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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Don Two . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "The Gravity Machine for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and this is one of my favorites. A good write about weight and its affect in regards to aging. Clever word play that is heartfelt, introspective and fun. A skillfully crafted Shakespearean Sonnet. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this poetic device. You use color and shading of words that evokes amusement through wit and playfulness. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a picture of how the "gravity machine" (scale) keeps track of the changes in your body that any reader can appreciate and relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Very good execution of iambic pentameter. Well done.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor for weight: "gravity" - nice descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.


*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; I love the humor of this piece, the 'tongue in cheek' feel to it and how all of us have to deal with "gravity" issues as we grow older. It made me laugh. This is something we can all relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about change in weight coming with age. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I have to say my middle is not lean;
there is a bit of belly here to stay.
Therefore I use this digital machine
which utilizes gravity to weigh."
- I love the opening lines to your sonnet. I like the understated humor that has verve to it which evokes feelings of fun and lightheartedness about weight gain and its connection to aging that is followed through to the end of the poem. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Free to Choose  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello warriormom. Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Free to Choose for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it and reflects the theme's intent while capturing its essence as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write about how you choose to make use of your free time that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct. I like it!

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device well in this poem. Very nice use of color and shading of your words that evokes feeling about how you use your daily free time. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of what choices you can make in regards to your free time: conversation with friends, solitude, enjoyable playtime, completing a task or napping - all things that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express your thoughts beautifully in the choices you can make with your free time that makes your day more "bearable" for you. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is a very short poem, I like all the lines of it because they contribute to the whole - the theme of what to do with free time which is very well expressed from the beginning to the end of the poem. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of CASCADE  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Dave . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "CASCADE

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it and reflects the intent of the theme while capturing the essence of the poem as it acts as a portal drawing readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I like form poetry, especially those that are driven by repetition. A good write about the creativity of a writer of poetry that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt. A well crafted Cascade. Perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I like how you use color and shade in words through sight, sound and touch which evokes emotion in regards to writer's creativity. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of the creative process of writing in a poet's mind; how it flows, the struggles that can ensue that reflects their inner thoughts and feelings that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very nice use of simile: words cascade, frees ink "like water over Niagara Falls" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines one/four (Falls, walls); lines two/five: (page, cage); lines three/seven (reflection/perfection).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the poet's mind set, his or her love and passion of words that is a reflection of their thoughts as it flows through their creative juices that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which is a poetic device that drives this form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of lines five and ten. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Passion flows with a force that breaks down walls
in his mind, freeing ink from its cage,"
- I love the power of these lines. It is our passion for words and writing that breaks down the walls to allow our thoughts to be put to paper. Well said and so true.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of Life  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Jace . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Life

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it reflecting its theme while capturing the essence of the poetry as it acts as a portal inviting the reader into it.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short form poetry, especially when it's minimalistic and this is a great example of one. A very good write about a mighty tree, aged in stature that is short, concise and succinct. Good presentation. A skillfully crafted Lanturne. Perfect 1/2/3/4/1 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of this poetic device. Very nice coloring/shading of the words of the piece that gives power to its eminence in nature and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this tree that stands with distinction of age in nature that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
This poetic device is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the power that the tree exudes in nature as it towers over yet amongst other trees in its presence as it exerts its purpose: beauty and life.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good. Nice assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors.

I especially like the following lines:
This is a short form of poetry and I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole of the theme which pictures the character and greatness of the continued life of this tree.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Liam . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Nature and Nurture

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short form and the challenge of it. This is a very good example of one that I have not yet written, but I plan to very soon. A very good write about what makes you who you are, your essence that is heartfelt and introspective. Good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Wreath poem, perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I love your use of color and shading of words that evoke feeling about how you see yourself, your being that lies under the surface. Through the lens of your eye you paint a abstract and complex picture of how you see your inner self, hidden yet quite out in the open and how life around you affects that being that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Good execution of iambic pentameter.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good use of metaphor regarding your being: "thread with which I'm sewn" and that you're a "plant that others grow" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababcdcd. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Also, as driven by the wreath form of poetry, the end line rhyme of the previous line is that rhyme set in the fourth syllable of the following line. Challenging and excellent execution.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express yourself well about your inner being and the affects of outside elements that "grows" you into the individual and unique person that you are. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; strong use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"I’m prone to be a plant that others grow;
the seeds they sow and nutrients they use"
- I really like these lines; they're thought provoking and deep. A powerful way to express how you came to be. Nicely done!

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. I like the humor; it's well stated. Well penned and a good read. Write on!



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Review of Insomnia  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Insomnia

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it reflecting the theme's intent as it captures the poem's essence while it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I like form poetry and this French form is a favorite of mine. A very good write about you being unable to sleep that is heartfelt and introspective. Prayerful. Clever word play. Nice presentation and take on the picture prompt. A well crafted Rondeau, near perfect form. Check line five of your first stanza. It has nine syllables it should have eight.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device very well in this piece. I like how you color and shade your words through sight and sound that evokes feeling in this poem. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of lack of sleep, even counting sheep doesn't help to the point you're ready to do anything to get some sleep that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Very nice execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of sleep: having a face, a "death-like facade" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba aabR aabbaR. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; one can sense your feeling of anxiety, being at your wits end in your need to get some sleep (if only Morpheus would listen)... I've certainly been there so I can definitely relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which is one of the devices that drives this form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Please, lull me with your song of sleep;
I've found there aren't sufficient sheep"
- these are excellent lines as you 'beg' for sleep that won't come and this theme is powerfully followed till the end of the poem. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of New Beginnings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Elby Wordsmith . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "New Beginnings

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for the theme as it reflects its intent while capture the poem's essence and at the same time acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I life form poetry and this in another of my favorites. A very good write and message about the ups and downs in life. Uplifting and encouraging. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Nice imagery and descriptives as is your use of this poetic device in this piece. I like the coloring and shading of your words to evoke feelings that are upbeat in the midst of life change. You paint a picture of one who overcomes through life by not fearing change which is a powerful tool in life that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of emotions, stress, pain and fear - they walk "hand in hand" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ef gg. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express the power of change in one's life if one will just take hold and use it. It is a message of hope to those going through hard times and is wonderful advice for all of us.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Spelling: line two in the first couplet, cannot is one word; to change the tense of come to 'comes' in line two of the second couplet; also add a space after the comma in line one of your third couplet. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma (or period) will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Emotions, stress, pain and fear
Hand in hand, come rushing near"
- I like these lines; they are powerful and so true.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!



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Review of Somewhere He  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Elby Wordsmith . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Somewhere He

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage reflecting the theme's intent while capturing the poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about waiting for one's true love that is heartfelt and introspective. Romantic. Well crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I like how you color and shade your words to evoke emotion through sight and sound in this search for true love. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of your true love, his character and personality that's just a shadow in your dreams knowing one day you'll meet him that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
These poetic devices are not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe aghg aigi. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line four of the first stanza (he, me) and line three in the fourth stanza (he, me).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your hopes of finding the perfect man of your dreams, his love for you and your love for him that will be transforming and for now is just a shadow in your reality.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling in finding true love. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to add a period at the end of line four in the first stanza; in line two of the second stanza change the comma to a semi-colon and add a comma at the end of line two in the third stanza. This will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I see him as a shadow
As sun shines from behind,
A form to make me quiver
Excitement fills my mind."
I like the picture of your "dream man" in these lines, the excitement you feel about him even though you can't really see him. I also like the rhythm of these lines and how they sound when read out loud. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of Soft and Gentle  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello Rhonda - the Queen of Minis . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Soft and Gentle

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting the theme's intent while capturing its essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.


*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A very good write, message and teachable moment about the importance of learning how one can be soft and gentle that is advice for the smallest child to an aged adult. Heartfelt and imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. I like the coloring/shading of your words that evokes feeling by describing the importance of being amiable and genial even in the smallest of children. Through the lens of your heart you paint a picture of friendship; a pact between "soft and gentle" and the work they do together to teach others how to practice this art in life that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good personification of soft and gentle: they "made a pact"; gave "advice" and helped lassies and gents. Good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defg hiji klml nobo. A nice mix of near rhyme, near perfect and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you are a clever storyteller whose advice about learning how to be congenial in everyday life is a teaching moment for children of all ages.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better i my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Soft and Gentle
made a pact
to use their words
with equal tact"
- I like the bond/promise made between "soft and gentle, " the subtle power of this theme that is followed through to the end of the piece. I like how the words sound when read aloud and the rhythm is very good.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!



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Review of Your immortality  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello ~Minja~ . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Your immortality

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it while reflecting the theme's intent. It captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done. Just a suggestion: capitalize the 'i' in immortality.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about who and what you are to others; how your are seen. Thought provoking. Good presentation, aesthetically pleasing. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of this poetic device. I like the color and shading of your words that evokes feelings through sight, time and pain in this piece. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the different aspects of one's inner being that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Very nice use of metaphor: "you are flower"; "you are color"; "you are hope"; "you are boat" and "you are thought". - Good descriptive/comparisons of a person's essence. Good observations.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express the many facets of a person, how one feels about them and really 'sees' the person, who they are inside that I can relate to very very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling or punctuation errors found. Just a suggestion to change the tense of a word in the last line of your poem: change "lie" to 'lay".

I especially like the following lines:
There are so many, but I think I like these lines the best -
"In artist's eye you are color
what is used for his
masterpiece."
This is so deep on so many levels. I like the color and implication expressed in these lines. The artist can be a person, and it can be God, who is the Creator/Artist and always sees you as you are in all one's attributes. Powerful.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of Cloud Stories  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Cloud Stories

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it reflecting the theme's intent as it captures the poem's essence and acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love story poems and this is a delightful one. A very good write on spending time watching the fairytales and children's stories that form while gazing at the clouds. Heartfelt, introspective and imaginative. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this poetic device very well in this piece. I love your use of color and shade in your words as they evoke feeling through sight and time in this piece. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of sitting and gazing at clouds, the peacefulness of it, as they change forms and paint pictures of stories that you see and are constructed that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Very nice execution of ballad meter.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of clouds: they tell and create stories - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef and so on... A nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of the fifth stanza (see, flee).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express implied joy in watching clouds that create pictures of stories and fairytales from your memory and imagination. A fun and restful day being entertained by the 'story clouds' that I can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line three in the third stanza; remove the comma at the end of line three in the fourth stanza; change the period at the end of line three to a comma in the fifth stanza and remove the comma at the end of line one of the seventh stanza. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"I love to sit gazing without
and watch the world go by.
I see the clouds; they seem to sprout
dark wings up in the sky."
- I love these powerful opening lines and how they set up what will come in the rest of the poem. I like the rhythm and how they sound when read out loud. From these lines the theme is followed through till the end of your poem which is definitely entertaining to children of all ages and the child at heart. Well done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of Home of the Brave  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Home of the Brave

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting the heart of the theme capturing its essence while it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love form poetry and its challenge and this is an excellent example of both. A very good write, tribute and memorial for our fallen heroes in the military that is heartfelt and poignant. Elegant verse. Nice presentation. A skillfully crafted Quatern, perfect form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device beautifully in this piece. Excellent use of color and shading which evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of honoring our fallen heroes through sight, sound, touch and pain felt by those affected by their loss that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of enjambment. Very good execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of winds: it "sighs"; shadows: "rest" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: Abab cAca adAd eaeA. A nice mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of stanza three (he, see).

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you capture the sorrow and honor that a son gives to his father, and all thees fallen hero who are celebrated and remembered for fighting for our freedom and liberty on Memorial Day. A moving and touching remembrance that I can relate to.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition which drives this poetic form. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (sighs). No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"The markers, in a hero's guise,
stretch out as far as he can see
as light fades from the evening skies.
Such is the price of liberty."
- I love these lines. They capture the deep emotion, honor, respect for those who gave their lives for our liberty. I love the rhythm and sound of these lines when read out loud. Simply beautiful.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Very good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello intuey . Good day to you.

"This is a Game of Thrones Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "My Shield and My Sword

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its heart as it captures the essence of its theme while acting as portal to invite the reader into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write, message and testimony about your relationship with the Lord that is heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. You use this poetic device well in this piece; the coloring/shade of love through faith evokes feeling about God's love. Through the lens of your heart you paint a picture of faith and love in God that any reader can appreciate

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm. Near perfect use of iambic tetrameter. Nice enjambment in lines nine and ten.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor for Jesus as "shield and sword" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line three (He, me), line four (be, free), line six and thirteen (by, my).


*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. Encouraging and uplifting. Your faith shines beautifully in this piece along with your loving praise and adoration of the Savior that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma after "stripes" in line five; remove the period after "Jesus" in line eight and remove the comma at the end of line thirteen. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
There are so many lines in this poem that I like, but I will choose -
"Because He sent His Son for me,
thanks be to Jesus I am free."
- I love these lines, the power and love that they express as well as how they sound when read aloud... the thankfulness for God's love. Simply beautiful.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!



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Review of Could This Be All  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 💙 Carly . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Could This Be All for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem's theme reflecting its intent at the same time captures the underlying essence of the poetry while acting as a portal that invites readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about your personal feelings on responsibilities in life that are heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy. Near perfect eight syllables per line in each stanza. Please check line two of your third stanza. There are nine syllables, should be eight syllables.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Nice imagery and descriptives. You use this device nicely in your poem; your coloring/shading through sounds and feelings. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a picture of worry in daily life and the pressure of work and its affect on your dreams that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Nearly perfect meter in iambic tetrameter. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of work: it "calls to arms" - nice descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you express your thoughts about your hopes and dreams with depth of feeling as they clash with the work that lies heavy upon your journey in life, what is and what you want it to be. I can relate to these feelings.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Onomatopoeia/Oxymoron/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of onomatopoeia (wails, shatter). Nice use of oxymoron (rabid/doubt). Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the period at the end of line one in the first stanza and add a comma at the end of line two; add a comma at the end of line two of the second stanza and add a comma at the end of line two in the third stanza. This will smooth out the flow and rhythm and make it better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Could this be all I have to give
Could this be all, I say through tears"
- I like the power of the emotion in these lines, at you wonder of what you experience now as you ask: is this all you have to look forward too? These feelings, this wonder is something that all of us deal with sometime during our lives.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Nicely penned and a much enjoyed read. Thank you for participating in our workshop and congratulations on your honorable mention in the contest. Write on!
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Review of Snowstorm  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Jali~mostly on hiatus . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Snowstorm

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its intent which captures its essence as it acts as portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I love short poetry and this is a very good example of one. A good write about a snowstorm that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted rhyming verse which I enjoy. Very nice use of brevity.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this device very well through its color and sound. You paint a vivid picture of a snowstorm, its beauty, eeriness and fierceness during the winter season that any reader can see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice personification of the wind: "howling whistling, wailing" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good. Nice rhyme scheme. Nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling. You express the character of a snowstorm beautifully in this peace as well as your love for the winter season.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good; strong use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice use of onomatopoeia (howling, whistling, wailing). No spelling or punctuation errors found.

I especially like the following lines:
"Wind-whipped wisps of flying snow
Lighted by the moon's pale glow"
- I like the power of this image as well as how it sounds when read aloud.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello J.C.Stonewell2 . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Castle in the Sky for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem that sets the stage for it reflecting the poem's intent, capturing its essence as it acts as a portal inviting the reader into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good fantasy write about a castle of dreams. An imaginative story poem. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this device which colors the scene that through the lens of your eye you paint with vividness that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of mirror as "sole resident" in a land that is "sad" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling as you express the sad demise of this ruin, this castle in a faraway land that has been deserted for a very long time, a place that is abandoned and only seen in dreams.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of a castle's ruins. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"the stones are fallen, the portcullis down
the gates are open the town is gone"
- I like the rhythm of these lines. They give the reader a vivid image of the death of a kingdom and the castle that has become a ruin. Powerful.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Review of Tiredness  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 💙 Carly . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Tiredness for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem as it reflects its intent capturing the essence of it while acting as a portal inviting the reader into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the affect of tiredness on a person. Heartfelt and introspective. Very nice use of brevity. Well crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives.You use this poetic device well through coloring so the picture you paint is vivid and enables the reader to see and appreciate the power of fatigue which we see through the lens of your eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good use of Simile: to be tired is "like a heavy cloak"; bears down "like a freight train" - very nice descriptive/comparisons that give power to the images.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this poem.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling; you express in a powerful way what it's like to be tired, run down while at the same time seeking "rest" so you can feel rejuvenatd with life. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following line(s):
"I climb into darkness and pray for peace" - I like this powerful image and emotion that is expressed beautifully in this line.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Nylsaj Nomis . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Words Fitly Spoken for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its heart as it acts as a portal to draw the reader into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write that is heartfelt and inspirational. Your faith shines through in this piece. Uplifting and encouraging. Well crafted Free Verse that is short, concise and succinct.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Very nice use of this poetic device as these words are 'colored' in a softness of care and comfort that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor about words fitly spoken - "buoys the soul" - and trials are "mountains high". Good descriptive comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Very nice execution of internal rhyme in line one (spoken, token); in line two (love, above) and in line six (hope, cope). A nice mix of feminine and masculine rhyming.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. This is wonderful advice and encouragement of how powerful words can be in uplifting the spirits of others. I can relate to this wisdom you express.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Spelling: in line six, change give to 'gives'. Punctuation: just a suggestion to remove the comma at the end of line one; at the end of line two, change the period to a semi-colon; remove the period at the end of line three; remove the period at the end of line five and remove the period at the end of line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"A word fitly spoken from a heart that has been softened.
Buoys the soul with hope and give you strength to cope."
- beautiful words of wisdom that touches the heart.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Okay, Joey's full of Blarney . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Some Caring for Karen

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for your poem reflecting its intent, capturing the essence of it and is inviting to the reader. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
A very good short write and tribute to this special friendship that is heartfelt, concise and succinct. Very nice use of brevity. Well crafted free verse with strong use of internal rhyme.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives which utilizes the coloring of one's thoughts and feelings that you express so well in this piece. You paint a vivid picture of a warm friendship that any reader can appreciate.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of metaphor for this person who is "a soft song" and "a whisper" - a creative descriptive/comparison about her.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Very good use of internal rhyme throughout this poem between lines and within lines. Nicely done.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Deep expression of emotion; you express your feelings in a way that is charming with a touch of romance.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good with a strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about this special woman in your life. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance.

I especially like the following lines:
"No longer alone, with only one thought her face does appear to me.
She calls out my best, puts my protests at rest."
- you express beautifully, from your heart what she means to you. You are blessed to have such a friend in your life.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello iluvhorses . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Short Story Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your short story "She Danced With the Prince for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board


*Check2*Title
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your short story. It sets the stage for your story, reflecting its heart acting as a portal to draw readers into it. Nicely done.


*Check1*First Impression/Structure
I enjoyed this back story for the fairytale, Cinderella. It is a well crafted narrative seen through the eyes of its main character, Tansy. I love the descriptions of the time, the scenes and the feelings of family and friendship. The story moves along quite well. I could see the pictures you painted with your words very well, thus keeping my attention from the story's beginning to its end.


*Check3*Grammar, Spelling, Punctuation
You have a wonderful vocabulary and you use it well in this piece. Grammar seems to be spot on; I didn't notice any errors. Spelling and punctuation is done well. Although you use the dialogue sparingly, it fits in well with the narrative.

*Check4*Character and Idea
I like Tansy very much. You flesh out her character, personality and how she feels about her family and her interaction with the Prince since she was a little girl. She expresses her fondness of her brother Antony and his friendship with Prince Andrew. The reader really gets a good picture of life within the boundaries of palace where her father is a confidante of the king. Tansy is smart and likeable. You bring out her shyness, kindness and intelligence. We see that in how she learns and tends the medicinal herbs as taught to her by the palace cook.

*Check5*Other Points/Overall
I like how the story builds its story with the upcoming Birthday Ball for the Prince, a very special day where the young ladies ready themselves for this special night. You also paint a picture of the Prince, his kindness, politeness, his chivalry that is implied... and I love the subtle ambiance of romance that is implied throughout your story. It's never overstated; it's just right. There is a beginning, middle and end to your story-- the Prince's first meeting with Cinderella. A nice place to end this story. This is truly a story within a story. A most enjoyable read. Write on!

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Review of Sanctuary  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Sanctuary for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it and reflects its intent while acting as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about your special place deep inside that is heartfelt and introspective. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. A well crafted Trijan Refrain with near perfect form (line six has seven syllables, should be eight).

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You use this element of poetry very well in this piece. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this place where memories are kept, a place where calm resides that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice use of metaphor: "whispering winds of memory" and "worry's mist"; and nice use of personification - the winds "sing in dulcet tones" - good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling; you express your inner thoughts and the memories you hold in this special place with subtle power in this poem. I can relate to them.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling, as well as being the device that drives this form of poetry. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line seven and in line three of the last stanza remove the comma. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"Whispering winds of memory
swirl in darkened mystery."
- I love the eeriness of these two line and the image it paints. I also like how they sound when read aloud.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Leprechaun Gold  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Lord Norry Wolfsbane . Good day to you.

"This is a Rising Stars Poetry Review"

I am reviewing your poem"Leprechaun Gold

*Star**Star*Title:*Star**Star*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It caught my attention and sets the stage for your poem reflecting its intent as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it.

*Star**Star*Form/Style:*Star**Star*
I like rhyme and fantasy and this has both. A very good write and story poem in the first person about one caught in a spell to capture this elusive pail of gold. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Star**Star*Imagery:*Star**Star*
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You use this device well in this piece. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of trying to retrieve this fairy gold at the end of the rainbow that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Star**Star*Flow/Rhythm:*Star**Star*
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice execution of iambic tetrameter.

*Star**Star*Metaphor/Personification/Simile:*Star**Star*
Nice use of personification "The Sun decided not to play" - good descriptive comparison.

*Star**Star*Rhyme:*Star**Star*
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Star**Star*Tone:*Star**Star*
Good depth of feeling; you are a very good storyteller. You express the excitement of the chase to win the pot of gold and I like how the suspense builds slowly throughout the poem.

*Star**Star*Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:*Star**Star*
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis on the gold and rainbow. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Spelling: check line four in second stanza 'anyone' is one word. Punctuation: in the first stanza, remove the periods at the end of lines one and two, add a comma at the end of line three and add a period at the end of line four. In stanza two, add a period at the end of line four. In the fourth stanza, change the periods to commas at the end of the first and second lines. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"The clouds broke up, the rain still fell.
And I was caught within a spell."
I like how these lines sound when read aloud; the beat is spot on and sets the rhythm for the rest of the poem.

*Star**Star*Overall:*Star**Star*
Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of I Love You  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Isola Bertolucci . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "I Love You for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it, reflecting its intent which acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short form and this one is a favorite of mine. A very good write about this special love you have for another that is short, concise and succinct. Very good use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Cinquain; perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You use this element of poetry well in this form poetry. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of your feelings for this special person that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice metaphor about her smile that it's "an unsmoldered flame" - good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is not applicable in this form of poetry created by Adelaide Crapsey.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express the love you feel for this special person in your life that uplifts and encourages you that I can relate to very well.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, to remove the semi-colon in line three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this is short form poetry, I like all the lines because they contribute to the whole - the power of love that brightens another's day, love that uplifts.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Review of Lost  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Lucius Cage . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Lost for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem reflecting its intent, acting as portal to draw your readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
I love short poetry and this one is a good example of it. A good write about questioning where and what your place is in the world that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and introspective. Very good use of brevity. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Through the lens of your heart, you paint a picture of your soul, fueling a fire to seek and find the place that is yours in the world that any reader can appreciate.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Nice personification of the soul, that it fuels fire and enrages desire. Good descriptive/comparison.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Deep expression of emotion; you express with power your feelings about need to know your place, who you are to be in this world, something that all of us has wrestled with sometime during our lives. I can relate.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the period to a comma at the end of line one; to change the period to comma at the end of line three and remove the period at the end of line four. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
Because this poem is so short, I like all the lines of the poem. They contribute to to the theme of 'who and what you are to be' that is expressed with fervor. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Hello Peter Stafford . Good day to you.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

I am reviewing your poem "Epitaph to Chivalry for the "Gang's Monthly Review Board

*Pencil*~Title:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem; it sets the stage and reflects the poem's intent acting as portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

*Pencil*~Form/Style:
A good write about the death of ideals in knighthood; the loss of honor and glory that is heartfelt, dark and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

*Pencil*~Imagery:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You utilize this element in poetry, the shading of character exposed, well in this piece. You paint a vivid picture of his abandonment of ideals that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

*Pencil*~Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

*Pencil*~Metaphor/Personification/Simile:
Good personification/metaphor of chivalry. Nice personification of his sword, it 'dubbed' or called him to service; creed, as a 'mime' and 'Romanticism' as a 'damsel' in distress. Good descriptive/comparisons.

*Pencil*~Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabbccddee ffgghh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

*Pencil*~Tone:
Good depth of feeling. You express in a powerful way this darkness that created loss which affected faith, honor, courage and the righteousness of the quest that have been lost through the ages.

*Pencil*~Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on that loss. Good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. Spelling: line six in first stanza, the word after sword should be 'that' and in line six of the second stanza, "done" should be 'down'. Punctuation: first stanza, line two change the comma to a semi-colon; lines four, six and eight, change the comma to a period. Second stanza: change the comma to a period at the end of lines two and four. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

I especially like the following lines:
"His honour sullied, his righteousness dust,
The sword the dubbed him given to rust,"
- powerful emotion and loss of character painted in these lines. I like the sound of them when read aloud.

*Pencil*~Overall:
Good closing line. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!
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