheive and it is something I want. . .good things happen to people who wait.

GRAMMAR, SYNTAX, SPELLING: *CheckR* I believe this is a sestina, am I right? You have not specified this at the bottom of your poem. This makes it nice for reviewers. With respect toward your sense of things you shape things with a great power and a voice. It is powerful. It is what I think you might have wanted to have reviewers see. Moving, yes.

SUGGESTIONS: True to form, I believe. No suggestions.

FINAL COMMENTS: Saw this feature in the Spiritual Newsletter this week. Congrats. It is a must-read for us at WDC who love this Newsletter.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


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Girl from a Dusty Memory  (18+)
Searching the dusty folders of my memory, her elusive name made me fall all over again
#1227557 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Coming from a distant star like Beetlejuice, you have captured me. I loved your dialogue with this piece. I find your bio a masterpiece and I hope to GOD I fit in with WDC because I feel I must have luck to enjoy pieces like "Girl From A Dusty Memory".

GRAMMAR:, SYNTAX AND SPELLING:*CheckR* Gee, you are all over the place with this. It's fabulous. A real epic adventure nd I'm wondering if you have done an interactive nor not. I'm not getting chummy but are you for real?

SUGGESTIONS:*CheckR* Keep it the same, keep it the same, keep it the same. LOL

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* Hope to someday visit your star again, er your portfolio I mean. You have great, raw talents with respect to where you are beaming from.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


 Fairytales come true  (13+)
This poem was dedicated to two of my best girl friends and their boyfriends.
#1702660 by Jae



Such a wonderful message to me today on this early morning! Brilliant writing for a breath of air and a cup of coffee. Thank you for giving me a chance to hear this today. May you have a nice day!




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .


Feather Duster
aka vicki
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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


 My best friend disability  (E)
Living with a disability
#1701295 by The Sky's the limit


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Wow. I'm sure you have talent. You have much to say in a clever way that branches out toward
the excellent line:

We make a good team, disability and I

I think this poem has heart and gives of itself. I love the form of poetry you used. I recognize it. I'm familiar with poems whichcome across as a lesson to learn, a gift to know about, a wish to handle with a star somewhere.

SUGGESTION: *CheckR*I'm not sure I myself would center it in that way. It is your procedure and your poem. It has a good attractive look; however, I would go line by line with commas and periods and make it shorter lines with stops for the
correct conjunctions. Come from the left side non-centered.

FINAL COMMMENT: *CheckR* This poem keeps your intellectual juices going! It does not strap you with a bulwark of nonsense nor too much of the garden. It picks one up. It gives sweat a little to a good word. Likely that it will be an excellent
poem to keep safe in your portfolio.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Review of Thirst  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



QUICK IMPRESSION: *CheckR* Liked your idea with its "creature". The mystery of the woman's body is a a can-see reaction. Thinking on it is a little scary but okay. Then the title. It grabs the point. Clear. I like syllogisms like reading this item.

Feather Duster/aka vicki

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



just clicking through the Romance/Love Newsletter this week with its hot items. Premontions come to me with this and I feel at ease with it. Jist of things that loops time and ground roots. Very well-spaced and smart dialogue that doesn't wander. Enjoyed it!!


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Review of Sr Mary Carola  
In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* I am so proud to read this piece. Probably one of the best short cultural pieces I have read on WDC. Moving and a just all-in-round feel good piece.

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* Excellent style of speech with this. That was what I noted first. Content was so interesting that it caught my attention and I related to the wonderful last line! Great way to write this. No spelling mistakes.

SUGGESTONS: *CheckR* Hope you have a nice day!

FINAL COMMENTS:*CheckR* Without matters of our faith like you have described I probably would have not been able to be keeping my interests in looking for great pieces like these and not be here.


Feather Duster\aka vicki


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS*CheckR* I love your offer to revisit your portfolio. What I have seen here is again a naturally gelled poem with great impressions to mark. I see again your womanly senses with a powerful force of earth rings and perhaps a sun and moon existence in a grand fashion of stars. It is kind of a romantical poem to me. Perhaps giving no leeway to lose a lover. Therefore, enticing. You can put barriers up against love, but when you talk of your lover perhaps just perhaps, it's just notion I am going on:

pretending we're different even though we're the same

is a line that governs the poem with a great impression of survival that you speak of, with romance as a guide as well.


GRAMMAR*CheckR*: Good verse. People flourish in it. I love it. I don't see why not. If there is a traditional line movement it takes it just that much more tight.



SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Write on! Good job.


FINAL COMMENT:*CheckR* I like your portfolio. I'm a fan already!



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Review of Her Tears  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* Words such as these tame the wild heart and calm the soul. I like your soothing sounds and your knowledge of the grand mother nature as woman. Questions we ask ourselves in the great cosmos. Look for these questions to answer and we are making our way in the world. Perhaps, the Lord is there to care, and a man is not hearing. I believe the opposite does not happen. the Lord is there to guide and not quit guiding. Gravesites are many, we must kneel in mud at times, and there are always more. I have to admit, at times it is hard for me to see.

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* A little off alignment but that is all.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* I will think on your poem.

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* You did just fine. Highly understandable and get a spiritual language with it.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


A review of:

The Shell Necklace  (18+)
A management trainee's act of kindness is reciprocated in a touching way.
#1686667 by Prof Moriarty







FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I would like to admit immediately I have not read anything quite like this on WDC yet. It was a most prestigious, detailed account of a love encounter that came after the character had some time to think on what it was he might end up receiving from a lover. Oh, to be in the heartland of Africa. You know your stuff. I read Robert Rurak for African Lit and he was excellent. Kind of Heart Of Darkness stuff by Joseph Conrad. I love your African Queen. Rosa is loveable, too. Your signs of knowing life itself with a certain bend on psychology shine through. Light at the end of the tunnel. The working man and his dilemma vs. the land concerns me here. I see the true task of your labors and it is manly fiction. Liked it as a femaie, to be honest.

GRAMMAR: *CheckR* You might add-on to the following line and explain saying something indignantly. You are only slightly prone to showing us what you want to feel without keeping your character of a good, solid man at only a few points.


"Next time, ask her to meet me. Otherwise, don't accept any more of these," I replied indignantly, gesturing at the honey

and then you forgot the word "me" after this first sentence of a paragraph:

Abena’s husband continued to elude,

These are only a few grammatical mistakes. To polish off your piece you don't need to do much.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: *CheckR* I commend you for doing a grand job of mapping out an African encounter. It is suspenseful and enjoyable and then enters into an intimate encounter and gives the reader a love scene that is very sexy. I liked your knowledge It borders on a message or lesson that we get. And I love to see that in stories. I did not mind the length because I kept up with it and it keeps my attention.

FINAL COMMENTS:*CheckR* Talent. Real talent is displayed here in your writing. I like your style. You're very close to giving us a winning piece here.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Review of Paper World.  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I am close with Cardio. My boyfriend has heart problems and I worry endlessly over him. Let us just say this piece has me left with a sad smile. I have no reality to it but that life is treating us well and I hope luck is on his side.*Star*

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* Is there an afterlife? Dad always prayed for one. Can we call it just a serene place? Or is it more? Dare we ask?*Star*


Thanks for letting me in your portfolio It was a pleasure. Write on!

Feather Duster
aka vicki

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* I could not but think of Savior Christ Jesus. For a moment it grabbed me to pray and then I thought beyond it. There is endless and useful markings of those speaking of His Great Steps. I am but a pebble in that pond where fishes swim. I wonder if you know how deep and impressive this is. A WDC genuine high mark.*Star*

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* Excellently done. To have unquoted and quoted originally, it's precious.*Star*

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Look to the future.*Star*

LAST COMMENTS: *CheckR* I might add there are things that come to me on a second read, it is that kind of poem. It will come to me if I were to read it thrice.*Star*

Feather Duster
aka vicki

May you find inner peace with this message which is also a signature.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Just as do you, I enjoy the beloved haiku form. Now I am aware of what you call The Familiar Form. Thank you. I see the illusions and the most important thing I think a haiku to my mind has: closeness to nature. The haiku form can be taken from China earth, but it still regenerates is renewed and never ends. *Star*

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* Perfect.*Star*

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* None.*Star*

FINAL COMMENTS: *CheckR* I will finish your portfolio. I enjoyed this visit.*Star*


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


The tiger is just beautiful: Princess. I love this story. It is sweet and cartoonesque with its Clara a woman. And it has movement to it which gives the piece a good rating from me. To talk with the animals, squeek and squack with the animals, it's just what Dr. Doolittle tells us! Quite a feed. I'm impressed.

Feather Duster
vicki

I modified this to fit my Portfolio at the current time.
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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Isn't this a sly part of the series? Jane Austen has always had that charm down through the ages and somehow you capture it! You know you make this meaningful. I asked myself who this Miss Schippen is and her place in life and it became very meaningful. Yes, you have meaningful stuff and it's quite fun to read! You have a captivating character study here in your storyline. Trumble is humourous in the contemp way. You know? It is your style. It's outstanding with . . . style. I loved it.

GRAMMAR*CheckR* I did find a few spelling errors: line 21:mahogany is the correct way as is in line 24 "with" and line 27 pompous and line 28 charming. I know they are typos and you were probably going at break-neck speed. watch out to go back and enjoy your piece and you will have perfect spelling. It's not my strongest point, personally. one other: Jennifer and Megan sit to sat on line 22.


SUGGESTIONS:*CheckR* Keep writing! You are just the best.

LAST COMMENTS: {:e:checkR} To me, your stuff has much greatness even if it is in its raw form. This is essentially not raw at all, it speaks from that other century, when women were interesting in a different way. It is sophisticated. It comes across well. And to illude to oneself in a way gives all the mystery to a piece that you think you have, yes, it is there.


Feather Duster
vicki

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Review of No End Valley  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: I like this poem. It gives us a glorious, colorful and thoughtful usage of the Lord's words. Its spiritualness takes us on a journey into mindul expressions of what he can be and mean for us. Your own place in the poem tells us something. It is behest of a message.
It tells us you follow Him.

PRAISE: I am singing the melodies of the clouds you say. Very nicely metaphoric. You sound as though your journey causes you to walk long. Do not stumble. He will answer.

LAST COMMENT: Words of praise are good to engage in. The best of poems. The psalms are so wonderful. We can never really do justice to them.

Feather Duster
vicki

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Who Am I?  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: You sound like a dedicated mother and you really came up with something when you told us about the Bible study you went through
with your husband. God's Way has this featured in their forum and I thought I would go ahead and read it. I liked your blog/journal. I had made a journal/blog but did not put it on the site about vacation time I spend in Florida for ten years and it is very long. I like reading blogs. Every day life can be so thought-provoking and much more than trivial.

PRAISE: I give you credit. You should write every day. It's a great goal.

Feather Duster
vicki

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Rated: E | (4.5)



IMPRESSIONS: Great variables fill this poem. It creates a lovely and faithful usage of words for faith and hope in God. I like using "a matriarch" for a symbol and someone who you imagine will give us light in heaven.

PRAISE: Let me say that your rhyme scheme was nicely done and just enough stanzas to explain what you want.

SUGGESTIONS: Do you really want to capitalize the first character of all of your lines? There is a semicolon in line 26 that seems out of place.

COMMENT: I liked your poem. I love church and what it can do for you.

Feather Duster
vicki


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)



IMPRESSIONS: I respect, and encourage you, and feel that this is an honest piece. I am proud to be a Roman Catholic Christian the faith healings of those my father were before he passed away. So many clergymen and clergywomen are wonderful beings of God and can help you change your mind if you cannot see light at the end of the tunnel when you stumble. I thank God I have had these teachers.

PRAISE: Praise God! You have a faith in God. That is wonderful and I follow this piece well for that. You can only testify to such a wonderful savior, I know, I know.

SUGGESTIONS: Enlarge? Only a few small words misspelled and you have given me something to really think about. Parable Of the Seeds that
Jesus tells. Good last line for us to believe in.



Thank you. Thank you. Joy in Christ. Read you from God's Way.

Feather Duster
vicki

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Review of Horseshoe Canyon  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)




FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Firstly, I love that style. Active voice, inspirational movement. How inspiring! I loved the out-of-doors when I was t hirteen or fourteen and it was as you say, a paradise. More than that, you give us a solid memory lane that is enjoyable to read and quite clever.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I think you did well with your contest entry. Good luck!

GRAMMAR: No errors I can see.


SUGGESTIONS: None. Good word count for a nice short item.. Exellent place to speak of as you think back.

Feather Duster
vicki


A beautiful Rose signature.
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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


First Impressions: I've noted poems like this one in book stores where the humanity factor is being deeply questioned. I love your pyschology that culminates in a bit of family a bit of romance.

Praise and Applause: I see that you might have felt the rhyme might have been forced but I looked at it as all thoroughly legitimate. It is very clear and glimmering in front of us.

Grammar: The use of pigeons was quite well done. A simile to use, a symbol to contemplate. It drops off pyschologically with the pressure of loneliness of a bench and a wakeup call to knights whereever we can find them. I really loved it.

Suggestions: Passing on the information you did at the end of the end after the poem was a very good idea. We know what you went through and it gave me a reason for giving you a higher rating after I knew you took so much time with it.

Thanks for being featured in Simply Postive this week.

Feather Duster
vicki


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Review of Anniversary Party  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: WIth a piece like this, Jaye P. oh so cleverly shows us illness at it's most defeating. What could have happened to Gerry Lewis? Was it massive heart attacks that Jaye P. wants to warn us about? Was it pills that can be bad? Was it symptoms of serious illnesses that can happen to us that we should be warned about?

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Jaye P.'s items have always been psychologically good for us. She delves, she investigates, she probes. Nothing goes by her in the end. I like her dialogue and it has always been natural. I think Jaye P. Marshall knew life itself. And her death, ironically, has me thinking she is in a better place, knowledgeable about life and at peace.

OTHER COMMENTS: Jaye P. will be missed and I myself am interested in visiting her white case soon to add to those who want to pay her homage. She was one of the best on the site.

Feather Duster
vicki


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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: This is a highly active chapter with lots of action. The knife scene was fascinating and very suspenseful. It proved Contessa's skill as a woman of many ways to cure.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I really like Contessa. She has a personality that shines and does have that healing touch. She is a praisable part of the story. Your other characters follow along well and balance themselves with Contessa.

GRAMMAR: THere were a few mistakes but nothing large. Contessa was spelled Conteesa in line two. In line 12 the word stabbed is spelled stabed. However, when you publish something it has always been flawless and that's what I go by.

SUGGESTIONS: I'm enjoying this. None.


Feather Duster
vicki


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Excellent triangle poem. You certainly used the contest words correctly. You have a sweeping manner to this style. Hearts are entwined and minds moving . . . You have always a romance on your mind, it's unique and what I dream and envy others over who grab the gauntlet young when they are young and restless and not in senior years. Take us on a mystical journey next time. These, Bell and Jacob, and Edward must survive the trip, and wow, voila, you enrich your imagery and still have the fashionable poem you have first written.

Love ya so.
Feather Duster
vicki


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