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Review of The Lost Hours  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi IE,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation and disappointment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Chris will be able to make the land deal he is hoping to make. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, Daylight Savings time almost ruins a businessman's chance of landing a deal he is trying to make. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Was It A Dream?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Espero,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with serenity and anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the globs are. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who has an encounter with what they think is an alien ship. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)My first inclination was to run but-There should be a comma after "run".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of My Love, His Loss  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Veronika,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sadness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about your partner, how he is your inspiration and how it felt to have him leave. I am hoping that you have found more inspiration in your life. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Falling Leaves  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Roari,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of delight. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem celebrates Autumn in all its glory. I love Summer more but Autumn has such bold colors as the Earth prepares for her Winter slumber. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi G.B.,

This is a wonderful essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. I found your topic fascinating and began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about death and how most people react to it. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)Nowe is always the right time to be kind.-"Nowe" should be "Now".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of The Game  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sue,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with suspicion and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering who will win in this battle for power. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a younger and older man who battle with cards to possess a ring which gives the wearer the power of Divine Intervention. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Hollow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Axel,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of fear and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering where Ella is. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a girl is worried about her missing friend and tries to find her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)“Never go in there again ok. You know what happened to Jason.”-Should read "Never go in there again. OK? You know what happened to Ella."

2)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently to this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Green Jade  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi JMariah,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the people around Claire will remain as friendly as they are now. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman finds a jade bracelet and is told it will bring her luck. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Kidnapped  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Odessa,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering who the masked man is who has captured Ginnie. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is being held captive. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi vindicq,

This is a wonderful piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I recently had a discussion with a woman about this, exact topic and began to read immediately to get your thoughts on the subject. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about how to relax facial muscles as you did as a child. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:


1)wonderfully made abd-Should read "wonderfully made, and"

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jake,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of love and pride. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is a tribute to your wife who enhanced your life and others' by being a loving wife and serving in the US military. I love the strong feelings that flow through this poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Of Dreams  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Spooky Striped Sox,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is intense and full of passion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the vampire will feed off of the woman in the story. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is begging a vampire to feed from her. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of The Sock Thief  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi penguinluver1431,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering who the Sock Thief is. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a sock thief plagues a guild of people who write fairy tales. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak liker real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi GreatGuin,

This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with curiosity as the reader is wondering what the new transfer student will be like. They will read on to find out. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They get extremely involved in the relationship between Riku and Yuuto and wonder if they will get close again. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi VanillaSoftArt,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of aggravation and satisfaction. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Vidal will do to keep Goten quiet. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who finds a peculiar, and disgusting, way to keep a boy she is babysitting quiet. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Bears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi NormaJean,

This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing my story. This is a fabulous story. The tone starts off formal but ends with shock and amusement. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if where the camera was and if the couple will find it before they leave. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a couple camping in Yellowstone Park are in for a huge surprise. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)Dealing with work and mail kept us busy so several days went by before we unloaded the camera.-There should be a comma after "busy".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Rule Britannia  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Mummified_Mike,

This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with excitement as the reader is wondering what will happen at Stonehenge during Winter Solstice. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of Fire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Genipher,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with aggravation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Ug will please his wife or go out to Mammoth hunting like he wants. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a cave man and woman argue over his plans to go hunting with his friends. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. You have left the description to the imagination of the reader. This is an effective tool which keeps the reader focused on the conflict. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of The Magician  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi GERVicious Ghoul,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of wonder and surprise. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the deck of cards Marcus has found is so unusual. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a strange event leads a boy to discover his destiny. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Winded  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Elisa,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about survival after hurricanes. We live through Hurricane Igor making landfall in our province. We had no power for days, and the clean up took days. Thankfully people all pitched in and helped each other clear their property of fallen trees and fix property damage. It was a mess. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Damon,

This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You introduce the topic with and anecdote from your childhood. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the you and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the weak equivalence theory. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Lumberjack  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Genipher,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of surprise. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Michael can pull a log like he describes. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who tries to chop down a tree with surprising results. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi MINAHILHAROON,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is one of contentment and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is completely content with themselves. I am happy with the person I am and embrace that everyday. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Lesson  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ken,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone about to try something as potentially dangerous. I am thinking that the person in the poem is trying skiing for the first time. I love trying new things and it always fills me a sense of anticipation and excitement. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The La'Tuin poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of The Highway  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mary,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about navigating the roads safely. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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