Very nice... Got this through read and review.... A few grammatical and punctuation errors but I love the way the story flows, and that it is written from the perspective of the dog.... Have you ever read 'Fluke' by James Herbert, I am sure you have, there are many similarities.
Very nice, although I found it somehow hard to read given that you split the verses. But I do find it actually ok that you have just continued the story through without beginning again, and I find no problems with your spelling or grammar. Looking forward to seeing more....
Ok so I like this, I guess because I can relate to it from personal experience, although I do not live with my mother, who is long dead. The thing that stands out most is your lack of grammar which, I feel, if inserted would make it far more readable
Nice perspective. Yes, I understand completely the ups and downs, ins and outs that are the general pattern of our lives here.
I like the way that you allude to hope and resilience at the end of your poem and to belief in yourself.
Keep going the world awaits....
'The massacre is stopped before the teeth are bared,' a beautiful line and for sure a line that reflects the world that we are living in today.
The drama reflected in this poem is a definite reflection of the life we are living today, you and I are the rabbit, the dog and the blue jay.....
Fantastic, really puts us humans in perspective. Your writing brings the whole of creation to a realization of it's own potential... I love the line:
Rabbits did binky dance with joy seeing a human being in me. One of them jumped at me “Hey you human, nice to see you here, come along we dance!” so real and tempting was her invite!
'Binky dance' really set my imagination flowing and forced me to pay attention to the rest of the story....
A few grammatical and spelling errors, but maybe you just put them in there to add to the sense of mystery.
Wonderful, thanks
Love this, your allusions and creativity with the theme or non-theme are great and it encapsulates an entire generation, just check the grammar and then it would be perfect.....
Love it' the pace is great as well as the suspense and the mystery of what might happen next. The characters seem to be built in a short time frame and, I feel, that this is a model that I could aspire to,,,,
Lovely writing, and great description brought about by the characters themselves. I certainly not familiar with this genre but this brought it alive for me. Personally, I can say it was a little to much rhetoric and not enough background,but then again who am I to speak. Thank you.....
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