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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jeff,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Tess and Mitch will manage to find Los Vegas. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman frustrated with a man who won't admit that he is wrong, even when its leading them into the wrong direction. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lou,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is melancholy and filled with disappointment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who believes they will not be remembered because they are not important enough to be remembered. I am hoping that the person in the poem will find a way to improve their self esteem and reach out to others for support. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Screenplay  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Pen Name?,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader a little about your time on the site. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have shared your struggle in finding someone who will actually read your screenplay. Ever writer has had problems like this. My only two books are on Amazon because I couldn't get a publisher to look at them. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

As for advice. I found this article online that might be of some help. https://scriptmag.com/features/magic-bullet-how-to...

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi black_winged_angel,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. You have described the novel you are working on and announced that you need a publisher. The reader is delighted with the look they get at the progress of your career. It sounds like a amazing novel. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a forceful style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi johnhowardreid,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written announcing the beginning of a few writing contests and how they can be found. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Gman,

I just loved the title of this one. I wanted to know more about what would be going on in this essay and how spirituality would figure into the whole scenario. Most of these types of essays reach out to offer help to others. I love essays that do that. There is, most times, little nuggets of wisdom we can all benefit from. You introduce the topic with a brief statement about your thoughts about the human experience. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the you and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about how a person cannot really plan for every problem because they can't anticipate everything that could go wrong. That is certainly true. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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This is a wonderful essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. The
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lexi,

A couple of things led me to this chapter. I love reviewing novels in general. I know what it is like to work on a novel, and I understand how challenging it can be at times to get the chapters reviewed. The title indicates that the novel is about a family. I love novels which revolve around a family and their family conflicts.

This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with the statement that the Bentleys are mice and goes on to describe the family. You have given animals personalities like humans. I love this technique. Fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Sam,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why Roland doesn't seem to be enjoying the wedding. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who attends the wedding of the love of his life, as a guest. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Untangle  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Twit,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied and desperate. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a time in your life when you were overwhelmed by many things that caused you great pain. I have gotten through the times in my life like this with my Faith and my husband. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

Winter Owl
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi nick,

This is a wonderful piece. The title makes the reader think the piece will be humorous. I am half Irish and most of my family played darts, and it always amounted to a time with a fair amount of laughs. I began to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief discussion about your ability at playing darts. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on you and the topic. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time you were convinced to take on five Irishmen in Darts. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) “ keep that son we’ll be taking more than that off you soon enough”.-Should read "Keep that son. We'll be taking more than that off you soon enough."

You use a light hearted style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of My Wife's Escape  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Simple Dykie,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It only states that the reader will be reading about your wife's escape. Was it from criminal, a dangerous animal? The reader is not sure but will begin to read immediately to find out. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on you and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a time when you had to compete with your wife's new car for her attention. The reader is delighted with the look they get a you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Moments of Gold  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jack,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the joy you get watching and spending time with your grandchildren and how much you learn from them. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of The Golden Buddha  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rhino,

The title caught me here. I wasn't sure whether you were talking about a statue or some aspect of the Buddhist religion. Other religions besides my own have always held a fascination for me. I love learning new things in general, but different religions were always especially interesting for me. I wanted to find out more about this piece.

The is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a certain type of Buddhist philosophy. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Thursday  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi D Babm

The title of this poem is a weekday. I was wondering if anything special had happened on Thursday or if something else inspired this title. Your synopsis says this is mindless ramblings, so that intrigued me even more. I just had to read this one to see what was going on.

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who has lost her love and is wondering if he remembers their time together like she does. The poem is infused with deep emotion. I am wondering if this couple will get back together or adjust to being apart as I read. I read to the last word to see which happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure.

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Review of Flames  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Aaron,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied and filled with energy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how romantic love can lose its way at times. I am hoping that this couple will be able to stay clear of serious problems. I read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but it is not needed here. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Creig,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of love and longing. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering of the future will reflect the optimism this woman seems to have. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a couple who decide to start a life adventure together. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Skurpio,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with confusion, worry and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what has happened to Bill after his fight with Shannon and where he was when he woke up. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a man disappears and his friends are worrying and wondering where he is. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1) In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.


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Review of A Prince's Vow  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Monster V.,

The title of this story said that it was fantasy and, probably romantic. I love both of these things in stories. I love stories about royalty. I just had to read this one.

This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the knight will knight will accept the prince's proposal of marriage. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a prince who continually proposes to a knight, only to be refused over and over again. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to put each piece of dialogue in its own paragraph. You should remember to do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Weirdone,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety and suspicion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what anti-adhesive elixir is. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a sales man trying to get the residents of a small town to buy his invention. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Chase  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Queen NormaJean Greeneyes,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why Brad is so nervous. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about two friends who realize they are in midst of a forest fire. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

Winter Owl
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Review of The Body  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Ken,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of fear and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if anyone will come along to help Ken. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a young man's accident while mountain climbing may have been foretold by a little girl. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Averran,

This is a fantastic essay. The title is a statement that is draws all the reader's attention. It tells the reader very little about what is in the essay. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. The essay tells the reader how a piece of advice shaped your life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use an organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi icracra,

The title of this piece was filled such excitement. I swept me away. I just had to know more. The synopsis mentions that this is an idea for a new book. That just peaked my interest altogether. I just had to know more about this.

This is a fantastic piece. The title is, as well as being full of excitement, tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have given the reader a description of one of the characters of your next book and a little about her circumstances. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your next project. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Scott,

You caught my interest with the title of this story from the moment I read it. It seemed to have a scary quality that I love in stories. Your synopsis left me unable to resist reading. I wanted to know what the secret was.

This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Margaret is hiding, if anything. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is hiding something from her neighbors as they all live near some outcast children. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. Margaret speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi wastor64,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of passion, longing, and some annoyance. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering it Daphne and the strange man will be interrupted in their encounter. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about two people who have a brief, erotic encounter in a bar. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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