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Review of Quarantined  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Norman,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is under quarentine and not sure what to do with themselves. The reader is wondering if the speaker will find enough to fill the time. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremelly well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation here, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi HeadlessGuy,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what exactly the speaker and dulhan will do together. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who loses his head to a strange woman but has bizare time with her afterwards. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Nick pt. 1  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Devin,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is intense and passionate. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, a couple who only have each other share a night of passion and love. I loved the powerful emotions that run through the poem as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of A Peek Into Hell  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Velicity,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of terror. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why this girl is in such an ominous place. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a girl is trapped in a scary, desolate place much like you would imagine hell would be. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the trapped girl, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of OroborO  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi E.B.,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxeity and tension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will succumb to his injuries and if he will be in his own time if he does. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a wounded soldier moves between different realities and experiences two battles at the same time. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The speaker comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Bruce,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with anxiety as Baldwin and Morgan are saved from the sea. The reader is wondering if they will be alright and will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They will read to the last word to see if the men remain safe. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come acrossoob one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) “We have gates which we close up at night and if they are broken we have another defence.”-There should be a comma after "night".

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Lepsy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is one you wrote while doing drugs. The reader is fascinated with the images that went through your mind at this point. They will read to the last word. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Silverwindrose Dragon Minstrel,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. The writer launches into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. This is a donation letter for a science field trip. It to the point and concise. Very effective. The length is perfect. The writer has completely developed his topic without belaboring the issue and making it tedious. The style is primarily emotional and suits the topic very well. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi HollyMerry,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my poem "The Mindset Of My Life". This is a fantastic outline. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the outline is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the outline without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the outline. They will read to the last word. You have outlined one of the novels you are working on. You have given enough to the reader to make they want more. TheYou length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the outline tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Thankful Sonali,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if there will be any trouble on the field trip. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a group of tenth graders take a field trip and one had pizza on his mind. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The speaker's aunt speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi turtlemoon,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the ladies will have a good vacation. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, two women encounter a little difficulty in their retirement trip. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Undead Ambition  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Beholden,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Brendan's plans are for his acting exercise. They will read to the last word to find out. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Signal  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi dragonwoman,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what the signal is. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a little boy learns about a very important signal that is used in his family. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Stonehenge  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jillian,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of wonder. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, Druid priests are holding a ceremony at Stonehenge. I love the aura of magic that flows through the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but that does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of A NIGHT GUARD  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi starchild,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word to find out. You have written about a poor family you are greatly concerned about. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Her Mare's Nose  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Pony Tale,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is informal and light. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a child who is being teased by their sister about the smell of her horse's nose. It sounds like a lot of the conversation with my younger cousins I had growing up. I didn't have any siblings. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Drummergirl,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Karla will avoid dealing the the zombie apocalypes. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a girl tries to get away from zombies who have overrun her home town. The conflict is well defined. there is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have used dialogue but neglected to put each piece into its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Patrice,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the piece with a short note about the audio portion that will be added once permission has been given. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have outlined your idea for an historical fiction story involving Michael Jackson. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your next project. The length is perfect. you completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi HollyMerry,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with
Broden being held captive. The reader is wondering why this has happened and will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of My Emblem  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mary Ann,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my wedding card. This is a wonderful poem. The tone is light. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. You have written about a few emblems from different countries. I have always love finding out about the flags and emblems of different countries. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi C.R.,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with Jackie and Jonathan starting a trip. The reader is wondering where they are going exactly. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They get completely caught up in the atmosphere of adventure in the chapter. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi A.J.,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker is disturbed. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a man decides for himself the value of his doctor's life. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Heart's Content  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi E. B.,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about integrating love and passion into your life and not just concentrating on what must be done. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Back to the Skies  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jack,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the entry is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You have written about your struggles with writing and being here on the site. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Race for Romance  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jellyfish,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Beth will finish the race. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman decided to run a race to impress a man. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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