This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about two people who have started to cross boundaries that were established in their relationship a long time ago. I am wondering if this relationship will suffer greatly with the change in dynamic. I read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with the Royal Family going on, what is expected to be. a long trip. Most trips have some sort of excitement involved, and the reader is wondering what will happen on this one. They will read on to find out. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are taken with the anxiety and danger which surrounds the Royal Family. The dialogue is well done and consistent. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied. The person in the poem is wondering what to do with themselves. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the hustle and bustle of Christmas morning. There was only me and my parents during my childhood, so there wasn't a lot of chaos. It is much the same now with me and my husband. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Rhupunt poetic form works well here, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal, but has humorous undertones. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a burglar whose plans are foiled by a protective mother. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a fabulous rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
I was taken with the title of this piece. It sounded like it would be a children's story. I have written a book of children's stories. I was interested in who else had written in the genre on the site. I was eager to start this one.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what will actually be in the piece. They know they will be reading about a journey into the forest but not much else. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have given the reader a review of your latest book available on Amazon. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your latest project and your career progression. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This seemed like it would be an emotional piece just from the title. I love pieces that give the reader something personal about the writer or tell them an emotional story. I love pieces I can sink my teeth into.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the will actually be in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your difficult journey to putting your writing first in your life. I had a lot of the same problems myself. I read to the last word to find out more about you and your mindset. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
I love animals. I have a cat myself but have known many families who have had beautiful dogs. My next door neighbors when I was a child had a gorgeous Collie named Lady. I anxiously started to read this piece to find out more.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and enigmatic at the same time. The reader knows they will be reading about dogs or a dog, but little else. Any dog or animal lover will begin reading right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the various characteristics of dogs. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal and slightly aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how names can say something about the children that receive them. I was Christened at the hospital before I had surgery when I was born. My mother simply said "Amy" when the priest asked her what my name would be. She had intended on calling me Melody. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about an ant who keeps going about his business on a hot day when everyone is trying to rest in the shade. From the few times I have seen ants it looks like they never stop. I could envision this one keeping busy as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a wonderful piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I know very little about European sports, and this piece fascinated me. I began to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. This takes all the reader's attention and focusing it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about improving the distribution of trophies in various sports in Europe. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
From the title I get an aura of nostalgia surrounding this poem. I love pieces that fall into the past, especially if they tell me about the writer themselves. I anxiously began to read to find out if this was about you or something from the past in general. I tend to look to my future but will share things about my past here.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light and filled with warmth. It looks like you look fondly on your youth. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the things that drove you crazy as a kid. I can remember so much like that, geni pants was one. Rap was another. I only bought one Rap album. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read.You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
I wasn't sure if you were talking about a real bug or something else because I have never heard the term "ambush bug" before. I love pieces that stimulate my curiosity even before I start reading them. This just peaked my interest. I had to read this poem to find out more.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about trying to decide if making a change in your life is a good, beneficial thing or if it will turn out to be a harmful thing to your life. I have had so many times I contemplated this, I lost count. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. The reader is carried along as they read, getting immersed in this poem. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar very consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
The title you have chosen is a contradiction, and this steals all my attention. I was anxious to find out more about this contradiction and how far it goes into the story. I just had to read this one.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the man's companion will explain what she means to him. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man whose female companion-it is not clear if it is his wife, mother, or something else-has made a cryptic remark, leaving him waiting for clarification. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This story has two titles and I was fascinated by this. I can see how both may apply. I had to see why you did this, though, and I started enthusiastically, to find out. I will always remember this story. I also love fantasy. I jump to read all the fantasy pieces I can find on the site.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the kingdom will get out of the clutches of their cruel king. They feel for the inhabitants of the kingdom and want them to be treated as they deserve to be. They will read to the last word to find out. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of wonder and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker is dreaming or if she really has been transported to another land. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who thinks she is dreaming about a flower filled field during a snowstorm. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)"you're making it cold"-'you're" should be "You're".
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is slightly formal, but has an air of fun as well. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about what happens when you only look within yourself and don't give anything to others. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Terra and Dr. Detroit are safe at the scene of this accident. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a university professor and his professor who run into a werewolf, something they normally hunt. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Jimbo is trying to show his nieces. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who tries to get his young nieces interested in how the clouds are forming when they are on a drive. The girls are simply hungry. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You are making a point about your personal point of view and you intend to make that point. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you prefer to do your own thing as opposed to conforming. I have always been like that, literally my whole life. I identify with what you are saying here. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
I was wondering if you would be sharing few, different poems here, and I was anxious to find out what you would share. I am intrigued when I am not sure what, exactly I will be experiencing when I go to read a piece of any sort. I was anxious to start this piece.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and beseeching. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the what is going on in the poem. They will read to on. You have written about a group of people who are suffering through a severe calamity which is causing widespread pain and starvation and deprivation. The reader is wondering if there will be anyone to help these poor people. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
The title of this poem got my attention today. I wasn't sure if it would be something heartbreaking and sad or just a general poem about lies in general. I have also been going through something with a friend of mine in which I am left wondering if I have been lied to. I really wanted to read this poem. It really has put a few things into perspective for me.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You have a point to make, and you intend to make it. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about what lies can do to people and relationships. I have always believed that honesty is the best policy. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
My mother is a retired teacher and has been talking about the changes that have occurred in schools because of the extensive use of technology in our world. She has pointed out her concern that with kids learning to use computers for their schoolwork, there is a risk that kids might lose out on fundamental skills like penmanship. This is what attracted me to this article.
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. This will be a fascinating piece for anyone familiar with the education system. The reader will begin right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief discussion about the impact technology has had on education in general. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how technology has influenced education in our world. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
I was entranced with the title of this piece. I was uncertain if it would be romantic or be a general piece about love in general. Either way, I am a romantic and was anxious to read a piece about love.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. The are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the very last word. You have written about moving on from a broken heart and being able to love yourself before you commit to loving someone else. I learned to love myself a long time ago. It was the only way I could get the forever love I had been dreaming of. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied and full of confusion. It is apparent as I read that the man in the poem has some sort of mental problem. I am hoping he will get the help he needs. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone confronted my a religious fanatic who is intent on killing them. I am wondering if the speaker will get killed by the person threatening them. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasant. Great job.
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