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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Sheriff O'Leary buckles down and goes on the hunt to find the Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great ending! Founder's Day is still going on strong.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sheriff O'Leary

O'Leary is a hero as he hunts down the bus. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. I counted 23 sentences and saw the story was edited on 1 OCT which did not meet the rules for the Cop Shop Contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Cop Shop Mystery  
Review by SpookyBee
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Ralph got lost driving the Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great ending! The Band got to where they were going.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Ralph

Ralph gets distracted and causes a fuss. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Cop Shop contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Left in the Dust  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Sheriff O'Leary is on the hunt to find the missing Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great visuals! I could see Smith doing the NASCAR driver thing.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sheriff O'Leary

You can't keep a good, determined man down! *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Cop Shop contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Officer Tibbs is up to no good, and hi-jacks the Bardstown Bus, but he's not the only one up to no good.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

You can't keep a good man down and it's Sam Whiton to the rescue!

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue compliments the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sam

Sam saves the day! *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Cop Shop contest.

Glowing Steph {/center}
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Sheriff O'Leary has to find the missing Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the players worked together to sabotage the driver.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's no dialogue.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sam

Sam leads an all star cast on a hijacking adventure. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Cop Shop contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Mr. Brewers is determined to prove Dr. Whoa-ha's a fraud.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Nice turn of the tables.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Mr. Brewers. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags were used appropriately. The dialogue drives the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might suggest tapping into the 5 senses. I would really love to know what the train smelled like.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: industrial age
PLACE: Train

This is something that is clarified enough for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Mr. Brewers

His motivation becomes apparent toward the end. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. The story captured the essence of a steampunk story. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

*Reading* I visited Puppet Master's C-Note Emporium.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the nature theme. My favorite notes where the Dolphins and the Lighthouse.

*Star* ENGAGING

All the Notes were heartwarming. I liked the focus on nature.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a nice variety of cnotes. They were uplifting, inspirational, and positive.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might expand the introduction a bit more.
Overall, nice presentation. I like that notes were affordable.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall July 2021 Cnote Contest.
Glowing Steph
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

*Reading* I visited Lilli's All Occasion C-Notes.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the whismical feel to the notes. My favorites were the flowers and the fingers.

*Star* ENGAGING

All the Notes were heartwarming.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a nice variety of cnotes. They were uplifting, inspirational, and positive.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Good introduction.
Overall, nice presentation. I like that notes were affordable.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall July 2021 Cnote Contest.
Glowing Steph
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

*Reading* I visited that All Occasion C-Note Shop.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

My favorite CNote was "Thank you for your Kindness." It had a nice whismical appeal.

*Star* ENGAGING

All the Cnotes had a nice, engaging image. However 2 images (2223958) and (2226662) were unavailable.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a nice variety of notes that captured the theme of "all occasion."

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Good use of graphics in the opening to attract readers. I liked the fact that merit badges were an option, and that the collection supported the Golden Heart Alliance on WDC. Overall, nice presentation.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall July 2021 Cnote Contest.
Glowing Steph
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Notes on the Horizon engages the reader talking marketing in the writing world, keeping track of writing, and Painted rocks.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked to see the pictures of the painted rocks. They are uplifting.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. I liked the post about Amazon Ads. I will check out the link.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. There was a nice conversational tone to the posts.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I might also suggest incorporating more graphics and links for a visual appeal. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the Bard's Hall 2021 Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Glowing Steph
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Review of Dragon Daughter  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Dragon Daughter engages the reader using poetry and topical conversations.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the poems. They were succicent and engaging. I especially liked the line in Golden Sin: "Sour wine fills that chalice."

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. I liked the post about recycling. Very comprehensive.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. There was a nice conversational tone to the posts.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Nice graphic in the intro to set the mood/tone of the blog. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the Bard's Hall 2021 Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Glowing Steph
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Scary & Other Stuff, that grows on You engages the reader using poetry.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked 3:13 AM. That one used a succient measure of words to paint a vibrant picture.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted a couple of times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. Some were poetry and some were stories shared by writing prompts.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. I thought the tone was quirky, yet had an underlying "beware what lurks beneath."

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Good graphic in the introduction to set the mood/tone for your blog. I might also suggest incorporating more graphics, maybe some quotes and/or links for a visual appeal. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the Bard's Hall 2021 Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Connecting with Jeannie engages the reader discussing life, family and topical political conversations.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the author was candid and heartfelt with every post.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. Some were about life, family and others discussed the "hot topics" of today.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. There was a nice, conversational style.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I might also suggest incorporating more graphics, (I did like the one with the bird) and links for a visual appeal. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the Bard's Hall 2021 Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Day to Day Happenings in my Life engages the reader by touching on life as it's passing by and topical conversations.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the length of the entries. They were just the right size. Not too long, not short, and always left me with nugget.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. They discussed life, family, and topics of the day.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. I liked the conversational tone.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I might also suggest incorporating more graphics, and links for a visual appeal. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the 2021 Bard's Hall Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB
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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Spiral Bound Jounal is a blog that features fictional writing.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the creativity in the entries.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to dive and discover the characters.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts, including topical themes and how today's world looks at them.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal. I especially liked how each entry was uniquely presented using WDC ML.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I enjoyed visiting your blog. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB for the 2021 Bard's Hall Blogging Contest.
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Review of Matters of Heart  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Lady Elizabeth hires a physical therapist to help her with her spinal problem.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the story offered a nice twist with the heroine being a physical therapist. It's not something I usually see with the genre. I thought the hero was spot on!

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited by Ann. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I might suggest a minor edit for dialogue tags. Only use "he said or she said" to identify the speaker. Use an "action" tag when speaking. For example, as written: "Thank you with the arrangements," he said warmly, taking her hand. A wave of joy washed over her.

My suggestion: "Thank you with the arrangements." Clayton wrapped his warm hand around Ann's. Her heart raced.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might suggest tapping into the 5 senses, smell and touch to put the reader into the scene. The use of flowers and meaning would do well here.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: the past
PLACE: England

This is something that could be a tad more clarified for the reader. Is it the Regency period or perhaps the Victorican era?

*Star* CHARACTERS

Ann

There's enough here to understand her motivations. She's very warmhearted and giving, perfect traits for her line of work. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. My other suggestion concerns voice. "Liz" is a much more modern way to say "Elizabeth," and it was slightly jaring for me as a reader, as it would take me out of the time period. I might suggest using "Elizabeth," or "Beth," but after Lady Elizabeth gave permission. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo displays a sunset over water.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture, tapping into hidden stories/people and inspiring the reader to remember them.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the picture evokes memories of the past.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which does not follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I would suggest tightening up the poem to reflect a 5-7-5 traditional syllable pattern of a haiku. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other and inspire the reader to go deeper into the meaning. The poem/picture evoke a sense of peace. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Antheraea  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo is a moth against a ruler.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the disturbing picture, as it explains how the moth got there and evokes the immediate feelings of the viewer.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

This picture invoked an instant reaction from me. "eewww." It's a very powerful picture that says "look at me."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The picture grabs your attention and the poem adds depth. Well done. The poem/picture evokes emotional disgust and well, I think we'd all be freaked out seeing that moth. I also like how the title, which is strange, (it's the name of the moth) plays right into the dynamic of the picture and poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Fyn Wave  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo shows a whole showing off it's flipper.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the playful picture, evoking a sense of reverence and respect as the whale says "hello."

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The concept and the lighthearted word play. I enjoyed the sense of awe the author invoked with the words.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other. The poem/picture evoke good vibes with a lighthearted beat. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Jumping Dolphins  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo is a playful one, showing dolphins jumping out of the water.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture. It's nice to see the dolphins enjoying themselves and bringing happiness to others.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The photo is very vibrant and expressive.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I like the picture, but I would would like to see the poem do more than describe what the dolphins are doing, maybe tap into the emotional response of the picture such as fun, vibrant, playful. The poem/picture evoke good feelings. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Leaving  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo highlights a sunflower surrounded by autumn foliage.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a perfect compliment to the autumn picture, as old becomes new giving into what nature wants.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The concept. Nice word play about old and new.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other and inspire the reader to go deeper into the meaning. The poem/picture make the reader think about nature's cycle, and even deeper, our own. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of PINK AND BLUE  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

This is a nature photo taken "upward" to reveal the skies. Trees are witnessing the sunset.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture. As nature bares witness to God's work.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoy nature photos and I liked how this one tied into God's wonderful work on Earth.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which does not follow the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. The pattern here is 5-10-6.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

My only suggestion is to work on the 5-7-5 syllable scheme. The poem/picture evoke a feeling of wonder. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Once More Now  
Review by SpookyBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Dylan and his invisible friend make pub night interesting.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked what happened to Annie. Poor thing. It made me chuckle.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnicient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

This was a dialogue challenge so the dialogue drives the story. The dialogue is conversational and engages the reader.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

It's hard to fit descriptions into dialogue, so I would say good use of trageted sentences to dribble in the description of the Pub

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting, Irish Pub

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Annie, Dylan, Unnamed friend

There's enough here to understand all their motivations. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. This was a challenging contest and the author did a great job with it. The dialogue felt natural to the Irish and there was a solid story that weaved in Irish lore. I like how the unnamed friend was implied to be a Leprechaun. It made me think as a reader. I had to read it a second time to make sure I didn't miss anything. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Review by SpookyBee
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THREE SCORE AND TEN
The blog was active SEP-DEC 2020. The blog focused on biographical entries.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

Each day was something new and I liked reading about Luna and Biscuit.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on biographical content. All the blog entries I reviewed were spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "biographical" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

Posts were hit and miss. Some had good engagement, some had none. I would have liked to have seen only because it was an interesting. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction frames the theme of the blog well so you know what to expect.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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for entry "Anxiety Fest " 
Review by SpookyBee
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THE DEFINATION OF INSANITY
The blog was active 8 out of 12 months in 2020. The blog focused on a WDC prompt, "30 Day Blogging Challenge."

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompts were very oringal and well thought out.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the mechanics made the blog easy to read. I also liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on the "30 Day Blogging Challenge." The content on all the blog entries I felt was a little short, but that didn't take away from people interacting, and if anything, it showed less is more.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the prompt content, discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "personal" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was good engagment on the posts. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction could define the theme a tad more.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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