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Rated: E | (4.0)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Bubba's Corner BBQ"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

Sam and Maria go to Hope, Arkansas in hopes of eating at Bubba's Corner BBQ only to find out there are 5! Yikes!

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked that the poem was easy to visualize in my imagination as I read it. And the best direction I ever heard was to go catawapmus from the First Baptist Church.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. I would check the following line: "For driections as their GPS," as I think direction" is misspelled. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "It is catawapmus from the First Baptist Church." I hate to repeat myself, but I just thought this was a hoot! Trying to picture going catawapmus from anywhere has me befuddled. *Laugh*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. A fun, light-hearted little poem about the Corner BBQ. If anything, I would suggest just touching on this a hint more: Bubba moved the Corner BBQ to somewhere else, but I wasn't sure where he moved it? Then again, do I need a know? The poem made me chuckle and that's a good thing.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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Rated: E | (4.0)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Bubba's Corner BBQ - Entry 4-12-24 "  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

Getting to Bubba's Corner BBQ isn't easy - especially if it's not on a corner.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the ending and the explanation why Bubba's Corner BBQ wasn't on a corner. Heck, I wouldn't want to be on a corner if I was usin' my own brew, too!

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free from poem with a AABBCC rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Soon, turn at the old brown stump with the dead skunk hangin' high," I was laughing at that visual an old brown stump and a dead skunk haning' high over the stump. It's nasty funny. The author did a great a job following the prompt and not using directional words.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. If anything, it's always a challenge to use a dialect because you want to be authentic, but at the same time, it can be hard to understand. I appreciated the fact that the tone was very authentic to the prompt, but I had to slow down and re-read to really get it. Give and take, I suppose. Overall, the poem is a hoot and lives up to the comedy genre.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about St. Patrick and what we do to remember him today.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I read this poem and the first emotion that hit me was: "This is an awesome feel good poem about St. Patrick." The first line starts with "St. Patrick was well loved," and the rest of the poem shares those things that we do today that demonstrates our "feel good vibe" we have for him.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme. There is a line that's a little long, and goes a little over, so you have to read it as a long line.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to highlight and bold the opening letter of the lines in green.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Toast your glass of beer to Patrick, the man!" - I could easily visualize a pub with lots of clinking glasses in my imagination.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with big, warm-hearted intentions. A nice highlight of today's traditions inspired by yesteryear.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph

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Review of St. Patrick's Day  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A look at St. Patrick and his accomplishments in Ireland.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem kept the focus on St. Patrick and his work in Ireland.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. The opening couplet rythmes, the middle section has no rythme scheme and the ending shares the couplet's rythme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to highlight and bold the opening letter of the lines in green. As for spelling, I might suggest taking a look at the word "drink" in the first line - did you mean "drank?"

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Ran the devil's snakes out of Ireland." - Broad, yet visual.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening couplet engages the reader with an easy rythme and beat. A nice tribute to St. Patrick.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph

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Review of Grandpa's Back!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Grandpa's Back!"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

Grandpa comes in dreams to pass on guidance and other things.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the poem progressed, how it started out as a dream and at the end, how the poet interprets those dreams in life. There's a deeper meaning here - you take the dream to heart, but how you choose to interpret the message is up to you.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with eight 4 line stanzas. The 1st and 2nd along with the 3rd and 4th lines rythme. I liked the rythme scheme, it gave added beats, not only with the rythme, but with emotional beats as well.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem was easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked -- "bifocals with maroon handles bent, sit with their meaning spent." Succinct word play paints a clear visual in my imagination - Grandpa's glasses, maroon in color with bent frames," ah, but what does "with their meaning spent?" How did the bifocals get broken? A fight? An accident?


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the poem, as the poet often dreams of Grandpa and the opening stanza engages the reader and keeps them going. There's a lot to unpack here - how do our dreams play with us? How real are they? Grandpa seemed to have a positive vibe in the dream, but in real life the poet doesn't seem to take the memories well. A dream put upside down on his head? The poem will resonate long after the reader has finished.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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Review of Snowed In  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Snowed In"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE STORY

Megan has to stop at a lodge when a blizzard hits.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

The ending is satisfying in a personal kind of way. We're worried for Megan, but we know she's safe, and now it's an opportunity for her to "power down" and relax, and she may not have had that chance in a long time.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited from Megan's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's a lot of description to set the scene. I liked: "Megan took a sip from the steaming mug of hot chocolate she'd ordered in the dining room." It put me right in the moment with Megan.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: rural, traveling setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader, and it's why Megan is in a pickle right now, due to the blizzard.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Megan

Megan sounds like a woman with common sense as she packs expecting a snow storm and has enough sense to find a lodge when the blizzard picks up. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is a good fit for the vinyette and the opening draws the reader in. If anything, I would have liked to have seen this developed a little more. Maybe Megan meets a nice man at the lodge and strikes up a friendship? Or meets an old friend? It's mostly narration, which is fine. You could always develop her more as a character. Overall, it's a nice vinyette that develops the setting well.



Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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Review of Exploding Daisy?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Exploding Daisy?"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE STORY

The narrator knows the real reason for the expression "Exploding Daisies," but are you ready to hear it?

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the conversational tone of the story. I felt like I was drawn right into the narrator's confidences and a ring side seat to the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the narrator who is a giant. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.


*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Suffice it to say, "I'm height enhanced." Prior to this there's a tad more description, told in a comical way, and I'm just chuckling. I could easily picture our narrator in my imagination.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: not sure
PLACE: for whatever reason I'm picturing a beanstock, but I think it's near a mountain.

I don't think time in this story really needs to be defined. Just still back, read, and enjoy.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Giant narrator

He's a fiesty tall guy and if you believe his exploding daisy story, I say two thumbs up. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story well and the opening engages the reader with a nice, easy style. If anything, I might suggest spacing between the paragraphs and maybe increasing the font to it's easier on the eyes? Overall, a light hearted story that's enjoyable!


Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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Review of Faith Healer  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Faith Healer"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE STORY

Connie is hoping to meet a man and start a family, but she gets a little help from her Grandma and faith.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

The story had a nice flow to it. Once I started, I didn't want to stop. I wanted to find out if Connie was going to have a happy ending. I'm a sucker for happy ending.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient from Connie's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I would suggest an edit for dialogue tags. Use only "he said" or "she replied" in tags to identify the speaker only, if you have to. Put action in a seperate sentence. Put the action first, then the dialogue.

FOR EXAMPLE, AS WRITTEN: "I apologize for bursting in on you, Miss," he said with an awkward, pained wrinkle in his brow, yet a gentle smile on his face. "I desperately need your help."

MY SUGGESTION: "I apologize for bursting in on you, Miss." He paused, and wrinkled his brow and wrung hands, and yet despite this, had a gentle smile on his face. "I desperately need your help."

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "The house was warm and dry, but outside the wind howled." I could easily visualize the scene in my imagination.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: in the past
PLACE: rural setting with cabins for houses

This is something that was clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Connie

Connie is a kind hearted soul and deserving of a kind-hearted family. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story well and the opening engages the reader. If anything, the part where Connie talks about the evil eyes seems a bit out of place or forced? I might strike up a conversation of faith and invite Ryan to pray, especially since she's gone out of her way to dissuade his fears over her being a witch. All together, it was a very enjoyable story!


Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Which One Will Win?"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem shares an old Cherokee legend that asks us to look into ourselves.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

Having spent time as a Boy Scout leader, I used to include an Indian story called, "Everyone's Canoe," into the Scout's Own and this story poem reminded me of teaching points. The old stories and legends are very relatable to our everyday life.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation/spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read and understand.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "tearing at one's feelings, behaviors, and attitudes," and while it isn't necessarily a physical description, it's an emotional one that every reader can understand. There are have been times we've all been a little torn over a situation that has confused us.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem challenges the reader to examine themselves in a very thought provoking and critical thinking way. Do you want to be the ugly wolf or the good wolf? It is your choice. This poem will resonate with readers long after it's read.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

This poem tells the tale of St. Patrick and his beliefs.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the poem was a very concise and succinct look at St. Patrick with a focus on the more spiritual aspects he brought to Ireland.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I did spot a formating error in that !size} is after Lord which I don't think was intended. The poem is easy to read. If anything I might suggest using WDC ML to increase the font to make it a little easier on the eyes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Kindness, love, compassion, and forgiveness won the day." It speaks to those traits we all strive for. I think we can say, "be kind," every day, but if we don't see an action that shows us what kindness is, then it's hard to imagine and I think St. Patrick was about showing us through his deeds what concepts likes this was about.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I believe the contest rules wanted the first letter in the line offset with green or a bold and that isn't done here. The poem is an honest look at St. Patrick life.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Looking Up to My Flag"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

This poem is a tribute to the American flag and what it represents not only to the American people, but to the world.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

Being a veteran, I gravitated right to this poem. For me, it speaks to the hope the flag offers, to all peoples. The flag is a poultice for an open wound, a light of peace, representative of a nation's pride.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "white clouds, blue sky, and red stripes of dawn." The line paints a nice visual that the colors of the flag aren't just on the flag, but embedded in the nation's every day life.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fit the poem well and the opening lines engage the reader. I liked how the poem tapped into emotions; patriotism, hope, peace, and more. The author uses a good economy of words to blend those emotions with visual vinyettes that readers can see in their mind's eyes as they read. Well done! I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

This poem is set in the nature of Ireland.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I appreciated that the setting became the main character of the poem. There are lot of nice visuals that paint pretty pictures in my imagination.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to bold the starting letters of each line.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The green of clover and blue of sky, Ponder the wonders of each new day," -- nice word choice here hints at a deeper meaning than just a pretty day, but also of a human need to appreciate the day and setting that has been given to us.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

An inspirational poem that will resonate long after its read. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph

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Review of Green Goes Gross  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A look at what happens when one uses shamrocks in soup.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the comedy in this poem. We all enjoy a shamrock or two, but in our food, especially, our soup.... maybe not so much. It was a very creative task on the prompt.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the starting letter of the line green.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Tasted putrid, looked like sewage. Awful choice to make." - Great word choices to paint a vivid picture!

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I almost spit out my coffee reading this poem! I hope there wasn't a touch of shamrock in it?! Yikes. A very entertaining read. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph

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Review of St. Patrick's Day  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A great look of the lore that St. Patrick left behind.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

A heartwarming tribute to St. Patrick, touching on the land and the objects he inspired.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Clover and heather; the ghostly moor which day dispels." - It pained a nice visual in my imagination.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

There's a nice flow to the poem. Great visuals using a good economy of words. I have no suggestions for improvement. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POLL

*Reading* A very engaging poll about where you like to sing your favorite tunes.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I think with a poll you need a strong introduction and a great question and this poll has both. The introduction draws you right in with it's conversational style of writing. The tone is light-hearted and endearing, and let's face it, it's a question we "struggle" with every day. Glad to see I'm not alone.

*Star* ENGAGING

The introduction draws the poll taker in with it's heartwarming, sincere tone.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of choices for answers. I didn't realize how many places we sing tunes at!

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, and this is minor, I like that the question is bolded, but I might increase the font on it so it's more catching to eye.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Great question! I thought the poll was a lot of fun. I did notice it has a lot of responses, which is awesome.


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Review of ATTENDANCE SHEET  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
GAMES OF THRONES MESSAGE BOARD/ATTENDENCE REVIEW

This is a review for "ATTENDANCE SHEET"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE BOARD

*Reading* The Message Board serves as a Guestbook for the author.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

What I loved about the guestbook is how the author has chosen a "Back to School" theme and is calling it "Attendance." Other items in the author's port are also school themed, so this is a nice compliment to the over all portfolio.

*Star* ENGAGING

The person popping in is invited to sign the attendance log. After all, one wants credit for being in the right place at the right time. The tone of the forum is light-hearted and endearing, encouraging the visitor to leave a missive.

*Star*VARIETY

A lot of people have stopped by and left a note, which was nice to see, if anything, it was a while since the last person prior to me had popped in - 27 days, I think. In that regard, I might suggest follow up to encourage engagement. Follow up could be anything. A question a day to bring people back or a prompt like flash fiction. It could be a school based prompt to stay on theme.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I liked the graphic in the introduction. It set the tone of what to expect from the forum. It's always a good thing to take attendance. *ThumbsUpL*

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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Review of TeaTotallyTime  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES WORD SEARCH REVIEW

This is a review for "TeaTotallyTime"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* The Word Search has an Alice in Wonderland tea party theme. The tone of the activity is light-hearted and fun.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great selection of words. All the words used were in association with a tea party and there were a lot teas being offered. Honestly, I'm craving tea now. *Laugh*

*Star* ENGAGING

With this word search, I only spotted a few words off the bat, and I had to hunt a bit more than I thought I would, but it was enough to keep hunting and just when I wanted to give up, I spied another word.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of words, which I liked. All the words were items you would find at a tea party which was nice. Nothing seemed out of place.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

If anything, I might suggest adding more content to the introduction to make it more inviting for the activity taker. Suggestion only - catch their eye with a whimsical graphic of a tea party or use WDC to vary the size and font of the introductory paragraph. I enjoyed the word search and would recommend others to try it.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES FLASH FICTION REVIEW

This is a review for "Cure for the Common Coffee"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.


*Reading* THE STORY

John writes coffee reviews for a living. It's not a bad job, but you'll soon discover it takes a lot of character to write coffee reviews.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I *Heart* coffee!! Every drop. Just like John. hehe. I love how John has an old-fashioned, easy-going way about himself.


*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from John's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. Honestly, I love past tense stories.

*Star*DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue used.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment next to my own coffee maker, taking in the rich aroma of my own fufu coffee.


*Star*CHARACTERS

What I liked about John as a character, is he's fun, quirky, and easily relatable, even if he likes to use a typewriter. Heck, if it wasn't for typewriting class in High School, I wouldn't be here. Sometimes, it's best not to fiddle with what works.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

It's perfect. It wasn't too slow, and not too fast either. I was right in the moment with John.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Good economy of words communicates well and evokes emotion. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. I highly recommend a cup of "John" when you sit down to read!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE POEM

A lively look at the man himself, St. Patrick.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the opening stanza, "Shamrock worn, coloured green, Today's the day to wear it be seen." It drew me right in.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the each line started in the color green. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Asps, away from him they ran," -- I thought it was a very creative way to weave in the legend of St. Patrick driving out snakes from Ireland.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I loved how the poem ended, bringing it full circle and to the modern day with what we usually to do celebrate - dance, drink, and a pint of Guiness. A very imaginative poem that puts the reader in the moment! Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem captures the essence of St. Patrick's Day shenanigans.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem framed St. Patrick's Day in a fun light.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the author highlighted the beginning letter in green. That was a nice touch.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Singing Irish poems Till the cows come home." That put a smile on my face. It was a nice way to set the mood and tone of the poem.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A fun and enjoyable poem that captures the essence of a warmhearted St. Patrick's Day. My only suggestion, and this would be a matter of style, is to add some limited punctuation to give the poem more a rthymic flow. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "My Christmas Prayer"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a heartfelt look at how the author's friend had touched their life.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem is poignant and heartfelt. It leaves the reader on an upbeat note, but it goes through emotional highs and lows as it dips and ebbs through life. In this way, it makes an emotional connection with the reader that resonates.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences. The poem presents itself as a Christmas tree which is appealing as well as being done in green.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "To make it through the "tough times" with a strong heart and with wisdom." I think all of us strive for a strong heart when times are tough.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is heartwarming and bittersweet to read. I have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the title was perfect for the presentation.

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Review of How is it that  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "How is it that"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem ponders the question "how is it that" I can't forget about you?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the honest introspection the poem offers. Even when 2 years have passed, the author can remember her with such clarity it's unnerving. I had something similar happen to me and I would consider this man my "first" that I was in love with. Even now, there are times I think "how is it that...?"

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's no vivid descriptions - just everyday descriptions. One that sticks out to me is it's been two long years.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I thought the title matched the thoughts and sentiments of the poem well and evoked the reader to ponder the "what if" in their own lives. That's how the poem emotionally resonates with the reader. The poem is easy to read and understand.

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Review of Idalin's Patio  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Idalin's Patio"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE MESSAGE FORM

The forum invites WDC Community members to stop on by, introduce themselves, say hi and share fellowship and friendship.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the heartwarming tone the introduction set. I enjoyed the greeting: "Other beverages are available for those over 21, but tea is the best." I agree! Tea is the best!

*Star* INTRODCUTION

The introduction uses a graphic to help set the mood and tone of the forum along with a quote from Jimmy Buffet. If anything, there is a link to an invalid item in the introduction that I might suggest cleaning up.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to switch up the colors. It catches the reader's eyes more.

*Star* EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author connects with their visitors using a variety of techniques, such as heartwarming pictures and whimsical sayings. If anything the last entry was 17 years ago, so I'd love to see more recent interaction. I would be more than willing to stop back and rate the forum higher if there is more recent again and the invalid item is attended to.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the forum and very inviting. See above for suggestions.


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Review of Survival  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Survival "  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE ESSAY

A look at homeless. The author shares his thought on homeless, possible causes, choices, and how one choice can make a difference in your life.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the tone of the essay. It wasn't accusatory or "woe is me," but a thoughtful look at what causes homelessness and what can be done. Ultimately, it comes down to the choices one makes. Seeking the choice to pick oneself out of homelessness requires a lot of courage and then will power to follow through.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a paragraph formatted essay.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest the use of WDC ML to make the font bigger so it would be easier to read for the reader.

*Star* EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author speaks in a tone that allows for an emotional connection with the reader. He sheds light on a problem that many might not understand to include the causes, drugs and gambling. The piece is poignant and very introspective.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Genuine, heartfelt, and honest. The title is reflective of the content. I have no suggestions for improvement.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "DragonBlue's Variety c-Notes"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

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THE CNOTES

*Reading* Dragonblue Variety Cnotes has a collection of cnotes for any occasion, which include humor, to pick one up when feeling blue, friendship, and sorry.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the heartfelt phrases each cnote contained. If anything, I might suggest changing up the font a little bit, as the font was a little striking.


*Star* ENGAGING

The cnotes are deeply rich in color, and if anything, I thought they were almost too vivid for my eyes, so my suggestion here would be to tone down the color plate a little bit.

*Star*VARIETY

There are ten cnotes which offer a nice amount of variety. There were a lot of nice heartwarming choices for viewers to choose from.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Nice use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them intrigued to visit the collection.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I thought the price point on the cnotes were a tad high, so I might suggest lowering the price a little. I would recommend WDC members so stop on by and check them out. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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