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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello SS-Diamond Dust, I stopped by for a read. and 'wow', that was good. I enjoyed it and understood it well. The only thing I noticed was you used the word "ground" twice in the same sentence, and it's not needed. I would remove the first one.

rewrite this sentence.
(The goblin was left speechless as the headless husk fell to the ground, dropping its rider to the ground.)

Try this;
The goblin (was) past tense/ (is) present./ left speechless as the headless husk fell, dropping its rider to the ground. Other than that, maybe add a little more detail in the beginning by showing the scene with a few different words. I saw the action take place in my head but, it came across a bit short of details. my opinion only. I like some visual details in my stories. lol

Good luck. It sounds like a good read!


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Review of A Christmas Event  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That’s beautiful. Very simply put with a lot of meaningful words within. πŸ₯° I love it!
You’ve added all the towns people and it connects us all to this poem. It reads like the Christmas story! Wonderful work!
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Review of This Isn't  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jacky. I'm out just reviewing and I came upon this 'flash fiction' of yours... I really enjoyed reading this. It made me think of The Men in Black movies then the end line. What a perfect line to use in this story.🀩 The prompt words weren't much to go on, but you did a great job with them. I believe a lot of this is true to our past. Earth has been here for who knows how long.😏
Good Read!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, Sand Castles Shopgirl 739. I'm on the raid and stopped by for a review of your beautifully written poem. Its sadness is very clear to the reader, it truly touched my heart at the loss of the child. Since I myself lost my first child back in 87'. But, this you did with much empathy. Your rhyming is on key throughout the poem. Nicely done! The first paragraph of lines starts this piece off perfectly, and tells the sadness of the little girl and implying that her voice can still be heard. Wonderful, Good Read!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, Legerdemain. I'm on the winter raid and stopped by for a review. This is a very sweet story. I really like your word choices to make this snowflake come alive. And then adding the others as her sisters is brilliant! I also really love the way you set this up, it's snowflake icons and the paragraphs are nicely arranged. Good Read! Great writing.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello, Dave. I'm on the winter raid and I had to stop by when I saw your title. I had to read it twice just for fun. I'm pretty sure I know a few folks who are just like the characters in this funny poem. You really got me in stitches. Every line is just as funny as the last. So I have no favorite, it's the whole poem. Great Job! I even think some of the characters are related to me. LOL
Good Read for the season!



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, LegendaryMask. I just read this script writing... And, "wow" it was great! I didn't know you could write scripts. Is there anything you can't write.😍 I really enjoyed this story and how you played it out. Jax is a good character and his girlfriend Arleigh is exciting. I liked how you kept the flow of the story up and on key! Good Read! πŸ˜‰


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello GivingThanksBrad, I stopped by and wanted to see this from the prompt given. I really enjoyed reading this. To me, you fulfilled the prompts expatiations. And with a wonderful story to complete it. You kept it spontaneous and entertaining. Very visual when George appears through a green misty portal when Ruby enters the hallway and there's no one there. I also loved the ending. Poor Ruby!
Good Read! :)


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Eldos. This story is really good. The last lines are creepy. In a good way. It kinda sent chills up my spine as I read it. :o I wasn't expecting that! Good job, there! I didn't notice anything wrong with any of it. Your punctuation, commas, all of it looks good! The whole second paragraph totally throws the reader (well, me) off thinking that she really survived the accident all the way to the end. Thanks... Lol :)


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Review of Closure  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello, C.N. Greer; I stopped by to give you a review on your story 'Closure'. First- I would like you to know I am here to offer you any help and suggestions. I am not an editor, I am just a writer like you. I was interested in this by the title and as I read your story I noticed you used the word "she'd, and he'd and had many, many times. Making the story always in the past tense. It would make a huge difference in this story if you gave the characters names. It would also personalize it so much more to your readers. Your punctuation was done well. It only appears to be a lot because of the overuse of those words I mentioned. This poor girl is reliving her past. A past that has been haunting her most of her life. When the words 'Coercive Rape' appear to her during a class that makes her understand that she was in fact raped many years ago by a so-called, want-to-be your boyfriend. This is what sets her out to confront her past, but she is living in the present. I truly liked your scene descriptions, you add nice detail to the surroundings of the story. Now, the characters need the same attention. I found only a couple of misspelled words throughout. All in all, I enjoyed reading this. I would like to see more details about the girl and her life. Who is was she? Who is she now? Did she have any family? Who was her good friend? Things like that, personalize it! I hope my feedback helps you out any. Good Job and Keep Writing :)


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Beautiful... Just Beautiful!!! πŸ₯°πŸ™. Nicely written and good use of words. πŸ˜‡. A nice tear jearker! 😭


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Royal Eduardo. I just read you're short story. Very well written. You completely had my attention on this. I found it to quite thrilling to the ending and captivating. You provided good imagery and the story flowed well with the suspense. What I liked best is the kidnapped girl being a clone and putting the story in a busy New York scene was brilliant! I found no errors if there are any. The story was exciting and held my attention. Good Read! πŸ‘


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Review of A new dawn  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Fellicia Moh. I just stopped by this newsletter and a newbie read. Since it's a New Year, I wanted to read this. I really felt your words talk to me about setting my own goals for the New Year. I have so many to consider. Your second line, 'Hope',towered over us like an umbrella in a rainy season. That's what I felt like a good half of last year. Nervous, excited and afraid. -Yeah, that's what I felt like. Then also as the year continued, my mind was still set on going forward with my goal for the year. To be truly a published author. When, it finally came near the end of the year. "The rise of a new dawn." "A chance to make it" I soon felt that I fulfilled my goal. For once in my life I did something I promised myself I would do. Live by your own words, because time passes us by much too fast. Good Read! Keep up the good work, and welcome to the best place for writing and help and making new friends. Only at the WDC. 🀩


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Review of Nice Guy  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Lewis Challinor. I stopped by to review your short story "Nice Guy". I felt as though I was reading a personal journal of a Nice Guy. Well done! This totally captured my attention. This poor soul of a man finds himself desperate for real Love. But the woman he falls for is not looking for a man like him. Though his heart is true and he exposes his feelings to her she sees a frail, weak man. Not even a man to give her real love, yet that is all he wants to give her. She turned out to be a 'users'. A tramp in other words and she breaks his heart. You did a great job on this piece. You gave it a feeling of true sacrifice. It comes through very sad in the end. But, things like this really do happen too often. Good Read! ***


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, WriterAtHeart.
I stopped by to give you a requested review of your poem "Looking for the Rain"
The title is captivating, but the first line and the second to last line that are the same somehow do not sound correct to me. I can feel what you are saying but the word 'have' doesn't seem to fit right! Or maybe it's the whole line, "She always have bunch of people to roam" ??? Something is missing here, I can't explain it? I do like this poem quite well. It's just that line that has me confused a bit! In the 6th line, you wrote 'voices'. that is plural, it would flow better as a singular word "voice". Other than that this is a beautiful poem. Sadness and memorable at the same time. I really liked the 4th paragraph. It gives this poem feeling. These are my thoughts only. It is a good read. :)


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautifully written nixie, your voice can be heard through the the lines of your story. You speak of another time with great empathy and love. Your parents are difinatelly from another time, the past comes alive as you spoke of how they met, how they spoke to each other. I loved that they always called each other by Sweetheart and Honey. That's an unconditional love wheather or not you see it every day or not.
It exists! It is rare these days anymore, but it still exists on a different level these days. I believe in what you say you heard and saw what your father said to you, " I'm done." After my mother passed away, I embraced seeing her walk up and down the hall od her home which I moved back into to care for my father. I always talked to her, and still do. What helped me understand and excepting her loss, I have pictures of both my parents all around my house, on my iPad, the first thing I see when I wake up, they live in pictures and in my heart. My parents met during the Korean War in the USO clubs in Ney York City. Oh the stories I can tell you about their love is a lot like yours, just a different time. This is a wonderful story nixie and thank you for sharing it with us all. Happy Anniversary, your fathe would be so proud of you! πŸ˜‡


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Review of On Holiday  
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
"Wonderful, bobturn. Simple wonderful story. I really enjoyed how you treat k the prompt and created this unique story of an old thrifty lady who is given a decorative purse, after her ragged old one fell apart. She is a simple woman, she would rather have something second hand than pay full price for a new useless item. Then to find a key later on that opens a forever holiday to her her when she uses the key.
The storyline is Brilliant!! Good Read! πŸ€—


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Review of Carry on  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello. Jay. I'm so happy to see you here! I really like this short poem of yours. It speaks louder than the words itself... I would like to make a suggestion, about the word "ideal" to me it would flow better with the word idea... What do you think? If that word works for you, then leave it alone. This is my opinion only. I do appreciate you writing in memory of all who have served and who are still serving our country. You will in time find many more writers here who are also retired service men and woman. Keep up the good work and never stop carrying on!!!! πŸ€—


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Review of The Potter.  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, EOIWriting. I am reviewing your free verse poem/story per your request. My first thought after reading it a couple times, tells me of a man who makes a clay pot, but he is unsatisified of the way it turned out. It's once soft changeable feeling had turned hard. To me, this poem/story is talking about the man himself, not a pot he made. His life is the pot, and the way it turned out is what is not satisfactory. It has turned hard, like a shell, nothing can bring back any of its softness that once existed. It won't budge at all. Even though he has tried to make it more of what his expicatations truly are, he is unable to change. He is afraid his love will not except it for what it is. And to continue to try to change it, only makes it worse. When he thinks there is no further use in trying to make the pot a better pot, he feels he has to make a decision to stay and accept the pot as it is and accept the damage that may come from keeping it or to leave it and move on and not confront the possiablties that it could ever change. When he desides to leave it, I felt saddened by this, because it is as though he gave up on himself. The clay pot he tried to make perfect.
You chose a very complex choice of words to create this silent poem of self disappointment. (Again, my opinion only) I did enjoy reading it. I hope others will see the same meaning that I saw hidden within this poem. Good job! Keep up the good work!
Sew-no-more πŸ€—


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, warped sanity. " Bravo" on this wonderfully written piece of writing. I really liked the repeated of the last verses and then how you changed the last verse to repeat it again. Nice touch! My cousins first born is Autistic, he's going on 38 years old and has never been a burden to anyone. He's smart, in his own way, just as you discribe the child in this poem. To me this poem has two sides to every paragraph. The Can do's, and the miss Understood struggles. I love it!
I used to be a special Ed teachers aid, and I so enjoyed going to work every day, that I felt privileged because I love my job! πŸ€— Thank you for writing this and making aware the true vision of Autism.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Elycia 'I completed the book.' Thank you for you kind words regarding my illness. I am home now for the second time in the past two weeks. My blood pressure skyrocketed and gave me severe headaches. And I never get headaches, until now. I'd like to return the thank you with a review of this poem, The climb to Nothingness.
My first thought after reading this, to me it speaks in silence of the many stepping stones we come to in our lifetime. Everyone is different in the way we walk through the life. I really enjoyed the way you discribe that path in this poem. Our future is something we must search for to find our happiness in this world. Some finds are bad, but the good will always be there if we never stop looking and accepting.
Good Read! πŸ€—
And Thank you again. Have a wonderful sale week!


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Review of Hands  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Icanterbareback. I am on the summer raid and thought I would stop by for a review of your story/poem 'Hands'. The title of this captured my attention first. I wondered how this would be written about hands. And you did a wonderful job with this. It tells of the one thing most people don't see when they meet new people. I think now I will have to start looking at people's hands just to get the experience in this piece. I did enjoy reading this and I like the story line behind it.
Good Read! Keep up the good work. πŸ€—


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Review of Responsibility  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Nick. I'm on the raid today and I've stopped by for a read. This free verse poem says a lot deep within the words. Especially in today's world. Society is an open book, you can't get away from it. It makes it hard to really put your trust in someone. For fear that they may tell only one other your shared secrets and feeling and in just a few minutes it's all over the www. Exposed to the public, nearly. This poem is very true, and it implies that there are others in your life that you can trust. I like that you placed your parents at the top of the list when looking for trust in your life. And only close friends, are trustworthy. Might I suggest that you add having 'Trust within yourself' too. πŸ€—πŸ’« Good Read!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, Ratdog. I'm on the raid today and stopped by for a read of your receipe for Ratdog's Barbecue Chicken Stew. First here to you🍻. I really enjoyed reading your directions for making this stew. I also liked all the options you offer throughout the ingredients needed. It mad me laugh!!! πŸ˜ƒ It almost sounds like the way my husband would make a stew. Some folks round here would add roadkill as well. Lol (Not kidding.) 😲 You wrote a fine piece here. I might even let my husband try it out. He loves beer too!!! Good Read!


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello, Joy. I'm on the raid today and just stopped by for a read.πŸ€— This is lovely, what I liked best is the story it tells in such few words as she walks along the beach near the waters front. Also, it gives me while reading the same feelings this poem takes you. Every moment felt, and everything seen, like in slow motion. Stopping by a beach house and witinessing two lovers embrace, which recalls a memory of her own... Very lovely written. My only suggestion would be to shape this poem into a heart, or oval, I've seen some shaped so beautifully. This could be one of those. Or not. You've done well! πŸ€—πŸŒΉπŸŒΉπŸŒΉGood Read!


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