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#4496137

Review of When the Lights Go Out

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello E. M. Gale

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "When the Lights Go Out"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - the magic when the lights go out - while at the same time, it captures your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

General/Form/Style:

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and sound/hearing (understanding). You paint a vivid picture of what happens at night when the light goes out as seen through the eyes of a child’s imagination that any reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of simile - ‘They vanish like melted snow’. Good descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; like the dream-like quality of your piece; there’s an enchantment feel throughout your poem that I enjoyed very much. Well done.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts and feelings.

I especially like the following lines:
“When we are asleep
And all is still
When not a person moves
And crickets chirp

They dance” - I love how this expresses the fun children have when the adults are asleep; it’s the sense of imagination in a dreamworld where only children find joy to participate in.

Overall:

This is a delightful write. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4496125

Review of A Mark Left Behind

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Zeke

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Mark Left Behind"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting your theme’s intent - a beauty in nature - while at the same time capturing its essence which acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

General/Form/Style:

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic devices. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (power of observation). You paint a vivid word picture of this tree that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very good rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

I love the extended metaphor which is beautifully done; good personification “searching the heavens with sightless eyes” and “when its dress was verdant shades of green” - lovely. Good use of descriptive/comparisons.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; an inspirational piece in its message of leaving one’s mark in the world like this stately tree in nature. Well done.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to remove the semi-colon at the end of lines one and three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines: there are so many lines that I’m drawn to, but these are my favorite —
“When its dress was verdant shades of green
Its lifeblood flowed freely but unseen” - a beautiful descriptive of a life in its fullness. Love it.

Overall:

This is a wonderful write. I enjoyed its message from beginning to end. I love the sense of hopefulness in leaving one’s mark whether in nature or in our own lives. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4495703

Review of Snow's Writing for 2019, 2020, & Beyond

for entry "The Flame of Faith: Rictameter"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Flame of Faith: Rictameter"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - faith- while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. I also like your use of alliteration. Nicely done.

General/Form/Style:

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic devices. Good color and shading in your words to promote and evoke emotion. You paint a vivid picture of faith that any reader can understand and appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice use of extended metaphor; vivid descriptive/comparisons. Well done.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Your word picture defines faith beautifully throughout your poem. Heartfelt. Your faith shines brightly in this piece. A lesson that teaches its readers the essence of true faith.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is very good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Good use of repetition for emphasis of your thoughts that define faith. No spelling errors found.

I especially like the following lines — I love all the lines, but the first 5 lines nailed it for me:
“Faith's flame
within our lamps
burns bright, illuminates
with its splendor our darkest nights.
We trim the wicks with our supplications,” — this is a powerful and vivid metaphor on faith that touches my soul.

Overall:

I love this poem from beginning to end. This word picture is one that I will keep in my heart. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4495466

Review of Your arms

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Melody Cadence Clark

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Your arms"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting your theme’s intent - one of safety and care - while at the same time capturing its essence by acting as a portal to invite readers into it.

General/Form/Style:

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke emotion. You paint a picture of love and healing that any reader can appreciate and relate to.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and enjambment. Well paced.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Nice internal rhyme in line eleven.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You feelings of love and care that this person in your life brings you permeates this piece. Hope exudes as your hurt and pain is released. I can relate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to use commas at the end of natural pauses which will also give emphasis to a thought or feeling and shall make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
“Your words offer the comfort I've craved
the world seems right again
when I am in your arms.
No more tears, and no more fears
You bring the light I lost” — you express your feelings beautifully and powerfully in these lines.

Overall:

A very good write. Your poem kept my attention from beginning to end. A touching and encouraging piece. Well penned. Write on!

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#4495340

Review of My Poetic Latticework

for entry "Write!"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dave

}. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Write!"

Title:

A good title that suits the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting your theme’s intent and at the same time captures its essence as an aid to draw readers into it. Nicely done.

General/Form/Style:

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. Nice use of poetic devices. Good use of color and shade in your words to promote and evoke emotion. You paint a picture that any writer and reader can appreciate.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good use of simile as is the use of descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Not applicable in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. This is a heartfelt teaching moment that I can relate to very well. You express the examples with clarity that any writer can appreciate.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
“Connect physical matter
with spiritual truth
so audience can
engage with ease.” - love these line; deep, powerful and so true.

Overall:

A well crafted piece that I enjoyed from beginning to end. It has so much wisdom about the
art of writing, how to hone your skills while at the same time entertain your readers. Well penned. Write on!

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#4494982

Review of 52 Flavors of Poetry

for entry "Sky Flowers - Form: Rictameter"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Gang's Monthly Review Board"

. "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Sky Flowers - Form: Rictameter"

Title:

A very good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage beautifully for this short form and reflects the theme beautifully.

General/Form/Style:

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a vivid picture of this spectacular display that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Good use of simile as is the descriptive/comparison “An amazing bouquet, in a new guise,
as flowers of the sky arise” - love it.

Rhyme:

Rhyming is very good. Excellent use of masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Well done.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You capture the excitement of the display beautifully in this piece and that can be difficult when writing in short form. Great job!

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good. Nice use of alliteration, strong assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion - I don't think you need a comma after ‘eyes’ at the end of line two (but this is just my opinion).

I especially like the following lines:
“An amazing bouquet, in a new guise,
as flowers of the sky arise
amidst astonished cries” — the description is simply beautiful

Overall:

A wonderfully executed Rictameter and a delightful write. It resonated with me and is a most enjoyable read.
Well penned. Write on!

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#4494698

Review of I Blog Poetry and Prose

for entry "Overcome Arachnophobia"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi Snow. You express your fear well in your blog post. I can relate to this fear. Spiders make me nervous and your descriptions of how you feel are vivid. Well done.
Shelley

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#4225804

Review of Nature Ballet

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (3.5)

I like the title, It suits the theme of your poem. It sets the stag for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to draw readers into it. Nicely done. A nice write. Imaginative. A good attempt at a Trilonnet. Your rhyme scheme is correct as is your syllable count; but the poem is supposed to be written in iambic tetrameter and this poem does not follow that rhythm. Good imagery and descriptives. Flow is nicely done. Nice line to line transition and breaks. Rhyme is good and you follow the scheme for this form. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Good depth of feeling. Nice word choice. I especially like your closing couplet. Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#4225799

Review of Chain Soul

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

A good title that is suitable to the subject of our poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures your poem's essence as it acts as a portal to draw readers into it.

A very good write about a dark soul. A nicely crafted Octameter, near perfect form (check line 7 in first stanza; it has 6 syllables should be 5 syllables. In the second stanza check line 2; it has 6 syllables, should be 5 syllables.) Good imagery and descriptives. Flow and line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Rhyming is nicely done. Good depth of feeling. Dark. Nice word choice. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. I especially like these lines:
"Darkness, overwhelms,
Consumed with despair" - powerful expression of emotion.
Overall I liked your poem. It is nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.*rose*

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#4174171

Review of Turkey Day

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Good day to you Tim Chiu

. My name is Shelley and this review is for your poem "Turkey Day"

. This is a micro-review for the group "The WDC Angel Army"

. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

Title:
"Turkey Day" is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures your poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, and rhyme (in particular) is a favorite with me. A good write and message about what thanksgiving means to you that is heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. Nice use of color and shading in your words to promote and evoke feeling through sight, scent and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a warm picture of love, family and fellowship on this special holiday of giving thanks for hearth and home that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good. line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff gghh. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express affection for family and friends on this special day of thankfulness, togetherness and celebration of this holiday, away from the distractions, troubles and dangers that still affects others in the world where joy and hope seems to go unseen.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the blessings shared on this holiday. Nice use of alliteration with good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the semi-colon to a comma at the end of line one; remove the comma at the end of line three and remove the period at the end of line six. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. I especially like the following lines:
"A hearty meal, and folks' applause,
With gratefulness, its major cause." - these two lines carry the spirit of the reason for giving thanks for blessings received that is expressed throughout your poem and which any reader can relate to.

**Overall**

This is a lovely message that begins our holiday season, one of gratitude and well wishes to those we care for. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4134552

Review of Moonbeams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello turtlemoon-dohi

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Moonbeams"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I'm partial to short poems and if it rhymes, that's icing on the cake for me of which this is a good example of it. A good write about the beauty and romance gifted to us by the moon as it showers down upon those who gaze upon it that is heartfelt. Good use of brevity. A well crafted free style metered rhyming Quatrain that is short, concise and succinct and I enjoyed it very much.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and its ambiance. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the sparkling moonbeams that shower down at night; its warmth and beauty that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of light; it dances and gives "honor"; winged specks "sway and swoon" - good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; I like the whimsy and subdued power of romance expressed in your poem. Magical, with a sense of charm and delight. I can relate.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the power of the moon and its beams that it showers down upon us each night.

~Overall:
I really like the romance that permeates this short piece. Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4134548

Review of Tree in Spring

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Cubby~Cheering House Florent!

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Tree in Spring"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Its sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry and am partial to any form poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write about trees in spring; their strength and beauty that is heartfelt. Good presentation; aesthetically pleasing. A skillfully crafted Prime poem; perfect form, which I enjoyed very much.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound and scent. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the strength and power of the tree in springtime and its ability to stand tall to whatever weather is thrown at them that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good personification of branches of the tree: they "laugh" and has "arms" and "fragile fingers"; good use of simile: "Petals bloom like an artist's brush" and "bees hover impatiently like golden jewels" - good descriptive/comparisons.

~Rhyme:
Nice use of internal rhyme in line six (avail, gale); in line seven (tree, ready) and in lines six and seven (avail, prevail).

~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your appreciation of the strength and beauty of the tree in nature in the spring season. Delightful with a sense of enchantment; jubilant and keen.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this beauty. Strong use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following line(s):
"Fragrant buds, bursting forth color, offer the branches a new air for spring." - I love this line. I love the beauty it expresses about new life that comes in spring. Nicely done.

~Overall:
I love your characterization of the tree and its branches - its beauty in nature that you capture throughout your poem. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4134536

Review of The Lemon Tree

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Cubby~Cheering House Florent!

. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Lemon Tree"

for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board"

~Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I'm partial to rhyme and this is a good example of it. A very good write about your love and appreciation for lemons and the tree that bears them that is heartfelt and introspective. Good presentation. Well crafted free style metered Triplets which I enjoy.

~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and taste. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the many ways that lemons are used as a drink, as dessert, as an herbal medicine to soothe a cough and so much more that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This device is not applicable in this piece.

~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaa bbb ccc ddd eee. A good mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

~Tone:
Good depth of feeling that's light and upbeat. You express how much you like lemon trees and the fruit it bears beautifully in this poem. Amusing and appreciative. Cheerful with a sense of delight. I like your enthusiasm for the lemon and your fondness for its many uses that any reader can relate to.

~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the lemon. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Frozen, powdered, sometimes grated
Tarty taste is loved or hated" - I love these lines; how they sound when read out loud and that the theme of these lines is carried throughout the poem.

~Overall:
I like the taste and scent of lemon and appreciate this tribute to this tree that is expressed so well from the beginning to the end of your poem. Very good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4133503

Review of Stop

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by ~my heart is made of words~

for the poem "Stop"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I'm partial to rhyme and this is a good example of it. A very good write and message about how we should take time and really see the beauty that is around us that is heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound, scent and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the beauty in the world to be seen, heard and touched in nature that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme is executed well in this piece (sky, by); (around, ground); (air, there). Nicely done.

Lovely depth of feeling. Hopeful, uplifting and encouraging. You give us good advice of taking time to "stop and smell the roses" - to take time out of our busy schedule to enjoy and appreciate the beauty of life that is around us. Your appreciation of this beauty permeates this piece. I can relate.

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia (chirping, buzzing). Nice use of the rhetorical question. Good use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period at the end of line one to an ellipsis (...); change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line four and change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line twelve. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion. The lines I like the best are:
"The world is beautiful.
There is no reason to give up on it." This is the theme that is expressed from the beginning to end of your poem. There is beauty in nature to be seen if we will take time to look for it.

**Overall**

A lovely write that shows us the importance of seeing the world around us... seeking inspiration through it to bring us hope and joy. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4133487

Review of RAINING IN THE GARDEN

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Mary Ann MCPhedran

for the poem "RAINING IN THE GARDEN"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's intent as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most forms of poetry but I'm partial to minimalistic (short) poems, especially if they include rhyme as this one does. A good write about a thirst quenching rain that gives life and beauty to a garden that is heartfelt. Good use of brevity. A nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this lovely garden during and after a rain that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is nice; line to line transition is nicely done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabcddcc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines one, two, four through eight that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line two (rain, again).

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of this garden that is uplifting. There's an implied sense of hope and delight that the rain makes the garden more lively and beautiful inspired by nature.

Word choice is nice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the importance of rain on growing things in a garden. Nice use of onomatopoeia (pita pata). Nice use of inversion in line eight (garden bright). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion. Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme about how rain gives life and beauty to a garden. Nicely done.

**Overall**

I like the images expresses in this garden. The sounds and sights in this garden is well expressed. Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4133005

Review of Green Peas at Stake

for entry "Pinwheel"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Joy

for the poem "Pinwheel"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done!

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I'm partial to minimalistic poetry of which this piece is a fine example. A very good write about the beauty of autumn in a form I created. Very good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Triquain that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect 3/6/9/12/9/6/3 syllabic form.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the majestic coloring of leaves on an autumn day that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye,. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Good personification of branches and leaves - "painted arms twirl with joy,"; of the sun "waltzing". Very good use of simile: "the sun --like a conjurer’s coin--" very good descriptive comparisons.

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your joy of autumn beautifully in this piece. Whimsical and magical. Your love of this season permeates the poem. I can relate.

Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (hum). No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line two. It's not needed and this will make the flow and rhythm of the following line even better in my opinion. Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the piece because they contribute to the powerful image you project in the subject/theme of autumn in your poem. Well done!

**Overall**

You capture the magic of autumn from the beginning to end of your poem. Excellent closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4124307

Review of This House, Our Home

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Turtle ~ KanyáthƐko:wa:h

for the poem "This House, Our Home"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time, it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nice use of alliteration in your title. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I do love minimalistic (short) poetry of which this is a fine example. This is a very good write about what makes a house a home that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of what a home is in your heart that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nice use a metaphor "in a home, you hang your heart" - a good descriptive/comparison. Nice use of masculine end line rhyme in lines six and eight (true, you).

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of home through love and family through the contrast between a house and home. I like the sense of contentment and enthusiasm in the love of your home that permeates this piece. I like the subdued happiness that is implied throughout the poem. Open and optimistic about your home life. I like how you express the pride you have in your home life that any reader can relate to.

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about what truly makes a home. Good use of alliteration and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma (and/or period or semi-colon) at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. There are so many lines I really like in your poem, but I think this line sums up your thoughts about home and family:
"In a home, you hang your heart" - this line is powerful, true and expresses how love is the making of home and family.

**Overall**

A beautiful write about love, family and how a house becomes a home due to the love therein. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4124288

Review of Figuring out the balance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by marts for the poem "Figuring out the balance"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry and short poems are a favorite of mine. A very good write and message; a picture of how people meet each other, make friends at a time when there is a need that needs to be met for a time or season that is heartfelt. Encouraging and thoughtful. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Lovely depth of feeling; you express beautifully reasons why people come together to affect change within one another's lives. I like the subdued power throughout the poem. Excellent use of contrasts. Caring and compassionate. Earnest, kind and hope filled. This is a lovely picture of balance in life that brings contentment. Nicely done.

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line three and to change the period to a comma at the end of line four. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion. Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines of the poem. Each line contributes to the subject/theme of friendship... people brought together to fulfill needs so that we can live a balanced life as seen through the contrasts and how they are aided by others that is expressed beautifully in this piece.

**Overall**

This is a beautiful lesson of how people touch each other's lives. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4124276

Review of Jolted

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Turtle ~ KanyáthƐko:wa:h

for the poem "Jolted"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

This is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I'm partial to minimalistic poems of which this is a fine example. A very good write about bad dreams; nightmares that are painful and surreal upon waking that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Shadorma, perfect 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely within this piece. Good color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through pain. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of fear from awaking from nightmares that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Nice use of internal rhyme in line five (unaware, where).

Good depth of feeling. You express how disorienting and disturbing bad dreams can be; how they can be scary and cause you fear upon waking from the darkness of them that is cold, agitating and alarming.

Good word choice, nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Just a suggestion, to change the period at the end of line five to an ellipsis (...). I think this will give more emphasis to your thought, a bit of suspense drawing out the moment. Because this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of bad dreams and the resulting fear in wakefulness that is expressed powerfully from the beginning to end of your poem.

**Overall**

You paint a powerful picture of the affect of nightmares upon you. Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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#4120782

Review of Springtime Jubilee

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Dave

for the poem "Springtime Jubilee"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

This is a good title that suits the subject o your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, and forms that include rhyme and meter are a favorite of mine and this is a fine example of it. A very good write about rebirth in springtime after a long winter that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and uplifting. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Ottawa Rima. Perfect form.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through scent, sight, sound and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the rebirth of spring; of new life awakening after a long hard winter that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Good execution of iambic pentameter. Nice personification of nature as "mother" - good descriptive/comparison. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abababcc. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Lovely depth of feeling. Encouraging, hopeful and optimistic. Upbeat and blissful. You express your pleasure with the season, how it is revitalizing to you, beautifully in this poem. I can relate.

Word choice is good; nice use of question for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Since this is a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of rejuvenation and new life that springtime brings that is uplifting to the spirit.

**Overall**

A lovely message of hope and renewal that comes with spring. Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on

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#4120741

Review of Nature's Grace

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Dave

for the poem "Nature's Grace"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

This is a good title that is suitable for the title of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a port to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but if it is a form and includes rhyme, for me that's icing on the cake. A very good write about how hard it is to try to capture the beauty and grace in nature with the written word by a poet that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and thought provoking. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Trois-par-Huit. Perfect syllabic form.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a word picture that can never really do it justice in capturing a beautiful moment of nature's grace, created by God that any reader can appreciate.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nice personification of hummingbirds, they "mock" - good descriptive/comparison. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbbccc. A nice mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully that the written word on a page can never do justice to the grace in nature that God creates and bestows for us to see and enjoy... the vibrancy of it loses its power when transposed on paper which the poet cannot capture in its totality.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line two. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion. I especially like the following lines:
"the beauty of a bird flitting before a rose
to the page, but cannot capture what God bestows." - this is the essence of your poem. The written words of a poet cannot capture the true beauty and vibrancy we see in nature of God's creation... the grace of it is in actually being in it and seeing it.

**Overall**

There is beauty in words, but it only can go so far... we can write a word picture of what we see in nature, but it is never as vivid as the original. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4120719

Review of The Curse of February

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Dave

for the poem "The Curse of February"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but I'm partial to form and rhyme of which this is a good example. A very good write about winter's grasp of cold, snow and ice as you wish for spring that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Amphion. Perfect form.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and temperature. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of frigid weather, lots of snow and ice that has taken hold and doesn't seem to want to let go that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Good execution of iambic tetrameter (lines one, four, seven, ten) and iambic dimeter (lines two, three, five, six, eight, nine). Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abbaccdeed. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Good depth of feeling; you express the extreme cold with power; there's a sense of exasperation that permeates your poem as well as a longing for the winter to end and for spring to begin; something any reader can relate to.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about winter. Good use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion. Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of a bitterly cold, snowy and icy winter during February that is holding you in its grip. Powerful imagery.

**Overall**

You've captured the "glacial" aspect of winter that seems to hang on (especially in the month of February) beautifully in your poem. Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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#4119318

Review of The Buck

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by turtlemoon-dohi

for the poem "The Buck"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry and this is a favorite. A very good write about your early morning encounter/sighting with a buck that is heartfelt and introspective. Awe inspiring. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your "meeting" with a buck in early morning as he stood majestically before you gave him right of way to cross the road that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Nice personification of the buck, he "nodded farewell" - good descriptive/comparison. Nice use of masculine end line rhyme in lines five and seven (way, day) and lines eleven and thirteen (stood, wood). Nice use of internal rhyme in lines two and three (he, me).

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of this special moment between you and this buck... the respect that you bestow upon each other with this chance meeting in nature. There is a sense of admiration that permeates this piece. Earnest and fascinating.

Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line two and to change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion. My favorite lines are:
"Out of awe and respect,
I gave him the right of way" - I like the subdued power of these lines... the underlying esteem and respect expressed by you to this beautiful creature in nature; a respect between man and animal that is seen throughout your poem. Nicely done.

**Overall**

I loved how you captured this powerful moment. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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#4119300

Review of The Trail

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Cubby~Cheering House Florent!

for the poem "The Trail"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

This is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing your poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, and short form in particular of which this is a good example. A very good write about the change of season and walking out in nature that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. A well crafted Triolet, a form that I enjoy.

Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a viivid picture of hiking as winter is on the wane and spring is budding that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ABaAabAB. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision ib this piece.

Good depth of feeling. You express your nature walk as refreshing and uplifting as spring awakens. Pleasurable and relaxing exercise as you enjoy budding spring. I can relate.

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling as well as the device that drives this form of poetry. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line two and add a comma at the end of line five. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Since this form of poetry is so short, I like all the lines of it because they contribute the subject/theme of changing seasons from winter to spring and enjoying the beauty in nature while out on a walk.

**Overall**

I like the feeling of peacefulness in the beauty you see while you're out walking. Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Miss Bessie

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a micro-review for poetry written by Cubby~Cheering House Florent!

for the poem "Miss Bessie"

for the activity "King's Landing updating "

Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a port inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, but short form that rhymes is definitely a favorite of mine and this is a fine example of it. A very good write about Miss Bessie the cow and her dream of eating beef that is short, concise and succinct. I love the humor. Imaginative. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Limerick which I enjoy that is executed in perfect form.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of this cow's funny dream in which a leprechaun gives her good advice about what she should be dreaming about and what she should steer clear of that any reader can appreciate.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice use of rhythm. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Good depth of feeling; amusing and fun. Comical. You're a good storyteller. Nicely done.

Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. Now spelling or punctuation errors found. Because this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of a cow's poor choice of eating habits in her dream.

**Overall**

I like the quirkiness of this piece. Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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