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Review of Patchwork Quilt  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I very much like this poem. I enjoyed your thoughts about how there is an inevitable quality of death followed by hope and promise of life.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Your imagery is lovely, "patchwork quilt, upon the cooling earth..." This very close to my writing style (which is why I like it, I guess! ). I enjoy brevity of words for the maximum impact.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
You wrote beautifully, no changes necessary in my humble opinion.

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Review of Freeing  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This really impacted me. You put a lot of Oomph into this short work. I, too, feel like I am trapped in stone, at times... words and art free my soul.



Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I feel like you are a 'wordsmith' sculpting words from marble. That's how I picture what I create in art and write about.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No suggestions needed.

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Review of Polar Bear  
Review by Sherasi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Cute. :)


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Review of African Violets  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I feel loss and grief for those who have been or are slaves (for any reason, to another person, to money, to an idea, etc) But I don't FEEL this from the poem, only that the poem triggers in my mind, memories of past horror and grief.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It is well written, but it feels dogmatic.. like you were counting syllables to make sure you were rhyming well. The imagery was perfection, but I didn't FEEL the poem. Please keep writing, it was well-written and shows great promise.

Grammar
The grammer is perfect.


Suggestions:
Please keep writing, focus on evoking emotional connection with your audience.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I love the humor in this work. I totally agree that Punxsutawney Phil deserves better than to be hauled out into the cold winter air.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Your imagery is great, being "held up by some muttonhead".

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I enjoyed your poem, I see nothing to change.

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Review by Sherasi
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This poem was a bit chilling since I just went out to eat at a classy restaurant that reportedly has ghosts enough that the show "paranormal Investigations" (or some such) is investigating the sightings. I ate at the Hotel of Edison" in Sunbury, Pa. Thomas Edison did his first switch from a 2 circuit to a three circuit electricity. At that point, Sunbury, Pa had the first lit up hotel in the world (it was called 'The City' Hotel at that time.

Back to the poem, sorry for the verbal wandering..... I feel this poem is well written and brings an emotional component of loss and grief.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This work gave a really creative way to 'see' ghosts and not be ironic or disbelieving. It was a loving look at the loss in their life.


Grammar
I saw no errors and was well written.


Suggestions:
Sometimes ghosts are called 'shades'. If you could somehow insert that into your "shadows" phrasing, it would make an interesting pun and word-play.

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Review of To Slay My Demons  
Review by Sherasi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely written. If you are alluding to alcoholism, I totally get it.
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Review of That Chair There  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for asking me to review this work. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a fascinating bit of writing... an almost fantasy/Dr Seuss-esque type of work. I enjoyed the mischievous curious child you wrote about. He has to take the dare and in the end pays for it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The first person you used was ingenious.. this made it personal to the audience reading it, too. I liked how the mother chose the chair her son became because it suited her and was 'comfy'. But the boy/chair was right, he should not have done what he had done. I also enjoyed the rhyming, it made the piece "sing-song" and I liked how you separated the sections for each part of the tale.

Grammar
I saw no glaring errors.


Suggestions:
A larger font would make it easier to read.

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Review of My True Friends  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your work on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I was really affected by this work. I, myself, have had a life of a few close friends, not even 2 or 3 most times. I do value them and I am pleased you wrote how I feel so well.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like the sound of your odd friends, because that is how I am and my friends are too. I like how you described your friendships and how they were with you when you needed them.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Perhaps you could use a larger font so it is easier to read.

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Review of Friend or Foe  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your story on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was an interesting read. I was drawn to keep reading until the end. And, I gotta admit it, the end was nothing like I thought it would be.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The character sounds confused, and I am also confused. I am not sure what was meant in this story, especially the end the way it was.
I liked the descriptions of the iron bat dragging and hitting the lightbulbs.
"Just as the light was about to reveal who he was, the bat swung up and broke the light along the ceiling..."

That was a bit scary to read. The whole thing was a bit scary to read, actually. That is why when she saw him and, what .. realized he was her long lost love. It was even more confusing.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:
Thanks so much for posting here, welcome to writing.com.

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Review of Assembly  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your work on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Oh My God! Forfend those Do-it-yourselfers who wreck things out of proportion to what it seems like it should be! I found it very amusing when Jay spoke:
'Jay jumped up excitedly, "it works!!!".'

A total lack of reality sitting there! LOL

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I can imagine that situation, watch all the lights shut off down the street!!!


Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
You could use a larger font for easier reading.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
It is an interesting expression and one that is entirely too accurate in my opinion. That is why I don't make them anymore. :)

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how that expression starts out with a grand entrance with a dragon head and spread wings. The end being a dejected tail where nothing was accomplished.

Grammar
no errors


Suggestions:
A larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of Santa Stalker  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was pretty funny. There are many people out there that WOULD do all that and more!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"You know I've filed a restraining order
to keep you out of my life"
Very funny, speaks it all in one phrase.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Maybe a larger font, but I forget, too.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a good description of impatience and coveting that which we don't have. It IS a shame that we Humans are unable, often, to observe something wonderful and make no changes to it, trying to 'perfect' it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked the rhyming, it didn't seem forced.

I also liked the lines:
"jealously, we must acquire
that which holds a desired trait."
It is too true that what we haven't is rarely good enough, that we seek more and more.. more wealth, more attention, etc.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No suggestions, I enjoyed the message you posted.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a poem expressing the sorrow at the loss of so many people and our innocence as well. It WAS a tragedy.. and that tragedy struck more than a simple building, it struck us in the deepest part of our hearts and souls as a country.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"to remind us of our great loss
and a rebirth of brotherhood."

A reminder that we need to remember those who were lost, and come back stronger and more vigilant against those who would try to tear us down.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No suggestions required.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a powerful image of abuse and cruelty from a strong person hurting weaker people. The abuser as a monster is totally accurate. I have been there myself in a similar situation.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"He says, 'sorry, I love you'
won't set bones, make bruises disappear"

This is a strong image to grasp, hearing lies and seeing the truth.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
Perhaps a larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Very nice image.. nice concept, I like it, I like it a lot.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like the image of imprinting ourself into our souls.. the essence of us, distilled into an amorphous entity (i.e.. our souls). I also like the image of our moment memories measuring us, bring us to a finite physical end.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
I like how you presented the poem, but if you could use a larger font it would be easier to read.

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Review of anxiety  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I can feel the anxiety and the quest for escapism. I also have felt those ways and used sleep as my step out of reality and life.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This perfectly summarizes the whole poem for me and exactly how I felt many times over.

"My dreams only tell stories of escape
An escape that is just out of reach
when I awake."


Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
On the last line of the second stanzas, you need to put a space in between:
"an escape that is just out of reach" and "when I wake" because you want consistency through out the work.

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Review of Corvus Corax  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I really loved your descriptions.. it was perfectly written.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Reminds me of 'The Raven'. That Harbinger of Death written by Poe. I enjoyed:

"Ebon harbinger
Never welcome overhead -"

Those lines really catch my eye. I liked how you centered the Haiku, really good emphasis on what you were writing.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I think it would have been easier to read with a larger font.

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Review of Creation.  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This really was a well-conceived and written work. It brings in all aspects of creation into cohesive and viable meld of ideas.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I love how you rhymed and it wasn't at all rushed or forced. It flowed. I loved this poem, I really enjoyed it.

"A fusion of cells, blood, sweat and tears.
A miracle of life, that's yours and ours."

Very nice imagery written here.

I also liked how you addressed the issue indirectly of "creation vs. evolution" with:

"No one knows how we came to be.
How humans form and live to be free."

This is a view that everyone can accept.

Grammar
No errors noted.



Suggestions:
I do suggest a larger font to make it easier to read.

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Review of The Drip  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your flash fiction on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Talk about the straw that broke the camels back! Wow! Very funny read!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I loved your description of the falling water drop "like an Olympic contender". and "Split like a grape" very nice images.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
I would use a larger font but otherwise this is a fun read.

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Review of Texting  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
You wrote convincingly of a desire to text but did the right thing and did your math worksheet. Welcome to Writing.com.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how you use the texting AS the poem. And then in the end, works on the school work. Now that bespeaks self-control, and that's really cool.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I suggest you use a larger font, and keep writing!

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Review of Pass  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very honest poem. I've felt that way before about school and classes.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked how you used your dislike of the class to motivate through this poem. It is after all, a poem.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:
Practice more with your writing, there could be unplumbed depths to find.

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Review of The Invitation  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your flash fiction on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a good read with an amusing twist. I liked how the main character is ready to believe the worst and got the best.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked how Ted eased out the door in amusement rather than irritation. That put a nice slant on the work.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I suggest a larger font for easier reading.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This poem seems to be a lament for the passing of an age of humanity and a curiously cautious look for the future.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The ideas are well-presented, but I am not sure what era we are talking about... the computer and electronics age, perhaps?

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I have no suggestions to make.

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