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I used a template for all of my reviews. I will comment on plot, characters, scene/setting, grammar, and anything else that comes to mind.
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short stories, novels, and blog
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dark fantasy and horror However, I will read anything that is similar to a VC Andrews story. I also like any books about cooking.
Least Favorite Genres
romance, comedy, mystery, science fiction
Favorite Item Types
short stories, novels, blogs, anything about cooking
Least Favorite Item Types
poetry, campfires
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Romance, action-adventure, mysteries/thiller, science fiction
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Review of Broken  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 2/5 of the reviews that I owe you.

I loved the imagery and alleration throughout this poem. I liked the flow, especially in the first two stanzas. The only suggestion I have is that you may want to play around with this last stanza, so the flow will match the other two stanzas. Just a suggestion though. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Inside  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 1/6 of the reviews that Just call me Omni has gifted you.

This poem reminds me so much of a lady who was at the hospital the same time I was. She was a meth addict. The imagery in this piece was very good and vivid. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Reflected Beauty  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 6/39 reviews that I owe you.

I loved the simplicity of this Lanturne. I also like the imagery in this piece. I know in your explaination that you said it's shaped like a Japanese lantern, but it kind of looks like a tree too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Black and White  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 1/5 reviews that I owe you.

I really liked the message of this poem. The imagery and use of repetition in this piece are very good. My favortie stanza is the last because it expresses the core of the message to the reader. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Fight Back!  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and because you gave me a review.

I really liked the message of your poem along with the imagery and subtle use of allteration. The only suggestion I have for this piece is to combine the first three lines to eliminate repeating "you" three times. Have the line to read, "Life will throw, hit and burn you". Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Synchronicity  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 1/5 reviews that I owe you.

I loved the emotion and passion in this poem. I also liked being exposed to a form of poetry that I've never heard of before. The only suggestion I have is that you may want to check the syllable count of some of the lines. I think you might have went over, but I might be wrong. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Sunflowers  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 1/5 reviews that I owe you.

I loved reading this Haiku that also included allteration throughout the piece. The imagery in this poem is also great. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of The Winner  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and because you gave me a review.

I loved how you built up the suspense and anticipation in this flash fiction piece. You do a good job of showing for such a small piece too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (3.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and because you gave me a review.

Good points
1. I liked the way you portrayed a child's relationship with his parents.
2. I liked the way you ended the diary entry. It makes the reader want to know what Monster City is.

Suggetions
1. Try not to start your sentences the same way every time. (EX: paragraph four)
2. Make sure when you write diary entries that you stay in 1st person. In paragraphs, four and eight you slip in to 2nd person (you) which is frowned upon by editors.
3. Use other words for look. This will make your writing cleaner and tighter.
4. Eliminate adverbs. They clutter up good writing.

I hope this helps. I hope you continue with this.

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Daemons  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, WDC Frontliners, and this is 5/39 reviews that I owe you.

This is a thought provoking poem. Your writing style reminds me of John Milton in a way. I loved the mix of dark and light imagery, and your use of alliteration. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of The Fallen Soul  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This is a well-written Vianelle about redemption. The imagery and flow is very good in this piece. This sig matches the poem quiet nicely too. I only have one small suggestion. I noticed that you have several sentences starting with the. You may want to try dropping the from the beginning of some of those sentences. Just try it and see if it works for this piece.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Fiery Red Hair  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

I like the way you portrayed a dying woman in this story. You do a good job with description in this piece. The only suggestion I have is a minor one. I noticed that you start almost every paragraph with "the old lady". You may want to change this up a bit. Just a thought.

Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Le Marcou  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, WDC Frontliners, and this is 4/39 reviews that I owe you.

I loved the story in this poem. The rhyme scheme is followed very well in this piece. My only suggestion would be to try expanding this into a short story. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This is a lovely story about a person's daily walk with God. I liked the imtimate nature of this story because it draws a reader in. I do have two minor editing suggestions. First, go back through and cut most of the adverbs to make your writing cleaner and tighter. Also the narration is a little stilted. Adding contractions will fix this.

Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Disorder  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

You portrayed bipolar disorder very well in this poem. As someone who has this illness, I know these ups and downs all too well. I love the sig you included with this poem too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Special Spices  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

This poem peaked my interest, especially in the first two stanza because it centered around cooking. The last stanza reminded me of when I use to abuse diet pills off and on. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army and WDC Frontliners.

This poem was so cute. You made good use of repetition in this piece. I remember the song this is a parody of. I haven't heard it since I was a child though. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Scales  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army and WDC Frontliners.

This would make a good movie for the Syfy channel. The only suggestions I have are to eliminate the adverbs and not capitalize they in the first paragraph. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of The Rose  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, WDC Frontliners, and this is 3/39 reviews that I owe you.

This is a very powerful piece. I enjoyed the story in this poem. It takes the saying there's no such thing as a free lunch to the max. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Loose Change  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Helping Hearts, and WDC Frontliners.

I really enjoyed reading your blog. I've been sending my short stories to different publications but no luck yet. I wish you luck with your stories becoming publish. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (2.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

You have an interesting plot and characters. The story does need some work in other areas. First, you need to go through and watch for info dumps, especially in the beginning of the story. Make sure everything you put in the story is neccessary. Second, elminate the adverbs to tighten up the writing. Third, make sure you don't start a sentence with then (you only do this once or twice). Last, drop some of the dialogue tags, just show the action instead.

If you decide to make changes, let me know and I will be more than happy to re-rate and review this story again.

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Cheap Thrill  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, and WDC Frontliners.

You portray how drugs lead a person nowhere fast very well. You did a terrific job on the flow and rhyme scheme. The next to the last stanza was my favorite. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of THE SPIRITS CALL  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, WDC Frontliners, and this is 5/5 reviews that I owe you.

I love it when a poem tells a story. This fantasy poem is a very emotional piece. Your use of repetition, aliteration, and rhyme are great. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army, Showering Acts of Joy, WDC Frontliners, and this is 4/5 reviews that I owe you.

This is a lovely fantasy poem. The imagery is quite beautiful. You did a good job on the rhyme and use of allteration. Thanks for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing you today courtesy of The Angel Army and WDC Frontliners.

This was such a cute Halloween poem for children. The outcome of the poem made me laugh. The flow and the use of repetition in this piece was very good. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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