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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mark,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a couple who are very much in love and are completely content to just be together. I am hoping that this love lasts forever. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Coincidence  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ourkidd,
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about the problems you had with buying a living room suite for your new home. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)Lindsey was just three weeks old when we moved in and she settled in quite well.-Should read "Lindsey was just three weeks old when we moved in, and she settled in quite well."

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Bedilah,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of disappointment and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who is wife and queen to a heartless man and is trying to deal with the situation. I am wondering if this relationship will endure or end. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Heat Lamp  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi nottabe,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of admiration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you feel about your favorite person. I see so much of my own feelings for my favorite person in this poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi percy,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader is caught up in the danger and drama in the chapter. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a couple of places you have neglected to use commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of Journal Entry #3  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Christy,
This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the entry is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You have written about the progress you are making with your novel. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your writing process. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Luckie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and desolation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about you feelings of aloneness and sorrow and how they affect your life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Just By Accident  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Bob'n Along,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of wonder and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Monk will find in the outside world as he reenters. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a man who was in a monastery comes back to the world and encounters a enticing woman after weeks of self denial. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Noice,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with wonder as the reader is wondering what Bliney will use the ladder for. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. The reader is anxious to find out if the antidote will work. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi A_hisokasimp,
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what kind of relationship Max and Nick will end up having. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the piece, a teenage boy finds meets the boy he wants to date online. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to start proper names with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)You have used dialogue but neglected to put each piece in its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The piece is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of On Three Cupids  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Richard,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light and informal. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about three very different Cupids and how they react. I love pieces about mythology and mythological creatures. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ups&Downs,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. The launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the confusion of having feelings which seem to have no reason. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Jenna  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Angel,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Jenna will learn about her past. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a girl is the target of bullies as she struggles with her own personal issues. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)Why wouldn’t the family say who he was and why would Joanna, or Jo, as she was known opt to bring up the baby alone.-This is a question and needs to end with a question mark.

2)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of The Key to Love  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Ken,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the key unlocks. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a couple who are led to try something different in their sex life when they find a key. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Gun in Hand  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Mimi,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is formal. It suits the piece and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the people in the piece will be hurt by whoever is shooting at them. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the piece, the residents of a home are shot at, but they have bullet proof glass. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Crissy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and s matter very well. The poem is about how beautiful you imagine snow is. Snow can be lovely. On sunny days it glistens like diamonds, when it just falls it looks like meringue on a pie. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Where's Six Now?  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Laurie,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone who sees unexpected, and unpleasant creatures on a moonlit night. I am taken with the sinister aspect of the poem, and wonder what exactly the speaker is seeing as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The haiku poetic style works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have concentrated on one image in this poem-the sight of the strange creatures as the moon shines down on them. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Love on a Platter  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi percy,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how unlucky you have been with the opposite sex from a very young age. It looks like you were did a bit better after college. I am so happy to see that. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi arya,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. You have written about the responsibility that a man and woman take on when they decide to have a baby. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of One Enormous Hug!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi hullabaloo22,
This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my Thanksgiving Card. This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy and gratitude. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you want take everything you are grateful for and give them all a huge hug. I would like to do that with all the people I love in my life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Inkless Pen  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Elisa,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the favorite pen with which you writer. I don't have a particular pen. I use my computer to writer. My desk is my special place to writer. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The acrostic poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have used the letters of "Blocked Musings" very creatively. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi nottabe,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of desperation and desire. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is trying to maintain a relationship with a demon lover who appears to them as a snake. I am wondering if the speaker will keep seeing their lover or have the presence exorcised. I read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Sweet Peggy Lee  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Brenda,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about dream you had about meeting a movie star who asked you advice about her career. We all have dreams like this which involve famous people. I have had a few involving many movie stars. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Letter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Norman,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of surprise. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who finds an old letter that talks about a family secret. I am wondering what the speaker will do about the information they find in the letter. I read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Joyous,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of desperation and frenzy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is managing the time and life of someone they idolize. I am not sure if you are talking about a spouse relationship or a working relationship, but the speaker seems to be trapped in a very unhealthy situation. I read to the last word to see if they got out. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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