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Review of Christmas Haiku  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the WDC Frontliners and because you gave me a very helpful review for a story of mine. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Christmas Haiku.

Your Christmas haiku is so sweet. There's nothing like the love of a child. It's one of the most precious gifts of all. I can just picture a child wrapping a gift with all the love in the world even without the sig above the poem.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of the WDC Frontliners and because you gave me a helpful review. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Genetic Manipulation.

This is a rather unique Sociological Science Fiction poem. The imagery is strong, and your word choice is good for this piece. It rolls off the tongue nicely too. I liked the subtle use of repetition also. The sixith and seventh lines were my favorites because I could picture beings erasing the beauty of the world to create mutations. Just my wacky take on things. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of WDC Frontliners and because you have given me a review. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Medusa the Snake Headed Monster.

I loved reading this poem about Medusa. I could picture the story as I sung the lyrics to the tune of Rudolph the Rednose Reindeer. You did a good job fashioning the words to make that work. The flow of this piece was great! I do have one suggestion. I would switch Roman and Greek to Greek and Roman in the last line. It seemed to roll better off the tongue. That may be just me though.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of WDC Frontliners and because you gave me a review. It has certainly been my pleasure reading your poem, Yellow Roses and You.

I love the beautiful love story told in such few words in this piece. The imagery is so sweet and vivid. The flow in this poem is good too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has been my pleasure to read your poem, Dance, Lady, Dance.

The imagery of dancing in this poem is absolutely beautiful. Your word usage is strong and makes this piece a joy to read. The flow goes along with a dance too. I also like the way that dancing seems to be used as a metaphor for how life goes around in a circle. I loved all of the stanzas equally in this piece because they were all so vivid.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Do You Still ?  
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has certainly been my pleasure to read your poem, Do You Still.

Readers could learn valuable lessons from reading this poem. Friendship and love are indeed very precious and dear to a person's life. You did a great job in keeping with the theme of this piece. Your imagery and subtle use of repetition was good. The flow made the poem easy to follow too. I really loved the last stanza because it makes the reader reflect on their life, and how is was lived.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I love reading articles on money and finance, especially when they are as well-written as this one. You did a great job explaining money and banks to those who may not have a background in Economics, Accounting, Finance, ect. I really liked your break down of a country's money supply, and the example you gave about the bank in Brazil crashing to support your point. Thanks for sharing this informative article and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It's been my pleasure reading chapters seven and eight of your novel, and I hope that my review is of some help to you.

I love how you are building up to the big concert. The action scene was exciting and great to read. I like how your ensemble of characters interact with one another.

I only have three suggestions for you.

1. Make sure that all of your dialogue is in its separate paragraph. For example,

Lying next to Damien, as mid-morning light streamed through the

window on the far side of the bedroom, Judas hesitated to bring the subject

up. He desperately wanted to preserve what they had together, but couldn't

keep his mind off of it and couldn't force himself to look the other way. "You

ain't been the same lately, D." The dialogue should be separate from the beginning narrative.

2. Watch for dialogue tags like exclaimed, added, commented, ect. Editors often frown upon them.

3. It's best not to tact on an adverb at the end of a dialoge tag. For instance,

"It does look good," Judas nodded, approvingly. Just drop approvingly, and you'll be fine. The reader will be able to tell from what Judas says that he approves.

Your novel is really coming together, and I'll come back to your port and read more!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy. It has been my pleasure to reader your story, and I hope you find this review helpful to you.

I loved the plot and pacing of this story. Your descriptions were good too. I do have a few suggestions for this piece.

1. The POV seems to jump around at the beginning. I understand why it changed at the end. However, it is wise to try to stick with one POV, especially in a short piece.

2. Make sure all dialogue is in a separate paragraph.

3. Go back and look at the sentences that you beginning with a coordinating conjunction. For example, The crickets and hoots quieted as if to allow the boys a closer listen. But no one heard the sound. It would be best to combine these in most cases.

4. You also need to edit for commas in sentences like this.

Peter stopped suddenly and Nicoli walked right into him. When you have a coordinating conjunction, a comma will be needed before the conjunction.

5. You use the adverb silvery about three or four times close together. You may want to eliminate or reword to eliminate this adverb.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Over Night Freeze  
Review by very thankful
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I loved this story about a town in Texas freezing over. The descriptions were great, very vivid. I liked the mayor. You described and voiced him well. I really liked the last line too. You only had one typo that I wanted to show you.

“it seems the little town of Hades has frozen over.”

The I in it should be capitalized.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I read this story twice, laughing both times. Messing the house up just to clean it up. Sounds like one of those home remedy tips that's listed in Good Housekeeping. My only concern was the overuse of alliteration. Maybe cut it in one part of the story, but not in the last line. That line is needed because it's so funny. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I'm really warming up to your novel. I like the bodyguard. The tension was good in these chapters too, especially in chapter 6. The only suggestions I have for you are to watch for some of the dialogue tags and to go through and make sure all of your paragraphs are together. It looks like the spacing in a few of them are off.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

Chapters three and four were vastly superior of chapters one and two. The characters were interesting and this part of the storyline held my interest. These chapters were much easier to follow than the ones before it. The only suggestion I have is to change the pop culture reference you make to the record company that Elvis and Johnny Cash started with. It was Sun not Mercury. Thanks for sharing this because I think you have something here. Write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I enjoyed reading a different take on the night before Christmas story. Mrs. Claus giving Santa too much eggnog. I would have never thought about any accountants on the North Pole, but I guess some would be needed to keep up with expenses there too.

I have just one editing suggestion for you.

"Sir.""Sir." "You asked for us?"

I believe you have too many quotation marks in this passage.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Nocturne Remorse  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I loved the dark story in this poem. It's full of great imagery for the reader to enjoy. I really liked how you revealed what she was in the last few stanzas of the piece. I also liked the flow of the last stanza. It rolled of the tongue nicely.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Augie  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

This is a great story. I love stories about animals, especially dogs. The ending was really unexpected. I do have a suggestion for you.

1. Look at this paragraph.

What the woman didn’t tell the boy was that the bodies of Augie’s brothers and sisters had been found too. The puppies had been tied to a tree with rough rope, and left to die. Only Augie had managed to wiggle free and find water. Animal Services had found him lying asleep next to the tree, where his dead brothers and sisters remained.

While this has interesting information, it would be considered an info dump. It's also a POV violation because you are switching from the boy's POV to the woman's POV.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Absolutely  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I loved this story, and I'm sure many readers can relate to your main character. I loved your MC's strength. I only have two minor suggestions for you.

1. Go through your story and edit for punctuation. For example, you have question marks where you need a period.

2. Go back and look at your dialogue tags. Many of them can be eliminated.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Bad Roses  
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Rated: ASR | (1.0)
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Just to let you know, I'm only rating you a one because you request it at the bottom of your poem for a contest. This poem is really funny. It made me smile because it reminded me of a poem my Dad made up one day.

The poem has loads of good imagery. The wording could use some work, but you have something to work with here.

I would have given you a 3.0.

Thanks for sharing, and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Spring Sprang  
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Rated: ASR | (2.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

When I saw this folder of "Bad to the Bone" poems, I had to check it out. I'm starting with the haiku first since I really like reading them. You really overloaded on the alliteration, but I understand that this is intentional for a contest. However, I will defend this piece on the imagery a little because I can picture a rabbit like the one in Alice in Wonderland jumping around hoping that it doesn't fall. The last stanza is madness like Mad Hatter. Just what came to my weird brain early in the morning from reading this piece. It's not as bad as a one in my opinion.

I give it a 2.5. It has the beginnings to be something good with some work.

I'm glad you took the time to be creative because that's what leads to great works!

Write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Souvenirs of Love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Yes, love does leave a trail. Your poem describes it beautifully with its imagery in each stanza. I liked the imagery in the second and fourth stanzas the best because they seemed to come to life in my mind the most as I read the poem. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of LightWorker  
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
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I like the message in this poem along with the flow and imagery. The use of repetition also works very well in this piece. I liked the third stanza the best. It made me smile. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy.

I like the storyline of your novel so far and believe it has potential. However, I think it needs some work.

1. The beginning needs a hook to attract readers. My mind wandered while reading the first chapter until I got about midway.

2. You need to vary the length of your sentence in many of your paragraphs, especially in the first half of the first chapter. This will make your novel more reader friendly.

3. Drop some of the dialogue tags. Just show the action.

4. There wasn't enough tension to keep the story going. Readers want excitement throughout.

Keep working on this! You have something good here! Don't give up!

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Changing Moon  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I love these lyrics. The imagery is very strong in this piece. I really like verse two, especially when it says "don't take it personally" and making the case about being a victim too. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Complex Numbers  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I loved your blog. You have an interesting view on things. I like your taste in music too, especially Leonard Cohen. I like the title and the introduction of your blog too. They're rather unique. I hope you keep on updating this blog. Thanks for sharing this with us and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Splintered Lives  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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The introduction and poem made me think of the classic country song "Golden Ring" by George Jones and Tammy Wynette. The part after the marriage goes bad, and the rings are taken off. I liked the flow to this piece and could see a marriage falling apart.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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