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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE VINYETTE

Inspired by a quote from Henry Rollins, the author goes a quest during November to fill in the hours with meaning.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the author's voice. It was very honest and candid.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.
*Star* TENSE

Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A endearing vinyette about finding yourself during NaNoWriMo. The title fits the vinyette well. Nice expression.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of Rescue  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Inspired by a quote from Emily Dickinson, the reader finds Amelia wrapped up in her writing, when Spunky interrupts the mood.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The character of Amelia took on an Emily Dickinson-like quality, as inspired by the quote.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a nice blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star* TENSE

Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I welcome any distraction from my heart's chilly gloom."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A heartwarming vinyette where a dog draws Amelia out of her world to help another. The title fits the story. Good use of the quote.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of November...  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Inspired by a quote from Emily Dickinson, Amelia takes November and finds that nature, the mood, and the lights inspire her writing.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The character of Amelia took on an Emily Dickinson-like quality.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "one chilly evening, as the sun dipped before the horizon, casting the sky in shades of crimson and gold."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I like the idea of using November as a muse. It's a dark, long, chilly month.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of I am Thankful  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry David Thoreau, the poem addresses the harvest of thoughts that can be found on the WDC community.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the creativity of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "where half baked words are overly spiced..."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The quote discusses a harvest of thought and the author draws on all the options you can find on WDC to harvest thoughts while painting a thanksgiving meal which is perfect for November.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Alphonse Karr, the author explores a thorn with a rose.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the inspiration message of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Roses have thorns, a warning given;"

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem uses a good economy of words to stir the reader's thought as they flip the illusion on it's end - why does a thorn have a rose? The use of alliteration with "One doesn't have one without the other," is in the perfect place to give the reader pause before the ending's message.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of Bus Stop  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Alphonse Karr, Winter's thorn will bring sweet heat at the Bus Stop.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem progressed from cold to heat and ended on a warm note, much like the quote from Karr.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There are 3 lines in each stanza. There is no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "fingers of frothy wetness crawl along my body."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem uses a good economy of words. I enjoyed how the poem told a simple story, yet it was layered with cold thorns which melt away at the end. Nice visuals.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of Thorns  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Alphonse Karr, Rose laughs and gloats, but there is a thorn on that flower. What could it be?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the easy flow of the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. The 2nd and 4th lines of the stanza rythmes.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "laughing, gloating, cackling Rose,"

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The flow is light and easy; the thorn is stated with the last line. The poem resonates due to the catchy flow and begs the reader to consider if there's more than just bad prose to consider.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

Glowing Steph


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Review of When In Rome  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CROSSWORD

*Reading* This crossword tests your knowledge on Rome and Italy.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the crossword was very interesting.

*Star* ENGAGING

The crossword offers a lot of choices. Some questions were easy, some were harder, but nothing a search engine couldn't help you out with.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of variety in the questions.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the tone for the crossword, if doable. A good first attempt!


Reviewed by StephB for Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive .
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Review of UK Universities  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CROSSWORD

*Reading* This crossword challenges the taker's knowledge on universities in the UK.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the crossword was challenging, but nothing you couldn't complete with a little help from a search engine.

*Star* ENGAGING

There are a lot of clues to sift through.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the tone for the crossword, if doable. I thought the crossword was a lot of challenging.

Reviewed by StephB for Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive.
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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

At the dawn of time, Zub, the Caveman, learns how to make clothes. One day he gets a big order - make something for the new king, Mog. Yikes! He's got nothing that fits! What's a caveman to do?

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Zub solves his problem using what he has and starts a tradition that has lastest centuries.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a small blend of dialogue and narration. My only suggestion here is to indent the dialogue and make it it's own paragraph.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: dawn of time
PLACE: caveman world

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Zub

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's gotta hustle to come up with something special for the new king. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. An enjoyable read that flows well with interesting characters.

This review is submitted to Steph's Bee Hive Group
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Review of Halloween C-Notes  
In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. Thanks for your patience with me, as I'm just recovering from vacation!

THE CNOTE

*Reading* Halloween CNotes offer a unique set of Halloween theme notes.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought both notes offered a nice appeal to different viewers.

*Star* ENGAGING

The CNotes are appropriate to the season. The introduction sets the mood with a nice quote that sums up the season.

*Star*VARIETY

There were only 2 choices. I'd love to see the collection expanded.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I thought the cNotes were spot on for the Halloween season. 1 was whimsical and one was spooky. The notes were affordability priced for the community.

Reviewed by StephB for Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive.
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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTE

*Reading* Sharmelle's Halloween Expressions are a fun set of CNotes to pass around during the fall season.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the whismical cNotes. They made me smile.

*Star* ENGAGING

CNotes entices the viewer to pass out a few with their whimsical, "feel good" vibes. The introduction is simple and straightforward.

*Star*VARIETY

There were a lot of choices.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I thought the cNotes were a lot of fun. Most cNotes are priced at 787 GP's which I thought were affordable for the community.

Reviewed by StephB for Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive.
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Blackwood Manor lingers on the outskirts of a rural town, harboring secrets to explore.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. It was nice closure on the haunting of the mansion.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's no dialogue.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set mood and tone of the story. I especially liked: "they were met with a clammy, musty oder that filled their nostrils."

*Star* SETTING

TIME: Part 1 is 50 years before part 2
PLACE: rural setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Henry and James

The characters are likable. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I would check the paragraph that starts with "Their Flashlights spread sinister..." there is miscoded WDC ML at the end of the paragraph -- ./linespace}.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

#1 - I wasn't sure how part 1 worked into part 2, unless Henry was one of the group of the youthful friends that were curious and explored the house. If that was the case, I would make that a bit more "clearer" in part 2. #2 - The prompt items were used, but I felt they were a bit forced into the story. I might have Henry linger on them and evoke memories? to make it feel more natural. (suggestion only) Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. Word count was not listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review of Grandpa  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Grandpa comes to visit his grandkids on Halloween while their parents step out for the night.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the author weaved in the prompt items. I thought it was a v natural fit.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. I might suggest an edit for past tense. Past tense is mixed with present tense on occasion. I would suggest being consistent and using past tense throughout.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I would suggest an edit for dialogue tags.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set mood and tone of the story.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Grandpa and the grandkids.

The boys are bit apprehensive being left alone but Grandpa comes along and eases their nervousness. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph

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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

What is causing the flickering lights at the old Price mansion?

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

There's plenty of suspects, and each has a motive.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's no dialogue.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scene.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: haunted house.

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

There's an ensemble cast, each with their own intentions. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening piques the reader's interest. I thought the ending brought all the clues together well. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules with the Cop Shop Mystery. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Barney Fife goes to investigate the noises coming from the old Price mansion.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the ending. Just when Barney thought he had it figured out...

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Present tense is used mostly, but it is not consistent. I would suggest an edit for tense.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The opening begins with dialogue. Tags are appropriate, but I might suggest an edit for punctuation within the dialogue. Spell out okay in creative writing. "OK" is okay for journalistic writing.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: "Broken windows gaped like hollow eye sockets." There's a good economy of words which paint a very succinct picture.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: haunted house.

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Barney

There's enough to understand his motivations. He goes to check out a complaint he has about the house. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. I would also suggest spacing between paragraphs, at least on Writing.com to make it easier on the eyes for the reader.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening piques the reader's interest. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules for the Cop Shop Mystery. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A word search that highlights items you'll find on Writing.com.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

You'll learn a lot about what Writing.com has to offer.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search kept me engaged. I wanted to solve the puzzle.

*Star*VARIETY

There were enough choices to make the puzzle engaging.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Other than spicing up the introduction to draw puzzle solvers in, I have no other suggestions. A challenging search!

Reviewed by StephBee for the Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive SEP 2023.
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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A nice little word search that celebrated WDC's birthday.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

This was a lot of fun.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search kept me engaged. I wanted to solve the puzzle.

*Star*VARIETY

There were enough choices to make the puzzle engaging.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Other than spicing up the introduction to draw puzzle solvers in, I have no other suggestions. I really enjoyed this word search because it was simple and yet challenging, too.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Best of the Rest at the Bee Hive SEP 2023.
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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A word search based on words that tell a type of story.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

This is a great word search to learn different type of storytelling.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search kept me engaged. I wanted to solve the puzzle.

*Star*VARIETY

The word search offered a lot of choices.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

A simple introduction. The title set the tone for the puzzle. I thought the search was a lot of fun.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Best of the Rest @ the Bee Hive, SEP 2023.
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In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE WORD SEARCH

*Reading* A grammer based word search.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

This is a great way to learn grammar terms.

*Star* ENGAGING

The word search kept me engaged. I wanted to solve the puzzle.

*Star*VARIETY

The word search offered a lot of choices.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction set the tone & expectations for the word search. The word search was challenging.

Reviewed by StephBee for the Best of the Rest @ the Bee Hive, SEP 2023.
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Becca is determined to beat a virtual game.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending and the message the story had to share. There is more to gaming, and even virtual gaming. Life is the ultimate game and there is a world out there to explore beyond a screen.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited by Becca. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. My constructive suggestion would be make me feel like I'm in the game with Becca. Tap into the five senses. Does the game smell? What is the forest like? Do the birds chirp in the forest? By using a good economy of words, you can write a sentence that taps into one of the senses and put the reader in the game with Becca.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day?
PLACE: urban setting?

This is something that is not defined but could be clarified for the reader. By setting the virtual reality game in the near future, this will allow the reader's imagination to take off.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Becca

Becca lives for the game, but soon discovers there's something more. The ending allowing for character growth. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. My constructive suggestion in this area would be to use WDC ML to make the story easier to read for the reader. I would space between each paragraph and maybe consider increasing the font to 3.5 or even changing the font to another type.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening draws the reader in. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.


Glowing Steph
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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE ARTICLE

The article gives a write up/narration of a virtual reality game.
*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the narration touched on several qualities the game would develop such as determination, resilience, and adaptability, which are all admirable qualities to take into real life.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to describe what you should expect from the game as a player.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: futuristic setting


This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

There is no main character, just narration giving an overview of what to expect from the game.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

My constructive parting thought/suggestion would be to slow down and read the rules of a contest and if I had any questions, ask. While the article's (Bard's Hall Contest Entry) narration reads well to entice me to play the game it describes, it's more "telling" than "showing," in that I expected to read a story actually involving a virtual player in a game per the rules of the contest, than a description of a virtual game that a player would play.

Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about what a person goes through when dealing with negative emotions.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem was very succinct and to the point, striking an emotional chord in the reader.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot and spelling mistakes. I have some suggestions for punctuation that might augment the pace and flow of the poem as spoken. For example, as written:

Yet as my stomach became an ocean,
it was cold
chills.

I might suggest:

Yet, as my stomach became an ocean,
it was cold -- chills.

Again, the punctuation speaks to the diction and rythme of the poem spoken out loud and only a suggestion.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mention above. A poignant poem that captures the physicality of emotion.

Reviewed by StephBee in the Sandbox.

A little girl in the sandbox of life. }
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Review of Jack and Claire  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

After a disagreement over their wedding Jack and Claire come to a resolution.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Run, Jack, Run!!

*Star* DIALOGUE

This is a dialogue only prompt and the author did a good job with the prompt.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Jack and Claire

The couple tackled issues that happen every day when it comes to weddings, such as the guest list. It's easy to have a 'row' over the small stuff, which then in turn, becomes big stuff and brings out the true nature of oneself.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The ending was realistic to the story. While the title is appropriate to the story, I might suggest a more engaging one to suck in the reader. Maybe, "Chick is Crazy." Lol! I Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review of Winning the Vows  
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Rick and Chrissy's disagreement leads to a comical role reversal on their wedding day.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the banter between Rick and Chrissy. It felt very natural. The role reversal made me chuckle.

*Star* DIALOGUE

This is a dialogue only contest and the author did a great job with the prompt.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Rick and Chrissy

When Chrissy insists on wearing her own wedding gown and not one passed down from Rick's side of family, Rick feels like he's in a hot spot with only one thing left to do. What I appreciated, is that while there is still a disagreement between them, their love shines through.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling or punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The ending was spot on for the story. The title is reflective of the story. The word count is listed in the post. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Dialogue Contest.

Glowing Steph


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