|I want to preface my review by letting you know that I am an extremely critical, technical reviewer. So please do not be discouraged by my comments. I read all of your available Chapters (1-5), and so here is the review you requested:
Reviewed by Shandralyn
I loved this story! I can’t wait to find out what happens next! You have a true gift for storytelling and I hope that you continue to pursue writing. That being said, you do have some serious technical issues with grammar and spelling. But I attribute most of that to your age and experience level, and that is something you can learn over time. The innate talent, creativity and energy that your story displays is not so easily learned.
Oh dear, where to begin… well, my best suggestion is to carefully re-read and edit your work. Once you have done all you are able, see if you can find someone who would be willing to act as a copy editor for you. If you want, I would be willing (I say that while cringing to myself because I see a lot of work in store). Maybe a few people; that way each can do a part of the work. Pay attention to what they correct and learn from it. Also find some good reference works, either books or online sites that you can read and learn from. Try to apply one concept at a time to your work. Over time you will see your writing skills greatly improve. Just your luck, you picked a reviewer who is all about the technicals.
Stylistic Elements & Writing Structure
Your characters are very well developed, and fascinating! I can really envision them, and each is distinct and unique. They really come alive for me.
Flow: Mixture of Dialog, Action, and Passive Desc
Pretty good here, too. The flow is constant and fast-paced as befitting an action/adventure style. There is a good mix of dialog, action and description.
Excellent. You seem to have an instinctive understanding of how to draw the reader’s attention and keep them on the edge of their seats.
What I liked best
Everything! …except the spelling and grammar. I love the character of Marty the Raccoon. I love your talent for developing plot. I love your energy and creativity.
Suggestions and Ideas for Future
Well as I mentioned before, there is a difference between talent and skill. Keep exercising your talent to hold onto that energy and creativity you have, and slowly build up your skills. I sincerely hope you never stop writing, whatever you do. You might get some people commenting on your grammar and spelling. Try and learn from those types of comments but don’t take it too seriously. I can feel how much you love the creative process in your writing and that, I believe, is essential to hold onto.
I would be more than happy to read any further chapters when you get more. And if you want me to revisit my rating for you after you make some grammatical corrections, I'd be happy to. Write On!!
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