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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Fyn,

I would like to submit my story for consideration.

Deckers Holiday Plans  (13+)
Mr Decker is fed up. He consults a Travel Agency for help.
#1984492 by Shawlyn


Thank you for your time.

Regards and best wishes,

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Maryann,

I would like to make a Level 3 Donation. I hope it helps.

Regards and best wishes,

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Cuckoo,

you have written a straight forward, simple and descriptive style of poem with an amusing twist at the end. It rhymes well. Your imagery is good and the flow is quite natural. Well done and keep it up.

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review of Blood Demon  
Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Crazy Writer,

What a powerful set of images you have put together! You have visually and graphically shown some battle scenes which flow together beautifully. It leaves me asking for more. I want to know more about this character. You have given he/she no name and very little description. Is this the end, or just the beginning? What ever, please continue. GREAT WRITING.

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review of The Ghostly Heart  
Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi Hedoren Yua,

Let me just say, that you have a wonderful writing style. Your imagery is very good and your tongue in cheek, smart alec wizard is a joy to read. Your dialogue captures his character beautifully. I will definitely keep an eye out for more of his adventures. Well done.

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Erina,

I'll get the correction out of the way first; 'I hear begin wailing'. Needs a minor change. As for the rest of the story....... very well written. You have a beautiful style with description and very good with conversation. It flows beautifully. The only problem I have found is that you have left me up in the air. What happens next???

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review of HUNTER'S RUN  
Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi Christian,

What a great read. I hope there is more, before and after. You have done a brilliant job of portraying a man with a mission. A man who will complete it come "hell or high water". You built in the tension right up to the last moment. Will he or won't he make the shot? Well written and I hope there's more.

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Shannon,

Just want to say how much I enjoyed your story. It has a nice steady rhythm and flow to it, which makes it very entertaining. Your main character is well equipped with tricks and magics and you've written it so that everything that happens and is to happen is sewn together neatly. Very well crafted.

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi J.A Buxton,

Congratulations on writing a brilliant spine chiller. Your characters are all well fleshed out and easily imagined. Emotionally charged piece with all hoping that Mary can be saved and the dastardly husband will get his just desserts. But as in real life, not everything is as it should be. Well done. keep writing.

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi S R. Capener,

Just read Springtime Conspiracy and really enjoyed it. Alien perspective, with human emotion. Tugs at the heart stings. Final realisation, great. Reminds me of someone :)
Well done and keep writing. (I'll get around to the others when I get a chance)

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Lyons Valentine,

I have just came across your story. Firstly, I am disappointed that this appears to be only your introduction. Secondly, I think you have done a wonderful job!
Your use of description is very good. The atmosphere you have created is wonderful and scenes are easy to envision.
Please write more!!!

Regards

Shawlyn
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Review of Silicon ticket  
Review by Shawlyn
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Richforce,
Let me compliment you on an enjoyable and entertaining read. The characters are all well drawn and fleshed out. Misinterpretation in the situation that you have presented can be very funny if it is done well and you have. Ben your marvellous mechanical man plays the straight man beautifully. The only fault I can see is that you have cast one of your characters with two names. Miller or Mitchell?Keep on writing.
Regards
Shalyn
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Review by Shawlyn
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Joe 45,
This is a beautiful piece of work. You have managed to pack in a great deal. Your descriptions of all the characters and the set up of scenes were very well handled. I found only one very small problem and that was your use of the plural for Adonis. In one instance you use "Adonises" and in another "Adonii". I have no idea which would be correct. I love the character of Bex Hart and I'm sure she would lend herself to further stories. Alverta, I'm sure could also "dish out" some further insights into the running of the Hart Finder Agency. Good luck with your book release.
Regards
Shawlyn
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Review of LISTENING POST  
Review by Shawlyn
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Christian,
I really enjoyed your story. The characters of Dana and Odin were very well written as was there interaction. Your flashbacks provided a good grounding and back story. Your use of conversation made it very dynamic and intimate for the reader. Your description and action scenes flowed together flawlessly. The ending was very appropriate for the story, but I must admit I enjoyed the characters so much that I would have loved for them and the story to continue further. I will definitely be looking forward to reading more in this series you are planning.
Regards Shawlyn
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