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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read all four of your Google information articles. In the past, I have usually become overwhelmed by researching with Google when I got millions of results. You really simplified the way to use Google in your easy-to-understand language, and I plan to try out most of your suggestions. Thanks for writing the articles.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well done. I like the way you developed your two characters with tone in their dialogue. For a 300-word story, you managed to move it forward very well. You sure surprised me with your conclusion. What a way to fix a clock! Great imagination.
Silentjoy
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Eagerlot,
You certainly managed to keep my interest with your intriguing plot and the action and dialogue you used to move your story forward.

In the interests of 'showing not telling', you could have said something like: "They gagged at the reek of rotting potatoes and skidded over the greasy floor."

Using passive verbs like "was holding", "was breathing" or "were open" wide, tend to slow down the action. You could try to use strong active verbs like: "forced" the thief against the mast, "gulped" his air, and 'eyes "bulged" behind strands of ...' .

Write on.
Silentjoy.
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