Hello jaya ,
First of all I want to thank you for your entry in my Stroll Down Memory Lane contest. I would like to share some of my thoughts about it in the spirit of friendliness.
Please remember these are only my opinions and take what you might find helpful for your story.
Now on to your review ~
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a detailed story of a retired single woman who buys a home at the seaside to live out her senior years surrounded by the sense of old world charm.
STORYLINE: In the beginning, your story shows your main character, Paula, moving into her newly purchased home by the sea. The middle of the story solves the problem of two young boys stealing vegetables from her garden. She wishes that they give her their bicycle. They explain how much they need it , but will lend it on weekends and agree to teach her how to ride it. You end the story by Paula having her wish fulfilled.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I suggest that you drop the repeated use of the word often as it is used so many times in a row here - Often she sent just-picked cauliflowers, beats and turnips with Jim or Ricky or anyone who’d like to take some. Paula felt her social service instinct somewhat assuaged. Often, Jim, Ricky and their friends came in to help her as well as to enjoy a game of badminton. Paula often played with them.
PARTING THOUGHTS: A good story following the prompt you chose, well..
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck in the contest.