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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed, and there are no suggestions for improving the poem.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The image before the entry adds to the item. The poem takes a reader for an emotional drive. The form used is perfect in this well written entry.
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ERRORS: No spelling, grammatical, or other mistakes were noticed.
SUGGESTIONS: None I feel would improve the entry.
OVERALL IMPRESSION: The form is used perfectly, the flow moved along good too. You did a super job of relaying how emotions and feeling have little meaning before fading away in the poem, or that is what I think.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions except to keep writing these wonderful poems.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The sonnet is absolutely beautiful! The emotions drew me in from the first stanza to the last. You did a perfect job of relaying the meaning of genuine love and how it cannot be taken away in some cases and how the heart will not let go. SUPERBLY written!
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: Not an error was spotted, and the only suggestion I have to offer is to keep writing these fantastic poems.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhyming form is used perfectly. You said it right about the surprises lovers come across because love is blind. The poem is written very well, and each and every line expressive.
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MECHANICS: No mechanical mistakes of any kind were noticed.
SUGGESTIONS: There are none that come to mind that I feel would improve the item.
MY FAVORITES: The rhyming pattern is terrific and the imagery just as good. You relay experiences we have in life very well in each stanza strongly. I liked that. I also like the way the entry is summed up with us continuing to push forward despite everything.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions other than to keep writing these wonderful poems.
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: Ransom, Thandor, and the other characters are defined perfectly.
WHAT I THOUGHT: I think the entry reads more like a short story. I noticed that you mentioned that pieces of it came from a story you wrote, and commend you on writing a poem that includes some of the tale. The rhythm and imagery are superb, and every stanza well written and an enjoyment to read.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed, and the only suggestion I have to offer is to keep writing these sensational poems.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhyming pattern is great, and so is the imagery. I could almost see the fairies singing and dancing under the moon and you pining for your love. I loved the poem!
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhyming pattern is right one, and the imagery good. I could almost see the frost on your window and drifts around you. I thought the poem was lovely.
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OVERALL THOUGHTS: You did an exceptional job of relaying facts about eating fast foods. As delicious as they may be, most are not healthy, which is relayed perfectly in the poem. I agree that there is also other risks to be considered.
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything to improve the item.
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} OVERALL OPINION: I'm certainly glad the Styx isn't calling me and making me a pawn. The poem in very dark, yet well written, although I admit it sent chills up my spine. The entry is great from beginning to end.
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MY LIKES: You did a great job of relaying the traditional Corn Festival. I revere Native American culture, and the poem is superb. The imagery is excellent, and the rhythm good as well.
MY DISLIKES:I had no dislikes.
OVERALL THOUGHTS: The entry gives readers a bit of knowledge about one of the Native Americans rituals. The poem sweeps readers back to the past.
ERRORS: Having had the pleasure of reading your work before, I was not surprised that no mistakes were noticed.
SUGGESTIONS: None for improving the entry.
MY THOUGHTS: This is a superb poem! It was almost like reading a story. The rhythm and imagery are fabulous. The poem relays how powerful blind love is and how beastly it can be as well, but that love conquers all. SUPERB!
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WHAT I THOUGHT: I think the lyrics are wonderful. They are well written, and from the heart. I liked that. The rhythm is good, and the imagery is fabulous.
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ERRORS: No mistakes were spotted.
SUGGESTIONS: None I can think of that would improve the entry. It is great!
OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm flows perfectly, and the imagery is just as good. Although dark, the poem is superbly written. I have no personal favorites. I liked the entire entry.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and the only suggestion I have is to keep writing these sensational poems.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm is right on, and the imagery is magnificent as well. The impact put on time is perfect in my opinion. From force to currency, you did a great job of defining time. The entry is different in a good way. I liked that.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: "to" should be "too" in the last line of the first stanza and the poem does not follow a traditional rhyming pattern.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: There is no traditional rhyming pattern as specified in the contest rules, however I still enjoyed reading the poem. The emotions and imagery are very good.
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ERRORS: No mistakes were noticed.
SUGGESTIONS: I cannot think of anything I feel would improve the entry.
MY THOUGHTS: The imagery is fabulous. Although I liked the whole poem, the second stanza is my favorite. I could almost see the couple dancing in the heavenly dust. Lovely poem!
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhyming pattern is perfect, and the imagery superb. Katy is defined well. Your wife handled your daughter's dilemma perfectly. You are right. Young hearts heal easier than older ones. The poem is outstanding.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything to improve the entry.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm and imagery are fantastic. A good example of imagery is The skies cry rain... I liked the second stanza about being soul mates. I wish it had stayed.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, spelling, or other errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions I can think of for improvement.
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MY OPINION: The sonnet is well written and an enjoyable read. The rhythm and imagery are outstanding. I have no personal favorites. I liked every stanza.
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OVERALL THOUGHTS: The imagery and rhythm are fantastic. Good examples of why I liked the imagery so much are the lines about the Twin Moons and the entire third stanza. The poem is well written.
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MY OPINION: The rhythm and imagery are super. The title suits the poem as well. You did a fantastic job of relaying what is felt for the woman in the mirror. The entry is unique, and drew me in from beginning to end.
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: I did not see any errors, and there are no suggestions for improvement.
CHARACTERS: Although not fiction, you and your family are described well. I like that because it lets us know a little more about you.
STORYLINE: The story is superb!
MY OPINION: You did a splendid job of relaying what Christmas was like in your home. I could almost smell the pine-scented tree and see you and your sisters pinning the stockings to chairs. The story is uplifting and touched my heart.
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, grammatical, or other errors were noticed. There are no suggestions I feel would improve the entry.
OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm is excellent, and the message terrific as well. You are right about being perfect. None of us are, whether it be our writing or anything else. However, picking up a pen and trying to get our meaning across helps, which is relayed well in the poem. I do not think a writer's pen ever dies, just takes a rest sometimes.
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