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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* INTERNAL DIALOGUE

Frank's friend wishes he was somewhere warm.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Internal dialogue based on the picture prompt? *CheckR*

Placed word count in the item? *CheckR*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I appreciated the rambling musings. Sometimes, when I get on a topic, I start to ramble. Very realistic in that regard.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Frank's friend. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I got a longing to change one's 'state' of life, and I think that's something we all can appreciate. There are times in our life when we could use a change.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* The author tugs on the heartstrings as the narrator works through their thoughts.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* INTERNAL DIALOGUE

A man mulls over a break up as he waits for the bus.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Internal dialogue based on the picture? *CheckR*

Place word count with the item? --- No word count placed in the item.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Honest character voice. You could hear the "numbness" of emotion

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of dealing with heartbreak and disappointment.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* Breaking up isn't easy to do and emotions can really get heavy.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in with something we all can identify with. The writing is candid with a touch of heartbreak. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Park Bench  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* INTERNAL DIALOGUE

A man reflects on his life and losing the love of his life, during life's quieter moments.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Wrote internal dialogue based on the picture prompt? *CheckR*

Did not modify the item after 1 FEB and put in the word count. *CheckR*


*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Nice character voice. Nice free flow of thoughts and contemplation.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of reflection, and that of looking backward to find motivation to look forward.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great! Resonates with strong emotion.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in. The writing is candid, honest, and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Immortal  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* INTERNAL DIALOGUE

A man gets sucked up in a barren landscape while searching for immortality.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Internal dialogue? *CheckR*

Word Count posted and item not modified after 1 FEB? *CheckR*



*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great character voice. It drew me right into the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

Sometimes when you take a chance, you take a wrong chance, probably due to the fact you didn't think the situation all the way through. I've done that a couple of times.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *CheckR* *CheckR* Good;

*CheckR* *Checkr* The author drew a picture of frustration after making a rash choice.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening drew me right in. I loved the creativity and imagination inspired by the photo prompt.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Time  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. I am reviewing this poem for the Angel Army.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem deals with the passage of time and how it can effect us.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the hint of Dr. Seuss. It made the poem very engaging.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. I noticed a general ABAB rythme scheme, but there were 2 stanzas where that didn't follow the pattern, still, it didn't take away from the presentation or the message.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "In circle's of life's wind, we trust."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I enjoyed the word play. The first line is especially appealing, "How did it get so late so soon?" The questions in the poem dare the reader to puzzle themselves out against the backdrop of the reader's life.


Reviewed by StephB for the the Angel Army

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Review of GRATEFUL HEART  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about thankfulness and those traits associated with being thankful.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

This is a very expressive and upbeat poem. I especially liked, "Every experience has a good reason For all of us to keep moving on."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of each line spells out a word or a message.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Honest, sincere, and heartfelt. A nice outlook to have on life.



Reviewed by StephB from the Bee Hive

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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

This review is #4 of a 4 poem port raid from Package 3 from the Bee Hive Honey Pit Raffle.
 
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APR 2024 - hang out with fellow Bees and enjoy the Honey.
#1474097 by StephBee - House Targaryen


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem tells a story of how Santa's sleigh was stolen.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the title of the poem. It sucked me right in and I had to read it!

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a 24 line poem that follows the melody of "Jingle Bells." Well done.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Someone jacked your sleigh, took to flight, so late at night." I could so picture this happening!

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Written for a contest, the poem it's a perfect "Bah Humbug!" The poem is lighthearted and fun. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Bee Hive

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Review of The Forlorn Sea  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

This review is #3 of a 4 poem port raid from Package 3 from the Bee Hive Honey Pit Raffle.
 
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Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E)
APR 2024 - hang out with fellow Bees and enjoy the Honey.
#1474097 by StephBee - House Targaryen


*Reading* THE POEM

The author uses the sea and the conditions of the sea to reflect how rocky a bad relationship can be and leaves the reader with a bit of hope at the end.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the tone. It was very somber and reflective.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a 16 line poem with every stanza having 4 lines. In each stanza the 1st and 3rd lines rythmed.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Where the foamy white caps turn black." Visually descriptive, it also reflects how a life of promise can turn sour.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem tells a tale of life and the emotional path life can take one on. I appreciated the hopeful ending. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Bee Hive

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Review of Lost In The Flood  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

This review is #2 of a 4 poem port raid from Package 3 from the Bee Hive Honey Pit Raffle.
 
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Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E)
APR 2024 - hang out with fellow Bees and enjoy the Honey.
#1474097 by StephBee - House Targaryen


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem speaks to the flood of life and what's like to make it through the waters.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I love the expression and word choices that evoke emotion.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a 16 line poem with every stanza having 4 lines and an ABAB rythme scheme. The rythme scheme allowed for a nice, rhythmic flow.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I'm sucked back under from a lifetime's strife..." I think we've all been there, when we've had to battle something hard life has thrown at us.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I love how visual the poem is. The reader can easily picture a riptide pulling someone under. The author does a great connecting the emotion to the tide, and then recovering. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Bee Hive

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Review of Turn From Here  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

This review is #1 of a 4 poem port raid from Package 3 from the Bee Hive Honey Pit Raffle.
 
FORUM
Steph Bee's Honey Pit   (E)
APR 2024 - hang out with fellow Bees and enjoy the Honey.
#1474097 by StephBee - House Targaryen


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem tells a story of a lighthouse keeper and a traumatic night.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the story. I felt like I was there watching everything unfold.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a 20 line poem with every stanza having 4 lines and an AABB rythme scheme. The rythme scheme allowed for a nice, rhythmic flow.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The bow came crashing hard on the rocks." It's very visual and easy to picture.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Written for a contest, the poem keeps on point with the prompt. Good storytelling. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Bee Hive

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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

*Reading* A collection with Christmas wishes and WDC welcome notes.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the the added Trinket to the notes.

*Star* ENGAGING

I loved the graphics. They were very engaging.

*Star*VARIETY

If anything, I would have loved to have seen a couple more CNotes in the collection.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

A nice introduction. Good use of WDC ML.

Reviewed by StephB for Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive.
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE ENTRY

This was a poem about the winter solstice.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *XO*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *XO*

Place word count with the item. *XO*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Nice descriptions place me at the feast.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This a free form poem with no rythme scheme.

*Star* THEME

This is a seasonal time where time changes.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* The author taps into hope when talking about looking forward to the light.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is pretty solid, but this entry doesn't follow the prompt for this month's Bard's Hall Prompt, which is memoir writing about a cherished gift.

Glowing Steph
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Review of A Cherished Gift  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

A Puppet holds cherished memories.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *CheckR*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *CheckR*

Place word count with the item. *CheckR*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Tone of voice was full of reverence.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

What resonated with me was dealing with loss and how a puppet can draw on happy memories even though Enid had passed away.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* The author's respect and reverence shines through, but I might suggest a tad more introspection regarding Enid.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. The writing is honest and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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for entry "A caring gift" 
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. My review is on "A caring gift."

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

Santosh reached out to his mom, and the promise of family proved a balm to her long suffering.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *CheckR*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *CheckR*

Place word count with the item. *CheckR*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Nice character voice. I think the story is one that the reader can emphasize with.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

What resonates with me is making tough choices and the power of love of family.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* The author shares struggles and challenges and what she did to overcome them.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. The writing is heartfelt and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of A Cherished Gift  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

A young man turns around his life with a unexpected gift at Christmas.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *CheckR*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *CheckR*

Place word count with the item. *CheckR*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

The used a very engaging character voice.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

As a reader, I resonated with overcoming adversity. It's never easy when you're in your early 20's and sometimes it's easy to make the wrong choice.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* The author's heartfelt memories speak to choices we all have to make.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in. The writing is honest and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

Seaman Frances has been demoted, but he's the only one who can solve the problem. What will it cost him?

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *CheckR*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *CheckR*

Place word count with the item.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. It was uplifting.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Seaman Frances. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

There's a lot of themes here - hard work, leadership, determination. All of it can lead to something positive in life.


*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* It's an emotionally inspiring story.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation and capitalization. I would also suggest that the author increase the font on the story, as it's hard to read. Also, I would space between the paragraphs.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening catches the reader's attention. The writing is forthright and honest. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of What's In A Gift?  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

Mum died and didn't leave much behind except an old, used pie dish.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *CheckR*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *CheckR*

Place word count with the item. *CheckR*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Nice character voice. It drew me right into the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

I think there's a double message here, dealing with loss and poverty - and sometimes the everyday, ordinary things are the things that resonate with us. For me, I'll always fondly remember the pot that Aunt Mary and I used to make pierogis in during Christmas.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* The author's emotional memories around an aluminum pie dish resonate with readers.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. The writing is wistful and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR

A young girl learns a life lesson at Christmas time.

*Star* FOLLOWED PROMPT?

Describe a cherished gift that always makes you think of the person who gave it to you. *CheckR*

Non-fiction story up to 1200 words. *CheckR*

Place word count with the item. *CheckR*

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great character voice. It drew me right into the story.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of life lesson. A young 9 year old receives the gift she asked for, but it wasn't what she expected. Her reaction and the consequences teach her a lesson that will resonate throughout her life.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
How well does the emotional beat resonate with the reader? *Checkr* *Checkr* *Checkr* Great; *CheckR* *CheckR* Good; *Checkr* Okay.

*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* The author drew a picture of a how a child learned the lesson of humility.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader. The reaction to her gift is one we all can relate to. The writing is candid, honest, and sincere. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE VINYETTE

Inspired by a quote from Henry Rollins, the author goes a quest during November to fill in the hours with meaning.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the author's voice. It was very honest and candid.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.
*Star* TENSE

Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A endearing vinyette about finding yourself during NaNoWriMo. The title fits the vinyette well. Nice expression.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of Rescue  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Inspired by a quote from Emily Dickinson, the reader finds Amelia wrapped up in her writing, when Spunky interrupts the mood.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The character of Amelia took on an Emily Dickinson-like quality, as inspired by the quote.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a nice blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star* TENSE

Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I welcome any distraction from my heart's chilly gloom."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A heartwarming vinyette where a dog draws Amelia out of her world to help another. The title fits the story. Good use of the quote.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of November...  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Inspired by a quote from Emily Dickinson, Amelia takes November and finds that nature, the mood, and the lights inspire her writing.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The character of Amelia took on an Emily Dickinson-like quality.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "one chilly evening, as the sun dipped before the horizon, casting the sky in shades of crimson and gold."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I like the idea of using November as a muse. It's a dark, long, chilly month.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of I am Thankful  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry David Thoreau, the poem addresses the harvest of thoughts that can be found on the WDC community.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the creativity of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "where half baked words are overly spiced..."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The quote discusses a harvest of thought and the author draws on all the options you can find on WDC to harvest thoughts while painting a thanksgiving meal which is perfect for November.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Alphonse Karr, the author explores a thorn with a rose.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the inspiration message of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Roses have thorns, a warning given;"

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem uses a good economy of words to stir the reader's thought as they flip the illusion on it's end - why does a thorn have a rose? The use of alliteration with "One doesn't have one without the other," is in the perfect place to give the reader pause before the ending's message.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of Bus Stop  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Alphonse Karr, Winter's thorn will bring sweet heat at the Bus Stop.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem progressed from cold to heat and ended on a warm note, much like the quote from Karr.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There are 3 lines in each stanza. There is no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "fingers of frothy wetness crawl along my body."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem uses a good economy of words. I enjoyed how the poem told a simple story, yet it was layered with cold thorns which melt away at the end. Nice visuals.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of Thorns  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Alphonse Karr, Rose laughs and gloats, but there is a thorn on that flower. What could it be?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the easy flow of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. The 2nd and 4th lines of the stanza rythmes.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "laughing, gloating, cackling Rose,"

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The flow is light and easy; the thorn is stated with the last line. The poem resonates due to the catchy flow and begs the reader to consider if there's more than just bad prose to consider.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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