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#4863025

Review of Kia the Blue Leprechaun  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)

Given:   Apr 4, 2026 at 5:54am

Length:   1,852 Characters | 1,730 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY Kia a blue leprechaun that is a little late in turning green. WHAT I LIKED Kia goes on a quest with her friends looking for that rare leprechaun magic that will turn her green. It's quite a journey, but these are the best journeys - taken with friends. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. Good job with dialogue tags. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph frames the story upon the mystical highlands in the village of Greentree. CHARACTERS Kia and her friends, Junior and Chris and her dog Bingo. All of them are a friendly, supportive bunch, especially when they undertake their journey. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the dilemma - Kia is a little late turning green, the middle sets upon solving Kia's lack of greenness and the ending finds a plausible way with a 'lil magic to find Kia's green. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. I might also consider adding "Fantasy" to genre selection. Overall, this is a lighthearted story filled with friendship and adventure. It's not easy finding your green, but Kia and her friends are determined. There's a lesson here to be learned about the power of friendship and the story does a wonderful teaching it gently.

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#4863021

Review of Mystic's Reverie  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Anniversary Reviews Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Apr 4, 2026 at 5:38am

Length:   1,249 Characters | 1,041 w/o WritingML

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem that implies behind the mystic is a good cup of coffee. WHAT I LIKED This was a new form of poetry for me, Naani, so I learned something new. STRUCTURE This is a Naani poem. There is a link that describes the structure of the poem which is very helpful, but basically a Naani poem has 4 lines with approx. 20 to 25 syllables. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Coffee prayers a mystic's solace," It's an interesting line and really open to a wide interpretation. I took it as finding peace and quiet while enjoying my coffee and fueling up for the rest of the day. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS I have no suggestions for improvement. Succinct expression using few words. FORUM Anniversary Reviews  (E) Help members celebrate another year of membership by sending them Anniversary Reviews. #1565040 by Allez les Bleus

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#4863020

Review of A Little Lie  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Apr 4, 2026 at 4:59am

Length:   1,634 Characters | 1,519 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY An injured Pegasus finds Pippa Twinkletoes who tells a few white lies to help him out. WHAT I LIKED This was a very colorful story and it captured the fantasy elements well. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 3rd person limited from Pippa's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. Good job with the dialogue tags. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph lets you know about Pippa and her personality in a whimsical, conversational voice that entices the reader to read on. CHARACTERS Pippa and Cloudhoof Pippa is a likable young girl. She quickly befriends Cloudhoof and as the story progresses, they demonstrate the power of friendship. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the dilemma with Cloudhoof's injury, the middles sets upon finding solution and the ending will warm the heart. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. Children and Fantasy were appropriate genres for the story. I found this to be a light hearted tale that speaks to the power of friendship and kindness. A Bee Hive Birthday Review

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#4862782

Review of THE BIG LITTLE MAN  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Apr 2, 2026 at 7:37pm

Length:   2,398 Characters | 2,267 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY A platoon of soldiers in boot camp during the spring of 1944 become involved in a boxing competition when their pride is hurt. WHAT I LIKED There were so many rich and vibrant characters in this story and I loved getting to know all of them, including Bragg. He may have been the antagonist, but the writer did a wonderful layered job with his characterization. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the first person by Private Reggie Brooks. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUE There's a nice blend of dialogue and narration. The dialogue did a wonderful job capturing accents and the essence of the time period. DESCRIPTIONS There's enough to set the scenes. Just when you needed that hint of a visual, the description was there. I especially the opening description which was succinct and to the point: "Our fatigues were soaked and boots caked with sandy clay fro the day's training activities..." It gave the story it's authenticity. SETTING TIME: Spring, 1944 PLACE: boot camp, North Carolina This is something that was clarified for the reader. CHARACTERS This story has a grand ensemble of a characters which mesh well with each other. Reggie is our storyteller, but you get to know Woofie, Marco, and the supporting cast well. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS I have no suggestions for improvement. Everything felt gritty, real, and honest to the characters and time period. The opening captures the reader's attention immediately with a character voice that sucks the reader in. I usually one to say to open a story with some action, but this one didn't need it with it's strong voice. This story was intriguing one as it was a hard look at the time and a gritty look of a platoon training in boot camp. There's camaraderie and esprit de corps which shines throughout. A compelling vignette of an intriguing time in history. A Bee Hive Review made for the Veterans Group Challenge, March 2026

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#4862710

Review of Solstice of The North  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Anniversary Reviews Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Apr 2, 2026 at 7:24am

Length:   1,359 Characters | 1,165 w/o WritingML

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about the lack of light in the north during winter. WHAT I LIKED You have to say a lot with a little when composing a haiku and this poem does just that. STRUCTURE This is haiku. It is a form of short Japanese poetry. The traditional form has 17 syllables and often has a phrase offering sudden enlightenment or it paints a poignant picture. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Cold ebbing of light." It is succinct and to the point, with ebbing the key word describing a sucking or leeching of light leaving one numb or lacking of warmth. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The title fits the poem well. I thought the genres listed were appropriate to the poem's expression. The poem leaves the reader with a longing for warmth and light, which could be taken literally (nature) or spiritually. FORUM Anniversary Reviews  (E) Help members celebrate another year of membership by sending them Anniversary Reviews. #1565040 by Allez les Bleus

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#4862637

Review of Night Watches. Day Sleep Not Much.  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Apr 1, 2026 at 7:13pm

Length:   1,594 Characters | 1,499 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM The poem was a reflection on life in a submarine. WHAT I LIKED As I read the poem, I could put myself there on the sub. I've been through historic subs (boy are submarines small!) and I've been submarines in the movies "The Hunt for Red October," so it was easy to visualize the experience from the verbal musings and slide into the "What if" aspect of the poem. Well done. STRUCTURE This is a poem with 5 stanzas and 4 lines each. There is an AABB rythme scheme. The poem has a nice beat when read outloud. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase font and make easier to read on the website. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "but were the days oft musty, dank, and sweltering, like some hell." The language used here is gritty and raw, yet thought provoking, and I can imagine a sailor in a sub, sitting at his post, or working at his station, sweating, keeping vigilant duty. Well done. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening asks a question, which causes the reader to pause and muse about the visual. I have no suggestions for improvement and I thought this was a poignant tribute to some of the things we sacrifice when we sign up for military duty. A Bee Hive Review made for the Veterans Group Challenge, March 2026

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#4862561

Review of The Old Veteran's Friends  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Apr 1, 2026 at 7:44am

Length:   1,107 Characters | 1,063 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. First Impressions In this poem, an old veteran recalls memories of young friends he knew during World War II. Structure This poem has 8 stanzas with 4 lines each. There is an AABB rythme scheme. There is a nice rhythmic beat when read outloud. Mechanics I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Descriptions I especially liked: "At the end of the day they prayed once more, thanked God for their lives, their spirits did soar." This is an emotional description that leaves the reader with hope at the end of the poem. Parting thoughts The title fits the poem well. The poem starts as a sad march through the veterans memory and evokes emotion well as the old veteran tells his friends' stories. Overall, the poem does a good job telling the story of World War II and the memories that remain. A Bee Hive Review for the Veterans Group Challenge, March 2026

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#4862554

Review of Navy Jet Accident Kills Two  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Apr 1, 2026 at 6:10am

Length:   1,504 Characters | 1,382 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY A emotional look at two Navy jet pilots who were killed in a training accident. WHAT I LIKED I liked the character voice. It was rich and honest and drew me into the story. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph did a good job setting the tone for the story. CHARACTERS Unnnamed narrator - our narrator goes through a gambit of emotions when she finds out her friends were killed in the accident. She's a character a lot of us can empathize with. FLOW & PACING The opening delivered the bad news, the middle had us struggling right along with our narrator and the ending left the reader on a hopeful note. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. The note at the beginning helped to frame the story for the reader. This vignette was a heart retching peek as to how death and dying can effect us all in different ways. A gripping read. A Bee Hive Review for the Veterans Group Challenge for March 2026

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#4862347

Review of A Fiber Optic Christmas  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 30, 2026 at 7:11pm

Length:   1,866 Characters | 1,729 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. I just want to note, this story is with an account that was last seen on WDC in 2010. THE STORY A family decides to buy an artificial tree for Christmas, but it's not an easy decision which one to get. WHAT I LIKED I loved the character voice. It made the story easy to read and enjoy. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. Dialogue tags were used appropriately. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph sets up the challenge - a family decides to buy an artificial tree after years of a real one, but it's not an easy decision to make. CHARACTERS Mom, Dad, and the narrator. All of them are likable and relatable, which makes the story click. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the challenge, the middle set on a solution and end made the reader smile. Well done. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. I especially liked the ending where Dad was talked into... (I don't want to spoil it). This is a nice, light hearted Christmas tale and very enjoyable. It was written in 2001 and last modified in 2006, so it's 20 years old. Despite the age, it's still a story that will connect with readers, especially those who enjoy the Christmas spirit. An Angel Army Review

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#4862177

Review of Halloween 2008 word search  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 29, 2026 at 6:59pm

Length:   1,057 Characters | 964 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH A word search with a Halloween theme. WHAT I LIKED The words that were used were more on the fun and lighter side of Halloween. ENGAGING The word search was very engaging. Even if it's not Fall or Halloween the selection of the words made the puzzle fun. VARIETY There were a lot of good word choices and the puzzle stayed on theme well. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The introduction is rather basic and my suggestion would be to spice it up a bit to make it more attractive (I found this on the random section). That said the member hasn't been on since July 2010, so while the introduction might not get the 'nutmeg' needed, this is a still a fun puzzle to solve. An Angel Army Review

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#4861771

Review of Deserted Island  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 26, 2026 at 8:48am

Length:   1,554 Characters | 1,463 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POLL The poll asks an intriguing question - If you were stuck on a desert island who would you want to be on the island with you? WHAT I LIKED There are some good options for the answers and I find the poll taker has to pause and really think about the answer. In that regard, the poll does a good job with employing critical thinking skills. ENGAGING I thought the question was very engaging and I tried not to think to hard about Lord of the Flies when evaluating my answer. VARIETY There were a some very good choices listed as an answer the poll taker could select. There was even an other option. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS I was very impressed that this poll had collected a total of 837 votes since it was created in June 2001. I might suggest using a graphic or a giphy in the introduction to establish tone or better set the theme of the poll, if doable, however, I did note that this member had not been on since 2010, curious about the modification. If anything, there looks to be some intriguing content in their port, including this poll. I'd love to see more. Overall, this is a poll that lingers as the poll taker might ponder the other available answers. An Angel Army Review

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#4861698

Review of The Lover's House  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Mar 25, 2026 at 6:35pm

Length:   3,378 Characters | 3,144 w/o WritingML

"Journey Through Genres: Official Contest"  Official Judge's Review My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. Thank you for entering Journey Through Genres. THE GENRE The Gothic genre got it’s start in the late 18th century and blends horror, romance, and the supernatural. What I like about the Gothic genre is how it explores the darker elements of human nature. I’m looking for the following in your story: Setting: I’m looking for a decaying, old, haunted, isolated setting. This can be an old castle, mansion, or remote landscapes. Atmosphere: I’m looking for a sense of dread and tension. The gothic genre usually build atmosphere through a reflection of the weather such as storms, mists, or darkness. Unexplained events: Gothic hints at supernatural occurrences, but when revealed have a natural explanation. Characters: The characters are usually young. Women tend to be naïve or painted as damsels in distress. The man is usually broody with anti-hero overtones. Plot devices: These can include secret rooms, visions, dreams, old manuscripts which help build suspense and tension in the story. Emotions: Emotions such as terror, awe, love, despair and obsessions are usually heightened, again to build suspense and tension. THE STORY Julian Thorne wants to save an old house that’s been in his family for years, but it was built on a ocean cliff and the ocean wants it back. He hires Maya Vance, a historical architect to assist in his project. WHAT I LIKED This story embodied modern day gothic to the “tee.” GOTHIC ELEMENTS: The house is hunched against the perpetual California fog, and damp with dew. Its also dark, as the wiring was salt-eaten. Julian and Maya are young – Julian is the owner, brooding and quiet, Maya is sharp and up to challenge of trying to save the house. She’s no damsel in distress, but confident in her abilities, giving this story a modern, gothic twist. The house itself is the plot device, with salt-worn rooms and a foundation that aches to go back to the sea. As Maya unlocks the secrets of the house, Julian is drawn to her. Their attraction is heightened by the dark ambience of the residence. DESCRIPTIONS The descriptions are succinct and to the point all while painting a vivid picture in the reader’s mind. For example: “Its gardens were a graveyard of roses, their petals soft as a bruise, their stems armored in thorns and salt-scale.” CHARACTERS Julian and Maya. Julian is rich, yet he feels he must save the house his ancestors left him. Maya is practical and honest, yet knows that ultimately whatever decision Julian must make it must be his. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS I have no suggestions for improvement. This story had me feeling like I was reading a Victoria Holt novel. Overall, a haunting gothic tale that will resonate with the reader long after they’ve finished it. This review is associated with FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4861697

Review of The House That Would Not Forget  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 25, 2026 at 6:35pm

Length:   3,208 Characters | 2,928 w/o WritingML

"Journey Through Genres: Official Contest"  Official Judge's Review My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. Thank you for entering Journey Through Genres. THE GENRE The Gothic genre got its start in the late 18th century and blends horror, romance, and the supernatural. What I like about the Gothic genre is how it explores the darker elements of human nature. I’m looking for the following in your story: Setting: I’m looking for a decaying, old, haunted, isolated setting. This can be an old castle, mansion, or remote landscapes. Atmosphere: I’m looking for a sense of dread and tension. The gothic genre usually build atmosphere through a reflection of the weather such as storms, mists, or darkness. Unexplained events: Gothic hints at supernatural occurrences, but when revealed have a natural explanation. Characters: The characters are usually young. Women tend to be naïve or painted as damsels in distress. The man is usually broody with anti-hero overtones. Plot devices: These can include secret rooms, visions, dreams, old manuscripts which help build suspense and tension in the story. Emotions: Emotions such as terror, awe, love, despair and obsessions are usually heightened, again to build suspense and tension. THE STORY Clara inherits Blackridge Manor and has a choice – keep the mansion which is dying under its own weight or demolish it. WHAT I LIKED I enjoyed the ending. Sometimes it’s easier than you think to do the right thing. GOTHIC ELEMENTS: The setting had a manor that was decaying on a cliff overlooking the Atlantic ocean. This line summed up with the atmosphere: “Dust floated in the air like pale spirits.” The east wing had always been forbidden which contributed to atmosphere and plot devices. A creepy knocking hints at the supernatural. Clara is the main character who inherits the manor. Her aunt, who is older tries to get her to keep the manor, leading to high emotional tension. DESCRIPTIONS The descriptions put the reader in the setting. I especially liked: “The night wind battered the house. The sea roared against the cliffs.” CHARACTERS Clara is a strong will heroine who is put under some pressure by her aunt. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling mistakes. If anything, I might tighten up the dialogue tags. For example as written: “What is this place?” Clara demanded, her voice shaking. My suggestion: “What is this place?” Clara’s voice shook, betraying her unease. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS I have no suggestion improvement. Good job offering a natural solution for a supernatural element. The story had a nice foreboding element and I liked Clara as a character. Overall, a strong gothic tale. This review is associated with FORUM Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E) JUNE2026 - hang out with the Bees & enjoy the Flowers. NEW challenge for JUN 2026 is OUT! #1474097 by SoccerBee

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#4861688

Review of Misunderstood  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (3.5)

Given:   Mar 25, 2026 at 6:28pm

Length:   2,314 Characters | 2,109 w/o WritingML

"Journey Through Genres: Official Contest"  Official Judge's Review My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. Thank you for entering Journey Through Genres. THE GENRE The Gothic genre got its start in the late 18th century and blends horror, romance, and the supernatural. What I like about the Gothic genre is how it explores the darker elements of human nature. I’m looking for the following in your story: Setting: I’m looking for a decaying, old, haunted, isolated setting. This can be an old castle, mansion, or remote landscapes. Atmosphere: I’m looking for a sense of dread and tension. The gothic genre usually build atmosphere through a reflection of the weather such as storms, mists, or darkness. Unexplained events: Gothic hints at supernatural occurrences, but when revealed have a natural explanation. Characters: The characters are usually young. Women tend to be naïve or painted as damsels in distress. The man is usually broody with anti-hero overtones. Plot devices: These can include secret rooms, visions, dreams, old manuscripts which help build suspense and tension in the story. Emotions: Emotions such as terror, awe, love, despair and obsessions are usually heightened, again to build suspense and tension. THE STORY A emotionally misunderstood daughter runs to her grandmother for solace and understanding. WHAT I LIKED I liked this line a lot: "If you want her to trust you, then stop trying to repaint her." It really speaks to what's inside a person's heart. GOTHIC ELEMENTS: There is a lot of heightened emotions and anxiety over Libby's choice of expression. CHARACTERS Grandma is the core character, willing to accept her granddaughter, Libby, as she is. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS This was a modern day character driven story that will tug on the heartstrings. This review is associated with the Bee Hive.

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#4861537

Review of camping  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 24, 2026 at 7:01pm

Length:   1,086 Characters | 968 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH A word search with a camping theme. WHAT I LIKED It's been a while since I went camping, but this word search brought back a lot of good memories, especially cooking with a dutch oven. ENGAGING This word search was very engaging. If you enjoy camping, you'll enjoy hunting down all the items you need for a good campout! VARIETY There were a lot of good choices that stayed on theme with being in the outdoors. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS I might suggest spicing up the introduction a little bit with a graphic or giphy, though I did notice the last time this member was on the site was in 2007. Overall, a fun puzzle that will have you jonesing for a campout! An Angel Army Review

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#4861158

Review of Star Trek Voyager Wordsearch  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 22, 2026 at 2:51am

Length:   1,140 Characters | 1,036 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH This is a word search based on Star Trek Voyager. WHAT I LIKED I remember watching Voyager when it first came on and I enjoyed it, so this word search brought back some good memories. ENGAGING I thought the word search was very engaging. I had a fun finding the different characters and remembering how much they were a part of the show. VARIETY There were a good variety of words that stayed on topic including quadrant and caretaker. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS My only suggestion would be to flesh out the introduction a bit more. Maybe include a Voyager giphy or explain a little bit about the motivation to create the word search and deepen the connection with the puzzle taker. Overall, a lot of fun for Star Trek fans. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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Review of Watercolor Memories  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 22, 2026 at 2:37am

Length:   1,588 Characters | 1,458 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY An artist/photographer captures a stampede of wild horses against the ocean's shore. WHAT I LIKED The author did a wonderful job painting an image with words. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Past tense is used in the story. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph made my heart skip a beat. "They" were running toward me. I hoped to avoid them as welL! CHARACTERS The main character is a photographer who has the opportunity of a lifetime to photograph wild horses running free, enjoying the water, untamed in nature. FLOW & PACING The opening put the photographer and the reader in the heart of the action as the horses ran toward them. The middle revealed how the horses enjoyed nature. The end had the photographer trying to paint the horses as she remembered them. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. There's a nice, warm, rich storytelling voice filled with reverence for nature and the majesty of the horses. I especially loved this line: "I was painting the memory." Memories are not easy paint, and yet painting that moment meant the word to the photographer. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4861036

Review of Lavender Teddy Bear Named Prince Poem  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Given:   Mar 21, 2026 at 7:32am

Length:   1,085 Characters | 949 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A heartfelt tribute poem dedicated to Prince, the musical artist. WHAT I LIKED I loved the sincerity in the writer's voice. Prince was an amazing guitarist and a wonderful musician. STRUCTURE This is a free form poem. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "He is lavender with a cute bow around his neck. A gift from my husband," I could easily picture the gift, given in love and comfort. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening invites the reader in as they talk about their teddy bear. The reader wants to find out more and why this teddy bear is so special. Prince was a special artist. This is a nice poem dedicated to him. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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Review of Chuck Norris  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Mar 20, 2026 at 6:39pm

Length:   1,181 Characters | 1,077 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE WORD SEARCH This word search is a welcomed tribute to Chuck Norris. WHAT I LIKED Chuck Norris will always be remembered for Walker, Texas Ranger, but his acting and his love of the martial arts was inspiring to others and I'm glad I found this today. ENGAGING The word search was very engaging and it covered Chuck Norris's life and career very well. VARIETY There were a lot of good words reflective of his vast work and the puzzle did a good job staying on theme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS My only suggestion would be to add a graphic or giphy to the introduction, or maybe even a YouTube clip of Chuck in action. The heartfelt words in the introduction really sum up how many of us feel. RIP Action Hero. You will be missed. Overall, a wonderful tribute to Chuck and his work. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4860518

Review of A Genre Called Romance  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Mar 17, 2026 at 10:36am

Length:   1,904 Characters | 1,766 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY "Skinny," aka "potterhad," aka "Scavali," is stuck in detention with Gothic4ever and they share quite a moment. WHAT I LIKED This is a great character driven story about the soft points in life. I really enjoyed it. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the 1st person by Scavali. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUE The dialogue accents the narration. OPENING PARAGRAPH The opening paragraph sets up the drama - Scavali is stuck in detention with the person he likes the least, but to his surprise, they end up having a thing or two in common. CHARACTERS Scavali & Gothic4ever. What I really enjoyed was that as the story starts out, the reader sees the surface. What what do people tend to do like Mr. Peppers? Judge the surface. But as the story progresses, there's a wonderful layered approached that really opens up the characters. Once you get to know them, there's a "Breakfast Club," vibe. FLOW & PACING The opening set up the dilemma - how is Scavali going to get through detention with Her? The middle really reveals the characters and the ending leaves the reader on a "feel good" note. MECHANICS I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The title fits the story. While there's no rock 'em sock em action, the story shines with great characterization as Scavali and Gothic open up to a side of themselves that's honest, raw, and even gritty. My only suggestion would be to maybe add "teen" to the genre selection in the intro block. An Angel Army Review

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#4860478

Review of Holiday Search!  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)

Given:   Mar 16, 2026 at 10:57pm

Length:   1,157 Characters | 1,022 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found this word search using the completely random feature. THE WORD SEARCH A word search about the December holidays, Christmas, Chanukah, and Kwanza. WHAT I LIKED A little Christmas is welcomed any time of the year! ENGAGING The word search was very engaging. All the words stayed on theme with the December holidays and as I hunted for the words, I could feel the good vibes. VARIETY There were a lot of good choices that embodied the holidays MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS My only suggestion would be to spice up the introduction to heighten the mood and introduction, but I noticed the last time the member was on WDC was 11/24/2008, so that might not be an option. Overall, it's a fun puzzle with good holiday cheer. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4860382

Review of Packing for Maui  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

Given:   Mar 16, 2026 at 5:54am

Length:   1,549 Characters | 1,428 w/o WritingML

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. First Impressions I'll be honest - the title sucked me in. Doesn't Packing for Maui sound like fun? I think a vacation to Hawaii is a great away. As I read the poem, I got the impression the writer was daydreaming a bit as they packed in anticipation of the big day. Structure This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem's tone came across as a stream of consciousness voice. Mechanics I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Descriptions I especially liked: "I am unmatched, living a pajama life-, clashing only works in home office." I thought the use of pajama life was a great visual. How many of us just lounge around the house in our pajamas, especially if we're working from home. I had a note next to the above line of "ordinary life" and in the totality of the stanza, I got the vibe of living an ordinary life while daydreaming about Maui. Suggestions/Parting Thoughts I have no suggestions for improvement. I got the impression that real life intruded on the daydreaming, but what a distraction, ah, daydream. . The poem is full of longing and wistfulness as the writer packs for Maui, I was right there with them stuffing my own suitcase. An Angel Army Review FORUM Angel Review Forum  (ASR) Read, Review, Rate and Record all items read by the Army Angels. #1188311 by iKïyå§ama Muses on Things

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#4859928

Review of Summer Grass  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Anniversary Reviews Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Mar 12, 2026 at 2:58pm

Length:   1,506 Characters | 1,308 w/o WritingML

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem was about a blade grass hanging onto life. WHAT I LIKED I liked how the poem told a story and I enjoyed the ending. STRUCTURE This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Withering in the oppressive heat" The line is succinct and to the point using an active description. Withering implies a struggle and we come to understand the blade is grasping for life in the oppressive heat. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS I liked the title, as I'm drawn to nature poems. The theme, for me, was nature vs. nature. It's nature's cycle to born, to thrive, to grow old and die all against environmental challenges. The opening pulled me in, curious about what was going to happen to the blade of grass and it kept me reading. The ending left the reader on a hopeful note. There's a depth to the poem behind just the story which gives the reader pause to go deeper. Great story, honest message. Image #1174945 over display limit. -?- FORUM Anniversary Reviews  (E) Help members celebrate another year of membership by sending them Anniversary Reviews. #1565040 by Allez les Bleus

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#4859588

Review of Inspiration, Determination, Motivation  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Anniversary Reviews Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Mar 10, 2026 at 8:53am

Length:   1,293 Characters | 1,122 w/o WritingML

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE CNOTE COLLECTION This collection has various inspirational quotes to motivate when you might be feeling a little down. WHAT I LIKED My favorite cnote was: Don't throw in the towel. Use it to wipe your face. ENGAGING The collection was very engaging with different quotes for different moods which required a different type of inspiration/motivation. VARIETY There were a lot of choices for notes. Most notes used simple imagery, keeping the focus on the words and the message. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS I have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the cost for the notes were appropriate for quality. The introduction did a good job setting the tone and expectations. If you know a friend who could use a little pick me up, this is a great collection to check out. An Anniversary Group Review Image #1174945 over display limit. -?-

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Review of Fur Babies C-Notes - Dogs  

Review by SoccerBee

In affiliation with Anniversary Reviews Group  

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Given:   Mar 9, 2026 at 12:41pm

Length:   1,307 Characters | 1,137 w/o WritingML

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE CNOTE COLLECTION A collection of cnotes with cute doggies. WHAT I LIKED I loved the warmhearted messages of the cnotes. I especially liked: "thank you for the review," "thank you for being a friend with the 2 doggies," and the vacation cnote. ENGAGING I thought the cnotes were very engaging. There were lots of cute poses used for the cnotes. It was hard to choose one I would use because they're all so cute. VARIETY There was a nice variety of dog breeds and lots of cnote options to choose from. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS The introduction uses a warmhearted photo of dogs to set the tone/mood/feel of the collection. I would totally recommend this collection to send thank you cnotes if you appreciated a review you recieved. If you're a dog lover, you'll enjoy this collection. An Anniversary Group Review Image #1256157 over display limit. -?-