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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, LegendaryMask. I just read this script writing... And, "wow" it was great! I didn't know you could write scripts. Is there anything you can't write.😍 I really enjoyed this story and how you played it out. Jax is a good character and his girlfriend Arleigh is exciting. I liked how you kept the flow of the story up and on key! Good Read! πŸ˜‰


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Jolanh. I'm here to return the favor and review your story. I like where you are going with this story, it appears to be a chapter story, in time. My thoughts only are I felt it needed a bit more detail on some characters to envision this more clearly. I did like your word choices throughout the story. Definitely for adults. This could be a good novel.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello GivingThanksBrad, I stopped by and wanted to see this from the prompt given. I really enjoyed reading this. To me, you fulfilled the prompts expatiations. And with a wonderful story to complete it. You kept it spontaneous and entertaining. Very visual when George appears through a green misty portal when Ruby enters the hallway and there's no one there. I also loved the ending. Poor Ruby!
Good Read! :)


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Eldos. This story is really good. The last lines are creepy. In a good way. It kinda sent chills up my spine as I read it. :o I wasn't expecting that! Good job, there! I didn't notice anything wrong with any of it. Your punctuation, commas, all of it looks good! The whole second paragraph totally throws the reader (well, me) off thinking that she really survived the accident all the way to the end. Thanks... Lol :)


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Review of The Old Man  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, AJW. I just stopped by for a read of your story "The Old Man". I liked where the story takes the reader in the ending through the emotions of what the son notices about his father, The Old Man. It makes me as a reader understand not to avoid changes in our elderly. Like how this man's memory is not what it used to be since he lives alone. Diseases of memory are in our real lives.
I would have liked to know more about what the noises sounded like that the old man heard, other than just one 'Bang'. I did notice in the first three paragraphs a few punctuation mistakes. ( for lack of, mostly) Some of the sentences also don't need to be broken with a period... Less of these... The line(One that no child should ever give.) Throws the flow of the story off! (in my opinion, only) His son gives his father a worried look. (Is fine.) Try giving the son a name, since the cat has a name, and I presume it was the old man's wife Helen. It will add to personalizing the story to your readers. Other than that I found this to be a Good Read! :) Keep up the good work!


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Review of Closure  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello, C.N. Greer; I stopped by to give you a review on your story 'Closure'. First- I would like you to know I am here to offer you any help and suggestions. I am not an editor, I am just a writer like you. I was interested in this by the title and as I read your story I noticed you used the word "she'd, and he'd and had many, many times. Making the story always in the past tense. It would make a huge difference in this story if you gave the characters names. It would also personalize it so much more to your readers. Your punctuation was done well. It only appears to be a lot because of the overuse of those words I mentioned. This poor girl is reliving her past. A past that has been haunting her most of her life. When the words 'Coercive Rape' appear to her during a class that makes her understand that she was in fact raped many years ago by a so-called, want-to-be your boyfriend. This is what sets her out to confront her past, but she is living in the present. I truly liked your scene descriptions, you add nice detail to the surroundings of the story. Now, the characters need the same attention. I found only a couple of misspelled words throughout. All in all, I enjoyed reading this. I would like to see more details about the girl and her life. Who is was she? Who is she now? Did she have any family? Who was her good friend? Things like that, personalize it! I hope my feedback helps you out any. Good Job and Keep Writing :)


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Beautiful... Just Beautiful!!! πŸ₯°πŸ™. Nicely written and good use of words. πŸ˜‡. A nice tear jearker! 😭


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Review of The Dollmaker  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Casey. I stopped by to see the winner of the writers cramp, and here you are. Well done with this prompt! It gives me a little creepy feeling reading it, as I'm sure that was your intention?
As I look at the picture of the clown (which I am terrified by now, thanks to Steven King) it still makes me want to read it. Your second paragraph sent chills up my spine, thinking about your words. It puts this writing together very well with the prompt. Good job!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Royal Eduardo. I just read you're short story. Very well written. You completely had my attention on this. I found it to quite thrilling to the ending and captivating. You provided good imagery and the story flowed well with the suspense. What I liked best is the kidnapped girl being a clone and putting the story in a busy New York scene was brilliant! I found no errors if there are any. The story was exciting and held my attention. Good Read! πŸ‘


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Review of A new dawn  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Fellicia Moh. I just stopped by this newsletter and a newbie read. Since it's a New Year, I wanted to read this. I really felt your words talk to me about setting my own goals for the New Year. I have so many to consider. Your second line, 'Hope',towered over us like an umbrella in a rainy season. That's what I felt like a good half of last year. Nervous, excited and afraid. -Yeah, that's what I felt like. Then also as the year continued, my mind was still set on going forward with my goal for the year. To be truly a published author. When, it finally came near the end of the year. "The rise of a new dawn." "A chance to make it" I soon felt that I fulfilled my goal. For once in my life I did something I promised myself I would do. Live by your own words, because time passes us by much too fast. Good Read! Keep up the good work, and welcome to the best place for writing and help and making new friends. Only at the WDC. 🀩


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Review of Nice Guy  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Lewis Challinor. I stopped by to review your short story "Nice Guy". I felt as though I was reading a personal journal of a Nice Guy. Well done! This totally captured my attention. This poor soul of a man finds himself desperate for real Love. But the woman he falls for is not looking for a man like him. Though his heart is true and he exposes his feelings to her she sees a frail, weak man. Not even a man to give her real love, yet that is all he wants to give her. She turned out to be a 'users'. A tramp in other words and she breaks his heart. You did a great job on this piece. You gave it a feeling of true sacrifice. It comes through very sad in the end. But, things like this really do happen too often. Good Read! ***


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, WriterAtHeart.
I stopped by to give you a requested review of your poem "Looking for the Rain"
The title is captivating, but the first line and the second to last line that are the same somehow do not sound correct to me. I can feel what you are saying but the word 'have' doesn't seem to fit right! Or maybe it's the whole line, "She always have bunch of people to roam" ??? Something is missing here, I can't explain it? I do like this poem quite well. It's just that line that has me confused a bit! In the 6th line, you wrote 'voices'. that is plural, it would flow better as a singular word "voice". Other than that this is a beautiful poem. Sadness and memorable at the same time. I really liked the 4th paragraph. It gives this poem feeling. These are my thoughts only. It is a good read. :)


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Review of Blind  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello ther CJ Reddick. I had to stop by for a read of your story. Your title pulled at my curiosity because I myself am losing my eyesight. I just had to read what you wrote. And I must say this was a very interesting story. I did read the good book many years ago. Though I have forgotten a lot of it. I still have my faith and belief in the words of our lord God. Your story of this blind woman who entered the church for personal salvation, only to be judged by the priest as a whore by only what he had seen in passings her by, was incredibly wrong and ungodly by all means when one approaches a priest for a wafer of the body of Christ then refused because of poor judgment and so called rules to receive the wafer. But when he confronts the woman after service she turned out to be Azrale and turned into a body of eyes, and takes his to show him that his own eyesight is in judgment now and he is blinded by true faith. Great twist on this story. My favorite part is the ending when he kneels down and asks the Lord to teach him to be truly humble to others. Wonderfully written. πŸ‘βœ¨


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautifully written nixie, your voice can be heard through the the lines of your story. You speak of another time with great empathy and love. Your parents are difinatelly from another time, the past comes alive as you spoke of how they met, how they spoke to each other. I loved that they always called each other by Sweetheart and Honey. That's an unconditional love wheather or not you see it every day or not.
It exists! It is rare these days anymore, but it still exists on a different level these days. I believe in what you say you heard and saw what your father said to you, " I'm done." After my mother passed away, I embraced seeing her walk up and down the hall od her home which I moved back into to care for my father. I always talked to her, and still do. What helped me understand and excepting her loss, I have pictures of both my parents all around my house, on my iPad, the first thing I see when I wake up, they live in pictures and in my heart. My parents met during the Korean War in the USO clubs in Ney York City. Oh the stories I can tell you about their love is a lot like yours, just a different time. This is a wonderful story nixie and thank you for sharing it with us all. Happy Anniversary, your fathe would be so proud of you! πŸ˜‡


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Review of On Holiday  
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
"Wonderful, bobturn. Simple wonderful story. I really enjoyed how you treat k the prompt and created this unique story of an old thrifty lady who is given a decorative purse, after her ragged old one fell apart. She is a simple woman, she would rather have something second hand than pay full price for a new useless item. Then to find a key later on that opens a forever holiday to her her when she uses the key.
The storyline is Brilliant!! Good Read! πŸ€—


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Review of Carry on  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello. Jay. I'm so happy to see you here! I really like this short poem of yours. It speaks louder than the words itself... I would like to make a suggestion, about the word "ideal" to me it would flow better with the word idea... What do you think? If that word works for you, then leave it alone. This is my opinion only. I do appreciate you writing in memory of all who have served and who are still serving our country. You will in time find many more writers here who are also retired service men and woman. Keep up the good work and never stop carrying on!!!! πŸ€—


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, warped sanity. " Bravo" on this wonderfully written piece of writing. I really liked the repeated of the last verses and then how you changed the last verse to repeat it again. Nice touch! My cousins first born is Autistic, he's going on 38 years old and has never been a burden to anyone. He's smart, in his own way, just as you discribe the child in this poem. To me this poem has two sides to every paragraph. The Can do's, and the miss Understood struggles. I love it!
I used to be a special Ed teachers aid, and I so enjoyed going to work every day, that I felt privileged because I love my job! πŸ€— Thank you for writing this and making aware the true vision of Autism.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, celticsea. I absolutely Love this adorable poem/story of yours "The Princess on the log." This had good flow for a story within the poem. Good choice of words any changes od could understand. My favorite part is when the frog talks back to the little girl. How surprised she was to hear it talk. Your expressions used the make that feeling come to life. Brilliant! All the way to a happy ending to find out that she has a twin, who was turned into the frog long ago. Now, her sister. Very cute tale! Good read!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Elycia 'I completed the book.' Thank you for you kind words regarding my illness. I am home now for the second time in the past two weeks. My blood pressure skyrocketed and gave me severe headaches. And I never get headaches, until now. I'd like to return the thank you with a review of this poem, The climb to Nothingness.
My first thought after reading this, to me it speaks in silence of the many stepping stones we come to in our lifetime. Everyone is different in the way we walk through the life. I really enjoyed the way you discribe that path in this poem. Our future is something we must search for to find our happiness in this world. Some finds are bad, but the good will always be there if we never stop looking and accepting.
Good Read! πŸ€—
And Thank you again. Have a wonderful sale week!


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Review of Hands  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Icanterbareback. I am on the summer raid and thought I would stop by for a review of your story/poem 'Hands'. The title of this captured my attention first. I wondered how this would be written about hands. And you did a wonderful job with this. It tells of the one thing most people don't see when they meet new people. I think now I will have to start looking at people's hands just to get the experience in this piece. I did enjoy reading this and I like the story line behind it.
Good Read! Keep up the good work. πŸ€—


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Review of Responsibility  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Nick. I'm on the raid today and I've stopped by for a read. This free verse poem says a lot deep within the words. Especially in today's world. Society is an open book, you can't get away from it. It makes it hard to really put your trust in someone. For fear that they may tell only one other your shared secrets and feeling and in just a few minutes it's all over the www. Exposed to the public, nearly. This poem is very true, and it implies that there are others in your life that you can trust. I like that you placed your parents at the top of the list when looking for trust in your life. And only close friends, are trustworthy. Might I suggest that you add having 'Trust within yourself' too. πŸ€—πŸ’« Good Read!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, Ratdog. I'm on the raid today and stopped by for a read of your receipe for Ratdog's Barbecue Chicken Stew. First here to you🍻. I really enjoyed reading your directions for making this stew. I also liked all the options you offer throughout the ingredients needed. It mad me laugh!!! πŸ˜ƒ It almost sounds like the way my husband would make a stew. Some folks round here would add roadkill as well. Lol (Not kidding.) 😲 You wrote a fine piece here. I might even let my husband try it out. He loves beer too!!! Good Read!


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello, Joy. I'm on the raid today and just stopped by for a read.πŸ€— This is lovely, what I liked best is the story it tells in such few words as she walks along the beach near the waters front. Also, it gives me while reading the same feelings this poem takes you. Every moment felt, and everything seen, like in slow motion. Stopping by a beach house and witinessing two lovers embrace, which recalls a memory of her own... Very lovely written. My only suggestion would be to shape this poem into a heart, or oval, I've seen some shaped so beautifully. This could be one of those. Or not. You've done well! πŸ€—πŸŒΉπŸŒΉπŸŒΉGood Read!


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Review of Dead Dreams  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello, wikiemol. I came across your story in the review request and stopped by for a read. When I finished it, my first thought was, this is creppy. It appears that this person fearing the entrapment of the city is causing this belief that the city is killing people. But, it's twisted turn revels a ghost that died years ago from an overdose. And this horrible man liked to slit people's throats. Maybe this is some kind of reincarnation of a killer or a very disturbed person who believes something, a deamon of sorts is still killing. But, this person is also wanting to slit people's throats. Scary, Yes! You achieved your goal to write something scary.😨 Good Read!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Gigi3456. I saw this request in the Hub and thought I would stop for a look. I feel empathy for any or all of this story you endured. It truly saddened me that young girls just don't see the person hurting them when most everybody you know sees it. This poor girl; confused and hurt, emotionally and mentally by another creep of a man. A narcissist person is someone who can and will never put anything first, except themselves. They can't tell the truth for their own life. Because they live in a fantasy of themselves, while tearing down the person closest to them, the person who says they Love them. Your voice is being heard in this. But, there is light at the end of your tunnel... You left him... You're a better woman for it. And experienced at the narcissist kind. It is your time to shine. So SHINE On! I truly hope this has a happy ending. Good Read!


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