I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions the best I can. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.
Review:
I love the way your poem rhymes here and the way you tell your story about Black History Month! I found no distractions in this poem. This is a very lovely poem and thanks for sharing and entering the "Poetry Topic of the Month Contest" !
I will give you my thoughts, pointers, corrections if needed, and some advice. These are only my opinions the best I can. Feel free to use what you find helpful, and please disregard the rest, for I'm not an expert reviewer.
Review:
I loved your poem but, one thing that threw me off a little was in your fourth stanza where you say "Libraries for book lovers is Santa’s wished for sleigh." maybe you could have said, "Libraries for book lovers is Santa’s wish per se." or something in that area. I know you are trying to rhyme this poem and that's my only suggestion for this poem.
I am so sorry, about this review it's been a while since I have given a review and I am not very good at them. I do hope this helps you though.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
"The Value of Values" is a wonderful poem with great rhythm!!! Your rhythm emphasizes the poem's emotions greatly!
This poem really reflects in our world today that most of our children do not have as much respect as we did as a child. I find myself very disappointed with this matter.
I really like the last stanza in your poem because you make a great point about respect in it.
I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems.
This poem does a great job of having rhythm and telling a great story in your poem. You make some great points with this poem too. I would love to read more of your poetry soon.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. I am sorry I am not really familiar with non-rhyming poetry, but I will try my best with this review ok. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
"The Anchor" is a wonderful poem and I like it.
This poem does a great job of having rhythm and telling a great story. I would love to read more of your poetry soon.
I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
"love is complex" is a great poem and has a great rhythm.
I found one distraction and I do not know if I am just missing something with it or something that you would like to change. Inline nine in the first stanza did you mean to put "it's" not "it"? Please forgive me if I am wrong on this and I am miss-understanding that part ok.
Other than that this is a great poem!!! Keep Writing!!!
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
As I said I would stop by and check out some of your poems and this one was one of them even though it took me a little bit to find it because the name was changed from the review you gave me earlier this month that you asked me to check out lol. But all is good ok.
"Shared tastes from the global village" is a great poem with a rhythm that is a little different than what I am use too, but I still love it the way it is.
I have found this poem of yours also humorous and fun. You also make some great points in this poem and I especially like the point you made in the last stanza.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. I am sorry I am not really familiar with non-rhyming poetry, but I will try my best with this review ok. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
I like your "THIRST" poem even though it does not rhyme like I am used too. I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems. I like your last stanza because it tell us what words are in this stanza.
Keep Writing!!!
PS I am also giving out this Review because I gave out a package in my fundraiser that included... 10 Poetry reviews for 1 for winner and 1 each for 9 of your friends. Eyestar won the package and chose you for one of the reviews for me to accomplish. Sorry, I am late on doing this I just lost one of my dogs this week.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
"A Milky Way Wonder" is a wonderful poem with great rhythm!!! Your rhythm emphasizes the poem's emotions greatly!
I really enjoyed this poem of yours... I use to go out and lay on a blanket in the grass and watch the stars at night and even on a cloudy night, I would see what the clouds would show me lol. But I can no longer lay in the grass to watch the stars and the clouds because of my disability and not being able to get up off the floor/ground by myself anymore lol. Even though I cannot do it that way anymore I can always do these things while sitting in a chair outside lol. It may not be as fun but it's doable.
I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems.
This poem does a great job of having rhythm and telling a great story in your poem. I would love to read more of your poetry soon.
Keep Writing!!!
PS I am also giving out this Review because I gave out a package in my fundraiser that included... 10 Poetry reviews for 1 for winner and 1 each for 9 of your friends. Eyestar won the package and chose you for one of the reviews for me to accomplish. Sorry, I am late on doing this I just lost one of my dogs this week.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
"In His Presence" is a fantastic poem that has great rhythm! Your rhythm in this poem emphasizes the poem's emotions greatly!
I really enjoyed the fifth and sixth stanzas! they are my favorite because in the fifth stanza you say...
"I don’t recall what he said, I remember his tone,
Hearing it, I know we’re not on our own."
and in the sixth stanza you say...
"For the first time, I saw God today.
In amazement, I found myself kneeling to pray."
Yes God is with us where ever we go and all you need to do is to believe that God is with you every day!
I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems.
This poem does a great job of having rhythm and telling a great story in your poem. I would love to read more of your poetry soon.
Keep Writing!!!
PS I am also giving out this Review because I gave out a package in my fundraiser that included... 10 Poetry reviews for 1 for winner and 1 each for 9 of your friends. Eyestar won the package and chose you for one of the reviews for me to do.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
"The sweet sound of Heaven" is a wonderful poem with great rhythm!!!
Your rhythm emphasizes the poem's emotions greatly even though the rhythm of your poem is different.
The main emotional impact is in the second stanza and this stanza is my favorite because of the Whispers in God’s words. “Come to me, I’ll save you and I will give you hope, For with me you shall never be alone. My arm is strong and powerful, full of love and kindness too for I shall not forsake even the poorest of you."
I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems.
This poem does a great job of having rhythm and telling a great story in your poem. I would love to read more of your poetry soon.
Keep Writing!!!
PS I am also giving out this Review because I gave out a package in my fundraiser that included... 10 Poetry reviews for 1 for winner and 1 each for 9 of your friends. Eyestar won the package and chose you for one of the reviews for me to do.
My name is Sharmelle and I'll be reviewing your piece today from Angel Army Review. Thank you for sharing your writing, and I hope this is helpful!
Theme/Subject Matter: "All Hallows Eve" is a wonderful poem with great rhythm!!!
Originality/Creativity: Your rhythm emphasizes the poem's emotions greatly.
Emotion/Impact: The main emotional impact is in the fourth stanza.
My Favorite Part: The third stanza is my favorite because the Goblin was sure no one knew his secret and that was exactly the way he liked it, feeling confident his little trick would work.
My Suggestions: I encountered no distractions. I found no technical problems.
Summary: This poem does a great job of having rhythm and telling a great story in your poem. I would love to read more of your poetry soon.
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