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Review of Cherished Tears  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by celiasgirl for the poem "Cherished Tears"  for the activity "King's Landing updating " .

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Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**


This is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry but I'm partial to minimalistic poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write of love and adoration for the Lord that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and introspective testimony of your abiding faith in Him. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy very much.

Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of our Lord's love, care and compassion He has for you that any reader can appreciate.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm with nice use of enjambment.

Deep expression of emotion. Poignant. You express your trust in the Lord, the tenderness He bestows upon you because He knows and understands your troubles and pain beautifully with subdued power in this piece. There is a sense of prayerful thankfulness for His consolation, love and care that permeates your poem from beginning to end.

Word choice is good as is your use of repetition and dialogue for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good use of assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a semi-colon at the end of line two; add a period at the end of line four and add a period at the end of line six. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion. I especially like these lines that captures our Lord's love and care:
"Tenderly, You bind my deep wounds
soothing, crooning, “Hush child, I love you”" - in these two lines you express the power of His love, a theme that is conveyed throughout the poem.

**Overall**

In your short poem you give us a beautiful picture of being cherished by our Lord and Savior, a precious gift that we can always depend upon. He touches your soul with His eternal love. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by The prodigal son returns 2023. for the poem "Lazing with Butterflies"  for the activity "King's Landing updating " .

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Good day to you. My name is Shelley and I will be reviewing the above mentioned piece in your portfolio today.

**Impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of this poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most forms of poetry and I'm partial to short poems especially if they rhyme of which this is a fine example. I love fantasy and this is a very good write about the magic in nature that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and uplifting. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your words that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and taste. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid yet imaginative picture of the fun and magic that is almost dreamlike in nature that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of simile: in nature to awake "as a flower blooming" - good descriptive comparison. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdedde. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in lines two and three (faeries, memories).

Lovely depth of feeling. I love the sense of joyfulness and delight that permeates your poem. Enchanting; charmed and cheerful... with just a tinge of darkness due to a passing storm which in nature comes and goes. A very special place that inspires goodwill.

Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line two and remove the comma at the end of line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion. I especially like the following lines:
"Dream of memories yet to come,
Soar from a cliff where the eagle dwells." - I like the power and imagery of these lines; it's implication of the magical in nature that is entered through your dreams, you only have to look for it.

**Overall**

I love make believe. Fantasy is a favorite genre that I'm drawn to in poetry and that you mix faeries, elves in nature in this poem takes me to this special place you are writing about. Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!


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Review of Exam Anxiety  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by luvleepoet . "This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review" for your poem "Exam Anxiety"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry and this one is a favorite. A good write about the pressure you feel when you're about to take an exam that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feelings through, sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the stress and anxiety you feel about testing that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice use of metaphor: that the test, "words on a page, circles on a sheet" - holds you confined. Nice use of descriptive/comparison. Nice use of perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines six and eight (sheet, feat); lines ten and eleven (see, me) and in lines eighteen and twenty (defeat, sheet). Nicely done.

Good depth of feeling. You express fear, agitation and alarm as you agonize over taking an exam that I can certainly commiserate with. Taking tests are my least favorite things. I can relate.

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the anxiety that exams cost you. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three; change the comma to a period at the end of line eight; change the comma to a period at the end of line fourteen; change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line eighteen and remove the comma at the end of line nineteen. This will make the flow and rhythm of the lines following even better in my opinion.

My favorite lines are:
"The clock ticks tirelessly toward
My inquisition of intelligence," - this says it all; the affect one feels at the beginning of a test. It vividly captures the building stress that comes when being tested, this theme that is followed through to the end of the piece.

**Overall**

This is a powerful picture of your view of testing. Very good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Warrior  
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Word Warrior beating cancer!! for the poem "Warrior" . "This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review". Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, but I'm drawn specifically to form and this is one of my favorites and is a fine example. A good write about what your 'handle' characterizes... how you see that 'self' of your creation. Good use of brevity. A well crafted free style metered rhyming Acrostic which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and emotion - fear, longing, defiance, bravery. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the attributes of this special warrior, this self of your creation, a 'knight' that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaa bbbbbbb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line eight (stand, and) (to, do).

Deep expression of emotion. You express the character and chivalry of this special warrior; his faith in God, the only one he answers to; that he knows fear as well as bravery and above all he is a survivor as he strives to become the person he wants to be. This is an uplifting and encouraging portrait of this special brand of warrior. Well done.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration and consonance with nice use of assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

My favorite lines:
"Wayward son, his own father he never knew,
Almighty God, the only One he answers to." - this is a powerful description of this 'alter ego' a portrait of a strength of character that is carried throughout your poem.

**Overall**

You portray a chivalrous and proud warrior in search of wholeness, a man of conscience who is not afraid to do what is right, to do what must be done to be the person he wants to be. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Here Today  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Jimbo . "This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review" for your poem "Here Today"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection the the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry, and minimalistic poetry is one of my favorites of which this is a fine example. A very good write and message about making sure that you take time every day to enjoy all that is around you while you still can because life can be short. Very good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Septolet. Perfect form.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice use of metaphor about life, its "fleeting drum" - good descriptive/comparison. Nice use of end line rhyme in lines three and seven (drum, come).

Good depth of feeling; you express the need to experience life each day, the gift of today that is gone tomorrow. Earnest and encouraging with a sense of warning not to let the opportunity one gets each day go by for tomorrow it will be gone, and you might not get another chance at it. Thought provoking.

Word choice is good; nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one and change the period to a comma at the end of line two and change the period to an ellipsis (...) at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Because this is such a short form of poetry, I like all of the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of taking time to "smell the roses" - the opportunities that may be here for you today and gone tomorrow.

**Overall**

Cleverly written. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of The Terrible Gift  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by GeminiGem of House Lannister . "This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review" for your poem "The Terrible Gift"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and this type is a favorite of mine. A very good write about your bout/fight with breast cancer that is heartfelt, introspective and powerful. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy very much.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through fear, pain and time. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of your reaction to breast cancer that causes within you so many emotions, many questions that run the gambit as you take in this health issue that has blind sided you that any reader can perceive.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nice use of metaphor for breast cancer as a "gift", anger as a "lightning strike" and nice use of simile ""scared as a lost child" - good descriptive/comparisons.

Deep expression of emotion; dark. You express an implied sense of disbelief, then devastation, anger, fear, numbness, helplessness, hurt. Powerful use of contrasts to express the depth of your feelings.

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition and use of rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the semi-colon at the end of line six; to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line twelve. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion. These are my favorite lines:
"It was an unwanted gift
with terrible powers;" There are so many lines in this piece that expresses your feelings about having breast cancer but I think these two lines say it all and it is this theme that is carried though from beginning to ending of your poem.

**Overall**

This is an expressive write that expresses your frame of mind; the power that cancer has over the body and mind; how it doesn't just affect you, but all of those close to you branching out into all aspects of your life. I can relate. Excellent closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by turtlemoon-dohi for the poem "Rain's Healing Sound" . "This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review". Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and I'm partial to rhyme and this is a good example of it. A very good write about Native people in this ceremonial dance for rain that is heartfelt. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming Couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the rain dance; its power and ceremony in the prayerful call for rain by the people that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Nice metaphor for land "Earth Mother" - good descriptive/comparison. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line nine (stories, tapestries).

Good depth of feeling. You express the power, mystery and faith of the rain dance, a sacred ceremony passed down from the ancestors and through it their plea answered for the rain. You express the harmony between Creator, creation and creatures through the steps of the dance and the stories it tells. Nicely done

Word choice is good. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. My favorite lines are:
"Prayers are danced, as ancestors before; now and long ago years.
Believing a quest will be answered, they listen with spiritual ears." I love these lines. They express the power of tradition and faith of the ceremony, one in which the tribe takes part in that is harmonious between Creator, creation and creatures.

**Overall**

I like how you describe what the essence of the rain dance entails; the blessings it brings through the music and dance that is in harmony with each other. Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Harmony  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by {suser:hunters moon} for the poem "Harmony" . "This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review". Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and rhyming poetry is a favorite of mine of which this is a good example. A good write about the essence and power of the rain dance; the harmony between nature, land and creatures as the people sing and dance for much needed rain. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of this ceremony; this song of faith through the dance of the people who watch the sky for answer to their prayer... rain, that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nice personification of the sun as "friend" and "foe" and the rain as "heaven's tears" - good descriptive/comparisons. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line four of the third stanza (need, plead).

Lovely depth of feeling. Prayerful. Faith is expressed with subdued power. Ardent, earnest and fervent in this ceremony that brings harmony between man and nature in this call for rain and the faith that their request will be heard as the sky turns from clear to gray with the approaching storm. Nicely done.

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Grammar: in line three of the first stanza should be "It's" (conjunction for it has). Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "spirits" in line three of the third stanza and to remove the period at the end of line three of the fifth stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion.

My favorite lines in this piece:
"The elders, in one voice, have spoken.
Together we’ll beseech the rain
in song, both aloud and unspoken,
to visit our land once again." - I love the 'music' of these lines when spoken aloud. The faith expressed is implied with power in this their prayerful call for rain... spoken and unspoken. This belief of those who sing and dance prayerfully for rain is followed through to the end of the poem. Nicely done.

**Overall**

I love the picture of harmony between Creator, creation and creatures that is a central theme in this piece. Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Bison Thirst  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by ♥Hooves♥ for the poem "Bison Thirst" . "This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review". Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and I'm partial to rhyming poetry of which this is a fine example. A very good write and prayer about the need for rain to water the lands ending thirst for it and its creatures that is heartfelt. Good interpretation of the picture prompt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound, temperature and touch. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of a drought, parched land and the hardship it brings to the creatures who live upon it and find sustenance in it in this prayerful request for rain and why it is needed that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nice personification of clouds, they: "tease" and "play tricks" - good descriptive/comparisons. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Lovely depth of feeling; a prayer of petition of prayer to the Great Spirit for rain that is earnest, passionate, fervent and sincere. Lovely words of adoration to the Great Spirit and His power over His creation.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a period at the end of line two of the first stanza; add a semi-colon at the end of line two and a period at the end of line four of the second stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion.

These are my favorite lines in your poem:
"Great Spirit, hear my plea
Bring to all who roam your fields
Gentle rain, light, fast and free!" - I love the depth of power in this prayer, this plea for much needed rain to water and feed His creation by those who are earth's caregivers. This theme is followed through to the end of your poem.

**Overall**

You express the faith of the people coming together to chant and pray for rain; the trust in the Creator that He will hear this petition and send rain. Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by christo . "This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review" for your poem "dreaming of drawers"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. I like your use of alliteration in the title. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry and this type is a favorite for me. A good write about your memory of a love once shared, hidden away behind one of many drawers in your mind that expresses a longing for what once was that is heartfelt and introspective. Abstract. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and scent. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of a past relationship; love shared that once was important to you, touching you deeply that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Nice metaphor of your mind, the many drawer's holding memories of love; nice personification of drawer, it "yawns" and nice use of simile: shirts "like tongues, hanging out" - good descriptive/comparison.

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the longing for this relationship, this love that is no more with poignance. I like the understated sense of affection and a wish that you still had that love in your life. There is a sense of loss, of sadness that is pictured in this relationship, this bond that once touched you with a depth that hasn't been forgotten and that you miss.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "shirts" and "tongues" in line three; remove the comma after "moment" in line seven and remove the comma after "back" in line nine. This will make the flow and rhythm in the lines following even better in my opinion.

**Overall**

"i want to whisper
just once more
about how i lived
before you came" - I love the power of these lines, the power of regret implied that is carried through much of the poem; your wish to have these feelings, have a chance at this relationship, just one more time to feel this contentment and closeness to that special person that somehow has been lost to you. I like your use of images in nature, of the sea and the places you had been together that gives power to your memories. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by 💙 Carly . "This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review" for your poem "Summer Storm - Etheree poem"  for "Random Thoughts and Cares" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Good use of alliteration in title. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and I'm partial to short form of which this is a fine example. A very good write about a rain storm that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity; good shape and aesthetically pleasing. A skillfully crafted Etheree. Perfect syllabic form.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a stormy day, a heavy day of rain that soaks everything in its midst that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Nice personification of sky: it expresses its "wrath" - good descriptive/comparison. Nice use of internal rhyme in lines eight and nine (hover, cover). Good depth of feeling; you express the power and fury of the storm beautifully in this piece. Ferocious, threatening and gloomy; nice use of contrast in the many traits of the rain storm. Nicely done.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

**Overall**

Since this is a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of this summer rainstorm that I can relate to very well. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Dawn  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Legerdemain for the poem "Dawn"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and minimalistic poems are a favorite of which this is a good example. A very good write about dawning of day in its silent beauty that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. An aesthetically pleasing shape poem that I enjoyed very much.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of dawn as the first light of day pierces the darkness of the waning evening in its range of colors that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Nice personification of dawn, she reaches out; nudges "moonlight"; she touches and caresses. Good descriptive/comparisons. Good depth of feeling; I like the sense of enchantment that you express with dawn. You capture its beauty with a serenity and calm that comes as day breaks that holds the one gazing upon it spellbound in its awe. I can relate.

Good word choice: nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this moment seen in early morning. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. Spelling: check line ten, I think the word should be "ethereal". No punctuation errors found. I especially like these lines:
"Tendrils reaching
Through rising mists
Nudging cool moonlight" - This is a lovely image. I love the subdued power of these lines that are so beautiful and serene as "Dawn" nudges moonlight away to bring the soft rays of the morning sun to awaken the day. This theme is carried through to the end of the piece. Nicely done.

**Overall**

I enjoyed 'seeing' this moment as painted by your words. Well penned and a mot enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of February 14th  
In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Maineiac . Good day to you.

"This is an official NAFP (Native American First People's) Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "February 14th" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A nice title that suits the subject of your poem.

*Star**Star*General/Form/Style:*Star**Star*
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and short poems are a favorite. A good write as you questioning why this bleak, cold and stormy month is the time when a holiday for love and romance is celebrated. Thoughtful. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of cold starkness, bad weather of this barren winter season when love is celebrated that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor: wind "a howling wall of snow"; nice personification of ground, it "screams" and nice use of simile: "cold like a razor" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Good use of internal rhyme in line one (snow, glow); in line two (one, done); in line three (deep, weep) and line four (above, love). Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; dark, depressing, dissatisfied, discontented and gloomy about this time when celebration of love takes place.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; nice use of rhetorical question for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (howling). No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this poem is short, I like all the lines of this poem because they contribute to the writer's wonder as to why love is celebrated in such a dismal month.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Sadness  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello MichelleP . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Sadness"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the poem's theme while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry but short poems, especially if they rhyme, are a favorite of which this is a good example. A very good write about how sadness makes a person feel; the bleakness of it that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. Thoughtful. Clever word play. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes of evokes feeling of pain and sorrow. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of what sorrow looks like when a person goes through it that any reader can recognize and appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb deae. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is a nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. Poignant. I like the truth and wisdom of your words that expresses sadness. I like the subdued power of your words expressing how heartache is released, a real feeling that can be seen and heard.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis a feeling about the emotion of sadness. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line five; change the period to a comma at the end of line six and remove the comma at the end of line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of expressing sadness.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Peaceful Solitude  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello arlene . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Peaceful Solitude"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and short poems are a favorite of which this is a nice example. A good write about your quiet time, your early morning moments of peaceful contemplation that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct. I like the poetic prose feel of this writing that I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You utilize this poetic device nicely in this poem. Nice use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling of calm as your day begins. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of a time of repose and tranquility in the early morning that gives balance to your spirit before the busyness of the day takes over that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphor about your thoughts, they "run free" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice use of internal rhyme in line one (new, through) and in line four (be, free, be, me). Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty and necessity of this peacefulness that gives serenity to your spirit; the silence that lets your thoughts run free as I sense in between the lines the implication of being inspired and being able to dream in thoughtful contemplation before the interruptions of life take over your day. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings about this quiet time you enjoy. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: check line three, should be "interruptions". Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following line even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of having time each morning in quiet solitude, time just for you to energize before the busyness of your day begins. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Penelope Blizzard . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Anticipated Snow Day"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and I'm partial to rhyme and this is a good example of it. A very good write and message about expecting a day off from school due to a snowstorm that doesn't come to fruition... oh, how I remember those days in my past as a child and the memory of it made me laugh. A delightful story poem. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of how anticipation of bad weather (a snow day) does not always end in a day off from school that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line twelve (to, do); and in lines seventeen and eighteen (say, Today, day) and in line twenty (wild, mild). Well done.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. I love the humor of this piece. It was very amusing as well as the sense of astonishment that was promoted when the "snow day" didn't happen and a day off from school was denied. I could feel the desolation felt of losing the precious day off then falling back on his "just in case sick card" that his mother saw through. I could sympathize with his disappointment... I think we've all gone through something like this. I could relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is your use of repetition and dialogue for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three; remove the comma at the end of lie ten; to change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line fourteen and remove the comma at the end of line fifteen. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Nature is ever-changing and never assured,
However, you can be sure that your ruse has not a day off procured." I love these lines. They're powerful words of wisdom as well as a clever saying that will be remembered in future when trying to get a day off from school through perceived cunning. These lines sum up the lesson learned from the story poem. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Balance  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello StarvingArtist . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Balance"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet who loves to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry but I'm partial to rhyme and this is a good example of it. A very good write and message about the balance that we need in life in regards to how we see what exists around us that affects that balance that we so desire. Heartfelt, introspective and thought provoking. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording to promote and evoke feeling through sight, sound and temperature. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the importance of balance is to ones life and that through the images of the things we see around us, experience and through change can affect it that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme. Nice use of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme (exist, bliss; peace, cease; night, light; could, good).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the contrast of many feelings: love, hate; joy, sadness; war/peace and light/dark... all of which affects the balance in our lives. I like the implications of your thoughts that through what we experience around us comes hope, concern, contentment as well as learning about loss though suffering and grief so that we can be thankful for the balance that we build in our lives. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feelings as expressed through the contrasts of what we see in life. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line five; remove the comma at the end of line seven; remove the comma at the end of line ten and remove the period at the end of line twelve. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Without the coldness of night,
we could not appreciate the light." There are many contrasts expressed in this piece which I enjoy, but this particular one I think is the best. This really gives a person a handle about what balance is in one's life (the good and bad) which gives us hope day by day. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. I like how you use a question to end your poem for you answered it in everything that came previous to it. Well done and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Change  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jadedjenz . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Change"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and this one is a favorite for me. A very good write about change and how it can affect one's life. Heartfelt; thoughtful. Skillfully crafted Free verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight, sound, temperature and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of turmoil one can feel when change takes charge in your life, how it can bring to what was once balanced to disarray that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile: the tick of the clock "like night to Day" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice use of internal rhyme in lines one through four (takes, shake, quake). Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express how change can disrupt your life thus bringing an instability that is upsetting to your spirit, takes you off the even keel to hanging on for dear life before you can get back to that balance that you crave. There is implied feelings of anxiety due to that change as well as apprehension that beleaguers the spirit. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about how change affects a person's life. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one; remove the comma at the end of line five; remove the period at the end of line six; remove the comma at the end of seven; change the period to a comma at the end of line eight; remove the period at the end of line ten; change the period to a semi-colon at the end of line fifteen; remove the comma at the end of line seventeen. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Not even the gale winds,
nor the deepest ocean waves.
Could ever compare,
to the universal force.
The chaos of change." This is a powerful description of what change can be in a person's life. I like the imagery of the force of nature change can evoke; something that all of us can relate to. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Love and Life  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Penelope Blizzard . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Love and Life"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry (especially short pieces) and this one is a favorite of mine. A very good write about love, life and the difficulties of addiction that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words that promotes and evokes feelings of sadness through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of a love that is troubled by addiction in a beloved partner that causes a struggle that is trying to this relationship that any reader can empathize with and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good use of simile: "unkind word cuts like a knife" and "tears flow like tributaries from the ocean..." good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. Poignant with a sense of desperation. You express the deep pain and sadness you feel about this addiction that is bringing ruin, anguish and distress to your relationship that any reader can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the one you love. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "knife" in line five; remove the comma at the end of lines six and seven and remove the comma at the end of line nine. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"The alcohol permeates your beautiful spirit,
Turning you into a familiar stranger,
Rather than the man I love." Powerful expression of your love as well as describing the change in temperament to the man you love due to his addiction... he's familiar but at the same time a stranger. Good use of inversion. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by turtlemoon-dohi for the poem "Two Warriors Sent To Save The People "  for the contest "N.A. First Peoples' Form Poetry Contest" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"Two Warriors Sent To Save The People" is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and this one is a favorite as well as being an excellent example of it. A very good write about the physical and spiritual bond in these warriors who are tied together in their journey of life. Heartfelt and uplifting. A very good interpretation of the picture prompt that is edifying and thought provoking. Skillfully crafted Free Verse that I enjoy very much. Imagery and descriptives are well done and this poetic device is utilized beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and interaction between all that the Creator has created. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of relationship, love, beauty and strength of spirit that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. A story of reflection, tradition and truths taught to The People from the ancestors, encouragement to lead the families, his family from their life of poverty and despair to a place of hope from the Spirit lessons planted in the hearts of those who follow the Creator. I especially like the relationship of the warriors, horse and rider; their respect and care of each other as they search for the home where there will be true rest and peace. Tone is lovely; I like the lyrical sense that permeates the piece; the music of the streams and rivers... a dance/celebration of life and being one with it in the Native way. You have expressed the power of memory and how it can touch a life deeply. Good word choice; nice use of repetition for emphasis on the lot of The People. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "dance" in line thirteen and to remove the period after "Creator" in line twenty-one. This will make the flow and rhythm of the lines following even better in my opinion. There are so many lines that I love in your poem, but these are some of my favorites:
"Every drum-beat and moccasin-step memory from the village
resounded in his traveling mind's eye and heart;
a gift of courage to continue on the journey with a vision
of finding the land of hope and prosperity for The People." - I think these lines are the essence of the whole poem. They are beautiful, powerful and touches the depth of the spirit.

**Overall**

I love the prayerful ending of the piece, one of thankfulness, hope and guidance in life. Very good closing lines. Thank you for participating in the contest. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Oldwarrior for the poem "Oldwarrior's Quest"  for the contest "N.A. First Peoples' Form Poetry Contest" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"Oldwarriors Quest" is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and this is a fine example of one of my favorites. A good write from the first person perspective about a warrior's quest to find and return home his beloved child that is heartfelt and poignant. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy. Imagery and descriptives are done well as is the utilization of this poetic device. Color and shading in your wording is done well and promotes and evokes feeling through sight. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of a father's love for a precious daughter who has been taken from him as he seeks her in his quest to rescue and reunite with her that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm as is the use of enjambment. Good use of simile: his "thundering heart stretches like a woman ripe with child" and his "mind flows freely like the slithering embers of a dying fire" and "lost memories like the cold whispering of the midnight wind" - good descriptive/comparisons. Tone is good; deep expression of emotion; passionate anger, yet mournful expressing the bitterness felt in this father's heart, all with an underlying distress of this father for his child taken from his loving embrace. Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a comma after "now" in line one of the third stanza; to remove the comma after "daughter" in line three of the fourth stanza and add a comma after "happiness" at the end of line five of the fourth stanza and to change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line six of the fifth stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm of the lines following even better in my opinion. I especially like the following lines that describes the the character of the warrior (and tribe) who took the child of Oldwarrior:
"The Kiowa are not people blessed of First Man
but are woven from evil spirits
who haunt and rape our land and steal our children," - powerfully dark description of this enemy tribe, one that preys on women and children... but even so, this will not stop a father's quest to retrieve his daughter.

**Overall**

Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in the contest. Write on!

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Review of Alone Again  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Rixfarmgirl for her poem "Alone Again"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"Alone Again" is a very good title for this piece. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Good use of alliteration in the title.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I also love most styles of poetry and this one is a good example of minimalistic form which is a favorite for me. A very good write about love and romance that deteriorates and ends leaving behind loneliness and deep sadness that is short, concise and succinct. Very good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Jigsaw poem. Imagery and descriptives are nicely done; vivid coloring to express the pain of love that does not end well that any reader can comprehend. Line transition and breaks are done well with very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling; love that starts with so much hope, joy and blissfulness moves to hurt and incrimination that quickly disintegrates and there is a lamentfulness as well as an implied sense of regret and sorrow that is deep and introspective. Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. Since this is such a short form of poetry, I love all the lines of the piece because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of love ending badly that is powerfully expressed, almost in a staccato tempo of word play.

**Overall**

Very good closing line. I like the 'laddering' of each stanza that also gives one a sense of breaking down through the use of shape. Well crafted and a very good read.

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Review of Writer's Write  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Rixfarmgirl for the poem "Writer's Write"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"Writer's Write" is a very good title for this piece. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of form poetry and this one is a favorite and good example of it. A very good write about writing, why we do it and how it is an important part/extension of who we are. Heartfelt. Very good use of brevity. A well crafted Triolet. Perfect rhyme scheme. Excellent execution of perfect masculine end line rhyme. Although this form usually is written with each line being eight syllables, the poet has chosen that each line is seven syllables long. Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. The rhythm of this piece is very good; line transition is well done. Good depth of feeling about why she feels this way about writing... why writer's write which I can relate to very well. She utilizes very good word choice and repetition for emphasis of feeling which also drives this form of poetry. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Since this is such a short form of poetry, and repetition is the focal point of this form, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of why writers write.

**Overall**

Good closing lines. This piece is well penned and a most enjoyable read.

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Rixfarmgirl for her poem "Nature's Beauty, a Butterfly Poem"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


"Nature's Beauty is a very good title for this piece. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry. I especially like short poetry and if it rhymes, that is just icing on the cake. This is a very good write about the beauty one sees in nature that is heartfelt. I love minimalistic poetry and this poet utilizes brevity with excellence in her portrayal of artistry we find in nature. This is a shape poem, that of a butterfly, which is executed nicely. Within this poem the reader sees the appeal and attraction of the scenes captured in nature. Imagery and descriptives are vivid. The color and life pictured is alluring as it brightens the world around us. Rhyming in this piece is excellent. Her execution of perfect masculine end line rhyme and internal rhyme is done skillfully. There is lovely depth of feeling in her words. One senses the love she has as she views nature from her own eyes. Her use of personification is subtle, but it is there which deepens the meaning of the poem. I love all the lines in this poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of the piece, beauty we find in nature, but if I had to choose my most favorite lines they would be:

"And buds take wing to soar in flight
As Earth unfolds her beauty bright." - it is in these words that the true essence of nature's beauty is found and this theme permeates the entire poem.

**Overall**

This is an excellent write and I enjoyed the powerful images portrayed in such a short piece. Well penned and a most enjoyable read.

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Review of Ancient Song  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a micro-review for poetry written by Bandit's Mama for the poem "Ancient Song"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**impressions**


I love the title for this piece. It is creative. "Ancient Song" sets the stage for the poem in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time capturing its essence as is acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love most styles of poetry and short poems are one of my favorite. I really enjoy minimalistic poetry and this is a very good example of it. This is a beautiful write about the song of the loons heard in the evening; there's an implied sense of the magical hearing these haunting tunes that calls out to the listener. Excellent use of brevity in this skillfully crafted Free Verse piece that is short, concise and succinct. The imagery and descriptives is powerful. The scene is vivid and I can almost see myself listening for the call of these birds, a melody that soothes the heart and spirit. There is lovely depth of feeling in this piece. I love the peacefulness of it that touches one's heart and soul. I love the call and response that the listener hears as the birds "sing" to each other. Very good word choice and use of repetition that emphasizes the feeling. I like the use of inversion. Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. I especially like these two lines:

"They knit the fabric of the night
With voices sweet through early light." I love the powerful sense of the lyrical in these lines... it promotes the special 'night' music that is carried through from the beginning to the end of the piece.

**Overall**

This is a lovely piece. I love the ambience of it. Simply beautiful. Well penned and a most enjoyable read.

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