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Review of Longing.  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello ThomasPain . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Longing.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — yearning for something missing in your life — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this is a fine example of it. A good write about your feelings, what you yearn for that is missing from your life. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of your longing, your ardent desire for a special person that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor; nice descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt and introspective. Your need is palpable in this piece. There’s feelings of desolation and anguish, almost despondency that permeates your poem.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“I long to be released from this cage.
Held captive by my choices.” — powerful; vivid descriptive of how powerless you feel in this circumstance you wish to be freed from.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove some of the periods (end stops that seem abrupt in the movement of your poem) and exchange them with commas which allow for the continuation of a thought and will smooth out the flow and rhythm of your piece.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, a good write about your deep emotion, longing for a special love that is expressed with power from beginning to end of your poem. Well penned and a good read. Write on.



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Review of Eyes of Love!  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello Ji pronounced Jeye . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Eyes of Love! in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent —your expectation of love and what it’s not — while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nice use of metaphor in your title.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. You title drew me in to read it and I was not disappointed. A good write that defines how you express/define love, and what it is not. Well crafted verse combining rhyme and free verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoyed.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shade in your words that promote and evoke emotion. You paint a vivid word picture of love’s attribute of truth as contrasted with its opposite of deceit (lies and betrayal) that any reader can understand. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor, nice descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling; personal, heartfelt and introspective. I sense a hurt that has not yet healed. There’s a sense of sadness that permeates this piece. Earnest, grieved and lamentful.

**Rhyme**:
Nice use of rhyme in the first four lines of your poem.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Lust is fleeting,
here and then gone.
The residue of betrayal
sticks hard to the bone.”
— powerful expression of feeling in defining the difference between love and lust. Hard to forgive or forget.Vivid.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, a good write and message about what love is and what it’s not and how a person can be hurt by it. Well penned. Write on!



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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello JM Jr. . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Tick-Tock goes the Clock in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — what or who controls one’s life — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as your imagination’s doorway to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I’m a rhymer and love rhyme and this is a fine example of it. A very good write and message about life and time (which are interwoven), as well as what is its meaning and who ultimately is in control of it. Clever. Well crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are its descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. Yo paint a vivid picture of life and how time affects it as to who is calling the shots in one’s life that any reader can appreciate. I like your use of contrast. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of simile about life - “ Fluid and graceful like notes from a fife”. Good descriptive/comparison.

**{ u}Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling; introspective. Thought provoking. I like the subtle sense of inquisitiveness in living life and the power behind it. Earnest. There’s a sense of time running out on one’s life, so we need to live it to the fullest, something any reader can relate to.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia- (tick-tock). Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“ If fluid and graceful life is not
Do the best with what you got”
— I like these two lines, a truism that all of us need to accept. Life and time are forever connected and these lines complement the theme of the affect of time on life.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will give emphasis to each thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write and thought provoking piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of Just Image  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Yoyo . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Just Image in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — an image of the future — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. (I’m just wondering... did you mean for your title to be “Just Imagine”?)

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a good write about expectations of the future of a relationship. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of a relationship that deepens, to try to excel in it in a different way, enhance it in the future that any reader can appreciate and relate to. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor. Nice use of descriptive/comparisons.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling; there seems to be a subtle sense of change in the relationship, the light of it may not be as bright as it once was, (though it’s still there), but you want to dig deeper and have a fuller relationship, more than before — better, yet different in essentials... stir it up to draw even closer. Heartfelt, introspective and earnest. Hopeful with a bit of whimsy.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Hearts on silenced
Pride on demand
But let’s try one more time
This time for the sentiment, desire and adulation”
— I really like these lines, the power in them; they’re uplifting and hopeful with the expectation for more, better than before... a healthy and growing relationship that is still fresh with a splash of excitement. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to each thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write about your special relationship, the promise of it and how you’d like to make it even better in the future which as a reader I can relate to. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of The Faiths  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Cara . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "The Faiths in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — the power and hope in faith — while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me in to read your poem and I was not disappointed. This is a good write about faith, the power and hopefulness of “The Faiths”. Well crafted rhyming verse which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your heart you paint a vivid picture of the power of faith — through “The Faiths” that any reader can appreciate and relate to. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor and personification. Good use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling; you express faith’s power, its essence for good, how it can be locked up and still do good because each person (heart) holds their own key to faith that will shine through. Uplifting and encouraging. Heartfelt. An earnest and thought provoking message. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is done well. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Strong use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Faiths never give up with wings full of strength
Faiths never tire with no distance too great
No land too far
No mountain too high
No heart too hard”
— Powerful, uplifting and encouraging. Hopeful. These lines capture just how important faith is to the heart in which it resides. Well said.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to each thought expressed as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write. An uplifting message that is hopeful and packed with encouragement. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of question?  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello jen10 . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "question? in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — a query about relationship — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem that acts as a doorway into which you invite readers to walk through it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me in to read it; to see what the question was. I was not disappointed. I love minimalistic poetry and this is a fine example of it. A good write about the difficulty of relationship. A well crafted free write that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Nice imagery and descriptives. Nice color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your heart, you paint a picture about the difficulty in defining a relationship, what kind it is that and reader can appreciate and relate to. I know that I can. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Not applicable in this piece.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. Personal, heartfelt and introspective. You express your confusion on how to define a relationship and the loss from the error in interpreting it, which resulted in the end of a possible friendship. Concerned and earnest. There’s a subtle sense of disappointment and discouragement as well as a feeling of being perplexed. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Nice use of end line rhyme in the first two lines of your poem.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines: because this poem is so short, I like all of the lines. They contribute to the theme and subject in this learning experience in regards to relationships, and the confusion that can be brought into it. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to add a semi-colon at the end of line two and to add a comma at the end of line four. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion as well as express the different thoughts that brought you to your conclusion. This is your poem, use what you may have found helpful in my review, ignore the rest.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write. It is heartfelt and expresses your feeling about a particular relationship that didn’t end as you would have liked. This is something all of us can relate to. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Fall  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello hullabaloo22 . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Fall in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — the nature of what autumn brings — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a good write about fall, its beauty and character. A well crafted double Etheree which I enjoy. Near perfect form (check line nine - has ten syllables, should be nine).

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the Fall season, its uniqueness and beauty that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: I like your use of metaphor. Nice use of personification. Good descriptive/comparisons.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling. There is subtle whimsy about the season that is effective. Colorful. Your descriptions are lively about nature’s workings in the Fall, from its liveliness to its ultimate barrenness and how it affects the wildlife. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Nice use of rhyming in the beginning lines of your poem.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

I especially like the following lines: there were so many but I liked these the best —
“ Nesting, burrowing; a haven
against the world turned hostile.
Soon to be barren land,
a landscape larder
of survival;”
— these lines are so vivid and powerful; a beautiful picture of what occurs in nature during the fall season. Vivid. I can see these images in my mind’s eye. Lovely depth of feeling. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write. It captures autumn’s nature beautifully in this piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of Dragon Poem  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Beholden . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Dragon Poem in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — a master’s opinion of his pet dragon — while at the same time captures the essence of this dragon pet as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like story poems about dragons and this is a fine one. A good write and take on the picture prompt. I really like “Cat”. I think I would have titled the poem that if I’d written it. Imaginative. Clever word play. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your pet dragon, his personality, looks and characteristics that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: I like your use of contrast and descriptive/comparisons. Nicely done.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling; I like the humor. Nicely done. You express the fondness of master for pet beautifully in this piece. Playful, yet earnest. Unique. Good punch line at the end of your poem. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (aabb/ccdd/eeff/gghh). A nice mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of inversion. Nice use of repetition for emphasis on your pet. Nice use of onomatopoeia (meow). Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“ ‘cept life is never pat like that;
I have a dragon whose name is Cat.‘ — I love these lines; I love the humor and the dragon’s name “Cat”. Good use of contrast. You follow through with humor to the end of the poem. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors; there is a typo in line eight (“his” should be ‘is’). No grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write and take on the picture prompt. You did a good job with the poetry form. I enjoyed your poem from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of A Beast Of Flame  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello hullabaloo22 . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "A Beast Of Flame in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — the character of a dragon — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a doorway to your imagination that invites your readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a good write about the personality and life of a dragon. Imaginative. A good take on the picture prompt. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. You paint a vivid picture of this dragon, how he lives and his personality that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: I like your personification of the dragon as he talks about himself and where he lives. You give a good look at his character. Nice descriptive/comparison. Nice use of contrast.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling; you express his powerful personality well throughout this piece. He’s confident, spirited, and comfortable in his own skin. I like the implied sense that he can be dangerous when he needs to be; but then can be just a gentle as a cat. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (aabb/ccdd/eeff/gghh). Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Well done.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (purr). Nicely done.

I especially like the following lines:
“ a touch, a croon, or just a pat
will make of me a pussy cat.” — I think you bring your poem to a great conclusion with these two lines. They’re powerful in showing the soft side of the dragon. I like how you write from his perspective throughout the poem. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write that kept my attention from beginning to end. You did a good job with both the prompt and the form of poetry. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of My Little Friend  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hello Mastiff is a Grinch. . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "My Little Friend in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — life with your pet dragon — while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.


**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me into it because of the picture prompt and I wasn’t disappointed. A good write and take on the picture prompt. Imaginative. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy. Good form.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your life with your very special pet that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Not applicable. I like your use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling; I like the humor of this piece. Playful and animating. I like the friskiness of your pet dragon and the affection you have for him. Very nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (aabb/ccdd/eeff/gghh). A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Well done.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance with nice use consonance. Nice use of repetition that gives emphasis to the character of your pet dragon.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines that I really like, but here are my favorite —
“ From tip to tail within my hand,
Your stature is still very grand.” — I don’t know why, but these two lines resonated with me. I love how you characterize your pet dragon’s personality. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, you did a very good job with the picture prompt and the story that went along with it. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of I rise  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello freespirit . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "I rise in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — overcoming adversity — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal that prepares the reader for what’s to come and to invite them in to it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this is a fine example of it. A very good write and message about what you could change in yourself. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion from your personal observation (the sense of sight). Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of renewal of spirit, from rising from the ashes of the life you could change to become someone new, someone stronger, a better you that any reader can appreciate and relate to. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Very nice extended metaphor that is followed through to the end of your poem. Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Deep expression of emotion; powerful, passionate, heartfelt and introspective. Confident, courageous, liberated and spirited. Change is a powerful thing, and you picture this throughout your poem.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“I fly, but not like a cloud
I'm the eagle that soars in the skies.” — Beautiful, powerful. You express that you are now in control of your destiny. I sense the fearlessness you have gained through your experience and you are now your own person and will call all the shots pertaining to yourself. Well said.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, in line four to add a comma after “form”; at the end of line five add a period and at the end of line six change the period to a comma. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Remember, this is your poem, use what you may have found helpful in my review, ignore the rest.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is powerful, inspirational, and uplifting piece which we can learn from. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of That Feeling!  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)


Hello hullabaloo22 . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "That Feeling! in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — the power of love — while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a doorway that sets the tone of what’s to come, preparing the way for the reader as it invites them into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a very good write that was inspired by the song “Can’t Stop the Feeling”. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a delightful and vivid picture of the joy of love that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor and simile. Good descriptive/comparisons.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling in the expression of joyful love; heartfelt and introspective e. Gleeful satisfaction for this gift of love; playful, energetic and passionate... this is the love that makes one want to dance. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (aa/bb/cc/dd/ee/ff). Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“The beating of my heart gives a rhythm to my feet,
for with that look of love, you've made my happiness complete.” — I love these lines. They sum up the joy of love, how it makes one feel... almost magical as it expresses the theme of this special kind of love.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a delightful write. It kept my attention from beginning to end. It made me want to dance for joy for the ones who have this special love. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Sea  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Hello Sammy . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Sea in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it it its reflection of the theme’s intent — the character of the sea — which at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a good write about the sea that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of sight (observation). You paint a vivid picture of the beauty as well as the danger that the sea can be to the sailors that love her that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Good personification of the sea as female and an enchantress. Nicely done. Good use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Good depth of feeling; you express the character of the sea powerfully, that ‘she’ be dealt with carefully because she is as dangerous as she is beautiful. A cautionary piece that describes her in a dynamic way... for at times she can be monstrous. There is a sense of fascination with the sea throughout your poem. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“She is natures greatest enchantress.
She is man's one true love.” — I like this powerful description of the sea in these lines and the emotions she sets off in men who sail upon her... to woo her if you will, forgetting how dangerous she can also be.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors found. Grammar: just a suggestion to remove “For” at the beginning of line six. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line one; to remove the period at the end of line four and change the period to a comma at the end of line five. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. But this is your poem, use what you may have found helpful in my review, ignore the rest.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of A Gray Dawn  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Kurt Philip Behm . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "A Gray Dawn in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
This is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — winter’s last gasp — while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a doorway inviting readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me in to read this poem. A very good write about winter’s last gasp before spring awakens. Well crafted free verse triplets which I enjoyed.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the las t vestiges of winter (its final blast) before spring arises from its rest that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor. Very nice use of personification of emotions of the winter; good use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful expression of winter’s tenacity; a sense of bitterness and hostility that winter doesn’t want to end its reign. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; strong carefully chosen words (diction) expressing strong emotion and vivid images. Nice use of assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Its blanket lowers
in a shroud of judgment,
its verdict darkly stained” — these are powerfully dark and vivid lines expressing winter’s last judgment to delay spring before it must take its rest; winter’s final death knell for its season.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write, dark, powerful, vivid and emotion packed. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Taste  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello BirdSeedSteve . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Taste in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent — the sense of taste — which at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short poetry and this is a fine example of it. A good write about your favorite sense, taste, and the things that your palate savors. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry that I enjoy that is short, concise and succinct. Nicely done.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of taste. You paint a vivid picture of how intense taste can be especially when eating your favorite foods that any reader can appreciate and relate to. I like your use of contrasts. Nicely done.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. Good depth of feeling in regards to your love of eating. Earnest, heartfelt and introspective. Playful. You express your joy and satisfaction with the different tastes, how you’re drawn to them, how intense they can be and is a sense that everyone should practice regularly because if one doesn’t, they won’t truly understand what they are missing. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is well done as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is your use of alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“I need a lollipop to lick,
A chip to chomp
What a romp
Salty sweet,
Quite a treat.” — I really like the contrasts of the different tastes you describe in these lines as well as the playfulness. It makes one’s tastebuds salivate.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or grammar errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a good write and a fun read. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of "Little Sparrow"  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello The Swarthy Bard . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem ""Little Sparrow" in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A very good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It set the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - God’s never ending care for each person - while at the same times captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. I like the implied feeling of comfort and endearment in your title;

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me to read your poem and it did not disappoint me. This is a beautiful write and message. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a beautiful and vivid picture of God’s loving care of those whom He created that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile:Well executed extended metaphor. Nicely done. Good use of descriptive/comparison and Double Entendre.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing in your poem. Deep expression of emotion; heartfelt, empathic, earnest and encouraging. Edifying to the spirit. Your faith shines through beautifully in this piece. I can relate.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good and the rhyme scheme is nicely done. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. I like how your words express the meaning of the scripture that gave you inspiration for this poem. Well done.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines of your poem that touch my heart, but these are my favorite—
“Whatsoever befalls You
is neither unfelt nor unknown;
know that God cares and calls You
when You're left out and all alone.” — these lines are powerful and filled with hope and comfort, something all of us need at one time or another. The power of trust is vivid in these lines.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a beautiful write and message. It’s uplifting, encouraging and filled with compassion. It touched my heart. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Gives Me Paws  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Hello Baloney Bill . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Gives Me Paws in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. I was intrigued by it. It sets the stage for your poem in its reflection of the theme’s intent - relationship with pet - while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. The title of your poem is unique and drew me in so I just had to read it and it did not disappoint. A very good write about master’s and their pets... how alike they become. I love the word play. Clever and fun. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of master and pet with tongue in cheek that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Good use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling. Love the humor; made me chuckle. Cheerful yet intriguing. Thought provoking (especially since I never really thought about it until now) and yes, I agree, at times their is a resemblance. Comical.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyming is very good as in your rhyme scheme (aa/bb/cc/did). A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Your rhyming couplets are excellent.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is very good as is the use of alliteration. Nice assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines in your poem that I like but these are my favorite -
“At how their looks so much resemble,
Dog to master; it makes me tremble,” — I don’t know why, but these two lines just tickled me. I like how they are a complement to the other lines and carry the theme so well. It struck me as quite funny. I like the subtle comedy of it.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a delightful write. It is fun, humorous and I like how it ended in a question (that’s what focuses the reader on how master and pet came to look so alike) as well as wondering if their personalities are alike as well... just a random thought that occurred to me. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of AUTUMN IS NEAR  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)


Hello Monty . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "AUTUMN IS NEAR in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A lovely title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - endings in seasons and life - while at the same time it captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I was drawn in by your title and was not disappointed. It is a very good write that has several meanings/levels (Double Entendre) and I like that about your poem. Skillfully crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion by sight (observation) and the need for touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the autumn beauty around you as well as the sadness of grieving that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor and descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt and introspective. Mournful and grieving. There’s a subtle sense of loss that permeates this piece; yet there is also a glimmer of hope which comes from your faith in God. Poignant.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (abab/cdcd/efef). A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Very good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Strong use of alliteration, nice assonance and good consonance.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines in this poem that I love (they complement each other), but these are my favorite —
“Autumn is just one of four fine seasons
that by Gods grace is given from above
and is just one more of many reasons
why I wish to rush to the one I love.” — your feelings are expressed so beautifully in these lines, the subtle sense of sadness/loss and the wish to be reunited with your love can be felt and this touches my heart.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is an excellent write, deep with emotion, heartfelt expression of your feelings. It kept by attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of A Blade of Grass  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Baloney Bill . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "A Blade of Grass in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It is the door to the imagination of the poet who writes it and sets the stage for it (the title) in its reflection of the theme’s intent - how one defines beauty, in this case a blade of grass - while at the same time captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Your title drew me to your poem and I wanted to see what you’d present in regards to this blade of grass and I was not disappointed. A very good write about one’s perspective, in the way you see something, in this case a blade of grass in early morning dew... how one can look at it. Clever word play. Well crafted Quatrains that I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of how to see the beauty of morning dew on blades of grass, a great start to one’s day. I like the whimsy expressed at the perspective of the person viewing the scene that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: nice use of metaphor and simile. Good use descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling; earnest, heartfelt and inspiring. Intriguing and thought provoking. There’s a sense of fascination on how one chooses to ‘see’ this grass. I like how one’s “point of view” comes into contention. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice use of free style metered rhyming. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is a nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Lyrical.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines: there are sol many lines that I like, but I think my favorite is—
“Our meadow glitters on and on
as far as we can see,
Like dazzling knights and maidens
in their splendid finery.” — I really like these lines; they’re vivid, poetic, whimsical and uplifting. There’s a feeling of joy implied in these lines that touches my heart. Nicely done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar of punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, I really enjoyed this write. To me it was magical and a positive/inspirational message. It is engaging. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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for entry "Harbor Watch
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Hello Dave . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Harbor Watch in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable for the subject of the poem, a spark of the poet’s imagination. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent — a life at sea — which captures the essence of your poem while at the same time acts as a portal inviting readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love form poetry that rhymes and is short (thus keeps my attention). This poem is a fine example of it. A very good write about a man’s life at sea that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Heroic Rispetto which I enjoy. Perfect form.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of what he sees and hears. You show what kind of life the seamen lives that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye Metaphor/Personification/Simile: nice use of metaphor — “cacaphonic choir of gulls compete”; nice use of personification — the pelican “attitude so quaintly cavalier.” Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very good rhythm and pacing. Well executed iambic pentameter. Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully his reflection of his life at sea; memories he love’s and cherishes as he look back on his life. I like the meditative feel expressed by the aged seaman. He’s immersed in the sounds and movement of the sea, a major part of his life. I like the feeling of contentment he exudes. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme (a-b-a-b / c-c-d-d). Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Lyrical.

**Word Choice**:
Excellent word choice. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines:
“while cacaphonic choir of gulls compete
for smorgasbord of whelks and crabs to eat,” — I love these lines. They’re so vivid and expressive of what occurs when one’s out at sea. I love the sound of them when read out loud. I like this ‘music’ that is part of the nature of the sea. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, the is an excellent write and story of this seasoned seaman that is pictured vividly in this piece and the surroundings that he is still in awe of. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Hello Wolfie von Wolfenstein III . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Low Harvest (Poetry Form: Rictameter) in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - a word picture of a poor harvest (stagnation of life) - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. One of my favorite types of poetry is short form... minimalistic, using few words to tell a story or give a message. This is a fine example of it. A very good write about a neglected field where plants lie dormant; no life sprouting in a place where it should. A skillfully crafted Rictameter. Perfect form. Aesthetically pleasing.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a field that is desolate that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor - “resting place were a cradle”. Nice use of personification. Good use of descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Lovely depth of feeling; one can sense the sorrow felt of this dying field as its life dwindles into obscurity; diminishing, along with a subtle sense of despair. Nicely done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
“Sweet bud of life lying dormant,
would that your resting place were a cradle,” — powerful image with deep sadness expressed so vividly in these lines which is a continuation of the theme expressed in your title. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling, grammar or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write, one that expresses sorrow about a land that has been forgotten and the life within it stagnates. Sad and mournful. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of Mother  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Adam Gill . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Mother in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - a mothers wise advice - while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. From your title, before I even read your poem, it drew me to continue to read and was very satisfied as I read on. This is a very good write, tribute and sage advice from a mother that loves and cares for you. Skillfully crafted rhyming Quatrains which I enjoy. Well done.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. You paint a vivid picture of your mom’s advice and how through it you felt her love and care that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor (“You prepared me for the road ahead”) and simile (“Things will hit you like a stone”). Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. Your love for your mother and her care of you is expressed beautifully in this piece. Heartfelt, introspective, earnest and encouraging, I love this tribute to her teaching moments on how to live life. It shows her devotion to you and your love for her and what she has taught you. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling (“But, now I'm older - now I see). Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines:
“Every pain dissipated with a kiss
Your loving smile I'll always miss
You prepared me for the road ahead
I'll always remember what you said” — I love these lines. They’re powerful and express a loving relationship and respect for her vividly.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to each change of thought as well as make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a beautiful write and tribute to your mom. I love your mother’s wisdom and your respect for it as you live your life... I also like that you’re still working on some of her teachings. The last verse also hit home for me. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Hello 🌙 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Whitechapel Memories in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of this poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - murders most heinous - while at the same time capturing your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a very good write about a historical event most heinous. I like your use of third person narrative in this piece. Well done. A skillfully crafted Decuain which I enjoy. Perfect form.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of sight (observation). You paint a vivid picture of this dark moment in time that any reader can see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Nice use of metaphor. Nice use of personification “swirling mists tread softly” — vivid descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Well executed iambic pentameter. Well done. Good depth of feeling; powerful. Dark, alarming, scary and threatening. Menacing. Fine storytelling.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Well done.

**Word Choice**:
Excellent word choice. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines:.
“A shadow moves. A faceless man retreats
in silence from the scene his blade has drawn;
the signature of hell's own evil spawn.” — beautifully dark and eerie. Vivid descriptions with its scary tones. Well done.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or punctuation errors found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good dark write about the Whitechapel murders that kept my attention from beginning to end. An excellent story poem about this historical event that is well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Review of Spiritual Echoes  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)


Hello Snow Angel . Good day to you.

I am ShelleyA and I am reviewing your poem "Spiritual Echoes in affiliation with our group "The Rockin' Reviewers. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.


**Title**:
This is a beautiful and creative title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - your heartfelt faith - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Well done.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short form poetry and this is a lovely example of it. This is a very good write about your faith in God. A well crafted Choka which I enjoy. Near perfect form - see syllable count in line one (spiritual is four syllables).

**Imagery**:
Good imagery and descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a picture of your relationship with God that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Metaphor/Personification/Simile: nice use of metaphor. Good descriptive/comparison.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Lovely pacing. Deep expression of emotion. Your faith shines in this poem. Earnest, heartfelt and introspective. Your praise, love and thankfulness to God permeates this piece. I love the sense of inspiration and worship that you exude throughout this piece. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry.

**Word Choice**:
Excellent word choice. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice assonance and consonance.
I especially like the following lines: This is a short form of poetry and I love all the lines, but I think my favorites are -
“Spiritual echoes
reverberate through my soul
as I chant God’s name
in the shadows of morning;”. - Powerful. Simply beautiful expression of worship and love for God that touches my heart and soul. ‘Sigh’

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling or punctuation errors are found.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a beautiful write. I wouldn’t change a thing. For me it is a wonderful, uplifting piece. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a review for poetry written by Scott Steven for the poem "Death Came Knocking for the group "The WDC Angel Army. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - a conversation with the grim reaper - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I’m partial to short poetry and rhyme in particular. This is a very good write about a conversation that is short, concise and succinct. It continues the connection expressed in your title’s theme which is followed through to the end of your poem. Nicely done. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and sound (hearing/understanding). Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your ‘visit’ with Death that any reader can relate to and see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Good use of personification of ‘Death’. Well expressed descriptive/comparison which complements your theme beautifully in this piece.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition. Very good rhythm and pacing. It gives a lyrical feel to your poem. It sounds beautiful when read out loud. Lovely depth of feeling. I like the humor in this piece. Clever word play; Hospitable. I like the sense of playfulness in this ‘unique’ conversation. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Your meter is tight. Good job.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; I like the tongue in cheek moment “You looked like Death.” - well played. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice use of dialogue.
I especially like the following lines: there are so many, but I think these are my favorite—
““Why ever did you let me in? Most folks keep me at bay."
I looked him in his hollow eyes to leave in him no doubt,
"You looked like Death." I told him flat. We laughed as he walked out.” — this was for me a perfect ending to the conversation (deadpan humor). I love it.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors found. Grammar and punctuation are fine.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write and an entertaining piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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