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Review of Rain and Fire  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

A fantasy that captures a moment - what will Inferno do?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the plot. The hero is faced with a choice.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a flash fiction.
The story is told in the 3rd person from Inferno's point of view.

The story as a passive voice, more telling and showing. I might suggest changing to an active voice, and show us through action and dialogue Inferno's choice.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I might suggest to space lines between paragraphs on WDC. Makes it easier to read.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The story presented Inferno's choice. Suggestions as mentioned above.

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Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall APR/MAY Contest.


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Review of Showers of Joy  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

It's been fifty since Joyce and Herbert met in an April shower...

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the story did a great job conveying a moment and contrasting the 50 years then and now.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a flash fiction. The story engages the reader and evokes emotion.

*Star* DIALOGUE

Most professional editors discourage putting action in a dialogue tag. Make it a separate sentence. For example as written: "Stop being such an old misery," Joyce said, turning her face into the rain. My suggestion: "Stop being such an old misery." Joyce turned her face into the rain.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest an edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The story flowed well and was easy to read. Joyce had sweet memories of their first meeting, while Herbert is more jaded due to the life they led over 50 years. Well done.

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Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall APR/MAY Contest.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A ode to the medieval realm in poetry.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. There are many "ranks" in the medieval world and the author defines what he'd like his role to be.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem. Rhythm scheme is ABACADAE then changes again as the stanza expand. It's an unusual scheme but it works within the context of the poem.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest an edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem painted an easy visual for me. It was easy to read and very enjoyable.

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Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall APR/MAY Contest.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

An unnamed narrator works in a morgue where strange things happen.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the how the story flowed. It was quick and easy to read, easy to visualize.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I would suggest an edit for dialogue tags. Use only "he said" or "she replied" in tags to identify the speaker only, if you have to. Put action in a seperate sentence. Put the action first, then the dialogue.

FOR EXAMPLE, AS WRITTEN: "Settle down all you Dead Heads" I yelled.

MY SUGGESTION: "Settle down all you dead heads!" Surprisingly, for a moment, they did.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might suggest tapping into scent. I can't imagine the morgue smells all that great. You can amp up the details by adding a couple of foul scents that make the stomach turn.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified enough for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Unnamed narrator

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He just wants to make it through the night. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation and spelling. For example, "seams" should be "seems."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. Good first person voice. Write on!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

A limerick is a form of poetry, especially one in five-line anapestic meter with a strict rhyme scheme (AABBA), which has humorous intent. The first, second and fifth lines are usually longer than the third and fourth.

*Reading* THE POEM

This is about a dog's spring adventures.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I absolutely loved the layers to this poem. We've got March, April, May and every month promises something new. Well done!

*Star* STRUCTURE

The limerick followed the AABBA rhyme scheme. It was rhymed and humorous. I especially liked the 4 stanzas of limericks to the poetry. A challenge indeed!

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. This is a funny limerick that really embodies the style of poetry well. Write on!

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A little girl in the sandbox of life. }
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Review of Hit By Love  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem that captures the visceral and stirring emotions of falling in love.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the pulse pounding words that were used to create a sense of urgency and intense rush which is often felt when falling love. Well done!

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form with no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. Great word play. Well Done!

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Review of The Weather King  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A furry little rodent prepares for his big day.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the story the poem told and I liked how it was told from the perspective of the groundhog.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem. Each stanza has 4 lines. There's a AA rythme in the first line and the 2nd/4th lines rythme. I like the scheme. It's a bit more complex, challenging, and the author makes it work well.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. The poem has a nice flow to it that I enjoyed.

A little girl in the sandbox of life.


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Santa gets in troubles with a couple of "ho, ho, hoes."

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Very good character voice. I also liked how the author put a new spin on "ho, ho, ho." *Wink*

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue accents the narration, hitting home the main point.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might suggest tapping into the five senses, especially smell.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day?
PLACE: north pole

This is something thatcould be clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Santa

There's enough here to understand up he's up to. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A very cute story with an interesting twist. Well done!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A young girl asks for a heartfelt gift, but can Santa bring it in time?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked what the young girl asked for. It wasn't a material object, but a gift that warms the heart.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with a the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza rhyming.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem captures the message of Christmas! Well done.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

It's Christmas eve and the Millers' house is a mess.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the story the poem told. It's not about the material gifts, but the spirit of Christmas (love and hope) that's important in our society.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with an AA/BB rythme scheme that changes throughout the poem.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I loved the tone and feel of the poem. It was easy to read and the message heartfelt. Write on!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Justin meets a girl and can't remember her name. The puzzle haunts him until he has a revelation in his chemistry class.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the characters and how they felt very comfortable with one another. The story had a natural feel to it.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

I loved the characterization. Great character voice.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue moves the story forward.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes and put the reader in the moment with Justin.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting.

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Justin

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He learns a little bit about himself when he meets a new girl who captures his attention. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. The opening engages the reader. I really liked Stephanie. She was a perfect 'match' for Justin. A very well written, engaging story. This is review is given for the Genre Action and Fundraiser. *Smile*

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Review of A Jamaican Sunset  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Steve and Cassandra find a moment on a Jamaican beach.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the characters and how they felt very comfortable with one another. The story had a natural feel to it.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Steve. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue moves the story forward.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scene, if anything, you could expand on this. You don't need much. Capture the the setting of the beach using the senses - using smell and touch. What does the beach smell like? Is it windy?

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: beach

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Steve

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's saying good bye to a dear friend. It's a bittersweet scene, but leaves hoping they meet again in the future. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A very well written vignette that taps into emotion. I always enjoy popping into your port, Kiya. You're stories are well written and engaging. This review for the Genre Auctions and Fundraiser Package. *Smile*

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Poppy the butterfly tells us about her life.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the character voice. Well done.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Poppy. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.


*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. You could expand on this if you wanted, just a couple of stragetic sentences put in just the right place. There's great visuals so I would challenge the author to work on touch and smell.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: rural setting?

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Poppy

There's enough here to understand her motivations. She eats, she pollinates, she procreates. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for capitalization. Poppy should be capitalized since it's a proper name.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A very whismical story and cute to read. I enjoyed it very much. Write on!

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Even dogs appreciate a good thanksgiving feast.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the comedy. The story captures the dog's personalities.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Dogs and humans

There's enough here to understand their motivations. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes. Spell out "OK" in manuscript writing.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A very cute comedy. Great visuals. Write on!

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Review of Dear Me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE ESSAY

The author decides to "shake it up" a little and let her imagination shine.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the voice. It engages the reader.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the author. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Narrator/author

There's enough here to understand her motivations. She wants to be a better writer. It takes putting a lot of things together well: imagination, emotions, and inspiration.*Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. If anything I might not using all capitals in certain words. You really don't need them to get your point across "Wake up, Brain" sends the same message just as effectively.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The essay is engaging and sets attainable goals for 2014 in her writing.

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Review of Ugly Ornament  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

A woman reflects on her tattered butterfly ornaments.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the memoir evoked emotion. The story that unravels is very heartwarming and poignant.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Joey. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I got a good sense of what the ornaments looked like. The author uses a good economy of words to paint a vivid picture.


*Star* CHARACTERS

Narrator

There's enough here to understand her feelings. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. Great character voice. Write on!

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE ESSAY

A look at lighthouses and how important they are to ships near the coast.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked this look at lighthouses. It states why lighthouses are important, describes what they look like, and talks a little about the history of lighthouses without being overwhelming.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropropiately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

The author uses a good economy of words to describe lighthouses.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. The essay holds interest, it's brief, yet very imformative.

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Rated: 13+
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Arielle and Cal enjoy dancing.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the author caputured the sponanety of the dance.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue moves the story forward.

Minor correction, as written: Arielle whispers, "You have any other good ideas?"

My suggestion: Arielle whispered. "You have any other good ideas?"

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scene. You could expand on this if you wanted, focusing on the five senses, specifically, hearing, and smell. You don't need a lot just a stragetically placed sentence or two that would amp up the story.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: a kitchen

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Arielle and Cal

There's enough here to understand their motivations. They enjoy dancing. Anything can be dancing inspiration to them - even a dish towel. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening intrigues the reader. I liked the ending. The story evokes romance. Write on!

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
*Reading* THE STORY

Sergeant Weems reflects on the war around him.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the characters cared for each other in this story. The story evokes emotion and put the reader in the moment.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited by Sergeant Weems. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue moves the story forward.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day?
PLACE: urban setting?

This is something that is not defined, but could be clarified for the reader. I might think this is the Iraq/Afghanistan conflict, Gulf War I, Vietnam, or even World War II. Too an extent, I suppose it doesn't have to be defined, the reader can believe what they wish, but I think it would benefit the topic to define the conflict involved.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sergent Weems

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's come to care for his troops because of the conflict they're involved in. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest an edit for punctuation and spelling. The correct spelling for "Sargent" is "Sergeant" which is only used once in the story. Private is underlined in the story, and I found a sentence with two periods.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. I had just one content question: How could Private Brady be expected to fire the missle when his shoulder is pretty missed up? The opening intrigues the reader. The pacing of the story is well done.

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Review of Dees Cesar  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

A boss tells a story about how one of her employees answers the phone.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the honesty of the story made me smile.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the boss. Good job with narration. There isn't an overused of "I" here which is good. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I might suggest putting the dialogue in paragraphs so it's easier to read here on the site.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scene.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

The boss

She's telling a humorous story.

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. The only spelling error I found was "I use to be head" I would write "I used to be head" Pay attention to were commas are needed.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. The vignette has good character voice.

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Review of Skiing  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem captures the fun that one has going skiing.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I like how the poem is easy to picture and easy to relate to.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with AA/BB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest an edit for punctuation. I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. A very whimsical poem that captures the enjoyment of skiing.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem tells the tale of a man with a mysterious black hat.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I like the whimsical nature of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest an edit for spelling and punctuation. wonder should be "wander"; stuff should be "stuffed."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. I saw magic and bit of deviousness on behalf of the man involved. It reminded me of Halloween night.

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Review of From Planet Z  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

In the future, a Chevrolet is as classic as an apple pie, but you have to go to the show to understand. *Wink*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the creativity on this vignette. Good character voice.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. The vignette is told as a radio segment so it's dialogue only.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to paint the picture. There's going to be a show of historical items in the town and the radio DJ's are putting out a promo.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: the future
PLACE:radio station

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

DJ's Rick and Jane

They give a good promo for historical day. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

II might suggest an edit for spelling and punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening piques the reader's interest. You used most of the words in the prompt IAW with the contest rules. I don't think I saw "hot dog." Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Review of Hall of Fame  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE ITEM

The item talks about defining your dreams, then seeking out those avenues that will help you achieve it.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

It's a very positive introspective piece.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. I thought "Hall of Fame" offered inspiration for those aspiring writers who are still struggling with their writing dreams. Nice voice.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Reading* THE LYRICS

Love has climaxed to that pivotal moment. What will the answer be?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the flow of the verses.

*Star* STRUCTURE

The 1st and 2nd lines rhyme as does the 3rd/4th. It shines as the backbone of the lyrics.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I could easily picture these lyrics being sung. Well done!

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