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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lurie,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about a delightful Hindu festival. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Jays Win Slugfest  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Epiehl,
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. Any Toronto Blue Jays fan will anxiously begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have given the highlights of a baseball game between the Toronto Blue Jays and the Atlanta Braves which turned out to be challenging for both teams. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for the reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Vincat456,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens at the beginning of the next day. This keeps the reader's train of thought flowing and keeps them focused on the narrative. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are completely taken in with the emotion and action of the chapter. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention;

1)The man is finally done unfreezing the girl. She opens her eyes Revealing her bright purple eyes as she slowly sits up. “Who are you?” The girl asked. The man Throws the embers to the ground, his hands burned down to the bones start to regenerate. “Saya it me Makoto..” The man says as his hand finishes regenerating. The girl pulls Makoto in for a hug, Makoto hugs back. “So I was not too late, you still remember me.” Makoto says as he hugs The girl tightly.-Here two characters are speaking. The paragraph should be divided into two for each piece of dialogue.

2)In a few places you have neglected to use a capital letter to begin sentences. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Beholden,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement and nervousness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Morgan will climb the structure of the Old Man. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a man travels to see a mysterious rock formation he has always heard of and has a strange experience when he gets there. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Morgan, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The Old Man speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Rachel,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with uncertainty and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Logan will realize that Gabe is actually heterosexual before he gets his heart broken. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, four young people navigate a complicated romantic situation. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)I know, you were too busy staring at Gabe over there,” I rolled my eyes at how he was turning red and I couldn’t help but laugh at him. As I was laughing, he threw a toothpick at me and told me to shut up.
When Gabe finally came over, he took our orders, “What can I get for you two today?” He looked up from his notepad, “Oh, hey Carolina. Hey Logan.” His teeth were straight and white. He had a perfect amount of muscle, they weren’t too big and they weren’t too small. Gabe’s hair was straight, which was surprising since his hair is always messy.-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.

You switch the point of view during the story, but it is done smoothly. The story is consistent in terms of tense. Great job.

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Review of The Chinese Box  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bill,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and shock. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the speaker will do with the box he has purchased. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who buys a jewelry box only to find out it is inhabited by a dragon. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. You use strong imagery to put your reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi lezismore,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. This gives the reader of Jamie's current situation and his condition after his recapture. They will read on to find out what happens to Jamie next. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They want to find out if Jamie will attempt another escape. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Vincat456,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with intrigue as Naruto sits and waits for someone. The reader is wondering who he is waiting for. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi collininsurance,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the services offered by the insurance company you work for. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi LJ,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with confusion and worry. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has been transported to an parallel universe. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Whiskerface73yearsoflove,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about how much you like the Beach Boys. I love them as well. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi midasmanifest,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how to more easily manifest the things you want in your life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi flyfishercacher,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the tedium that might be involved in mastering a craft. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of I, Zombie  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kotaro,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of surprise and anger. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a murder victim who rises to get revenge on the person who killed them. I love poems that tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi DiaDia,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of excitement and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Jamie's parents will react to Dia. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a boy makes friends with a strange boy. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to begin sentences with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Benjamin  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Patrice,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Patti ended up in a psychiatric facility. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a mother and daughter have a strange, strained relationship they are both trying to cope with. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. Patti speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)fuming and foot stomping made her feel justifiably victimized--yet for what she did not know.-"fuming" should begin with a capital letter.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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for entry "Buried Treasure #3
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jack,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the entry is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You have outlined the purpose of your blog and feature the link to an essay you feel should be shared with others. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use a light style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Kare,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of contentment and tranquility. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is pulled along by the emotions in the story. They will read to the last word. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman working on poetry experiences a moment of peace. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and realistic. The story concentrates on Yanni, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Victory Seeker,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Martha will help Jack improve his life. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a woman tries to help a homeless man and get him to open up to her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Gotta Hold On  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Angus,
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have given an summary of the unpleasant things that went on in the States in 2020 and your attitude toward them. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great jon.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Sam,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is fascinated with Aguilar and want to find out more about him. They will read on. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, the people of a town try, over and over again, to kill one of their political leaders. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) and Che Guevara doesn’t exist, they are teaching them lies, mother,-Should read "and Che Guevara doesn't exist, they are teaching them lies. Mother"

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Just Because  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman going through grief and sorrow after the death of her husband. I am hoping that the woman will be able to rebuild her life and go on. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi PastorJuan,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and encouraging. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is the condition your life was in when you turned to Jesus for salvation. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer as they read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jeannie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of delight and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is celebrates Spring and the renewal that comes with it. I like Spring. It's warmer and I am able to get around better. Summer is my favorite season, though. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Rat  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi T.J.,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the homeless man will be able to use the gems to help himself. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a wealthy man runs a very unusual scam. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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