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#4748947

Review of Creature Features

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES FORUM/CONTEST REVIEW

This is a review for "Creature Features"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

in conjunction with:

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM
"Anniversary Reviews"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE FORUM/CONTEST

This forum hosts the

FORUM

Creature Features

(13+)
Round 23 open!
#2211262 by Angelica- Happy May 5th!

contest. This a contest that focuses on animals and creatures and accepts poetry, prose, and short stories.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the theme of the contest. Animals touch our hearts in such a positive way. I also liked how the contest gave one the option to enter using poetry, prose, or a short story.

THE RULES

The rules are clearly listed and easy to understand. I liked use of dropnotes to help organize the rules and keep the Introduction less cluttered.

JUDGES

While there is a dropnote for judges, it says "user" which I assume is the forum host.

PRIZES

Prizes are clearly listed. If anything, I might suggest creating a separate BITEM where previous winners are listed. I think it helps in establishing a proven history with the contest.

ENGAGING

While the contest appeared activ.

VARIETY

Variety would come with the prompt. There is a dropnote for the prompt and there were a couple of options listed

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I liked the use of the graphic in the Introduction as it helps to set a nice tone for the contest. Good use of WDC ML and dropnotes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I think it's a good contest for newer members to the community to try out. The contest itself is not overly complicated and is pretty straightforward. I would most definately recommend you bookmark it!

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Review of HONORING OUR VETERANS

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES FORUM/CONTEST REVIEW

This is a review for "HONORING OUR VETERANS "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE FORUM/CONTEST

This forum hosts the

FORUM

HONORING OUR VETERANS

(ASR)
Of course there's a Veterans Day - EVERY DAY!
#423698 by Monty

contest. This is a monthly contest that has a military theme and honors Veterans.

WHAT I LIKED

I love the patriotic spirit of the forum. Having served myself, this forum warms my heart. I love the reverence and respect for all who have served and this is a great forum to highlight our military writing.

THE RULES

The rules are clearly listed and easy to understand. I liked that we can use old bitems if unawarded.

JUDGES

The Judges are clearly listed.

PRIZES

Prizes are clearly listed. Winners are announced in the forum for everyone to see.

ENGAGING

I thought the forum was active and there was a fair amount of engagement from community members.

VARIETY

Variety would come when the new month starts, as it's an open prompt with a broad military theme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I liked the use of the graphic in the Introduction as it helps to set a nice tone for the contest. Good use of WDC ML as well.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I think it's a great contest and I would encourage more community members to enter. The contest theme is one close to the heart. I highly encourage community members to visit the contest and try it out!

I also liked the "Tributes" at the end as I remember COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME

and how she just loved to support veterans.

I also see the contest is a Quill Award winner and it's not easy to win a Quill! Well done. I highly recommend this forum/contest.

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#4748317

Review of Noticing Newbies

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Rated: 13+

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GAMES OF THRONES ACTIVE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "Noticing Newbies"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE FORUM

This forum is

FORUM

Noticing Newbies

(13+)
A warm welcome to our newbies; come meet new and not-so-new members of Writing.Com!
#126963 by The StoryMistress

which encourages community members to stop on by and notice the "newbies" who have recently joined Writing.com.

WHAT I LIKED

I think this is a great idea as a "first stop" for Newbies to the site who want to acquaint themselves with Writing.com and meet community members. I liked the message Forum tips that were listed. "The Writer's Cramp" and "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" are two writing activities that will help challenge new writers and ease them into the community.

THE INTRODUCTION

The introduction lists a bunch of options and activities. Good use of a graphic to set the tone, and there are a bunch of links to other active groups/forums that newbies can check out.

ENGAGING

The forum appears very active with several posts welcoming new members.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS

This is a great "first stop" for new members to the Writing.com community. It's a place to mingle, ask questions, give directions and find new friends who have writing in common. It's very welcoming and I highly recommend it.

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#4748313

Review of The 'Organized Port' Contest

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES "LOST TREASURE" INACTIVE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "The 'Organized Port' Contest"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE "LOST TREASURE" INACTIVE FORUM

The Lost Treasure is

The 'Organized Port' Contest

(13+)
CLOSED! A contest to help get those ports organized! Over 125K in prizes to be won!
#1148950 by iKïyå§ama

which encourages community members to submit their portfolio and show off just how organized they could be!

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the idea of making a contest that focused on organization, especially here on WDC. The more organized a portfolio is, the more appealing it is for me to pop on it and check it out.

THE RULES

The rules are clearly stated, such as you must have at least 20 items in your port to enter, how you can enter the contest, and when the contest ends. Also, a points system is listed as to how the judges will judge the contest.

THE JUDGES
The guest judges are clearly listed.

THE PRIZES

The prizes (and their winners) are clearly listed and generous.

DONATIONS

The donors are listed. I can't help but notice that I'm listed as one of "The Generous Ones."

ENGAGING

There are 1 out of 3 pages, so I can tell the contest engaged the community and it appeared active.

VARIETY

The variety would come in the nominations of the portfolios.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The Introduction is really appealing with a graphic that sets the tone/mood as well as WDC ML which varies color and font to keep it easy on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

This lost treasure was last active 18 years ago!! BUT there's a couple messages recalling what an awesome contest this was about a month ago.

I think this activity has A LOT of potential if it was to be restarted. Now, if I was on a desert island and I came across this lost treasure, I would most definitely dust this treasure off, give it a restoration and maybe make it a seasonal activity.

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#4748297

Review of 15 for 15 Contest --- Closed

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES "LOST TREASURE" CURRENTLY INACTIVE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "15 for 15 Contest --- Closed"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE LOST TREASURE/CURRENTLY INACTIVE FORUM

15 for 15 Contest --- Closed

(18+)
Do you have 15 minutes? Come in and join this contest!
#994771 by Legerdemain

Is a forum that dared writers to take a look at a picture then spend 15 minutes a day for 15 days writing something based on the picture.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the idea of using a short amount of time to create a story. Writing shorts is an art, from 500 words to 2k words. A prompt like this would develop the following skills in writers: how to use a good economy of words in a short period of time to communicate a story.

RULES

The rules were listed in a dropnote link, which I thought was a good idea as it didn't clutter up the Introduction. However, when I clicked on the dropnote, I discovered there was a lot of rules, which led to the complexity of the contest. For me, when something appears too complex, I tend to shy away from it.

JUDGES

The guest judges were clearly listed., i.e., "theckenast" and drboris

AWARDS

I saw there were awards and grand prize winners listed in the body of the forum, but nothing in the Introduction. I would also posthumously suggest to create a separate BITEM that archived previous awards winners and have it linked in the Introduction. I like having a feature as this because it displays the history of the contest.

DONATIONS

There is a place to list donations and donors.

ENGAGING

The lost treasure had many contestants which are listed in the introduction and looked very active.

VARIETY

Variety would come in the way of the pictures offered on a daily basis.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to vary the colors and font to make it easier on the eyes. I did like the graphic in the Introduction as it helped to set a mood/tone for the forum/contest.

PARTING THOUGHTS

This Lost Treasure was last active 12 years ago! I think the premise of the Forum /Contest is one that is a tad complex and if carried over/re-opened, I might suggest trying to simplify it a little.

POTENTIAL

This is a lost treasure that if I found it on a deserted island, I'd put it in my back pocket and would tinker with it at the evening campfire before I went to bed.

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#4748290

Review of CONTEST: Words of ImaginationClosed

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES "LOST TREASURE" CURRENTLY INACTIVE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "CONTEST: Words of ImaginationClosed"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE LOST TREASURE/CURRENTLY INACTIVE FORUM

CONTEST: Words of ImaginationClosed

(ASR)
Include at least ten words from Imagination Alphabet in your poem or short story.
#514966 by Maryann

Is a forum that was meant to stir a writer's imagination and creativity by having the contestant write a poem or short story using a least ten words from the Imagination Alphabet.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the concept of it. Find at least ten words and build a story around it. It invites one to take their time in developing a creative and imaginative story.

RULES

The rules were clearly listed. Use a min. of ten words; write on any topic, keep it PG or under, keep it short, and one entry per person. There was a due date, but I couldn't tell if this was a monthly contest or perhaps a seasonal contest?

JUDGES

The judges were clearly listed.

AWARDS

The awards were also clearly listed. There was also a separate BITEM that archived previous awards winners. I like this feature as it displays the history of the contest.

DONATIONS

There is a place to list donations and donors, but it doesn't list any incentives, such as receive a merit badge, etc.

ENGAGING

The lost treasure had several contestants and looked active.

VARIETY

Variety would come in the way of the word choices in the Imagination Alphabet.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to vary the colors to make it easier on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

This Lost Treasure was last active 21 years ago! I think the premise of the Forum /Contest is one that could carry over today, as tapping into creativity and the imagination never goes out of style for a writer.

POTENTIAL

This contest has A LOT potential if it was to be restarted. It might need a slight overhaul such a graphic to set the mood/tone of the contest, increasing font size, more use of color, emoji's, and fix any broken links.

This is a lost treasure that I wouldn't mind finding on a deserted island, dusting it off, and putting it out there again.

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#4748274

Review of Autumn Magic

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Autumn Magic"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

A poem that brings out the kid in us all. While raking leaves is an autumn chore, there is a reward in the end if you don't mind raking more leaves.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the memories that this poem conjured up. I remember growing up, bunching up leaves into a big pile just so I can jump in them. It's happy, dirty, memory. I tried to make a leaf pile for my son when he was that magical age to appreciate jumping in a leaf pile, but in SoCal, there's just not enough leaves.

STRUCTURE

This is a five stanza poem comprised of quatrains. The 1st and 3rd lines along with the 2nd and 4th lines rythme. The poem has a nice beat when read out loud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "He watched the leaves fall from the tree; their arcane dance was neglected." - It's a nice, warm visual of leaves on the ground fluttering around in a haphazard way. Good use of the word arcane here.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title paints a nice emotional description/expectation of the poem, and the opening teases the reader to keep reading. This is a lighthearted poem that stirs up pleasant childhood memories well.

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#4748270

Review of A Simple Touch

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "A Simple Touch"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

A poem that tugs on the reader's heartstrings as it communicates the power of a simple touch.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the uplifting message of the poem. There's something powerful about reaching out to other humans in a kind, compassionate way and this poem captures the essence of that gesture.

STRUCTURE

This is a three stanza poem comprised of quatrains. The 1st and 2nd lines along with the 3rd and 4th lines rythme. The poem is has a nice beat when read out loud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "For the homeless on the street, who beg for change so they can eat," -- the words create an easy visual in the reader's imagination, but they also hint at an emotional description, one of hopeless, which sets up the inspiring message the rest of the poem delivers.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is an accurate fit for the poem, and the opening drawers the reader in. This an honest, candid, poem that ends on a note of hope. Well done.

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Review of The Surprise in the Shed

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "The Surprise in the Shed"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

A story about unlocked shed on a rainy night that needs to get locked. When the woman goes out to lock the shed up, she's in for quite a surprise!

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the poem told a story. There's a nice, light comedic tone to the poem with nice rhythmic beats that match emotional beats.

STRUCTURE

This is a ten stanza poem with four lines each.. The 1st and 3rd along with the 2nd and 4th lines rythme. The poem is has a nice beat when read out loud

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "With light in hand, I slowly crept, and there I saw a hairless tail." -- It's a nice, easy visual that's easy to imagine, but not only that, it builds suspense well, uncovering the "thing" in the shed. What's next?!

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is perfect for the poem, and the opening engages the reader. This a fun, enjoyable read that I think readers can really identify with.

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#4748262

Review of The Sand Castle

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "The Sand Castle"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

A heartwarming poem about a day at the beach and the highs and lows of building a sandcastle.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem captures the uplifting ambiance of being at a beach. From the laziness of the day, to the waves drifting up on the shore, to the seagulls flying overhead and the sense of joy and wonder of building a sandcastle to the end of the day and the waves claiming the castle, one can picture themselves at the beach enjoying themselves.

STRUCTURE

This is a free verse poem with internal rythme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make it easy to read on WDC. The poem itself is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Salt and spray sail through the air, assaulting the fortress of the sand." -- It's an easy scene that the reader can visualize in their imagination, but it also hints an emotional description, the thrill of the waves teasing the destruction of the sandcastle and hours of hard work.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the poem. The opening pulls the reader in and keeps them reading. Well written with great visuals using a good economy of words to paint a vivid picture.

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Review of Dulcet Drops

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Rated: ASR

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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Dulcet Drops"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

The poem captures a sensual in the heat of a kiss.

WHAT I LIKED

Nice word play here to imply something much more heated - not only the physicality of the moment, but the intensity of the persons feelings and emotions. Not only is word play succinct, the author uses a good economy of words to paint the picture of Dulcet Drops.

STRUCTURE

This is a two stanza poem with four lines each. The 2nd and 4th lines rythme in the quatrains.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion would be to increase the font on WDC to make it easier on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I lower my lips to your liquescent skin." - liquescent is a word that's not very common, but the author gives you the definition in the notes which, once understood makes it the perfect word for this place in the poem. It's a great visual that I can picture in my imagination.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I liked the notes section at the end of the poem. It helps the reader to understand the word choices. The notes give the meaning of Dulcet, and once understand, makes the title the perfect fit for the poem. The opening engages the reader. Well done!

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#4747240

Review of On Being Yellow

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "On Being Yellow"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

A fun poem about being promoted to yellow case here on WDC.

WHAT I LIKED

What a heartwarming, fun, and uplifting poem! It's a nice dedication to a yellow case promotion. There's a nice beat to the poem when read outloud.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. T

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest using a "deeper" shade of yellow, maybe gold or even an organish-yellow, because the bright yellow used here makes it really hard to see the words. The poem is easy to read and understand.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Yellow is the star of the day sunshine for all to see" - It's just an uplifting description which passes out good vibes. My example isn't necessarily yellow but it's easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the poem and the opening engages the reader. The poem is not overly long and hold the reader's attention well. I enjoyed the lighthearted tone and the positivity. The poem is upbeat and puts a smile on one's face. This poem is a great way to spread the yellow case on WDC.

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#4747233

Review of In Her Memory

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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "In Her Memory"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

The poem is a heartwarming tribute to the poet's mother.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the sweet, reverent nature of the poem. It is a touching tribute and captures the essence of a loving relationship between a mother and child.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. It gives the appearance of an acrostic poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make easier on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The smiles we share and the tears we shed" I can easily visualize each of them sharing those important life moments, a graduation, a wedding, the birth of a child, but it also speaks to an emotional description, those undercurrent of feelings which make those life moments special.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem's title is reflective of the content and the opening engages the readers. The poem touches on life and death, topics that readers deal with everyday. A heartwarming tribute!

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#4747228

Review of Happy Holiday c-Notes

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE COLLECTION REVIEW

This is a review for "Happy Holiday c-Notes"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE CNOTE COLLECTION

This collection focuses on Holidays to include: Easter, Christmas, and Halloween

WHAT I LIKED

My favorite Cnote was "The Witching Hour." It sums up my Halloween Vibe very well! Another thing I liked was that the cnotes were very affordable. All the Cnotes are very unique and keeping in a whimsical theme which is representative of Webbie's creativity.

ENGAGING

The Cnotes are very creative and imaginative which makes them appealing. There's a nice selection.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices in cnotes between the three holidays. I would definitely recommend this collection!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The opening graphic is appealing to eye and draws potential buyers in.

PARTING THOUGHTS

My only suggestion here is that I would love to see 4th of July Cnotes! The cnotes touch the heartstrings with their unique and whimsical presentation. Not only do they send a heartwarming and sweet message, they also let the recipient know they were thought of.

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#4747220

Review of The Witch's Chamber

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

GAMES OF THRONES MESSAGE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "The Witch's Chamber"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE FORUM

Dubbed "The Witch's Chamber" is a quick and easy fundraiser that benefits the ROAK upgrade brigade and The Witch's House.

WHAT I LIKED

It's a great way to support the WDC community. All you have to do is buy an exclusive Merit Badge. It's a tad pricy mind you, but the buyer gets an exclusive MB and the satisfaction in knowing they helped to support the community.

ENGAGING

Who doesn't love to earn and exclusive merit badge. Not only that, the activity is simple and not too overwhelming.

VARIETY

If anything, my only suggestion would be to offer 1 or 2 more exclusive MB's to the mix.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Great use of WDC ML and graphics. It's easy to understand the rules, and Webbie sets an easy, conversational tone that draws people in.

PARTING THOUGHTS

This is another activity, that while currently closed, could be opened quarterly to help benefit the community. I liked how the people who donated where listed. I think that helps to show community interaction and helps to keep the contest honest.

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#4747218

Review of Angel-Witch Bingo!

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Rated: 13+

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GAMES OF THRONES MESSAGE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "Angel-Witch Bingo! "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE FORUM

This forum hosts the "Angel Witch Bingo" which comes around every September when WDC celebrates its anniversary!

WHAT I LIKED

I absolutely love Angel Witch Bingo! It's really fun to play and it's easy to play too. Based on the concept of Bingo, that's why I think it attracts a lot of players. The rules are easy to understand.

ENGAGING

The game is very engaging, and with frequent rolls/plays, it keeps community members coming back for more.

VARIETY

The variety is found in the words "Angel" and "Witch," and with the frequent chance to pick your Bingo.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Great use of WDC ML and graphics to lure potential players in. Honestly, it's perfect and sets a fun tone for the activity.

PARTING THOUGHTS

My only suggestion would be this a great activity that you could turn into a quarterly fundraiser if needed, though I don't suppose it's a lot of work. It's a fun and unique activity here at WDC and I highly recommend new members check it out come September.

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Review of The Witch's Garden

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Rated: 13+

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GAMES OF THRONES MESSAGE FORUM REVIEW

This is a review for "The Witch's Garden "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE FORUM

The Message Forum is a place where members of the WDC Community can mix and mingle, hang out and have fun.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed how the Forum was themed. Mind you, it was a Christmas holiday theme, but I Know Webbie's been very busy lately so she might not have had the time to update it to a spring or even a summer theme. Honestly, for me, who is starting out with my own forum, I found the layout and theme to be very inspirational.

ENGAGING

Let me tell you, the forum was hoping. There were holiday handles, random dice rolls, and raffle tickets to pass out.

VARIETY

I loved the variety in the games and interactions. Nothing like raffles, handles, dice rolls, merit badges, and other acts of kindness to spread cheer. Well done!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Again, great use of WDC ML to grow some holiday cheer!

PARTING THOUGHTS

As I mentioned before, I found the message forum really inspirational. Webbie makes it easy to understand what is needed to participate in the fun. Can't wait til she opens it back up again! I would recommend that members visit any time of the year just to leave a hello and let Webbie know how much is appreciated here at WDC.

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#4746707

Review of The Witch's House

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES COMMUNITY GROUP REVIEW

This is a review for "The Witch's House"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE COMMUNITY GROUP

This Group is Webbie's House. There's a lot of good stuff to do and see.

WHAT I LIKED

I can't believe I haven't made it to the Witch's House before! I loved how cozy and welcoming it was. Theres's a lot of graphics which adds personality to the group and the sections are well defined.

ENGAGING

There's a link to the Witch's Garden which invites visitors over to explore. Can you imagine what a witch would grow in her garden?

. The House has 9 members.

VARIETY

Here in the House, Webbie also lists her exclusive merit badges which look like a fabulous collection to collect! Also, the House has an exclusive Awardicon offering.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Great use of WDC ML and graphics to set a welcoming tone to the WDC Community.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Webbie is a good little witch and I love how she is so inviting and welcome. Her mission is clearly stated, "I love doing little acts of kindness and unexpected gifting around the site." If you have an opportunity, check out the Witch's House. It just might be fun being a witch!

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#4745970

Review of Against the Unknown

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Against the Unknown"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

A mystery about an abandoned home that stirs the reader's imagination.

WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the word play in this poem. The author has to use some mandatory phrases per the prompt, but does an excellent job weaving them into a poem that stirs the imagination. Reader finds several signs of abandonment, from a lonely dog, to the salt tipped over to the haunting wind chimes and a full mailbox. Things that make you go um....?

STRUCTURE

This is a poem with four quatrains. The 1st and 2nd along with the 3rd and 4th lines rythme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to make it easy on the reader's eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I especiallyliked: "The sound of wind chimes, a haunting refrain, a melody lost in the whispering rain." -- what a great visual, that only sets a vivid scene in the reader's imagination, but also stirs their curiosity.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title piques the reader's interest but I don't know how representative it is of the mystery presented in the poem. The opening stanza grabs the reader's interest. An interesting mystery indeed!

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#4745969

Review of Mystery in the Rafters

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Mystery in the Rafters"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE STORY

The business has a cost overrun and it's up to Hamilton to figure out why.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the ending. Didn't quite picture that.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Hamilton. Good job with narration. If anything I would suggest a minor edit for tense. The opening starts in the past tense and shift between past and present.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "I follow the bread crumbs to the false ceiling..." -- What I liked about this description is how I feel I'm following along right with Hamilton, curious, and determine to get to the root of the mystery.

SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: computer chip manufacturing facility

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Mr. Hamilton

I loved Hamilton from the start. He's overworked, probably underpaid, a tad stressed, and yet he's the best guy to find the cost overrun.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. When you have quotes, put the period inside the quotes. For example: "start with the basics."

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. A satisfying read!

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#4745346

Review of The Survivor of Gilligan's Island

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES FAN FICTION REVIEW

This is a review for "The Survivor of Gilligan's Island"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE FAN FICTION

A cross between Survivor and Gilligan's island - who can outwit, outlast, and outplay Mr. Howell the money man?

WHAT I LIKED

I picked this item because I loved Gilligan's Island and I love Survivor, and of course I wanted to see who would make it into the final 2. This was just a fun little piece that I enjoyed!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

THEME

The theme is: who is going to be the last one "survivor" on Gillian island and it ain't Gilligan - he's too nice. There's a little ruthlessness involved, but ultimately the person who deserves to win, wins.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The fan fiction is easy to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is a great fit for the fan fiction and the opening hooked me right away. What a hoot! I really enjoyed reading this and I laughed and smiled as I read it. What a fun item to find in the author's port. My suggestion for what it's worth: If anything, I suppose you could grow this out more with 1K or less entries on each "challenge" and who wins.

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#4745340

Review of Royal Caribbean's Adventure of the Seas

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES MEMIOR REVIEW

This is a review for "Royal Caribbean's Adventure of the Seas"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE MEMOIR

The author takes us on a fun cruise to the Caribbean.

WHAT I LIKED

I picked this item because I'm going on a cruise in May - the first one since 2005, and I wanted to get a sense of what it would be like. I'm glad I read this, because I got a good feel of what to expect. I appreciated the pictures, if anything I wish they were just a tad bigger! Pout!!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

THEME

Well, I gotta theme everything. haha. I would say the theme here is traveling. Even if you've never cruised before, you'll learn a lot about cruising and what to expect from the food service, visiting the different places and excursions to what a 'key' is and the upgraded packages.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

After I was done reading this memoir, I wanted to go on a Caribbean cruise!! I'm saving my money for cruising when I hit retirement. I could tell from the conversational tone of the writing the author had a blast and I'm so glad she shared her experience with us!

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#4745321

Review of Unexpected Caller

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Unexpected Caller "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE STORY

A man's voice whispered into a phone receiver: "Tonight she dies," but the person on the other end is sure it's not for her.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the story flowed. It was easy to read and grew the tension well regarding the mystery.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by a female narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "One of the ways that serial killers and other criminal types hid bodies was to feed them to the cute farm animals because their razor sharp teeth would ensure that nobody was able to find them." -- It's a great description using a good economy of words to tell what happens to a victim without being overly graphic.

SETTING

TIME: contemporary setting 80's or 90's
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that isn't especially clarified for the reader. If anything, hardly anyone uses a "classic" phone with a receiver, so I would clarify that a little as I thought the story would take place in the 80's or 90's.

CHARACTERS

Female narrator

After hearing an accidental threat, she goes looking for the police.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctaution mistakes. I might suggest spelling out "OK" as "okay" in creative writing.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits in well with the story. The opening hooks the reader right away. If anything, I was a little confused near the ending and who the wife, ex-wife was?

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#4745318

Review of Worm Moon

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Rated: 13+

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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Worm Moon"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE STORY

When a red quartz relic is found, Miss Harris is on the hunt to find out where it came from and what it was used for.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending, because I was totally lost and the ending gave the vinyettes context.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient in 3 vinyettes that tie-in together. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "As you know, during a total lunar eclipse, the Earth moves between the sun and the moon and cuts off the moon's light supply, the sun. When this happens, the moon's surface takes on a reddish glow instead of going completely dark." - it's a very succient description of a lunar eclipse that's easy to understand and visualize in the reader's imagination.

SETTING

TIME: ancient times and modern day
PLACE: college setting and outdoors

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Miss Harris is the main character

In that she does the research to offer a viable theory for the red quartz.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for WDC tags.
Currently: 100,000 years font:verdana}older than the I would correct the tag.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I think the title fits with the theme of the "moon" but I would clarify how worm fits in the story. The opening engages the reader. I enjoyed how the vinyettes came together in the end.

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#4745307

Review of Fairy’s Favor

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Fairy’s Favor"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE POEM

A little girl loses her tooth and can't wait for the tooth fairy to come!

WHAT I LIKED

This poem captures all the excitement of the tooth fairy - it lessens the pain of losing the tooth for sure and captures all the fun of hiding the tooth in anticipation of a BIG reward in the morning. It's upbeat and uplifting.

STRUCTURE

This is a poem with ten quaterns. The 1st and 2nd along with the 3rd and 4th lines rythme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. The rythme scheme allows for nice, rich emotional beats.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "A tiny fairy, real phenom, She sat sulking on Mommy's palm." What a great visual! I can easily picture this in my imagination. I'm sure the tooth fairy was pretty mad at getting caught.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the poem. The opening lures the reader in with a nice rythme scheme and keeps them reading. There are twists and turns - especially when the tooth fairy gets busted. A whimsical children's poem that would make a great "Dr. Suess" like children's book.

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