I was wondering if you would be sharing few, different poems here, and I was anxious to find out what you would share. I am intrigued when I am not sure what, exactly I will be experiencing when I go to read a piece of any sort. I was anxious to start this piece.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and beseeching. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the what is going on in the poem. They will read to on. You have written about a group of people who are suffering through a severe calamity which is causing widespread pain and starvation and deprivation. The reader is wondering if there will be anyone to help these poor people. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
The title of this poem got my attention today. I wasn't sure if it would be something heartbreaking and sad or just a general poem about lies in general. I have also been going through something with a friend of mine in which I am left wondering if I have been lied to. I really wanted to read this poem. It really has put a few things into perspective for me.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You have a point to make, and you intend to make it. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about what lies can do to people and relationships. I have always believed that honesty is the best policy. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
My mother is a retired teacher and has been talking about the changes that have occurred in schools because of the extensive use of technology in our world. She has pointed out her concern that with kids learning to use computers for their schoolwork, there is a risk that kids might lose out on fundamental skills like penmanship. This is what attracted me to this article.
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. This will be a fascinating piece for anyone familiar with the education system. The reader will begin right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief discussion about the impact technology has had on education in general. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how technology has influenced education in our world. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
I was entranced with the title of this piece. I was uncertain if it would be romantic or be a general piece about love in general. Either way, I am a romantic and was anxious to read a piece about love.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. The are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the very last word. You have written about moving on from a broken heart and being able to love yourself before you commit to loving someone else. I learned to love myself a long time ago. It was the only way I could get the forever love I had been dreaming of. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied and full of confusion. It is apparent as I read that the man in the poem has some sort of mental problem. I am hoping he will get the help he needs. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone confronted my a religious fanatic who is intent on killing them. I am wondering if the speaker will get killed by the person threatening them. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasant. Great job.
Hi Troyizen,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Camille getting more and more erratic. The reader is wondering what sort of trouble she is planning on causing. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are wondering how Carter will figure into Camille's devious plans. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)"Oh, sorry. I just got here and wanted to see you," said Angelina as she held onto Caroline's naked hips with her hands. Caroline lifted herself on her tippy-toes and kissed Angelina on her lips. Angelina's hands slipped down to her butt, and Carter saw a slight squeeze.
The golden-armored Angelina released her grip on Princess Caroline as she gathered her clothes from the ground. Rita and Ursa excitedly exited the bath and also hugged the fully clothed woman while naked.-These are two separated paragraphs and need to be double spaced.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as a real people. Great job.
The title is this piece makes a direct statement. I am assuming the piece is fiction, and this one statement tells me, right away about one of the characters. I am anxious to find out if there are other character and what I can learn about them. Therefore, I began reading right away.
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is confused and heartbroken. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will find anyone who can fill their life with trust and love. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about someone who is introverted and has lost the one person they found they could open up to. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on the speaker, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The piece is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
The title and the description you gave pulled me in right away. The title sends the message that this will be am emotional piece. Y-goblet had me thinking this would be something about the ancient world. Both of these things always add up to a fantastic story.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is aggressive but formal at the same time. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Calus will defeat Gaul and rule that country as well. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a mighty emperor who is looking to conquer a country and add it to his empire. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words.
The title of this poem caught my attention as soon as I read it. It makes a direct statement about you and what you are looking for. I love finding out more and more about the members here. I started in on this poem right away. It also made me wonder if you are an artist yourself. There were so many good reasons to read and review this poem.
This is a fantastic poem. The poem is upbeat and slightly aggressive. You have something you want to share with the reader, and you intend to share it. The poem is about all the reasons you want to fall in love with, and be in a relationship with an artist. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person. They will read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This chapter seemed like it had a science fiction feel to it when I saw the title. Then the description you offered mentioned a curse. I love science fiction and magic. I had to start this one to see how the two would mesh.
This is a wonderful first chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. The reader can envision Barbela as they read. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on Barbela and the chapter. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the way the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1)as he climbed up the slope-"as" should begin with a capital letter.
2)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about what life would be like controlled humans and not the other way around. We had a dog when I was growing up, and I can see him having some of wishes expressed in the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow, hurt and anger. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who has been badly hurt by the woman he planned to ask to marry him. I am filled with so much sympathy for the man in the poem. I read to the last word to see if he would be able to rebuild his life. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but it is not needed here. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Princess Mary rummaging through her father's papers. The reader is wondering what she is looking for. They will read on to find out. This is a fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. They get a good look at Princess Mary's evil, devious side and wonder what plan she will come up with to gain the throne. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)More grander-Should read "More grand".
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi strlcuckoo,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with wonder and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about having there first experience with writing. I remember when I first wrote a long piece in school. It was a story. This poem brought this right to mind. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Two things got my attention as I clicked onto this story. The title is designates it as a diary entry, but it is categorized as fiction. Obviously this some sort of mock memoir. It has been a long time since I read something like this. I wanted to find out what it was all about. Very interesting way to do things.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what is going on in Edith's life. They will begin to read right away to find out. The story is about how the main character, Edith, has grown up and how she lives. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Edith's father speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
The title of this piece really caught my attention. I did not know just from that what the piece would be talking about. It said educational so I was thinking an essay of some sort. I was anxious to find out what I would be finding out about as I read.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. I did have to look up standee to find out what that was, but others in your community would know what you are talking about. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have given the reader the guidelines and purpose of a contest going on in your community. The reader will know exactly what they will have to do to enter and enjoy this contest. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
The title of this poem caught my attention. I was wondering what type of escape you were describing here. Was is an escape from danger, from yourself or something else entirely. We try to escape from so many things in our lives. I had to find out what the escape was all about and why it was important to you.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone starts off dark and disappointed then changes to hopeful. This captures all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about going to where you previously lived, and finding the places you remember enjoying did not hold as much joy for you as they once did. We find that a lot as we visit the places with either grew up in or, simply, moved out of. I am hoping that in some way your disappointment will shift to a much more positive feeling. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the coming of Spring and how the earth and everything on it wakes up at this time. I love watching the snow go and the leaves grow on the trees at this time. I love Spring, but Summer even more. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Interlocking Rubaiyat poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and genre very well. The reader is wondering if the dragon they attacked can be caught. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, two princesses go with the King's knights to hunt a dragon who attacked the village. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem you contemplate why you wrote poetry when you were younger and not very good at it. I did the same thing years ago, and I have always wondered the same thing. I saw a lot of myself in this poem, and read to the last word. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Beholden,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with peace and love. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who is admiring his wife sleep and contemplating their love and their life together. This marriage seems so happy. I am hoping that this couple will withstand the test of time. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
I have loved every novel I have experienced here. I have had a few books on this site myself. Two of these books were even published. I wanted to see what yours would entail. I love fantasy. They are some of my favorite pieces on this site. I anxiously read this piece.
This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with a boy getting slapped by his father. The shock of the blow and the wondering of what might have caused it grabs all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the action and chapter. They will read on. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Friend,
I loved Jack and the Beanstalk as a kid. It was one of my favorite fairy tales. I love seeing other writers' takes on popular fairy tales and other popular stories. Different versions can give the same story so much depth. I wanted to see what your version was like, and this is what drew me to this story.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what Jack's mother will day when she sees the beans he brought home. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a boy who swaps a cow he was supposed to sell for a handful of beans. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi ounsworth17,
I don't write a lot of poetry, but I love reviewing it. Poems are so subjective. I love seeing what random thoughts and emotions influence people's poems. So much of what happens in a writer's life influences what a writer writes.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is serene and filled with joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a time when you spent time in peaceful, beautiful fields. Do you get to visit this spot much? We have a spot that is beautiful and peaceful just a short walk from my home. I love the description and imagery you use in this poem. I could see the fields as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
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