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Review of Change of Season  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is is a micro-review for poetry written by Bandit's Mama for the poem "Change of Season"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"Change of Season" is a very good title for this piece. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet who loves reading, writing and creating form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and rhyme is a personal favorite of which this is an excellent example. I love springtime and this is a beautiful write about this season. It's a delightful read and is so vivid that you can see the images that the poet captures and portrays through her words. The rhyming is excellent and I just love the rhythm. The sound is beautiful when read aloud. I love the subtle personification of Spring.. she touches the world around us so that we can revel in it. It's beautifully done. There is lovely depth of feeling; the reader can sense a feeling of renewal and rebirth, a joy one can find in life just by taking it in. The verse is elegant with good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. There are so many wonderful lines in this piece, but I think these are my favorites:

"She warms the earth and brightens the sky,
Lifting the hearts of those passing by." - These lines capture Spring's aura beautifully and it is carried through from the beginning to end of the piece.

**Overall**

I loved every line and image portrayed by her words. Well penned and a most enjoyable read.

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Review of City Sorrow  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is is a micro-review for poetry that was written by Bandit's Mama for the poem "City Sorrow"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"City Sorrow" is an excellent title for this piece. It sets the stage for the poem in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures its essence acting as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. Although I'm a formalist poet who reads, writes and creates form poetry, I do love most styles of poetry and rhyming poetry is definitely a favorite. This is a very good write about this writers feelings about living in a big city... the loneliness of it; its sometimes feeling almost like a prison. This is a heartfelt and introspective piece that is short, concise and succinct. It is skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy. The imagery and descriptives are well done. Through the poets eyes we view the contrast between city life, its dreariness with a sense of almost suffocating there and that of living in a place where nature grounds you, gives one a sense of peacefulness and freedom when you can commune there. I think these lines say it all, and they are my favorites in this piece:

"I long for the fresh breath of trees
And sunshine, mountains, and clouds." - I love these lines, the hope and joy they express is powerful.

**Overall**

This is a delightful poem. I love the hopefulness of it, how getting back to nature and away from the rat race uplifts the spirit. This is a well crafted piece and a most enjoyable read.

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Review of Colored World  
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello revdbob . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Colored World"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme' intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, but I've always been partial to rhyme and this is a fine example of it. A very good write about how you see the world; the color it paints in your life and thoughts that are heartfelt and introspective. Inspirational and encouraging. Good use of brevity. Good presentation. Well crafted free style metered Rhyming Couplets that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through inner pain, sight and temperature. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the world in all of its faces, humanity and nature that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice metaphor about the world in your use of many colors that direct emotions that are fed by what happens in the world. Good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line five (me, see) and in line twelve (bright, light). Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. Your faith in the Lord shines brightly in this piece. Hopeful and uplifting. Lovely words of praise and adoration for the Savior who brings the true color of the world through His rainbow of love. I love the implied sense of compassion and contentment that you express in this piece. Earnest with a sense of optimism that lifts the spirit. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about how you see and live in the world. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Grammar: just a suggestion to change the tense of "light' to 'lights' in line seven. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a period at the end of line six; in line seven remove the comma after "fail"; remove the period after "sadness" in line ten; add a comma after "wrongs" in line eleven; change the semi-colon at the end of line twelve to an ellipsis (...) and remove the comma at the end of line thirteen. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Some days the world is colored blue
By sadness. But its cure is You!" - I love these lines. In these lines is your powerful statement of faith in the Lord that is implied throughout the poem. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing couplet. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Fantasies  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Gnomeranger . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Fantasies"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, but I've always been partial to rhyme of which this is a fine example. A very good write about your long ago dreams; children's dreams for what they will grow up to be someday that is heartfelt and whimsical. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered Rhyming Poetry that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye and imagination you paint a vivid picture of children's hopes for tomorrow, the beauty and magic that they dream of for their lives that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of fantasy, it can speak, "call" to a person. Good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb cdd eeaf. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line ten (me, fantasy).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the longing for recapturing these childhood dreams, being attentive to them by listening for them. Poignant, anxious yet hopeful. There is a sense of magic that is implied throughout the poem, a magic that even an adult still watches out for that is endearing. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration,
nice assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Their fantasy has left them behind.
Is it lost among the memories?" - These are powerful lines and are my favorites in this poem. Dreams never really fade away; we always sense them hidden deep within us, hoping that one day they will arise, a theme that is carried throughout your poem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Portraits  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Sharon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Portraits"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite the reader into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry although I am partial to rhyme and short poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write about the beauty and sadness of the rockiness of relationship of lovers as seen through the temperament of the sea that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Skillfully crafted Rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the raging power of love between lovers and how love can be broken that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Good execution of iambic tetrameter. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the sea as "angry" and its "face" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one (be, me) and in line eight (tear, there). Nice internal rhyme in lines seven and eight (air, tear). Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; romantic and poignant. I like the understated passion and feeling of loss when love ends. Emotional, fervent with a touch of lamentfulness.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the semi-colon at the end of line one; change the semi-colon at the end of line four to a period and add a comma at the end of line six. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the line of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the peaks and valley's in a lover's relationship that meets a sad end.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Spring  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Sharon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Spring"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, and I'm partial to rhyme of which this piece is a fine example. A very good write about the beauty of awakening spring that is heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming tercets which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of budding spring as winter slowly fades where there is a contrast between winter's chill and spring's warmth that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile: a passing breeze is "like winter's freeze" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaa bbc dee fff. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; I like the sense of renewal expressed that is uplifting as spring takes hold and winter fades. The beauty of the season, the budding flowers implies new life and renewal that comes with the season that lightens the heart through its beauty. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the spring awakening. Nice use of inversion. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Spring's arrived, but winter stays
to cool the air for those who play
and gaze upon spring's bright display." - These are my favorite lines. They express the spirit of spring, its beauty as new life begins to blossom that is the theme of this piece. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Autumn Concert  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello turtlemoon-dohi . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Autumn Concert"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, and am partial to short rhyming poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write about the music of the autumn season, its beauty and richness of the woodlands that is heartfelt and whimsical. Good use of brevity. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the rhythm, melody and movement seen in a forest, a palette of rich rainbow colors conducted by the autumn season that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of trees, "songs sung" by them; of fall: composes "ballads"; of leaves, notes that "serenade"; of winds that "whistle" and of foliage dancing, a "ballet whirling, spiraling and spinning" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccddee. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty and elegance of the fall season as seen in the woodlands through a symphony of color and dance, an expression of the autumn winds and sunshine painting the leaves and foliage through nature's artistry that is amazing, filled with charm that gives delight to those who see its richness. One can sense the enchantment in its orchestration. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (whistle). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Bronze, gold, and red notes serenade a harvest moon,
While autumn winds whistle a woodland tune." I love these lines. I like the powerful imagery. It is a beautiful expression of the lyrical melodies orchestrated through a burst of color by nature that is vivid and vivacious. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Tim Chiu . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Holiday Season Is Upon Us" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love reading, writing and creating form poetry. I also love most styles of poetry, and I'm partial to rhyme of which this piece is a good example. A very good write about the holidays, the excitement and cheer, spending time with family and friends showing love and kindness to others that is heartfelt and inspirational. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feelings through sight and scent. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the holiday season; the beauty, wonder and love shared as Christmas nears that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line five (to,do).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express joy, happiness, mirth and love in this season of celebration. Cheerful and bright; you show your warmth and delight beautifully in this piece that any reader can relate to. Well done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the holidays. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line seven; remove the comma at the end of line eleven and add a comma after "innocence". This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"The most worthy of loves and sweet kindness, this season,
With happiness, warmth, and much merriment, the reason;" - I love these lines. They capture the joy and love of the celebratory season, a theme which is expressed throughout your poem. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Until  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Richard A. Webster . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Until" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love reading, writing and creating form poetry. I also love most styles of poetry; and I'm partial to short poetry, especially if it rhymes and this is a good example of it. A very good write about love, growth and acceptance when one waits for the real thing that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of love, its changes; its ebb and flow, at times waiting for it patiently knowing that it will come that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of simile: losing a friend "as tides that rise and bend" - good descriptive comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabcddee. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines five, six and seven (see, me,we). Good job.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; I like the understated power of love in its ebb and flow... it's always there, growing deep under the surface if you will wait for it. Earnest and hopeful. I like the intensity of the feeling and optimism that permeates the poem from beginning to end.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "tides" in line one; to change the comma to a period at the end of line two; change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line four and remove the comma at the end of line six. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short piece, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of love's growth in a person's life that any reader can relate to.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Drake Stonesoul . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Where Have All the Eagles Gone?" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love reading, writing and creating form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and rhyme is a particular favorite of mine and this one is a fine example of it. A good write, message and prayer to the Father about mankind's destruction of our resources and the loss of peace and balance in our lives that is a consequence of poor care of this place in which we live. Heartfelt, spiritual and thought provoking. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and temperature. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of a cry to the ancestors for peace that is nowhere to be seen, in a world that seems to be dying due to our misuse of it, its people and resources that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. I also like the call and response in the first stanza. Well done.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor to our lack of being warriors "where have the eagles gone" and in regards to unrest "we live not in peace but by demon swords" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccdd efgghhii ba. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in lines two and three (sky, why); line three (why, dry) and in lines four, five and six (dry, why, my).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. You express your anguish, anxiety and sadness of our failings in caring for the earth in which we live and the instability in the world, the lack of our need to be warriors to bring peace and balance in our lives. A powerful cry to the ancestors, for help? to somehow gain what we now lack? Poignant, yet with bitter expression of disappointment about the way things are and the lack of hope that things can change.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this lack of peace in us and in the world. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a period at the end of line four; to add a comma at the end of line seven; add a period at the end of line eight; add a semi-colon at the end of line nine; add a period at the end of line ten; add a comma after "tears" in line twelve; add a period at the end of line twelve; add a question mark at the end of line thirteen and add a period at the end of line fourteen. This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, just a suggestion to change the tense of the word "don't" to 'doesn't' in line four.

I especially like the following lines:
There are so many lines in this prayer/poem that I like but these are my favorites,
"We live not in peace but by demon swords
A fire burns in our hearts but not for love" - They are powerful and show the disconnect we have in life when there is no peace or balance in it, where love has disappeared and is no more.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. I like how you close with the first line, the question that permeates all your thoughts expressed throughout the poem. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello turtlemoon-dohi . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Turtlemoon Blessing" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love reading, writing and creating form poetry. Also, a favorite for me is short poetry of which this is a fine example. A good write, message and blessing to one's journey in life that is heartfelt and inspirational. Very good use of brevity. Skillfully crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling about one's personal walk. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a picture of the blessing of life that is fulfilling that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice use of masculine end line rhyme in lines one and four (song, strong).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; prayerful. Hopeful, encouraging and uplifting. Beautiful words of thanksgiving and praise for one's spiritual and physical journey that is edifying, optimistic and warm. A generous and kindhearted blessing to celebrate one's life in their own way. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about one's personal journey in life. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short piece, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the blessing and celebration of life. I love the sense of joyfulness as we "dance" to our own drum. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Ben Langhinrichs . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Shaken, Not Stirred" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
Although titles aren't usually used in this Japanese form of poetry, it is applicable to use the first line of the poem. A title for single haiku, in general, is not a requirement. Usually they are untitled and are either numbered or dated. A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. I like the cleverness and alliteration used in the title. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I'm partial to minimalistic poetry, and Japanese short form in particular of which this is a good example. A very good write about the beauty seen in fall on a windy day where leaves lose their tenuous hold on its branches. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Traditional Haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the chilly winds of autumn blowing in strength as leaves get caught in its clutches that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done very well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; you express the characteristics of the autumn season; its temperature, beauty and change in nature. I like the cleverness of the aha moment in line three It is a very short fleeting moment in which I caught a glimpse of what I would call the 'world harmony,' this relationship that is seen through its cause, being autumn, and its affect on nature, through its chilly winds in which leaves are carried away through its power. A vivid image seen in a snapshot that any reader can relate to.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the strong use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the subject/theme of an autumn day that is vivid and powerful. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Heavenly Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Kings . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Heavenly Life" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme's intent while at the same time capturing your poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Also, I'm partial to short poetry and especially if it rhymes as this one does. A good write about the one you love and the blessing she has become in your life that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling, the peacefulness and beauty that her love brings you. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of this wonderful blessing of love, God's gift to you in this special person in your life that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of simile: life is "like heaven everyday" and metaphor: she is a "sweet angel" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. You express your deep love and affection for her beautifully in this poem. I like the understated passion of your feelings for her that is powerful and is implied throughout your poem. I like the blissfulness of this precious gift from God which she is to you that you express that any reader can relate to.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this special love you have for her. Nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. Spelling: please check line three "an" should be 'a'. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line one; to remove the period at the end of line three; remove the period at the end of line five and change the period to a comma at the end of line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the special love God has given you that you are thankful for. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Stars  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dawn Embers . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Stars" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I enjoy reading, writing and creating form poetry. I especially like minimalistic poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write about stars, their relationship to each other and on those that view them. Heartfelt and whimsical. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Pleiades. Perfect form of six syllable per line. Well done.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of these shining heavenly bodies, their connections to each other and the beauty to those who gaze and wish upon the brightest star that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice personification of cluster of stars as "sisters" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; I like the sense of whimsy about this special group of stars. You express the beauty and magic to be found in stars that any reader can relate to. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about these stars. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this poem is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of stars and their connections that is followed through to the end of the piece. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello David Cocks . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Friends Need Wings too" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet who loves to read, write and create form poetry. Short poetry is also a favorite of mine and this is a good example of it. A good write and message about friendship that is heartfelt. Encouraging and uplifting. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct and which I enjoy very much.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling in regards to true friendship. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture about being there for a friend who has been hurt, to give them aid as needed that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice metaphor: a hurt friend "their wings become broken" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice use of internal rhyme in lines three and four (fly, high, sky); in line five (share, their). Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty, care and assurance of the true character of friendship. Edifying, caring, concerned and earnest. Kindhearted. You show brotherly love beautifully in this piece. Empathetic. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in being a good friend. Nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. Spelling: see line three - "can not" should be one word 'cannot'. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma after "So" in line five. This will give emphasis to your thought as well as making the flow and rhythm of the line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme about what true friendship entails and that theme is followed through to the end of the piece. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing couplet. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Stepping Stones  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello David Cocks . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Stepping Stones" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nice use of alliteration in the title. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most types of poetry and this is a good example of one I enjoy. A very good write about one's journey in life, how one learns through mistakes making life better through the experience that is heartfelt. Encouraging and inspirational. Thought provoking. Well crafted Free Verse that I enjoy. Well done.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling that touches the inner spirit. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of balance in one's life through one's life experience that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Good use of metaphor: "bridges are stepping stones" mistakes "stepping stone in life" and "life's journey - a piece of clay" and "ship of your fate". Good descriptive/comparisons about how one molds their life.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the power of faith and hope that empowers one in life very well in this poem. I like the sense of assurance implied within the piece about a person's growth spiritually. Earnest words of wisdom. Optimistic and uplifting. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about one's journey in life. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of the rhetorical question. Spelling: see line six "can not" is one word, should be 'cannot'. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period at the end of line eleven after "past" to a semi-colon. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Life's journey is a piece of clay
that we mold and shape by beliefs.
Let them become legacies." - I love these lines. They are excellent words of wisdom expressed through a powerful image... a melding of the physical and spiritual in one's journey of life. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line; something to ponder. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of State of Mind  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Happy 2024! . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "State of Mind"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. A particular favorite of mine is rhyme of which this one is a fine example. A very good write about your fear of flying that is heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming Quatrains which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your words to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture about flying, what you do to distract yourself from being afraid by listening to music, taking time to eat and looking out the window to see the beautiful sky and clouds that the plane passes through that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Very good execution of iambic tetrameter. Well done.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphor for plane "wings of steel"- good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaba bbcb ccdc dddd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line four of the first stanza (fly, by) and in line two of the fourth stanza (fly, high). Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express your fear, anxiety and agitation of flying, as well as of heights beautifully in this piece. Also there is a powerful apprehension about flying that permeates your poem; almost a caution about moving around that is implied, beneath the surface in a plane in flight that I certainly can relate to. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in regards to your fear of flying. Nice use of inversion. Nice use of onomatopoeia (bleat). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line three in the second stanza; to remove the comma after "But" in line three and remove the comma at the end of the same line of the third stanza and to change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line three of the fourth stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I will distraction as I eat
and drink and watch and hear the bleat" - I really like these two lines. I do this myself every time I fly somewhere... any distraction will do to keep my mind off the movement and the height is welcome. I like the understated power of these lines with an implied emphasis of fear that is also sensed. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Camp California  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jaeff | KBtW of the Free Folk . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Camp California" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. I like your use of alliteration in the title. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry and this is a good example of one of my favorites. A very good write about nature, its beauty, wonder and character that is heartfelt. Informative. A skillfully crafted Double Etheree. Perfect syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, scent and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the restorative power we can find in nature through its beauty, peacefulness, its waters, trees and flora that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjmbment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Good personification of Mother Nature: she "greets" kids "for the first time." She "shows" them her wonders; she's a "healer, " "therapist" and "friend." Good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; uplifting, encouraging and hopeful. You express beautifully nature's attraction and wonder beautifully. There is a sense of enchantment and fascination of nature's personality. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about Nature's character. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestions to remove the comma at the end of line four; to remove the comma at the end of line six and remove the comma at the end of line eleven. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion. Also a suggestion, in line eighteen to change "as" to 'is'. It will smooth out the meaning of this last thought expressed in your poem.

I especially like the following lines:
"A place to foster hope,
Where innocence is reclaimed." - I love these two lines. They are apropos in the reflection of what nature is in this camp... a place of restoration that is expressed throughout your poem. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Ben Langhinrichs . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native Anerican First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Shadows on the Moon" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is a favorite of mine and is a very good example of it. A very good write about your feelings for this special person and this broken bond with her that is heartfelt and introspective. I like minimalistic poetry and you write it very well. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Triolet that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect rhyme scheme and syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the shadows of sorrow that touch one's life through a bond of love that has somehow been broken that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Good execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this poem.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ABaAabAB. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. One can feel the anguish and heartache of memories of love, now a shadow of what it once was. Poignant with understated power. Well done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling as well as a device that drives this form of poetry. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion remove the comma at the end of line one; remove the period at the end of line two; change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line four and remove the comma at the end of line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of this shadow of sadness of a love that is broken in some way which is carried through to the end of the piece. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Heretic's Lament  
In affiliation with Muse Masters Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam . Good day to you.

"This is an official Muse Masters Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Heretic's Lament"  for the "Invalid Item" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. Short form is a particular favorite and this is an excellent example of minimalism in poetry. A very good write about the inquisition, this dark time in religious history that is short, concise and succinct. Bleak and sorrowful. Good presentation and good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Fibonacci. Perfect syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the horrible acts of persecution and suffering during a dark period of the church that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; a prayerful cry of anguish. Dire, disturbing and dreadful. Hostile, shameful and shocking. A picture of torment by those tortured during this terror carried out by the church for those who were deemed heretical for being politically, or spiritually opposite to their teachings. A truly dark time in history.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration and assonance. Excellent use of exaggeration (hyperbole) that is executed so well in such a short form. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of this deadly practice in this dark time in history.

*Pencil*~Overall:
A terrible era powerfully and deplorably expressed in your closing line. Well penned. Write on!

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Review of Winter Fade  
In affiliation with Muse Masters Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Muse Masters Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Winter Fade"  for the "Invalid Item" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet who loves to read, write and create form poetry and this is a favorite and a good example of one. A very good write of the last vestiges of the winter season as spring begins its budding renewal that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Dizain. Perfect rhyme scheme with ten syllables per line.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling about this change of season through sight and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of waning winter and the life renewal of spring in its change from winter's frosty look to the vibrant colors of blossoms and grasses that sprinkles the countryside that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of winter: it has "breath" and "a chromatic chorus line" and is nonchalant. Nice use of simile: spring's vibrancy, "like broken shards of multicolored glass - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababbccdcd. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the last breaths of winter with spring's warmth, beauty and elegance to the contrast with the silver and gray of winter's departure leaving the reader with a liveliness and sense of optimism and expectation that we can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; elegant verse. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"A chromatic chorus line, now revealed
by the promise of warmth. A renaissance" - I really like these two lines; I like their rhythm, how they sound when read aloud. I like the image of change of color, the gray/silver of winter fading to the color that is vibrant, a "renaissance" of spring. Clever word play... I like it.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Too Many Clouds  
In affiliation with  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ⭐️Jellyfish⭐️ . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Too Many Clouds"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I like all types of poetry. This is a very good write about how you see and feel about clouds, how they affect your being that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your words to promote and evoke feeling about cloudy skies through sight. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of clouds that to you are like a flood that blocks the sun rays and brings gloomy weather that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Good use of simile: clouds flood sky "like fat, white crocodiles" and clouds take up space "like black balloons"; Nice personification of clouds: they "cry cold tears" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express powerfully your dislike of clouds; how oppressive they can be, depressing to your spirit as the 'bruise' springtime taking the joy out of Spring for you. Gloomy, disenchanted and disheartened by cloud cover.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feelings about clouds. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"They loom in the distance;
Deceptive marshmallow fluff
Obscuring happiness" - I like the power in these lines; you express how clouds block the light, remove the joy from a beautiful day, this feeling that is carried throughout your poem. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Greed  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Tom Smith . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Greed"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I'm a formalist poet but I love all kinds of poetry and rhyme is one of my favorites. A good write and message about greed and how destructive it can be to the person who is never happy with having enough, but always wants to have more. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling about how greed preys on a person through sight and want. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of avarice, a hunger never satisfied that preys upon a person to his own destruction that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphoric story poem for greed.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabccbddbeefggfhhf. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line eighteen (be, free, he).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express his gluttony for always wanting more; of never being filled because he always must feed that craving. You express with power this sickness of covetousness that will be his ultimate destruction if he will not reign it in. For me it has a fable feeling to it because he is blind to it and in the end he'll be destroyed by it.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about his never ending greed. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Just a suggestion, in line fourteen, change "That" to 'A'. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a semi-colon at the end of line three; a period at the end of line six; add a comma at the end of line nine and a semi-colon at the end of line fifteen. This will give emphasis to each thought and will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Most any and all
Nay modest or small
His share of whatever he pleases" - This is a powerful image of his greed that is taking over his life. This theme is carried through to the end of the piece. It is a picture of being insatiable which in the end is always destructive and sad.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of The Poet  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Poet" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I enjoy writing and reading form poetry; short form in particular of which this is good example. A very good write about a poet and his or her creativity when writing that is heartfelt. Clever word play. Good sense of drama. Excellent use of brevity. Rhopalic Verse is not an easy form of poetry and this is skillfully crafted in perfect form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling about the poet and their craft. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the creative process of a poet and his tenor in expressing the drama of his thoughts that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of simile for astonishment "like birthdays guarantee celebrations" - a very good descriptive/comparison. An analogy that is apropos.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdb. Lines two, four and six are perfect feminine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three (stories, histories).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. I like the seriousness which goes hand in hand with the understated hint of humor or playfulness in how you express the poet's imaginativeness... how he or she sees the world and expresses it much like the truth of Shakespeare's statement that "All the world is a stage". I can relate. Well done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; strong use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"His stories – histories personified
In daring dramatic presentations." I like the power of these two lines; the emotion implied about the theme of the dramatic that exudes the creativity and cleverness of the poet.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Very good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Life...sigh...  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Beautiful Candy . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Life...sigh..." 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of the theme while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I love the challenge of short form and this is a good example. A very good write about the trying times in life that is heartfelt and introspective. Somber. Good use of brevity. A well crafted Etheree. Perfect syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling through images in nature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a gloomy picture of what life can sometimes be like... confused and empty even when it is cluttered up with things that disorient you and are unsettling to the spirit that any reader can recognize and/or imagine.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice metaphor for how one lives life - in "the forest of confusion"; "traps of illusion" and streams of resentment" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice masculine end line rhyme in line four and five (confusion, illusion); nice internal rhyme in line seven (life, strife).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. Dark, disconcerting and lamentful. There is a sense of dread, frustration and hopelessness in how life can treat a person, almost to the point of becoming disconnected.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line four and to add a comma after life in line seven. This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the piece because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of the darkness and anxiety one can feel at times during one's life that can be powerful and unsettling to the spirit.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Dark closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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