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Review of Robert In Winter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lou,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of impatience. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is reflecting on how much they dislike winter as they look out the window at the falling snow. I am not a fan of Winter, like the speaker. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kathie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of apprehension and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a time in your life when you make an uncertain choice in order to have a better life. I hope that your choice has given you the happiness your were seeking in your life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Goat Farm  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mastiff,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone watching a herd of goats play among themselves. I was taken with the peace and serenity in this poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have concentrated on one image here-the playfulness of the goats. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi lucifer very very very 1st,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal but tinged with aggression. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how a fire can feed off of itself and get bigger an more uncontrollable over time. I have heard that this can happen, and I have see fires I start in my fire pit get pretty big. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The philosophical poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The poem has a wonderful rhythm. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Rook  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Bedilah,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and slightly sinister. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a rook stalking prey in the wild in winter. I am wondering if the rook will get the person it is hunting. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Music's An Art  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Richard,
This is a wonderful poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how music is something which is common to all of us. This is true. I don't know of anyone who doesn't like some type of music. I loved this poem and read to the last word. I did find a problem with the way you handled the lipogram poetic form:

1)You wanted to not use the letter "E", but "like" has that letter. You could use "akin to". That might word.

The poem does flow very well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kurt,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about humans and their propensity for fighting and killing each other. I believe that one day, long in the future, humans will become mature enough to shed violence. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled wonder and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about sinner's being forgiven by God and connecting to His loving Presence. I hope to be connected with God in Heaven one day. I work towards this goal everyday. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi ViolentBeast,
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is formal. It suits the piece and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Scooby and his friends will be able to defeat the robots. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, Scooby Doo and the gang have to handle two robots from the future. They conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to start sentences or proper names with capital letters. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi SomeGuy,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of bitterness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will get back at the people who have enslaved his race. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a man takes to sea to free his people from a race who has enslaved them but still feels that the enslavement of his people might be partially responsible for their own predicament. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi HollyMerry,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a man whose bride leaves him, and all he has is a bunch of holly berries to remember her. I am wondering why this couple are not together. I read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Each Day  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi dog pack,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of faith and trust. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has been removed from God for a time but still believes they will be with Him in heaven someday. I have been struggling with the faith for the past few years, and I hoping to repair my relationship with Him. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Leading the Team  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Master Om,
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief discussion of why the lead dog in a team of sled dogs is not the leader. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the composition of a sled dog team based on your own experience. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. You also make the topic very comprehensible for the reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi PENsive is Meemaw X 3!,
This is a fantastic story The tone is full of love and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is taken with the love in this family. They will read to the last word. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a young man realizes the many things in his life he had to appreciate and be thankful for. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Ever Thankful  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi It's too hot already!,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the safety your pets feel now that you, and your family, have rescued them from homelessness. It is written from the point of view of you largest pet. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Earth  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Avalon Cole Hive,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, you celebrate the Earth and everything is gives to us. I am a great believer in keeping our planet healthy. It is our home, after all. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Underneath  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Julia,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what is interesting about the Underground. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who discovers a terrible secret about her friend. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Lonely The Dragon  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rinsoxy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about an immortal dragon who is along in the world and lonely. I am hoping that the dragon will find more like him for companionship. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Lonely The Dragon  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rinsoxy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about an immortal dragon who is along in the world and lonely. I am hoping that the dragon will find more like him for companionship. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Heartfelt Tears  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi LegendaryMask,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a time when you were so moved at the death of an unrelated veteran that it brought you to tears. I find the death of anyone heart breaking and feel for any family who has to grieve. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Payback  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Sumojo,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with anxiety and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Lucas has some sort of evil, supernatural abilities. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a town with a gang problem is visited by a strange man who seems to have tragedy following him. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1) “What’s that you’re drinking?-This is a piece of dialogue and needs to end with quotation marks.

2)“You leaving-This is a piece of dialogue and needs to end with quotation marks.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Heist  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Charity,
This is ar fantastic story. The tone is tinged with confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering who robbed the jewelry story. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In this story, a detective investigates a jewelry story robbery. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Prom Date  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Stephanie,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with worry and irritation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the couple will find some other way to celebrate their prom. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In this story, a lesbian couple is turned away from their high school prom because the prom is meant for boy/girl couples. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi ImSomi,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is dark and full of confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the obviously disturbed speaker will seek help. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, someone has decided that everything outside of their own thoughts is irrelevant but is becoming unstable in their isolation. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Lost then Healed  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jack,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone obsessed with getting the love of someone else. It sounds like love is hopeless and a little irrational. I read to the last word to see if the speaker would get past their fixation on the person they want. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.


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