First off I would like to say thank you for entering my first contest!
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Now on to my review of your story ~
WHAT I LIKED
You have followed the prompt here very well. You keep the prompt as the theme in your story constant.
I like that you ended your story with the same words as you started it with.
WHAT I DIDN'T LIKE
Actually, you have started with FOUR words and ended with the same FOUR here! When cut back to THREE (as stated in the rules of this contest) - they end up differently. Do you see that?
However, I don't have the heart to disqualify you for that if you change it toTHREE instead of FOUR
FORM/STRUCTURE
This is well written in first person - past and present tense is written fittingly.
I enjoyed the "penny candy" plot. You've packed a lot of story into your word count here and succeeded in pulling off a great beginning, middle, and end to your story.
SUGGESTIONS
The only suggestion I have is that you change your FOUR words at the beginning and end to THREE words instead. I loved your story and want to see your entry remain in the contest. I will even give it a higher rating.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I enjoyed this somewhat educational 'penny candy' walk down memory lane with you!
Good luck in the contest!