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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CreativeExpression (Diane) . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Walk in the Woods"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it and reflects the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry, especially when it rhymes. A good write about walking alone in the woods that is short, concise and succinct. Good use of brevity. A well crafted free style metered rhyming poem which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of her walk, alone with no communication when she hears something that causes her to become fearful that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccdddd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. I like how the suspense builds throughout the poem. You express the fear she feels about a mysterious sound very well and having no way to contact anyone that makes her heart beat faster. One can sense her nervousness as she looks around to see what made the noise and then her relief when she realizes who the culprit was, a rabbit. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to add a period at the end of line two; add a semi-colon at the end of line four; add a period at the end of lines six and eight. This will give emphasis to each thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is a short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of what she experience on her walk alone in the woods and how she 'scares' herself that at the end of the poem gives the reader a bit of comic relief. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Skeletons of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello J'nell . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Skeletons of Life"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this is a good example of one. A good write and message about what persons have hidden away from those close to them, secrets that are always there and seem to fan the fire of guilt and discontent that break down rather than build up. Heartfelt. Thoughtful. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise, and succinct; all of which I do enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice utilization of this poetic device. Nice use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling about the way secrets can tear a person down causing problems with relationships. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of discontentment; how keeping secrets can build up in your 'life's closet' which is carried around with a person wherever they go and slowly brings about ruin to them and their relationships that any reader can relate to.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor about secrets kept in life, these "skeletons" that all of us have and hide. Nice descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express an implication of fear and conflict that occurs in regards to secrets kept that tear away at a person deep inside and causes inner turmoil as well as breaking down relationships with others. Obstructive.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of lines three and four and change the period to an ellipses (...) at the end of line five; remove the comma at the end of lines six and nine. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short poem, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole theme/subject about how these "skeletons" work to destroy a person and their relationships with an insidiousness that seems to have a power of its own.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of My Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CreativeExpression (Diane) . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Dreams"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write and message about your dreams that are heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct and which I enjoy very much.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice utilization of this poetic device. Good use of color and shade to your words to promote and evoke feeling about your dreams. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of life change and its affect upon your dreams and how your choices keep your dreams alive that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abcbdefegfhf. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (renewed, skewed; afraid, made, ahead, dead).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about your life journey that is upbeat in attitude and encouraging. I like your outlook on life, how it is a choice made that moves forward towards your ultimate goal of securing your dreams. A hopeful pep talk to yourself with an implied message that your dreams are achievable and that they're not dead, a message that any reader can relate to. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I'm on the right path now
No longer afraid
Of the changes ahead
Or the choices I've made" - I love these lines. I think all of us have felt this way at some time during our lives. You express well how good it feels when you sense and know you have chosen the right direction in your life, a theme that you carry through with to the end of your poem. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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129
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello O. D. D. Cummings . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "In This Day And Age..."  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this is a good example of it. A very good write and message about the 'social' technological age that is short, concise and succinct. Excellent use of brevity. Clever word play. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice utilization of the poetic device. The color and shading used in your words promote and evoke feeling through interaction in social media. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of how a person expresses their feelings in the digital age that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabcdefcge. Nice use of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. I like the "punch" in this social commentary. Very good advice and words of wisdom that any reader can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the message. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line five; change the comma at the end of line six to a semi-colon and remove the comma at the end of line nine. This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
This is short poetry and I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of connecting with others in the information age, a message of how one should conduct themselves in social media. Well thought out with implied power.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Tim Chiu . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Two Faithful Lovers"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about this special loving relationship that lasts through the years. A heartfelt and edifying dedicatory piece. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling about this long lasting relationship that deepens through the years. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of true love, its beauty and joy, the excitement of their journey together and hope for the future through good times and bad that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphor for home (earth): "this wondrous blue-green orb" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. A beautiful, heartfelt blessing upon this couple through the peaks and valley's of their lives forever entwined together in love that deepens as time passes. Lovely expression of romance through imagery of nature that touches the heart and soul. Hope permeates this piece, the wonder of true love, its power felt from beginning to end. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"From the rosy, golden hues of a brand new day,
To the deepening skies of a harkening dusk,
Two soon-to-be-engaged, distant lovers
Embark on an inspiring and momentous journey." - I love these lines. It's a powerful beginning expressing the specialness of their relationship; their union and the journey they are about to begin together that is heartfelt, deep and the hope for them and their future, that essence/implication that is followed through to the end of the poem. Simply lovely.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Winter Wonderland  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Nellafantasia . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Winter Wonderland"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write in the first person perspective about your venture outside on a cold snowy winter night that is heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading to your words to promote and evoke feeling about this season through sight, scent, touch and taste. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your evening stroll; how you spent this wintery night that was cold and snowy that ended with your respite from it, inside where you warmed up drinking hot cocoa, relaxed then curled up in bed to dream that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dede fefg hihi. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme in line three of the third stanza (cocoa, so).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about this cold, snowy night, how you spent it and enjoyed it in its peacefulness that any reader can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about how you spent this night. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
This is a fairly short poem and I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole theme/subject of the piece about how you spent this particular winter night. You expressed your observations about the cold and what you did to relieve it nicely.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Life of a Leaf  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello CreativeExpression (Diane) . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Life of a Leaf"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of the theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this is a very good example of it. A very good write about what life is like through the cycle of time and seasons that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading to your words that promote and evoke feeling about the life cycle and its affects on a person. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the life cycle, its beauty through renewal, growth, aging to hibernation and back to the budding life of renewal; a cycle that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very good use of metaphor of a person, their cycle of life as seen in a leaf: "change with the seasons"; "I bud"; "I bloom"; "I brown" (age); "I die" and rebirth "become part of the earth" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express with warmth and fervor the cycle of life in a person through years of growth as seen through the character of the leaf. Profound and thought provoking.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the life cycle. Good use of alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Like a leaf on a tree
I change with the seasons" Excellent opening lines. I like the power expressed and the poignancy implied in these lines, the theme of which is carried through with a brilliance that continues throughout to the end of the poem. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of The Dance  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Mr. Palindrome . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Dance"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I like short poetry and this one is nicely done. A good write about dance as it expresses the partnership between two people who draw closer to each other through the dance. Nice use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are good. You utilize this poetic nicely in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your words to promote and evoke feeling between dancers through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the nuances and romance of the dance between two people who find joy in each other that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express how these dancers feel happiness and joy by dancing together that draws them closer emotionally, uplifting their day by enjoying their time together that any reader can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis on the movement of the dance. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling erorrs found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "mix" in line five; remove the comma after "twirl" in line seven and add a comma after "tomorrow" in line eight. This will make the flow and rhythm in your poem even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Laughter and passion mix, forming emotions
and pictures never seen but in dreams." - I like the emotion expressed in these lines. It show how dance becomes romance to the two people sharing that moment, sharing a closeness from the catalyst of dance.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of 4th of July  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello fyn . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "4th of July"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I like short form poetry and this is a favorite of mine. A very good write about celebrating Independence Day. Heartfelt. Very good use of brevity. Skillfully crafted traditional Senryu chain. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading for words that promote and evoke feeling about this holiday through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye you paint vivid snapshots of the awesome beauty of a night sky painted by fireworks, inspired by Independence day that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition an breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm amnd enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the awe felt by those watching the beauty and majesty of fireworks in celebration of July 4th. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a note, punctuation (periods) are not usually used in haiku/senryu so I would remove the period at the end of the first two Senryu.

I especially like the following lines:
This is a short form of poetry and because of it I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole theme/subject which is the celebration of the 4th of July by fireworks enjoyed by the people that watch them all over the nation.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing Senryu. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Wonderland  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jaeff | KBtW of the Free Folk . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Wonderland"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this form is a favorite for me. A very good write about this magical place, Wonderland. Dark, deceptive and ensnaring. Good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Kyrielle Sonnet. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling about this imaginary place and how it draws one into it. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of Wonderland, a place where there is no hurt, pain or sorrow and a place that becomes a trap where one is never allowed to leave; an insidious land that is desired which any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: AabB ccbB ddbB AB. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; a deceptive invitation to escape from one's troubles. A cunning and crafty way to draw in its victims to this supposed 'safe' haven.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and which drives this poetic form. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: in the first stanza remove the comma at the end of line one and in the second stanza remove the comma at the end of line one. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Do not let real life take its toll;
Come deeper down the rabbit hole." - I love the rhythm and flow of these two lines and how they sound when read out loud. I like the subtle implication of one finding a place away from hardship in life, a way to escape problems by running away to this imaginary place that really doesn't solve anything and becomes another sort of jail that you cannot break out of.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing couplet. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Aquarius  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello intuey of House Lannister . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Aquarius "  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write and message about the personality and character traits of an Aquarian. Informative and heartfelt. Good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling about the temperament of persons born under this sign. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of an aquarian: enlightened, strong, creative, intelligent and kind that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor for the sun sign Aquarius: "your life giving water flows along." - good descriptive/comparison for

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccde ffgg. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts well about the inner being of an Aquarian with warmth and creativity. You express their strengths and weaknesses; that they are tenderhearted, feel things deeply and are willing to forgive.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, consonance with nice assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line one of the first stanza and remove the comma at the end of line one of the second stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm of the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Creative and intelligent, too,
Your charitable acts carry through." I love the sound of these lines when read out loud. I like their rhythm and flow. I like the edifying feel of these lines that imply these persons have good self-esteem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of Hearts  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello KerrieAnnS . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Hearts" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short form poetry and this is a very good example of it. A very good write about love and how it connects two people. Heartfelt. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Tyburn. Perfect 2/2/2/2/9/9 syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words to promote and evoke feelings of love through sight and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of love between two people that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This device is not applicable in this poem.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaabb. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of love, how it molds two people into one 'heart' as their love grows. I like the romantic feel of the lines as touch acts as a catalyst to bring two people together. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and drives this poetry form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is such a short form of poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of how love, through touch, brings two people together, melding them into one heart; a powerful and positive result of love. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Marching Orders  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jaeff | KBtW of the Free Folk . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Marching Orders"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and short form in particular. This is a good example of one. A very good write about soldiers, called to duty at any time to any place. Good use of brevity and interpretation of the prompt. A well crafted Rondelet that is short, concise and succinct. Perfect 4/8/4/8/8/8/4 syllabic form. Very nice minimalistic piece.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Good use of color and shade in your words that promote and evoke feeling about a soldiers lot in life. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of soldiers being called to duty, by whatever mean as ordered by the higher uppers that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: AbAabbA. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the staccato beat to the orders given to soldiers, rhythm and duties working hand in hand.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis on the subject as it drives this form of poetry. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Since this is a short form of poetry, I like all the lines of the poem because they contribute to the whole subject/theme of what is expected of soldier at any given moment. I like the subdued power of the lines.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello intuey of House Lannister . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Obsessive Thoughts"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I like short poetry and this is a good example of it. A very good write about obsession that is heartfelt and dark. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are good. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words that promotes and evokes emotion of her behavior. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of her singularness; a disposition where there is no joy seen or felt in the moments in her life, only sadness as she finds no pleasure except in her dreams that any reader can sense and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of simile: "like a leech, the sadness won't flee" - a very somber descriptive/comparison that shows the darkness she is living in.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion. You express a bleakness in her life; she feels no joy as she lives a disheartening life. I sense a hopelessness that blinds her to anything but her dreams.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of how she feels. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, in your first stanza remove the comma at the end of line one; change the period to a comma at the end of line two and remove the comma at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Lost in a realm of obsession,
Like a leech, the sadness won't flee." - powerful image about this darkness which encompasses her, almost a mania that she seems to wallow in, a depressed state which seems to permeate the poem.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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Review of Without You  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Angels in my Ear . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Without You"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of the theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about dreaming of the beauty seen at sunset shared with someone dear to you yet, it is also illusive. Heartfelt, introspective, romantic and poignant. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words that promotes and evokes emotion through sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of a majestic sunset, its beauty and color that is breathtaking as the waves wash up against the shore that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very nice metaphor of the sun setting: "fingers of fire rake across the sky"; Nice personification of waves: it sheds "tears" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Nice masculine end line rhyme in lines two and three of the second stanza (sky, die).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express dreams of beauty and love shared implied, the romance of this moment that becomes fleeting as you hear a whispered goodbye... sadness and then awake to the reality of being alone. Powerful.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and dialogue for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice onomatopoeia (weeping, whisper). No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line two in the first stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following line even better in my opinion. Also, I suggest that you look at the fourth stanza, maybe limit the use of "and, " in one of the lines if possible.

I especially like the following lines:
"I saw fingers of fire
rake across the sky,
reluctant to die," - I love these lines. I love the imagery; the flow and rhythm of them. They're simply beautiful. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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for entry "Rhumba Way" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello fyn . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Rhumba Way"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of the theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I like short poetry, especially if it rhymes and this is a good example of it. A very good write about the sensuality of dance; the romance of it that is heartfelt. Good use of brevity. Good interpretation of the prompt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Good use of color and shading of words that evoke emotion through sight, sound and touch in regards to the dance. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the beauty of love as experienced through the dance; its tactile nature that at times can be steamy, stimulating and lustful as it stirs the heart of the couple as they move as one that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccddee. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you capture the intrinsic beauty of the dance that is delightfully sensual in this pas de deux moment between two people that enraptures them as well as those who watch that may be enchanted by it or flustered by their 'gyrations'. Good use of contrasts. Well done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in the rhumba. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"percussive rhythms, suggestive depiction,
intertwined legs: body friction." - I love these lines, the images they create, the rhythm of the lines, how they sound when read aloud and their suggestive sensuality. These lines definitely describe what some call dirty dancing, this theme that is carried through to the end of the poem.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Storm Writer . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "In Play With The Storm"  for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about returning home in a storm from a bird's point of view. Creative and imaginative. Clever word play. Good interpretation of the prompt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Good use of color and shading that evokes emotion through sight and sound during a storm. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of a powerful storm: rain, thunder and lightning that a bird must overcome to reach home to get out of it that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the heavens as having a voice which "grumble" and "echoes"; thunder, its "rhythmic clapping" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabccb ddeffe gghiih. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the determination of the bird to beat all odds in this storm to reach its final destination, the warmth and safety of its nest. I like how the suspense builds as the storm grows stronger as the bird battles the elements to reach home.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. Very nice use of onomatopoeia (grumble, echoes, rumble, clapping). No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"grey ocean of thunder,
dense, rhythmic clapping
in storm-clouds wrapping
the world down under" - I love the rhythm and sound of these lines when they are read out loud. Powerful images are expressed vividly. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Sssssh! I'm not really here. . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Reflections Revealed" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. Very nice use of alliteration in your title. Nice touch. It sets the stage for your poem by reflecting the intent of the theme while capturing its essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about a beautiful autumn scene reflected in a lake-like mirror that its viewers delight in on a brilliant fall day that is heartfelt and awe inspiring. Elegant verse. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Excellent use of color and shading of words that evoke emotion that the sights and sound in nature promotes in this season. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a majestic picture of an autumn day, a snapshot reflected in a body of water created by God above for the entertainment and wonder to those that view it that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor: "O' proud mirror" (a lake or other body of water); "inspiring still shot of nature." "currents' striped ripples, percolate an image"; Nice personification of symbiotic sensation of nature: it "satisfies the senses"; celebrates with "eye feast" holding "a banquet of clarity"; the evergreen trees: "pencil-like sentries" they salute "the handiwork of the Creator". - very creative descriptive/comparisons. Powerful images.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice internal masculine rhyme in the second line of the eight stanza (delight, flight); nice perfect feminine end line rhyme in the third and fourth lines of same stanza (places, spaces). Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty and majesty of autumn, a palette created by God that is breathtaking and uplifting to the spirit for the pleasure it brings to those who view it. A precious gift that is magical and warms the heart. I can relate.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Excellent word choice. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and this landscape of beauty in autumn. Nice use of rhetorical questions about what is more beautiful: "the reality or the reflection". Nice use of call and response. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three in the fourth stanza; remove the comma at the end of line one of the sixth stanza (the couplet); in the eighth stanza, remove the period at the end of line one and in the last stanza, line one, change the period to a colon. This will make the emphasis, flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines: There are so many wonderful lines in this piece.
"The viewer knows not which scene is more perfect;
the reality or the reflection.
Conflicted?" - This 'reader' (me) is also having a hard time deciding what is favorite of her favorite lines. I think these lines puts that thought across for both readers and viewers. Clever word play.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Binary Blindfold  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Liam . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Binary Blindfold" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your subject. I like your use of alliteration. Nice touch. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love form poetry and this a fine example of one and a favorite of mine. A good write and message about the world wide web and its affects upon the user. Clever word play. A well crafted Trijan Refrain. Near perfect form due to rhyme scheme variation. Perfect 8/6/8/6/8/8/4/4/8 syllabic form.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptive. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. I love your use of color and shading of your words to promote and evoke feeling through sight and sound in regards to computer technology. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of how addictive the internet universe (i.e. world wide web) is to everyone who accesses it; how it is our standard way to contact others and yet never "meet" them and it's the place where our children "play" as it becomes addiction in our daily lives that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Good use of iambic meter.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor: "the internet our universe"; "God the keyboard keys"; Nice personification of the internet: it kills, has a victim and leads people astray; - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababccccc dedefffff ghghiiiii. A nice mix of near perfect and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme line five of stanza one (dismiss, idleness); in stanza two line five (kill, will) and in stanza three line five (play, day).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; you express the power and addiction of the internet in our daily lives; how there is no way to get away from it, no rest from it; it has hidden dangers that aren't so hidden as well as its insidiousness in everything we do while we remain anonymous which is becoming a sad commentary in life.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the internet's power and is a poetic device that also drives this form of poetry. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The death of our morality
lies victim to its claim." - I like the power and truth of the words in these lines. Although technology can be good, there is a darkness in it as well that can do damage to those who become addicted to it. Deep and thought provoking.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello ♥Hooves♥ . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "♥Streets of Dingle♥" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A good write about visiting the sights in Ireland that is informing, entertaining and good fun. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I like your use of color and shading of words that evokes feelings through the senses of sight, sound, scent and taste in the different cities you walked in Ireland. Through the lens or your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the romance of this place, walking its streets, enjoying the sights, mingling with people and creatures that you came in contact with during your visit that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is a nice mix of near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the beauty and magic of these places you visited during the winter at Christmastime that held feelings of the joy, fun, and the ambiance of these places that any reader can enjoy and relate to. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in your walks to see the sights in Ireland. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one of your first stanza and add a comma to the end of line two; in the second stanza, line two add and apostrophe before the 's' in December and add a comma at the end of line three of the sixth stanza.

I especially like the following lines:
I liked so many of the stanzas of your poem but I think I liked this one the best--
"We walked the streets of Adare,
In Chawke’s Pub, we did alight
Songs sung by Noel McLoughlin
We spent that Winter’s night" - I like the rhythm and sound of these line when read aloud. I also love the sense of romance on this particular night, a night of togetherness enjoying the music. Simply lovely.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of For John  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello warriormom. Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "For John" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
"For John, a Brave Warrior" is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while it captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A beautiful write, message and tribute to your beloved friend and fellow writer that is heartfelt. Poignant; an uplifting eulogy of the life of a special friend and loved one. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this piece. Lovely use of color and shade that evokes emotion through pain, suffering and joy. Through the lens of your heart and eye, you've painted a vivid picture of a man who lived life to the fullest, in hope and strength that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice personification of Death as "enemy" and "lord" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abcb defe dd ghgh. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion with lovely words of hope and praise for this very special man in celebration of his life, a man of faith that will shine brightly within those he left behind. My condolences. He will be missed.

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Word choice is good with strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Elegant verse, lyrical. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"For when all was said and all was done,
we knew, by faith, that John had won." - I love the power of these lines, how the words sound when they are read out loud and its implication that he ran his life race well and won. Now he will receive his prize. He is a wonderful example of how to live life to the fullest even when you are in a battle to overcome an adversity.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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Review of A Small Death  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "A Small Death" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

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I love form poetry and this is one of my favorites. A very good write about the peacefulness and joy found in dreams that is heartfelt. Lovely presentation and interpretation of the inspirational image. Whimsical. A skillfully crafted English Sonnet. Perfect syllabic form.

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Imagery and descriptives are subtle yet well done. You utilize this poetic form nicely in this piece. Good use of color and shade to evoke emotion in this dream state though sight and sound. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this young woman's dream-filled sleep; her conversation with Morpheus on his plane of existence where there is only beauty, joy and peace that in a moment of indecision is gone that any reader can appreciate.

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Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Near perfect iambic pentameter. Well done.

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Nice metaphor for sleep "an alabaster veil of moonlight"; nice personification of Morpheus: he converses and "he croons" - good descriptive/comparisons.

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Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. A nice mix of dactyl, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

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Lovely depth of feeling; you express with subtle power a poignant sadness she carries, even in her dreams which affects the outcome of a peaceful rest that is out of her grasp as she suddenly awakens. Moving.

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Word choice is good. Elegant verse. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia (croons). Nice use of inversion. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"She lies in sleep, an alabaster veil
of moonlight shimmers with each rise, each fall," - I like the whimsy of these opening lines which are simply beautiful; they express her sleep (and implied dreams), this theme which is built upon through to the end of the poem. I love how the words sound when they are read aloud. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. I like how you end the final couplet with the creative touch of a question that gives power to her emotions upon awakening from her dream. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Carpe Diem  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dave . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Carpe Diem" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of your theme while it captures the poem's essence as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

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A very good write about the celebration of love in nature that is heartfelt and introspective. Romantic. A skillfully crafted Grossblank with perfect syllabic form.

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Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic form beautifully in this piece. Very good use of color and shading of words to evoke emotion through sight, sound and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of youthful love, the memories of it that warms the hearts of the adventurous nature between two lovers that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

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Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice enjambment. Excellent execution of iambic hexameter which is not an easy feat. Well done.

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Nice use of metaphor: "ghosts of summer whisper"; "turn the page of Nature's book" - good descriptive/comparison's about time and seasons passing by and memories of love flourish. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice use of internal feminine rhyme in line one (russet, sunset).

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Lovely depth of feeling. I like how you seize this special 'day of love'. You express the youthful exuberance of love and romance in the 'wild' of nature, something done with the brashness of youth; delightfully sensual with a dash of danger due to seasonal changes of temperature which can affect how the waves break upon the shore.

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Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"the ghosts of summer whisper in our ready ears
and reminisce about romantic escapades," - I love these line, the power of the image, the depth of love and a time of youthful exploits when you are in love, and have been for a long time. I love how memories of love that have stood through time is implied in these lines. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Dave . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the"Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Love's Sweet Repertoire" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage to reflect the theme's intent while it captures the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

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This is a new form of poetry that I was introduced to recently and I enjoy the fun and challenge of it. A good write about finding true love that changes one's perspective in life. Heartfelt, introspective and romantic. Whimsical. A skillfully crafted Roundabout. Perfect form.

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Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. Very nice color and shading of your words that promotes and evokes feeling through sight and touch. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of falling in love; the change you undergo when you met your soul mate, how she brought her loving light into you life and world and brought you true riches that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

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Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

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Nice use of metaphor: "Cupid's arrow brought love's flame" and your new love touched your heart by melting your "hard veneers" and she is a "star" - good descriptive/comparisons.

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Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccb bCddC cDaaD dAbbA. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

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Lovely depth of feeling; you express this life changing moment, one that seems magical when you at last met your true love and found the riches that really matter in her. Moving and stirs the heart; this is a feeling any reader can relate to.

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Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which drives this form of poetry. Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line three of the second stanza; to change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line two of the third stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm in the following lines even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"with your warm gaze,
and charming ways
to melt the hard veneers." - I really like these lines. I like their rhythm, I like how they sound when read out loud and they show just how life changing love can be. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Whispering Stars  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Angels in my Ear . Good day to you.
My name is Shelley and I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the "Invalid Item" . "This is also an official Paper Doll Gang Rockin' Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Whispering Stars" 

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it by reflecting the intent of its theme while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good write about the stars care to those they shine upon that is heartfelt and introspective. Whimsical ad romantic. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

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Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device beautifully in this piece. Your use of color and shade of your words evokes feeling through sight, a warmth of protection in the evening light. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of the purpose of moonlight and starlight, the love that is reflected below to earth through their light, invisible during day but bright at night that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment.

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Nice personification of the moon: its "loving gaze"; the stars: "conquered the earth"; they speak "whisper" - good descriptive/comparisons of their 'humanity'. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Nice dactylic and masculine end line rhyme in lines two and four of the second stanza (eternity, free).

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Lovely depth of feeling; you express beauty, peacefulness, comfort and love that warms the heart about these lights that guide your path. I love the sense of hopefulness that is implied in the character of the moon and stars. I can relate.

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Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling expressed by the moon and stars to those they shine upon. Very nice use of dialogue in the stars spoken message that it whispers to you. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion in the first stanza remove the comma at the end of line one; in the second stanza change the comma to a semi-colon at the end of line four; in the third stanza remove the comma at the end of line one; in the fourth stanza remove the comma at the end of lines one and four; in the fifth stanza in line two capitalize "they" and at the end of line five add a period. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"They have conquered the earth
and taken their place in eternity." - I like the power of these lines. It is a vivid picture of the character of the stars, their station in the universe forever laid. The implication of these lines are carried through to the end of your poem. Well done.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines, I like how you repeat the first two lines of your poem which gives it completion. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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