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Review of Alone  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Maineiac . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Alone for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this is a good example of it. A good write about sensing and feeling fear that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. A well crafted free style metered rhyming Quatrain which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of being scared upon entering a dark room when you're supposed to be alone yet you sense something there, out of sight until you turn on the light... feelings that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express a sense of anxiety and suspense that builds throughout the poem. One can almost feel your fear. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of line one and change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of feeling fear; the power of it that seems to grow through to the end of the poem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
I like how you repeat the first phrase in line one in the last line. Very good use of repetition and a good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Renewed  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Preston Alexander . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Renewed for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write and message about saving faith; a gift to us that is heartfelt, encouraging and uplifting. Well crafted free style metered poetry using rhythm and rhyme that I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling about God's love and care for all of us. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a picture of saving faith, of God's love and forgiveness He gives to us when we seek Him and how one's spirit is renewed that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
I like I how you use rhyme in this piece. You do it through internal rhyme and repetition which enhances the rhythm of your poem. Unique use of end line rhyme in lines one and two (need it, read it); in lines four and five: (surround you, around you); Nice end line rhyme in lines seven and eight (praise, ways) and nine and ten (renew, through). Nice internal rhyme in line six (through, you) and line ten (you, through). Well done.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. Your faith shines in this piece in this testimony about God's love, forgiveness and renewal of a person if they will look to Him and trust Him. A powerful message; well expressed advice and lovely words of praise and adoration for our Lord. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good play on words in line one. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, change the period to a comma at the end of line seven and remove the comma after 'sins' in line eight; change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line nine. This will make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"When everyone around is looking down on you,
Just look up and His love will surround you."
- I love these two lines. What you say in these lines is so true. I love how you express the importance of trusting in God, knowing that He is there with and for us when those around us try to tear us down... God is there building us up through His love. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Very good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of The Sea  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Happy 2024! . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Sea for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I'm a formalist poet and I love to read and write form poetry which this is a good example of. A very good write about the sea, how it touches you, and its magic that is heartfelt and introspective. I like the whimsy of the piece. A skillfully crafted Alouette, perfect syllabic form and rhyme which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words that promote and evoke feeling through taste, touch, sound and sight. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the sea, its life, beauty, serenity and enchantment that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the sea, being wrapped in its arms - good descriptive/compasrison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabccb ddeffe. A good mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision i this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about the sea with imagination that is whimsical. Heartwarming and peaceful with a sense of blissfulness that any reader can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line two of the first stanza and add a comma at the end of line five in the second stanza. This will give emphasis as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Prolonged peacefulness
calming quietness
ride the roll of frothy wave."
- A vivid image. I really like these lines; I can sense the serenity through your words and almost hear the roll of the wave that gives a feeling of calmness that touches the soul. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of HIS HANDS  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "HIS HANDS

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem' essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. I like the use of alliteration in the title. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write and message about your faith and trust in God that is heartfelt and introspective. Inspirational, encouraging and a powerful testimony of God's love. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your words that promote and evoke feeling about your relationship with God. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of God's loving care as He works in your life; your love and trust of Him as you depend on Him and follow Him that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice personification (anthropomorphism) of God - "His hands"; "He walks"; He catches you when you fall - good descriptive/comparisons that paints a picture of His being a dear friend.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb cded efeg eheh. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of the first stanza (when, fallen); in line four of the first stanza (He, me); in line three in the second stanza (he, me) and in line three of the third stanza (me, mercy).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. You express your testimony beautifully in this piece. about your trust and love for God that is powerful and an example of faith, adoration and praise for God whom you love and follow. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling regarding your relationship with God. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"When hope is gone, and life seems worthless
He reminds me that he is my true friend."
This is just two of my favorite lines in thi piece, and what you've written is so true. I like the understated power of these lines which imply God's blessing in our lives and reminds those who believe in Him that He is our friend. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of SILVER WATER  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "SILVER WATER

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about nature's beauty as seen in your dreams that is heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the decriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture dreaming of the beauty of nature that warms the heart through this sanctum that touches the spirit that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice personification of moonbeams as "dancing" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abcb dede dfgf hdid abcb. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling with a touch of whimsy which is enchanting. Blissful. I like the peacefulness of this piece. Inspirational and satisfying. You express the pleasure of these lovely sights as you dream of nature's delights that any reader an relate to.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three in the first stanza and remove the comma at the end of line three in the last stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Silver water shining softly
as the moon appears above;
Just a moment in eternity
that I shall always love."
- I really like the image painted in these lines. Lyrical. They express the power of memories seen in nature's beauty, a love that warms your heart. I like how these lines sound when read aloud; I like the rhythm which is free style and pleasing to the ear. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing stanza. I like how you repeat the first stanza as your last stanza. Very nice touch that emphasizes the joy you feel in this dream. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of ENOUGH FOR ME  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "ENOUGH FOR ME

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about living life happily and to the fullest that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading pertaining to word use that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the joy of living, the experiences in life that builds up, gives hope while building memories that will always be part of who you are that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor: "I have flown where angels play" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jk. Every second/fourth line in the first three stanzas are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express delight in your thoughts and enjoyment of life beautifully in this poem. Uplifting, encouraging and enthusiastic. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in living life with enthusiasm. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I have listened to the music
And have danced the night away,"
I like these lines, their beauty and power in expression of the music of your life, this theme that is carried throughout your poem. It implies joy you experience in life; your love of it and the memories that warm your heart. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Winnie Kay .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Leprechaun's Lament

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for in in its reflection of the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into in. Nice use of alliteration in the title. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I love form poetry and this one is a favorite of mine. A very good write about a leprechaun with a taste for the drink... non-alcholic ale that is. Clever word play. I like the humor, the tongue in cheek and whimsy of the poem. Good presentation. A skillfully crafted Limerick. Perfect syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery and descriptives are well done. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and taste. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a picture of love for drink he created that doesn't have punch that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. I love the wit, playfulness and word play of the poem. It is fun and amusing. It made me smile. Well done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of line four. This will make the flow in the following line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
This is a short form of poetry and I love all the lines of the piece because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of his love for the "drink" of his creation. I like the implied double entendre that is craftily expressed. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. I like the "punch" of it. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Birdbath Beauty  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Happy 2024! .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Birdbath Beauty

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. I like the use of alliteration in you title. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short poetry, particularly when it rhymes and this is a good example of it. A very good write about nature's beauty as seen in the activity in and around a birdbath. Good use of brevity. Good presentation and take on the picture prompt. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words that promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a rainy day, birds flying to and fro and the overflowing birdbath from rainwater that is also a reflection of a stormy day as leaves fall and float on it that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one of the second stanza (fills, spills).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. I like the sense of wonder and beauty on a rainy day in nature; the delight in the activity of the birds going about their business regardless of a bit of gloomy weather.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (plop, splash). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the the period at the end of line seven to a comma. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short poem, I like all of the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme about a birdbath in nature on a rainy day and the activity around it. I also like the rhythm of the poem when read out loud is beautiful and lyrical.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Shubham .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Day At The Beach

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about the fun and relaxation you have on a day at the beach that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound, taste and touch on a day at the shore. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your experience on a beautiful day at the beach from early morning until days end; the beauty, fun and peacefulness of this jaunt to the beach that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab ccbb ddee ffgh iijj. A nice mix of near rhyme, perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line four of the third stanza (play, they); in line one of the fourth stanza (everyone, fun) and in line two of the fourth stanza (sun, horizon). Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. You express your joy and wonder, a sense of awe at the beauty, peacefulness and recreation that you experience on a day spent at the beach. Uplifting and enriching to the spirit. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the sea, sky and sun on a day at the beach. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three of the first verse; to remove the comma at the end of line one of the fourth stanza; to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line two and remove the comma at the end of line three of the fifth stanza. This will make the rhythm and flow of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"The infinite sea drifts onto the sand,
Looking at this beauty, with bare feet I stand."
- I like these lines. I've done this myself on an early morning at the beach. I love the feeling of calm and the majesty of the range of colors that paints the sky as the sun rises. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Memories  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Happy 2024! .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Memories

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of its theme while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I love form poetry (especially minimalistic) of which this is one of my favorites. A very good write about what memories are like that is short, concise and succinct. Very good use of brevity. Clever word play. A skillfully crafted Pleiades with six syllables per line. Perfect form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feelings about the power of memories. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of the intricacy of memories, how powerful they can be to our senses that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of simile: "Memories move like sand" and "mandate thoughts like magic" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. Thought provoking and deep. You express the power of the mind through memories that affect all aspects of our lives.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short form of poetry, I love all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of it in regards to the power of memories and how they can drive a person in their life journey. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Heat  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Happy 2024! .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Heat

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I love form poetry, especially short form. A good write about the heat and how it feels and affects your surroundings that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. A well crafted rhyming Nonet that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a very hot and humid day, of bright sunshine and the discomfort you feel that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccded. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. You express how miserable it feels to be outside on such a hot and humid day; that you feel no relief from the power of the heat that seems to suck the energy out of you and that makes you feel sick. I know how that feels and I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration with nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the semi-colon at the end of line one and at the end of line two, change the semi-colon to a period. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the subject/theme of it, the oppressive heat and its affects on what you see, feel and taste. I like the powerful images you express that anyone can relate too. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Snowflakes  
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Rated: E
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Fhionnuisce . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Snowflakes for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Its sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the beauty and uniqueness of snowflakes. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely in this piece. Nice use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling about the purpose of snowflakes. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of of snowflakes, how each one has its own unique quality created by God that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the snowflake: they're "individuals" and bring "joy and happiness" and say "goodbye" and "die" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Good internal rhyme in line two of the second stanza (they, say).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express God's artistic work in the beauty and creation of the snowflake and their being part of His plan for nature and care of the earth. Your faith shines through in this piece. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the work and purpose of snowflakes. Nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, at the end of line two in the first stanza, change the period to a semi-colon and at the end of line two of the second stanza change the period to a semi-colon. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"They bring Earth joy and happiness
before they say goodbye.a"
- I like these lines because they are so true. The beauty of snowflakes and the joy one's feels in their pristine brightness is something I understand very well. It brings to my mind playing in the snow as a child, the fun snow would bring (snow days, no school); but it also has a purpose, to fill our reservoirs so it can feed the earth and its inhabitants. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of July/August Entry  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello EmmiKitten . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "July/August Entry for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A title is a very important thing when writing poetry. It sets the stage for it, its intent and essence while at the same time acting as a portal to invite readers into it. My suggestion is that whenever possible you title your poetry. It really can draw people to read and for me, it is a finishing touch for your writing.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and if it rhymes, that's just icing on the cake for me. A good write and message about lessons we can learn from stories that uplift and encourage through our journey in life. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which is short, concise and succinct and which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling about the power of a story's message. Through the lens of your eye and imagination you paint a picture of lessons we can learn to battle problems in life from stories we read of others overcoming obstacles that give support and encouragement that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcc defe. The third/fourth lines of the first stanza and the second/fourth lines of the second stanza are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. Hopeful, supportive and optimistic. An uplifting message to all readers that I can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is nice. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of the power of storytelling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line one of the second stanza; 'a lot' should be two words. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to each thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the line of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the message one can receive from stories. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Winnie Kay . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Mortal Immortality for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for in in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry, especially when it is written in iambic meter and rhyme. A very good write about the immortality of the spirit that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and thought provoking. Profound. Skillfully crafted Rhyming Poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely in this piece. Nice use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling in the contrast of body and spirit (finite and infinite). Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of infinity that is abstract in regards of reflecting what mind, body and spirit is to each other that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Good execution of iambic pentameter.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor of the eternal quality of the soul. Nice use of abstraction as a descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. Deep and thoughtful. Uplifting and hopeful.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good. Elegant verse. Nice use of rhetorical questions and repetition for emphasis on the nature of the soul. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Cannot the soul emerge and hence embrace
The grace to soar beyond infinity?"
- I love these lines. I like the power of this question, its depth, how they sound when read aloud and the implied hopefulness of the eternal quality of the soul. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Winnie and Liam, you both did an exceptional job in writing a poem that is seamless. I never got the feeling that two writers wrote this poem. You were both in sync. Beautiful form. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of The Tear  
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Rated: E
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Fhionnuisce .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Tear

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write of the power of hidden passion, its loss and the pain its bring that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evoke feeling through pain and sorrow. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the anguish of heartbreak that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor: "eye of my heart" and "my human soul bleeds" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line two of stanza one (eye, my).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion; you express the depth of passionate feeling that seems unseen by others but is painful to the spirit as the ache of the heart shedding its silent tear for unrequited love that does not come to fruition. Powerful.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"A droplet of passion
from the eye of my heart,
blind to its purpose,
to all it imparts."
- I love these lines, the image and implied depth of passion's emotion. A powerful opening to your poem through rhythm and sound especially when read aloud. It's theme is carried through to the end of your poem. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Much  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jimminycritic . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Much for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this is a good example of it. A very good write about what poetry means to you and how it is a reflection of the way you see yourself. Heartfelt and introspective. Thoughtful. Very good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. Your use of color and shading of your word is understated yet it promotes and evokes feeling about why you write poetry. Through the lens of your heart you paint a picture of how words... through poetry represents the image of the person in their 'brokenness' - that any reader can appreciate and understand.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile that poet should be "broken much like me" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice use of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme in lines one, six and eight.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your thoughts about the power of poetry and its reflection of one's brokenness in their life's journey that is deep and profound. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make your rhythm and flow even better in my opinion (i.e. add a comma at the end of lines two and three and maybe and ellipsis [...] at the end of line seven).

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of what poetry means to you. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of The Ghastly Oak  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Fhionnuisce
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Ghastly Oak

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of the theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I love form poetry and short form in particular. This is a good example of it. A very good write about a malevolent tree. Dark and eerie. Excellent use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Triolet that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect syllabic form (eight syllables per line).

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling of fear through sight. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of this old oak tree, the wickedness it exudes as it frightens you in its darkness that you wish to flee that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Excellent execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of simile: limbs "like arms"; nice personification of oak tree: it casts fear into you, it reaches out for you and emanates wickedness. Good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ABaAabAB. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines one, four and seven (ghastly, me); in lines two and eight (so, O) and in line three (me, tree).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. Dark. I like the ambiance of eeriness that permeates the poem from the beginning to end of it and how the fear is expressed with subdued power. Well done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and which drives this form of poetry. Good use of alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the darkness that this tree exudes in casting fear in the one it reaches out for. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of No Good Deed...  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CreativeExpression (Diane) .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "No Good Deed...

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of the theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A good write and message about what consequences could be when choosing to help others in need that is heartfelt and introspective. Thought provoking. Well crafted free style metered rhyming Quatrain poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely in this piece. Nice color and shading of your words that promote and evokes feeling in regards to aiding those less fortunate in the world. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a picture of someone homeless or without work that you wish to help and yet you wonder what will become of that monetary aid given as you ask yourself if it is the right thing to do that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme and rhyme scheme is nicely done. A nice mix of near rhyme, near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines the third stanza line one (to, do) and line two (to, you).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling as you express your reasoning in how you choose to help others, whether it will do good or harm and the questions it lays upon your heart in hopes that it will be a good deed given and received. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of rhetorical questions and repetition for emphasis of feeling about giving aid to others. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line one of the first stanza; at the end of the first line of the third stanza add a comma; add a semi-colon at the end of the second line and add a period at the end of the fourth line. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"You have to believe that most people are good
And that your help is well-deserved"
- When one truly wishes to help others in need these lines say it all; we have to believe that to help others is good and will do good for those deserving of it. It is an implied message of love for your fellow man and an understated empowerment through giving. A lesson for all of us to think about. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello amagrah . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Mother I Needed for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this is a good example of it. A very good write and tribute about love received from your surrogate mother, this special woman who loved and nurtured you, the child of her heart, though not of her body, this bond of love is just as strong. Heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling through sight and touch of the power of love. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of a bond of love of a mother for her child that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor of a mother releasing her child to grow "You gifted me wings and gave me a song, encouraged me always to soar" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines six and eight (core, soar).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express your love, respect and honor for this special woman who raised you as her own that is inspiring and uplifting. Heartwarming bond of love that any reader can relate to. You are blessed.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the bond between you and this special woman who loves and nurtured you through the years. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one and change the period to a comma at the end of line two; change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line six; remove the comma at the end of lines nine and eleven. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines that follow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"You never carried me in your womb,
nor went through all the pain.
You never really gave birth to me,
but you loved me all the same."
- I love these lines; they express the power of this special bond of love, this theme of which is carried throughout the poem. Simply lovely.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dhammika Weerasingha . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "If it is a promise for the
"Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by the reflection of the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry, especially if it rhymes and this is a good example. A good write and message about promises kept that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. Good use of brevity. Thought provoking. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your words to promote and evoke feeling though sight in nature and society. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of performance in completing that which becomes an obligation whether by word or deed that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdbeb. Lines two, four, six and eight are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line six (be, free).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; thoughtful words of wisdom that are encouraging and uplifting as it expresses the importance of fulfilling promises as seen in nature, society and in humankind.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to limit the use of ellipsis (...) because this is such a short piece; maybe change a couple of them to commas which will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like the understated power of all the lines because they contribute to the emphasis of the whole subject/theme about the importance of promises being kept in all areas of life. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Nice closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Just One Time  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Fhionnuisce .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Just One Time

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by being a reflection of its theme while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I'm a formalist poet and I love form poetry and this one is a favorite of mine. A good write from a father's perspective about losing beloved babies and his one wish to have been able to hold them close that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that are short, concise and succinct, which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. Nice use of color and shading of your words that promote and evoke feeling through touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of love that is both joy and pain in the loss of babies never held by a loving father whose one wish was to hold them, just one time that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is nicely done; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: ab cb de de df gf. Every second line of each couplet is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice mix of perfect masculine and feminine end line rhyme in lines seven and nine (me, only) of the poem. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. You express your feelings that are deeply felt; a love that is poignant and touches the heart. This is a stirring lament of loss about the wish to share love with babies you never got to hold and know that will never be forgotten. My condolences on your loss.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line two; to change the period at the end of line six to a semi-colon and remove the comma at the end of line seven; change the period to a comma at the end of line ten and remove the comma at the end of line eleven. This will make the flow and rhythm of this piece even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of loss and a father's wish to hold his babies... just one time.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Powerful closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Forever  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Fhionnuisce .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Forever

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by its reflection of the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short form poetry, especially if rhyme is incorporated within in. A good write and message about the power of love in this dedicatory piece to you wife. Heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that is short, concise and succinct.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling in this tribute to true love through sight and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture to a love that is constant and lasting that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ab cb. The second line of each couplet is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. You express the deepness of your love, how special it is beautifully in this poem. Heartwarming and fervent.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one and to change the comma to an ellipsis (...) at the end of line two. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of the power of love that is eternal. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello F. H. Hadley .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Labyrinth of Nalod

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Intriguing title. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love form poetry and this is a good example of it. A very good write about the labyrinth of your mind created to escape love's gaze that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words that promote and evoke feeling about the multitude of chambers in your mind though sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of the never ending network of dark rooms, pathways and doorways in your mind that any reader can see in their mind's eye

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Good personification of brick, it "shouts" and questions "hide" and "whisper" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line eighteen (there, dare).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expressions of emotion that are dark and powerful. You express the desolation of your feelings about this labyrinth that you created in your mind that have also caused you great fear and pain because you cannot find your way out of your creation where there seems to be no exit. You've built a trap from which you cannot escape, nor does it fade. Only your cry to God to help free you from this prison/maze will you find hope for healing.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about being trapped in this maze of pathways in your mind. Nice use of onomatopoeia (echo, crash). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses or a period at the end of a thought will give emphasis to the ideas you wish to get across to the reader as well as making the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, check the twelfth couplet (lines twenty-three and twenty-four). I seem to trip over the second line of this couplet when I read it aloud. Maybe something like: 'is the one created by me' but this is only a suggestion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Anger, passion, madness, grief
Nowhere seems to find relief"
- I like these powerful lines. They summarize the feelings about being trapped in this maze of your creation. What was thought to be a means of protection has now become a prison of pain as expressed through to the end of the poem. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Triage  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Shelley Esh .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Triage

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject to your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short poetry and rhyming makes it a particular favorite for me. A very good write about the power of the eyes through its glaring stare that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity with clever word play. Well crafted free style metered rhyming tercets which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words that promote and evoke feeling through sight. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the 'darts' thrown through the eye towards another that can cause pain and fear that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice metaphor about how dangerous eyes can be through the 'look' - an "arrows quiver" given to another. Good descriptive/comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abb cbb deb. Every second/third line in first two tercets are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice mix of near rhyme in the second/third lines of the third tercet.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. You express the cold, darkness of a glare that can frighten and cause one pain who is on the receiving end of it. Letting this 'evil eye' fly is so powerful that even lightning dims before it. Well done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is such a short poem, I like all the line of the piece because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of the power of the eye, the "arrows" shot to others though its dark glare. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Tender Love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse .
Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Tender Love

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short poetry, and especially when it rhymes. This is a good example of it. A good write about the friendship between a cat and puppy that is warm and affectionate. Heartfelt. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct and a form which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words that provoke and evoke feeling through sight and touch in sleep and play through two playmates. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the love between a cat and puppy through their playfulness and as sleep mates that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Constant eight syllables per line throughout poem.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem. Nice use of internal rhyme in line three of the second stanza (they, play).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty of this friendship between a cat and puppy that is heartwarming. One can sense the love and light humor expressed between them even if it is hidden; yet, the reader can also see their contentment with each other. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of their connection. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is such a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of this special friendship between a cat and puppy. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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