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Review of Simple Deeds  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Anita E. . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Simple Deeds"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Concise and to the point. It sets the stage and reflects the intent of your poem, acting as a portal inviting the reader into it.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write and message about reaching out to others. Heartfelt and inspiring. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Nice use of imagery and descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of the power of a smile and a warm 'hello' that can uplift a persons day that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is nice; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
The use of these elements are not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good with as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express beautifully how random acts of kindness, just by giving someone a smile from the heart, can make a person's day... uplift them and encourage them, just by this small deed that is so easy to do and shows that you care. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the power of a 'simple deed' and how it affects the giver and recipient. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion - in stanza one, add a comma at the end of line one, remove the comma at the end of line two and add a period at the end of line four; in stanza two, remove the comma at the end of line two and add a period at the end of line four. This will make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion. I also recommend that it's good practice to put a period at the end of a sentence so the reader knows you've started a new thought. It gives emphasis to a series of thoughts, in this case, how and why one should do these random acts of kindness,

I especially like the following lines:
"These little things
So simple to do,
Are not frequently done
But they can be by you" - powerful and very nicely stated words of wisdom that all of us can actively participate in daily that help lifts other's spirits, as well as our own. A lovely message.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Hope's View  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Anita E. . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Hope's View"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It's sets the stage reflecting the intent of the piece.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write and message about the bleakness of life and the glimmer of hope that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this element of poetry. I like how you use shades of color which evokes the feeling of dreariness. You paint a vivid picture of desolation through images found in nature that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of clouds as a protector. Good descriptive comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg hh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line six (every, be, free) and in line twelve (you, view).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the gloominess of the day and its affects on ones emotion, yet there is a glimmer of hope and a message how to kindle it and make it grow that is encouraging to the spirit. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis and will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Also, I recommend that you limit the use of articles (i.e. the, and, etc) for example - add a comma at the end of line three, remove 'And' in line four. This smooths out the flow.

I especially like the following lines:
"Hard to be found and yet it is there
A spark of hope that floats in the air" - I like these words of encouragement; this is so true at times in our lives. Hope is never far away when we look for it.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Nice closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Alexi . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Mother bird's love"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its intent. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short form and this is a fine example. A good write about this fledgling that makes his first flight. Good use of brevity. A well crafted Tetractys. Perfect 1-2-3-4-10 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this element of poetry. You paint a vivid picture of the relationship between a mother bird and her younglings, one of which draws on his courage to take his first flight from the nest that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This element is not applicable in this poem.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this poetry form.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express beautifully the family unit of birds in their natural habitat that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma at the end of line three. A strategically placed comma at a natural pause makes the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all lines of this short form because they contribute to the whole picture of the 'story' in this poem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Amazon  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Osirantinous . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Amazon"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your it, reflects its intent and acts as a portal that invites the reader into your poem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love this form of poetry and you did a good job with it. A good write and tribute to your mom and her bravery in her cancer fight. Heartfelt, uplifting and encouraging. Very nicely shaped. A skillfully crafted Enteree. Perfect syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device well; I like the 'color' implied in your description of your mom's courage. You paint a vivid picture of her bravery that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor in defining your mom as an "Amazon" woman. Good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your love and respect for your mom with power in this piece. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your mom's character. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all the lines of this short poem. All the lines contribute to painting a vivid and powerful picture of your mother's character and your love and respect for her that shines throughout the piece.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of Marriage  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Lina Black-So Far Behind!!! . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Marriage"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem. It reflects the intent of the poem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this one is a favorite. A good write and message about the bonds of marriage on ones wedding day that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. Good use of brevity. Aesthetically pleasing. A skillfully crafted Etheree. Perfect syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You use this poetic device nicely in this piece. Through the lens of your eye you paint a good picture of the bonds of matrimony and sharing lives with each other and friends that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the importance of love shared and the ceremony that bonds two people together, blessed by God and celebrated with friends and family. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to remove the comma in line seven after 'expand' and to add a comma at the end of that line and to remove the comma in line eight. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"explaining, true meaning of bonds
held in love, brought by God, in front of
Friends and Family, graced with harmony" - a beautiful statement for marriage that is heartfelt and touching to the heart.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Alexi . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "God's Kiss on Earth's Breast"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it, reflects its intent, capturing its essence and acts as a portal inviting the reader into the poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this is a good example of one. A good write about nature, God's creation that is short, concise and succinct. Very good use of brevity. Very nicely shaped. A skillfully crafted Etheree. Perfect syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You use this poetic device well in this piece. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this scene in nature that is visual in its strong images that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of personification of the trees - they are "waking green sleeping giants" and "praise God's kiss of rain" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
This element is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; one get's the feeling of awe at the beauty and power of this scene in God's creation that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to remove the '...' in line five and in line ten add an apostrophe 'earth's' (it's possessive). Also, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis and make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"sleeping giants to stretch proud
trunk as refreshed branches praise God's" - powerful imagery and personification in their praise of God. I like how these lines sound when read aloud.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Steam  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Anabelle8 . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Steam"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Just a suggestion, a title sets the stage/tone for your poem and can add distinction to it. It should be engaging and original to draw readers to it. I recommend this because poems tend to be short and the title can act as a portal inviting a reader into it. For example, I might call this poem 'The Beast', but this is just a suggestion.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about steam, its traits, and the almost eerieness of it. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy. I like the brevity of this piece.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You use this important tool of poetry very well in this piece. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of what steam from boiling water looks like, as though it has a life of its own that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of steam; very nice use of simile about the steam - it whirls and twirls "like dancer's, entwining themselves" - a good descriptive/comparison. I like the strength of and appeal to a reader's senses in the building of this image.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not necessarily excluded from Free Verse, but in this piece, it is not applicable.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; I like your use of visual that spurs my senses, to 'see' the steam as having a life of its own... for a time. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis. Nice internal rhyme in line six (whirling, twirling). Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, in line five change the tense of looking to "Look" and at the end of the line, change the period to a comma. In stanza two, at the end of line two, remove the comma. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"the tentacles of
The beast retreat slowly,
Obediently," - I love the description and power of these lines. It's a vivid image and I like the sound of it when read aloud.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of 09 November 2012  
In affiliation with Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Sunny . Good day to you.

"This is a Reviewing Reviewers Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "09 November 2012" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A nice title that implies a day of relevance and significance of a change to the bearer, in this case, the writer of the piece reflecting the poet's intent drawing me in to read the poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short poetry and I like the depth of this piece. A good write about the loss of a brother that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and poignant. Very nice use of brevity that stimulates thought. I like the subtle rhyme.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice use of feminine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion; you express in a powerful way, your deep feelings of sadness and loss that is implicit (understood without being said). My condolences on your loss. I know you feel it greatly.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
I like all the lines of this poem because of how short it is and that all lines contribute to the one thought-- the loss of your brother and your wonder as to whether you're still a sister without him... profound.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
A good closing line that is powerful. Well penned and a good read. Write on!
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Review of Autumnal Dance  
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is a Circle of Sisters & Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Autumnal Dance" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, setting the stage as it reflects the intent of the subject to draw readers to it.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short form and this is a good example of it. A very good write about the colorful beauty found as leaves fall to their final rest. Excellent use of brevity. Heartfelt and whimsical. A skillfully crafted Saraband. Perfect form that is short, concise and succinct.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the autumnal scene that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice personification of mistral... it's ability to sing and "leaves" dancing that are creative descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaa bcbc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty you see around you in this autumn season that I can relate to very well.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"They dip and swirl without a care
ignoring me as I stand there." - I like the rhythm of these two lines, expressing the 'dance' of leaves in a magical way.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Excellent closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Curse the Sun  
In affiliation with  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Kitty Can Write . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Curse the Sun " 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem that sets the stage reflecting the intent that drew me in to read your poem.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short form and this style is one of my favorites. Dark and heartfelt with clever word play. A well crafted Trois-par-Huit, near perfect form. Check line seven in the third stanza. It is seven syllables, should be six syllables.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of death in its shades of color in expression of pain and sorrow that any reader can relate to as it blots out the light due to ones grief.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor for death - as the reaper "leaves my soul behind, unsung" - a good descriptive/comparision.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aab bb ccc. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion. The darkness of death and the heartache it brings permeates this poem with power. I can relate to it.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"As morning breaks, dazzling beams of amber glow.
This heart aches, dripping through the wake of tomorrow. - powerful lines of sorrow's pain; I love the use of double entendre in the 'wake' of tomorrow. Cleverly done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!
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Review of Play Ball!  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Isola Bertolucci . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Play Ball!"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. I like how in these two words you set the stage for the theme of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the excitement that fans bring to a ball game that is short, concise and succinct. Clever word play. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of this "base ball" you create a vivid picture of the roar of the crowd awaiting the pitch at all ball game that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the baseball and what it would say to the fans. A very creative descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this short form poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the passion for the game powerfully in this piece that I can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration and dialogue. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line two. This will make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
The Cinquain is also known as the 'American' haiku. Since this form is so short, I like all the lines because they contribute to paint a vivid picture of the fun of fans at a ball game that is expressed with power in this piece.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (3.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Booksaregreat . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "There was a young man from France,"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Just a suggestion,
because this is a short poem, I'd recommend a shorter title and not use the first line of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I enjoy short form and this one is nicely done. Nice use of humor, almost slapstick. A very nicely crafted Limerick with good form that is concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the demise of this man who tried to rescue a toad in this funny situation.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is nice; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm although it could be a bit smoother if you can add another syllable to the first line making the syllable count: 8/8/5/5/8 instead of 7/8/5/5/8

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Metaphor is not applicable in this poem.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express absurdity of this man's action and lack of judgment that nicely uses dark humor.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one; change the comma to a period at the end of line two and remove the comma at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because it contributes the picture/impagery as a whole.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Transitions  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon and Cherokee Rose . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Transitions"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is original and draws me in to want to read more. It sets the stage for the theme of your poem with creativity.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about a coming storm that is short, concise and succinct. Good presentation and interpretation of the image that inspired this piece. Seamless. This poetry is written well, smoothly continuous that if I didn't know that two people wrote this poem, I would think it was written by one poet. Skillfully crafted Monorhyme. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this storm that is on the horizon that any reader can see in their mind's eye. We get the clear sense of movement, windiness and rough waters that descend that really doesn't need the added image that inspired it. Bravo.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Uniform ten syllables per line in both stanzas executed beautifully.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphor: "whitecaps begin their wind-dance on the bay" - very good descriptive comparison of the coming storm.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaa bbbb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express well the storm in its furor with clarity and power.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line three "into" one word. Punctuation: Just a suggestion: line four - change the period to a comma after 'out' and change 'There' to lower case. Line six: change the period after down to a comma and change 'Beaches' to lower case and in line eight change the period to a comma after 'coming' and change 'It's' to lower case. This will make the rhythm and flow the poem even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"whitecaps begin their wind-dance on the bay.
Crab like, the boats scuttle in to the quay." - I love these lines, they paint such a vivid picture and one can almost feel the rough movement of the bay.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Very good closing line. Well penned ad a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Broken  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Broken"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem, a reflection of its essence that sets the stage for your theme.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short form. This is very good write about the cause of a broken heart that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and excellent use of brevity. A well thought out interpretation of the quote prompt. A skillfully crafted Five by Five. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as is the descriptive. You paint a vivid picture of anger and the pain it causes to oneself and to the person on the receiving end of it that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor - "love slowly drips" - a good descriptive/comparison of sorrow.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababa. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. Powerful. You express well how being sorry can't wipe away of words said in anger... not easily forgotten as you break the heart of the one you love and causing you both pain.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of dialogue, alliteration, assonance with good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines. They contribute to the whole theme of the sorrow that results from anger, a powerful message and warning to others due to ones ire.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a good read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Yellow Rose . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Love Is Like Rainbows 14 lines"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A beautiful title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about the wonder of true love as seen from the perspective of the beauty of a rainbow. Heartfelt and whimsical. A skillfully crafted free style metered blend of free verse and rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a delightful picture of the miracle of a rainbow, of it being one of a kind; always different and yet the same... much like love.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile - a rainbow suspended in air, like "the love to people might share" - a creative descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good. A good mix of near rhyme and near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the miracle of love, it's creation like that of a rainbow that came into being through God's love.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Then I stop and think no man could create this marvelous entity
It seems to appear out of nowhere and then disappears into infinity
Think how fragile it must be suspended in thin air
Almost like the love two people might share" - simply beautiful; deep, profound, and thought provoking is the miracle of rainbows which also holds true in love and romance.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Very good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Were Equal .  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Tyesha . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your prose poem "Were Equal ."  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A very nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem (although I think you have a typo here: should be "We're Equal"

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short form and brevity that is well done. This does both. A good write and message that is encouraging, uplifting and inspirational. Thoughtful and heartfelt. Well crafted prose that is short, concise and succinct, which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor - "taste of excellence" - a good descriptive/comparison and very good suggestion of the appealing flavor that all of us can experience.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice use of internal rhyme: line two (free, key) and line eight (be, nobody).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling and beautiful words of advice about treatment towards one another that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line two - should be "grudges". Punctuation: place a period at the end of line three after feelings; check line five - after each should be "other's" and line seven should be "It's".

I especially like the following lines:
I like all of the lines because they contribute to the whole theme of this prose in regards to one's deportment, a code of conduct and behavior for all of us to live by as an act of respect toward one another.

*Pencil*~Overall:
It has the feel of a well stated monologue with very good closing words. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Fall's Spire  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Maverick . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Fall's Spire"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
This is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love Japanese short form and this write is a beautiful example of one. It is concise and succinct. Excellent use of brevity. A skillfully crafted traditional haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid snapshot of the wonder of this breath taking lake scene that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor for the dew - "chilled kisses" - vivid descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this Japanese form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you capture the beauty and essence of this autumn scene, a visual that any reader can relate to. Very nice aha moment, contrasts nicely with the previous lines.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice; strong alliteration, good assonance with nice consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors Just a note: haiku is written in lower case (exception: proper names).

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is Haiku and is Japanese short form poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole theme, a beautiful scene found in nature. Delightfully done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Isola Bertolucci . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "'Til Death Do Us Part"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this is a good example and write about parting that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt, passionate and poignant. Very good use of brevity. A well crafted Lai. Perfect syllabic form and rhyme.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the progression of love in all of its stages (beginning, middle and end) that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphor about death being "an anvil" - a good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aab aab aab. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express how love is compelled by friendship, deepens with sensual delight until death puts and end to it when one goes to their eternal rest.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration and consonance with nice assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
This is a short form of poetry and I like all of the lines in this poem because they contribute to the whole subject of relationship and it's progression to its final end.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!
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Review of Equinox  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dave . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Equinox"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about nature and the change of seasons that creates beautiful scenes in autumn due to movement of the sun and earth. Thought provoking. A skillfully crafted Minute Poem. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of fall, its vibrant hues that paints the landscapes and forest in a flash of color, this sanctuary of grace that is awe inspiring that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of earth as she "runs" around the sun. A good descriptive/comparison. Nice simile.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express how the beauty of this palette of color inspires the muse to articulate its splendor through the written word that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"autumnal flares
of vibrant hues
inspire the Muse." - powerful expression of the "flare" of color that is inspiring to the muse of a poet. I like this connection. Visual's feed the muse and these lines state that succinctly.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of Firefly Whispers  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Whitemorn . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Firefly Whispers"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It drew me to this piece because I remember when I was a little girl, chasing after fireflies on warm summer nights.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write, imaginative and whimsical. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of fireflies and how they shine on warm nights and the fun of watching and 'playing' with them that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor of about fireflies "dancing to and fro" and personification "their hunt for love and feast" and "whisper come and play" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty and fun, almost an adventure with these tiny insects that are dancing lights at night. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line four of the second stanza should be "to" instead of too. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one of stanza one; remove the commas at the end of line one and three of stanza two; remove the comma at the end of line three of stanza three and in stanza four, line three, capitalize "No" and remove the comma at the end of the line. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
I really like all of the stanzas. It's so hard to pick just one. But, if I had to choose just one, then it would be the second stanza. I love every line and its description. It's so visual and I like the whimsy of these lines.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Autumn  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 💙 Carly . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Autumn"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about nature's beauty and color created in the autumn, my favorite season. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the change of color to the leaves and trees as the days grow shorter and the chill begins to nip the air that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor "fall's paintbrush"; nice use of personification "orange peeks behind" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty and color that is delightful. Your love of the fall permeates your poem and I can relate to these thoughts very much.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice internal rhyme in second stanza (nips/dips). Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Trees alight with reds and yellows
Orange peeks behind the greens" - I love these lines; they capture the beauty of the changing colors of leaves by lighting up the landscape for our pleasure.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Just Keep Going  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Yellow Rose . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Just Keep Going"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write and message about going on in the face of adversity that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. Good use of brevity. Well crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Nice imagery and descriptives. Through the lens of your heart, you paint a lovely picture on how a person can be motivating to one's self and to others that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable in this poetry.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express encouragement as well as good advice on how to motivate and uplift others as well as yourself by taking time to gift someone with a smile, always remembering that you are loved. I can relate to the wisdom of these words.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Sharing your heart without hesitation
Giving your time without reservation" - a beautiful sentiment that is so true and is uplifting to your spirit as well as those whom you touch; this is something we should all do to make our lives better and happier.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Thank you for sharing this message. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Fairport . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "In a Whispered Moment"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A beautiful write, thought provoking, short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt words of faith and inspirational message. Elegant verse. Very good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Harrisham Rhyme. Near perfect form written in free style meter.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as is the descriptive. You paint a lovely picture of this peaceful, special place we call heaven that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the passion, comfort and peacefulness one shall find one day in heaven, a celebration of being safe within God's loving hand, at home forever.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice alliteration. consonance and good assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Rapture to a whispered call,
Embraced within His loving hand" - uplifting, powerful words of hope found in the care of a loving God that is encouraging to heart and soul and an act of His gracious love.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Who Am I?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CJThomasson . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your "Who Am I?"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of this testimony of faith.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write of love and trust in the Savior that is heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a picture of God's grace, taking
you from the darkness of sin into the light of His redemption that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor about yourself - "a battered ship set adrift" and nice use of personification - to be set in
"the flaming arms of darkness": very nice descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully a powerful message of hope that new life in Christ has given you, with passion that uplifts and encourages that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about who you are as a believer in Christ. Good alliteration,
assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
But in the midst of my blindness
I found You; a shining light of hope; - these two lines express something all believers in Christ have learned, the blindness of our sin
is taken away by the Savior, our beacon of hope and saving faith. Well stated.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of Heaven Opened  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Whitemorn . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Heaven Opened"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is uplifting and suitable to the subject of your poem.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love Japanese form poetry and this is a very good write about a love's beginning that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. Heartfelt, romantic and whimsical. A well crafted traditional Tanka. Perfect 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a stirring yet memorable picture of destiny that is seen through the chance encounter at love's inception that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Not applicable.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Not applicable in this Japanese form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the light and joy of new love shared between soul mates that hold passion and blessing that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
"Destiny perfectly timed
Enhanced perceptions" - I love this expression of love's design, that it occurs exactly on time, at the right place with the right people that will experience heaven's bliss.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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