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Review of Bitter Tears  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a sad poem, a recollection of a failed or ended relationship. I felt sympathy and loss for the author.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

"You faded from my life,
And became one more memory,
A mere milestone
In a life of loneliness."

This evoked a powerful sense of regret for the author that he hasn't moved on in his grief for the ended relationship.

I liked how you centered it, it had good flow.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to make the font size larger for easier reading.

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Review of Curt Butt  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your prose on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was clearly a man who needs help.. he is plotting the fall of a colleague and childhood companion and using untraceable ways to do it, but it keeps backfiring on him.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This was a very venomous man who cares little for how he hurts other people, in fact he enjoys it. I felt anger at him, but cheered on Harvey for healing his relationship with his parents.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
A larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your short story on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was an engrossing read. I like how matter-of-factly you write his actions and reasons for doing them. Kind of like a bad James Bond.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
A do-gooder thief who only targets other thieves, I love it!

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
A larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of This is America  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your editorial on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I liked your fervor supporting your feelings about this country. You presented a good argument for a country like ours. I'm not going to make this into a political discussion, but I did enjoy the premise that working together our people can be better.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This appears to support the way we, in this country, help small groups of people to unite into an amalgam that all are a part of.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I only suggest a larger font for easier reading.

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Review of What is Freedom?  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I enjoyed how you are evaluating what true freedom is. You wrote about the tangibles, the reader has to think of the intangibles.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked this poem, it is thoughtful and inquisitive.

Grammar
I saw no errors.


Suggestions:
If you use a larger font it is easier to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I found your fiction on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was very amusing. At first it seems to be a Russian game with 'the savage'.
Then the tables turn with what may be an even greater risk.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I loved that line:
The African smiles broadly, "One of the six is a cannibal." He doesn't have a choice but to allow all the women to have private attention to him, any more than the Russian did with the handgun revolver.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Perhaps using a larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of Hypnotics  
Review by Sherasi
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
It is clear with your title that you are using medications to self-medicate. It could even be abuse of the meds. I felt your disconnect with the world in that poem. I like how you emphasized the feeling you are experiencing with the . . .'s.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This was a very visual and rhythmic sensation to read. I see an attempt to escape a situation. People don't usually take drugs to feel sensations, normally they are there to manage specific medical conditions. If you are taking it to feel that disconnect, you are using the meds wrongly.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No suggestions needed. Just if you are using, get some help.

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Review of Razor-blade  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I had to read this several times, it was perplexing a bit. Repeating razor blade put it into a different level.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This was fast, sharp and very visual. I saw the blade each time become a part of the prose. I liked this because of the intensity.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Larger font size would be helpful to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
OK< I found it
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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a powerfully written work. At first it's a discussion about nurturing and the loss of that support. That you need to step out of the nest and test your wings. Then you proceed to state that mom actually gave you all the necessary tools to prosper and cope with life. I, myself, have had a lot of failure by NOT making a decision.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
You use some very colorful language with significant descriptions of what the consequences are if you don't take up adult responsibility and decision-making skills. The tone and words were perfect for what you are discussing.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I would suggest a larger font to make it easier to read.

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Review of Back To Black  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a powerfully written poem, expressed in solid unequivocal terms. You were true toward your opinion the whole way through.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I enjoyed the rhythm of this work, it was well written and made valid points.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:
I suggest larger fonts.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Very funny poem. I can see him sitting there without any of his glory (hair) looking stunned at his visage.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I love the the last:
"They say revenge is best served cold
and maybe that is true
be careful whom you may upset
thats my advice to you."

No truer words were ever spokem!

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I have none, except don't be kissing women (who aren't your wife) in public!

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Review of Tranquility  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This poem evoked the feeling of regret and loss. I see the degradation of human society in only 50 short years of my life.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"a melody from this mayhem" very apt phrasing. And mayhem it is. I am afraid because the world appears to be falling apart.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
I think maybe a larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of The Weight  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Short but very full of impact. I can feel sorrow and anger in those words.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This is a somewhat ambiguous poem, which I like. "You weigh on my chest... heavy like a stone" This is the exact symptoms often described in heart attacks. "I lose my breath while going under..." Another possible heart attack symptom. Makes me wonder if the character was dying while realizing it was all in vain.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:
No suggestions needed.

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Review of The Cure  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was very amusing. A disease called "writer's cramp"... I am not sure but I think I may have contracted it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This piece of poetry was fun to read, as though you have to cure yourself from wanting to write.

"Time for myself to do as I please,
Not forced to write everyday.
I was no longer a slave to the keys,
Now I can sleep 'til midday."

I've been having this problem since October 25th, 2021. Now my ART is another beast entirely. I've had to get up all night long or I dreamed over and over the strokes of paint I needed to do or the pencil lines I needed to draw.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No suggestions.... except "Take 2 Aspirin, and call me in the morning"


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very emotional tirade against those who would make into objects people weaker than them. I agree with the Author's Note.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It is clear you feel that women are subservient to men, and that may be true for you. I feel your pain and anger in your words.

Grammar
The last line doesn't make sense to me:
'The abuse you earned as female you're born."
Perhaps you meant to say:
"The abuse you earned because a female you were born."
Also:
"Never to know freedom or peace but to ensure" I think you meant to ENDURE



Suggestions:
I suggest you use those grammatical checks, and use a larger font so your work is easier to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a poem about death and the afterlife, Charon ushering the dead to their final residence.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I've never seen a Cornish Sonnet before, I like it. I like how it repeats the intro and makes it into a farewell. This was a pleasure to read and I love the phrase "amidst pervasive nauseating reek" ... it just strikes me a really cool phrase.

Grammar
I saw no errors.


Suggestions:
I like how you used larger and bold font, it was really easy to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
His prior technical knowledge was adequate for executing his job effortlessly. WE ALSO found him to be hardworking and professional at his work.

industry; his role

During HIS tenure, he exhibited

Is "sharma" to be capitalized as a name? [Sharma]

TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN:

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was interesting because it provides a way to accomplish creativity without being wordy.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"Soon images play out to you... Capture them, still" The basis of any art is to capture the image, whether it be wordsmithing or painting. Being prepared to do that is half the battle.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Using a larger font will help make it easier to read.


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Review of The Old Book  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Wow.. this really dated me! I had someone the other day asking what a phonebooth was.. they were wondering why they had to go to a specific place to call someone.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This was well-written to make us old fogies feel our age. :)

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I think a larger font to see what we read. (As if phones weren't bad enough!)

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Review of Sheaves of Grain  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I feel the celebration of life in this poem. It makes me feel gratitude and appreciation for the things we have that we normally take for granted.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like some of the imagery:
"Feel..."
"Taste..."
"Watch..."
This brings in all the senses and makes us participate in rather than only observe the miracle of life.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
Use a larger font for easier reading.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This is a statement of unity in uniqueness. Which is not a bad thing, in and of itself. It is an interesting history you discuss.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
That is a totally viable fact that nations find unity and brotherhood in a common language. It helps them remain away from other people. That unity creates segregation, and in the United States causes a lot of subcultural tension and strife. I feel that is a shame because people can become stronger as a large group with interlocking puzzle pieces. This is all my opinion.

You wrote your argument well, and I found nothing to correct in it.

Grammar
I DO feel that using Capitals, punctuation and paragraphs would make your piece get more positive attention.


Suggestions:
Use punctuation a grammar rules and make the font larger for easier reading.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I totally agree with the loss of communication skills. Between the technology and the reprehensible face masks people are wearing, teens and children are losing the ability to communicate effectively.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I felt the argument was lucid and well put together.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
Perhaps a larger font to make this piece of prose easier to read.

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Review of You never cared!  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This is gut wrenching depression story. You say she still struggles, but 'keep on keeping on'. It is important to find a path out of that dark hole, writing on here helps. I know, I also have depression. I was you once, but life got better and I found a new group of people to make friends with.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked the stark nature of your prose. You say it like it is and no beating around the bush. Did you like the wolf because of the "Lone Wolf" kind of scenario?

Grammar
I think it would be easier to read if you would put in paragraphs and use larger font.


Suggestions:
If you or Kei feel like hurting yourself call this phone number: 800-273-8255

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Review of Migraine  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a pretty good description of a migraine, but I am not sure what you meant by a "dark infested room".

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how you presented the work, centered and a red color. It is short sweet and to the point, which gives more 'Ummph' to the migraine symptoms.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I'd create a different phrase than 'dark infested room'. It would make more sense in context.

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