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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi AngieR,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. I have never been on a Ferris Wheel but would like to try it. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Seuzz,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of impatience and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering where the mummified body has come from. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who decides to look into the strange instance of a mummified body being fished out of the East River. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Gig  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi hullabaloo22,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement and disappointment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will enjoy the concert. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, someone is injured at a concert they have waited a long time to attend. The conflict is well define. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Musical Treasure  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Carly,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of anticipation and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Alessia will find the singer she is looking for. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who tries to find a singer she heard singing by a lake. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a few structural issues that need your attention:

1)no not me.-"no" should begin with a capital letter.

2)"what's up?'-"what's" should begin with a capital letter.

3) In a couple of places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Lost in Thought  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Norman,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is hoping that sleep with help their cluttered mind. I am hoping that the sleep works for the speaker. I know what it is like to have too many thoughts running around in my mind. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of red soil in june  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Sidney,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about children who are reading on a blanket outdoors while waiting for their father to return home. This poem reminds me of many summer days when I lived with my parents. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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for entry "forget it
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kristina,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the entry is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. In this entry you have no prompt to go by and really don't know what to right about. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi John,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what use the magic beans will be to Jackie. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is a retelling of the fairy tale "Jack and the Beanstalk". This one is more aggressive and the beans are traded for an old computer. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Rein,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is a lovely myth of the creation of seasons and their change. I love myths and loved reading this sadly, elegant poem. I read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.


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Review of The Future  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi ESTyree,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the future as you think it will be, mainly structured and very uninteresting. I hope this is not our future. I loved this poem and read to the last word. You should have gone with this in contest. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Ranger  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Raoc,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if David will be able to get reinforcements to his company soon. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a soldier is instructed by his commanding officer to bring reinforcements to his surrounded company. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Elfin Dragon,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written a descriptive assignment with a valley with a vast fortress as your subject. This is such a beautiful scene, I think you should integrate it into a novel or story. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Mars planet view  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi K.HBey,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what the astronaut will discover as he explores Mars. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, an astronaught starts to explore Mars after landing. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the astronaut, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of The Day Begins  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi LeAnna,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Yon waking up in the morning. The reader is wondering what the day will hold for her and why she is still so tired. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of Seven Years Later  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Whitemorn,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Adam will remain cynical or if something will change for him. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, prompted by his grandmother, a young man revisits the wonder of childhood and grows as a person. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of The Chase  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Mastiff,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion and wonder. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want t read on. The reader is wondering, like the speaker, why Bare insists on chasing squirrels. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who is mystified when his dog incessantly chases squirrels. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The man in the story speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Handmanu,
This is wonderful story. The tone is full of apathy and delight. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Amy will find another aspect to her life. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who lives a very uneventful life until there is an accident in the laboratory in which she works. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sorji,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation and disbelief. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if party will go well. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman plans the perfect birthday party for her son and hopes all goes well. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the mother, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi RubyDragon,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of determination and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the person in quarantine will find some way to focus and come out without mental problems. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about someone who is getting stressed and confused as their time under quarantine goes on. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the person who is quarantined, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi River,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the entry. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. You have written about the progress of your activity Reviewing With River. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi SandraLynn,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering who the writer of the mysterious letter might be. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a town who finds a letter in their time capsule which holds a mystery that the confounds the residents who have attended the opening. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Coder's Muse  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Jack,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Lindsay will help Vern with his new game. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a man gets support and help from a woman he barely knows when he designs a computer game. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi dog pack,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of fear and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the woman is suffering from. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who is facing a serious illness and the life changes that go with it. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Prosperium Prime  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Seuzz,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of wonder and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what lays inside the walls of Prosperium Prime. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a ancient refuge for survivors of a plague causes wonder and interest from those that live around it. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of An autumn walk  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HollyMerry,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is the beauty someone experienced while going on a walk on an Autumn day. I love the bold, vibrant colors that the leaves turn in Autumn. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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