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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sahan,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion, fear and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Taryn will be able to stay with her family. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a empathic girl tries to come to terms with her abilities and her parents' fear of it. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and believable. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)We don’t know what to expect and that’s what scares us.”-There should be a comma after "expect".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Chris,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with a description of what kind of person Sophie is and exactly what is troubling her. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on Sophie and the chapter. They will read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader wants to know how much trouble Sophie might get in and how she will handle it. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of A Lost Harvest  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Sean,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of animosity and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what happened to all the product at the RealChix warehouse. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a warehouse holding plant-based products is robbed, and a former employee wants to know how and who did it. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Bobby,
This is a fabulus poem. The tone is full of wonder and peace. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who thinks he sees a mermaid during a day on the water. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Prankster  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi D. NuMont,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with fun and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering where the speaker has lost"Dotheir shocking pen. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a prankster wakes up to find a vital item in their bag of jokes it missing. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)“don't try anything on him- he needs his rest."-"don't" needs to begin with a capital letter.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Darken_Graves,
This one made me want cry, but it was fantastic. The tone is full of sorrow and love. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about visiting your father's grave and the emotions you experienced. I am so sorry for your loss and hope you found the comfort you need and deserve. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Aspiring To Be Me,
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. In the article you give your opinion of acting normal. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the articl tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to use a comma before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Poetry  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Barbie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the different types of poetry that their are. I like reading poetry at times and have sampled many different types. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Home  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Angelica,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone having a relaxing drive in their jeep as night falls. I love the relaxing atmosphere of the poem. I also loved this description that brings the reader into the outdoors with you. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi apexel,
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. I love to take pictures but am not that good at it. I began to read right away to find out more about photography in general. You introduce the topic by posing a direct question to the reader. They immediatly start thinking about the answer and will read to the last word to see what your thoughts are. You have written about the meaning and purpose of photography. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for the reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Lost in my Mind  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sabrina,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic with a direct question to the reader. This gets them thinking about the possible answer. They will read to the last word to find out your thoughts on the matter. You have written about getting lost in your thoughts. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)Have you ever been so lost in you're mind that you thought you would never return to back to reality.-This is a question and needs to end with a question mark.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Wandering Thought  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi outsidetheaxle,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter ver well. The poem is about someone who has a fleeting thought while sleeping which just goes away on their waking. I hate it when my thought doesn't stay long enough to grab onto. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Center stage  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi LC moreno
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anger and frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a doctor who loses a COVJD-19 patient no despite his efforts to save them. I love poems which tell stories. Emotional poems are my favorite. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi G.B. Williams,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the things you have to be thankful for, even though they might be a little annoying. I always keep in mind all the things I have to be grateful for, namely my family, having a safe home and my health. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poemf flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Okes,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I am always looking for more information about the pandemic and began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the pandemic and the possible future consequences of it. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Blue Light  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Roari,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suites the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem, a new night is filled with activity of the animals who are either ending or starting their activity. I love the peaceful nights where I live. You can hear the animals that fill the night go about their business do easily. The other night I heard an owl for the first time. We don't usually get them around here. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistnetly in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Darken_Graves,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow, love and hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who is in love with someone who does not love him anymore. He is determined to wait for her, though. The reader is wondering if the man will find someone else to love before he spends his life waiting. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi DragonBlue,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with a sense of darkness and mystery with their first look at the wolf. They will read on to see what he will do. This a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are completely absorbed in the aggression that boils just below the surface of this chapter. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of Upon Teeth  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Lyria,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anguish and pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about your feelings of inadeuacy. I am truly hoping that you have gained more self-confidence since writing this. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Firebrand Times Newspaper,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic with a disclaimer stating that all opinions are valid and should be expressed freely. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about religious observation and how it should be accepted freely and not hidden due to society's need for political correctness. I totally agree. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Sailor M,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with aggravation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how much trouble Kevin and his brother might get into. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a man is flabberghasted and worries when his brother asks his to try some gambling. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Cush-Hero  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Axton,
This is a wonderful act. The act opens with anxeity as the reader wonders what kind of trouble Tony might be in. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the act. They will read to the last word to see if Tony will be alright. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The act is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the act. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)The two women straps-"straps" should be "strap".

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sherasi,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how education has evolved to include technology, like computers, in the learning process. I didn't get to use a computer until well into high school, and then only on a very limited basis. Now, I'm getting a cell phone for the first time. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in the poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Zimmernan's Urn  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Wilderness Dude,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what will happen to the old man. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, the kidnapping of an old man leads him to the place he wants to be most. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. You use strong imagery to put your reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1}In a few places you have forgetten to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the importance of practise in playing any sport. I was never into playing sports, but I do love watching hockey. I see that some teams are markedly better than others, and I tend to wonder why that is. It might just be more practise. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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