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I used a template for all of my reviews. I will comment on plot, characters, scene/setting, grammar, and anything else that comes to mind.
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short stories, novels, and blog
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dark fantasy and horror However, I will read anything that is similar to a VC Andrews story. I also like any books about cooking.
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romance, comedy, mystery, science fiction
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short stories, novels, blogs, anything about cooking
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poetry, campfires
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Review of Little Jack's Day  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This poem is so sweet, very ideal for children. I loved the flow and imagery in this piece. This poem also reads like a nice story for a little child too, a picture book perhaps. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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The humor was really cool in this poem. The flow and rhyme was great too. I really liked the last four lines. I laughed my head off! You did a great job here. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Crimson Teardrops  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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This poem stired up many emotions and brought back some memories. The imagery in this piece is very strong and suits it very well. The flow is pretty good too. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of I will...  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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This poem chilled me to the bone. It made me think of the pleasure faerie named Maria in my novel, that first line especially. I liked your subtle use of repetition in this piece. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I like the flow and use of repetition of this piece. I really appreciate this piece because I have a cat named Gizmo, and I would feel the same way if something happened to him. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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This is a sweet story of love. I love weddings, and a white wedding is a beautiful one. It's good when people can adapt and have a plan B. I only have a two suggestions, and they're only minor ones.

1. There was a tent set up for the reception and the ceremony was to be under the gazebo.
A comma is needed after reception.

2. The dialogue needs to be in it's own paragraph.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Converse Voyeur  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I like the flow and rhythm of this poem. I like the how you start this with a shoe and end with the real subject matter. The form you use works for this piece too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of My Own Tongue  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I like the fact that you are paying a tribute to speaking your native language. I also like the explainations of the dialetic. The suggestion I have is to substitute another phrase for "I want" for some of the lines because it's too repetitive. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of God is Love  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I agree with your word and thoughts totally. I just believe that perhaps this piece isn't developed enough to be an article. Maybe you should have put it under other and religious instead of an article. This is just my opinion though.

Thanks for sharing your thoughts with WDC and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Tulle soul  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I love the imagery and story in this poem. The main suggestion I have would be to work on the length of some of the lines in this piece because it throws the poem of balance. Otherwise, good job!

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Seeking Paradise  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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This is a neat piece of flash fiction you have here. You need to edit it for punctuation.

1. Double quotation marks for dialogue.
2. 'Go seek a good woman, learn to love her the way she needs to be loved and she will show you Paradise' - A comma is needed after loved.
3. As the young noviced hurried beyond the Monastry gates the master was heard to whisper.- A comma is needed after gates.

Try editing this sentence.
After many months of this daily question often repeated several times, the master not really sure if it was frustration or inspiration answered. - It seems a little long in the tooth. It's rather telling too.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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This poem has good flow and builds up nicely as the reader wonders what the author's mother did that was so embrassing. That last stanza provided some hilarious imagery. I would have died if my Mom would have done that to me.

Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of ~~The Cold Tide  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I loved the dark tone of the poem. The flow and imagery are great. I really liked this form, and it worked for this piece. The last four lines sent shivers down my spine. I loved the use of allteration in the second stanza too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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A mother's love can make all kinds of things possible. This story is so sweet, and I only wished it were longer. I wasn't ready to stop reading. I loved the imagery in it the most besides the mother. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I liked the straightforward message in your political limerick. Taxes are crazy, and they never end. I liked the flow and imagery in this piece. I also loved the fact that this is a piece readers can relate to. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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The flow and imagery are good in this poem. It does hurt when someone we love just passes us by like we are nothing. You express this very well, especially in the last stanza. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Halloween Meeting  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I enjoyed your story centering around El Dia de los Murteos. It's cool reading about spirits. The only suggestions I have are to go back and change the story back to past tense and halfway through you seem to go back and forth on POV (it's usually a good idea to stick with one POV in a short story).

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Rejuvenation  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is a poem that readers can relate to because opportunities appear and disappear all the time, very good ones in fact. However, as the second stanza reveals good things do come. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I liked the flow and imagery in this poem. I also believe creative people, not just writers, will be able to identify with this piece because we've all heard it many times before. I loved the line "Please don't blame me, blame my muse!" I'll have to remember that one. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I liked the powerful story you presented, and the intensity you built up throughout it. The only thing I would suggest is that maybe you should switch to past tense in the narrative since that's the common way stories are written. Also editors prefer it that way.

I loved the ending. Humor can overcome obstacles. Well done.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Caffeine  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I love Japanese poetry, and your Senryu is no exception. I loved the imagery and flow of this piece. It reminds me of drinking hot chocolate at night. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of The Stuffed Fox  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I liked the intensity you built up in this piece of flash fiction. I loved the ending. I would only work on dropping dialogue tag and just showing action. Also, try using other words for look.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (3.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army. Congrats on being selected a Spotlight Author for the month.

I love urban legends, and you have written a nice one. I have a few suggestions for you. In the first sentence, hunted should be haunted. In the second sentence, a comma is needed after true. You also have another sentence or two similar two this one where a comma is needed before the conjunction. You also need to place dialogue in it's own paragraph.

Thank you for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Psychosis ???  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army. Congrats on being selected a Spolight Author of the Month.

This poem made me think of being in another dimension. However, the piece seemed a little disjointed to me. I had to read it three times before any of it set in. I think it was the psychosis part that's throwing me off. Now, I do realize that it may be just me, and others may read this and pick up the complete meaning right away. Maybe if you worked with it a little more, it would all come together. Don't give up. You have a good start.

Write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This poem is so hilarious! This would be an excellent piece to read to children to get them to stop picking their nose. Thank you for shaing this with WDC and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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