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Review of Glass Flower  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Norma Jean, I am reviewing your flash fiction, congratulations on your win, well deserved. "Glass Flower" 

It starts off as an exhibition, normal, nothing out of the ordinary. Then it intrigues me, a flower painted in glass and curiosity started to unstitch how it was made.

Fairy magic, cobwebs, and dust, quite unbelievable.

I just love the ending the light reflected fairies inside the glass flower.

How enchanting

Alexi *Heart*
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Review of Honing the Craft  
for entry "Week 3. May Flowers" 
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Judi, I am reviewing your poem "Week 3. May Flowers" "Week 3. May Flowers" 

May Flowers brought me in.
I delightful poem describing the characters garden beginning at the gate,
I heard the gate open with a squeak as I walked into an amazing abundance of May flowers
all swaying for attention
Look at me they called, don't forget me the peony, I'm pretty in pink.
The daisies crying for attention dancing along the back fence, how wonderful.
I love Michaelmas daisies, reminds me of my Granma's garden, she always had them.

A tribute to the author.
Thank you for letting me into your world of poems.
Alexi
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Admiration for all you have been through and you have survived it all. I truly hope that your rewards for perseverance have paid off and your inner peace is a trophy to hold on to.
Alexi *Heart*
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for entry "Neighbors" 
Review by Alexi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Mike, I am reviewing your poem "Promptly Poetry Folder 2020-2021"  Form. Kyrielle
Neighbors
This is what neighbors should do
Lookout to one another
I just so enjoyed your story about your how you kept an eye on him
the end of each verse: I waved at my neighbor today
Your neighbor said without words his gratitude that you saw him and he was still alive. I like that.
Grammatically all good.
A nice well-rounded poem Mike and worthy of the author.
Alexi *Heart*
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Review of Promptly Poetry  
for entry "Waving to a Neighbour" 
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Beholden, I am reviewing your poem "Waving to a Neighbour" 
Waving to a neighbor, It was fun to read. I loved the way you unwound the story of him never having acknowledged you in as many years. Some folk are like that.
It could be shyness or just that he has never learned to be friendly. all in all, it was good to read.
Your action/slow reaction to respond made me smile. I have done that myself, so know how you felt at the time.
Good poem
Alexi *Heart*
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for entry "Nana" 
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ned, I am reviewing your poem Nana,
The prompt was filled nicely
My favorite line :
fingers knotted at the knuckles
Grammar no problem
The story about your Nana was delightful and you painted her as a picture I could visualize with ease.
A great poem Ned.
Well done.
Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good morning Beholden, I am reviewing your poem "A Girl I Never Knew" 
First I congratulate you on winning "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest"  It's a good feeling is it not?

This led me to be curious and read what made it stand out, I am glad I did.

The girl in the picture of your memory has the gap in her two front teeth just like my sister has.
Funny how deep memories come floating to the surface after such a long time, maybe she was thinking about you and what you shared that one night long ago.

Lines I liked:
Or maybe it was innocence,
we were both young enough for that;
it’s hard to say since she has long faded

A well-written poem and worthy of the prize.

Alexi *Heart*
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Review of Raised for Us  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mike, I am reviewing your Haiku Poem "Raised for Us" 

*Cross1* Death is defeated. What Our Lord did for us, he defeated death to let us live.

*Cross1* the empty tomb provides hope. This is an example of his faith. His word told us it would happen.

*Cross1* For eternal life. This says it all in three words.

*Cross1* A short Haiku that express the story of easter in such a few words.

*Cross1* The grammar has no-faults.

*Cross1* I enjoyed reading your poem and the massage it gives.

Alexi *Cross1*

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Review of Veterans Day  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mike, I am reviewing your short story "Veterans Day" 

*Salute* Memories of war are sometimes difficult to bear on a soldier who has been through it and for the civilians the also had to endure the tearing of their lives and sometimes separation from friends.

*Salute* This is a bittersweet story, two men who met during the days towards the end of the second world war and who kept in touch over the years.

*Salute* I cannot find any grammatical errors and it is written with a vision of the moment.

*Salute* I enjoyed reading this story of the two men who faithfully kept in touch for many years until the sadness of the death of one of the men left a hollow in the heart of the other.

*Salute* Written with a deep love an companionship of their friendship. Well done Mike, nice work.

Alexi *WaterDrop*
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Review of Flipped Switch  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Miranda, I am reviewing your poem "Flipped Switch " 
*WaterDrop* This is a poem I would read again. I like the first line, it drew me in to read more.
Pools of cerulean reminded me of a painting of the ocean, just right.

*WaterDrop* The way your character was teased and the feelings she had for him. I know that feeling.

*WaterDrop* Oh, the scene is played so well, time has evaporated and you ask the questions. I enjoyed this so much and every word fits and you painted them like a canvas of memories.
Well done, love it.
Alexi *Heart*
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Review of GP Pranked  
Review by Alexi
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Laugh* It's my nine-year birthday here today , so.... who? I know and thank you anonymous. *Hug*
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Review of Rainbow World  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Duepiter, I am reviewing your essay, "Rainbow World" 

Rainbow world, yes, it would be amazing to live in a world where there is no bad and where people appreciate one another. Unfortunately, it is only in our fantasy world that this can happen. Our world is made up of people of all kinds and it is life and choices that determine what we turn out to be. If we choose to be kind and thoughtful, thinking about our neighbors, the second commandment. then, yes, we can make others happy, but not all. There will be people whom no matter what you try to do to make their world better, will not be able to or want to have it better.

Take the dirt in the earth, although it is mucky, it brings forth plants for us to eat, and trees that help to oxygenate the air we breathe.

Not everyone has the gift to help an autistic child or realize that hurting the planet is wrong. They haven't been taught to look after themselves let alone our planet. It all boils down to doing the best we can and making our fingerprint in this world a good one.

I am the one who picks up other's trash, I am the one who helps my neighbor, I am the one who makes that child's day by giving him a smile and letting him know that I care.

Oh, I do agree, that we yearn for the rainbow world, but the reality is, it has to be worked at. Maybe, you should be one of the leaders who make the changes. I always said that if I were in charge of running the country, things would be different, I would make it different. Ha!
Meanwhile, I try to do it in my small space here on the planet earth and to those around me.

Now I have stopped ranting, I enjoyed your first write on WDC and hope to see many more. We are a great family here and ready to help when needed and learn alongside each other.

Thank you Deupiter for sharing your work with us.
Alexi*Heart*
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Review by Alexi
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Megan, thank you for sharing your MBs at this time of celebration. I would like the first one on your page Jane Austin. *Heart* and a happy smile sent your way, here you are. *Smile*
Alexi *Heart*
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Review of Notation  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good morning Tinker form the UK *CountryUK*
May I review your poem {item: 2132466}

I just love this, the way the author walks me through the scene, the sounds, the atmosphere of the whole place where the woman goes through the melancholy chores of the day.

She is doing her duty as a mother and wife and has forgotten her own needs. I believe many women go through this bubble in their lives, I know I did, I lost my identity for a while. I was called Dan's mum, Mrs and other names that did not define me.

The author has brought out that feeling in the poem.

I like the last line 'Tonight it's just herself with memories.' I can picture her with a glass of wine looking through her mind with a teenagers spirit, laughing to herself at days gone by.

the theme: blank verse telling a story.

well done
Alexi *Heart*
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Review of Mountains  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Chloe, I am reviewing your short story. "Mountains"  Relationships can vary from love to domination and reading this brought sadness to my heart. Your character has gone through a life-changing relationship and had the wisdom to break the chains od dominant slavery of the soul. Then succeeding to go and make something of herself.

Life is not easy but we can make choices that lead us in the right direction.
Well done and welcome to writing.com.
Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Just a discrete bit for your funds. *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Monty, I am reviewing your winner poem. "WINGS IN THE CORNER" 
Beautifully written and heartwrenching.

What got my heartstrings were the last two verses.

Made me have a tear.

Well done.

Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Stacey, welcome to WDC. I am reviewing your poem "The One Where You Love Yourself" 

Self-acceptance...

The words are living adrenaline for someone who has been drained of self-worth.
Like a syringe going through the veins of a soul who has been beaten down by words that are made like bullets by others who continually fire, fire, fire. then just when the soul is almost dead, when feelings have been drained from the veins, when hope has fused and the button of hopelessness has been pressed.

The words are released and flow like a river through the empty veins, new life, and strength filter through. this can only be God's intervention.

Your words could be a lifesaver to the soul of the battered dying souls who need a lifeline.

Loved it. *Heart*

Don’t rely on someone else for your happiness and self-worth,
Only you can be responsible for that.
If you can’t love and respect yourself ,no one else will be able to make that happen.
Accept who you are ,completely- the good and the bad.
And make changes as YOU see fit, not because you think someone else wants you to be different.

Just a couple of commas, yourself, and on the next line are, you have put a space between those words. *Wink*

That is all I can find but all good otherwise Stacey. Well done you.

Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kaysalisu, hello and welcome to writing.com.

I am reviewing your poem as requested. I am sorry for the delay but other life issues came first."KEEP CALM AND BE YOURSELF" 

Looking at your thoughts here and from other poems, you have written, I can see that you have a gift of deep wisdom. Used well, this will be useful for your life and perhaps others.

When God made each one of us, he threw away the mold and we were thought of before we were knit in our mother's womb. You are one of those unique men and a pleasure to acquaint.

I enjoyed reading your work but if I may suggest your sentences. just a tweak on some of your grammar, for instance...

We all have to learn including myself.

(And) and be (discipline) disciplined enough to follow its path.

Kaysalisu, It has been a pleasure reviewing your work. I hope this has been helpful. You have the makings of a philosopher, I can see this in you.

Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Max, just going through your chapter. Found some minor errors, I hope you don't mind?
I have brackets around the ones that I found.

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"My team up on the Zuiderkruis has already processed the data we uploaded from the Cabot Cove AI. All that's left is the formal transfer from the current Resident to you. We can do that over lunch. ( It's my) understanding

Where the brackets are --- It's my --- should have one space between words. *Checkb*

Elam adjusted his seatbelt again and avoided looking at Bender. "It told me what I needed to know. I'll have this place to myself for the next( then) years, right?"

Should that be ten years? *Checkb*


Elam shrugged. "Maybe he turned it off so he could have privacy." For damned sure, (that's what )Elam
Spacing-- two needs one.

Elam snorted. "What, on a banana? There's nothing to (trip on,) nowhere to fall from. Look at his skull. It's all bashed in. Someone killed him."


Spacing *Checkb*

That's what I said. His wife (must have)done it. they were the only people on the planet.

Spacing *Checkb*

Alexi *Heart* Good luck with this.










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Review of YOU ARE MY GIFT  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good morning La form the UK, My name is Alexi and I would like to review your poem "YOU ARE MY GIFT" 
It is so good to meet you and welcome to writing.com

First of all the title is special and comes from a heart that knows what love is.
The first verse says that he is a soul that is grateful for the gift God gave him, you La, his wife.
This second verse brings a tear to my eyes, his love for you is as God intended a couple to be.
Verse three, he is drawn to your laughter and loves being around you.
Verse four is his thoughts about the woman he loves and he pores the words out "I'm in love with you." How beautiful love is, I wish the world was full of love, but there is so much brokenness. Hold on to your love for each other.
in Five he is looking at the promises of our God and his faithfulness. This goes back to Genisis 2
The Lord God said, “It is not good for the man to be alone. I will make a helper suitable for him.
So the Lord God caused the man to fall into a deep sleep; and while he was sleeping, he took one of the man’s ribs[ and then closed up the place with flesh. Then the Lord God made a woman from the rib he had taken out of the man, and he brought her to the man.The man said,
“This is now bone of my bones
and flesh of my flesh;
she shall be called ‘woman,’
for she was taken out of man.”
How wonderful He is. This is where His love comes from and I'm sure you know that and how we as a couple become one because we are one, this poem shows that oneness.
I love this poem from the heart and I hope to read some of your writings in the near future La.
Thank you for sharing.
Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am impressed that you found the words to share this story Olem. The Bible says that you were thought of before you were formed in your mother's womb. How wonderful is that!

No one is a mistake and the story you write here is of compassion and love, make no mistake, it was no accident but a gift that you were born and for a purpose.

A lovely story and so much more was the love your mum has to risk her life for you.

Well done.
Alexi *Heart*
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Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good morning from the UK Ken, I am reviewing your poem with pleasure today "I Want To Be A Unicorn" 
The construction of this tale is an amaze of words formed to make me laugh and giggle.
An Easter bunny who wants to be a unicorn. Who would have thought of that. Well only you Ken. I now have to walk the floor trying to come up with something that might get a look in on yours but my hope flew off to the planet egg when I read and enjoyed your talent.
So well done my friend and I'll just hop off to think of my word crowding plot. *Laugh*

I think your in with a winner here. Well done Ken.*Proud* *Egg2*

Alexi *Heart*
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Review of Time Changes...  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jenn, I have just read your article "Time Changes..."  and I am impressed. We all have to start somewhere and I so admire your drive.

From reading this piece I can see that you are listening to your heart and that is a good thing as you can realise your dreams through hard work.

I see you are a cartooning artist. *GiftY* I love to draw and paint. I like your picture, it's great.

Ok, back to your article, I am impressed and look forward to more of your talents.

Alexi *Heart*
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Review of A Bunny's Tale  
Review by Alexi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well I just have to review this one little bunny tale. "A Bunny's Tale" 
The first verse sets the scene and like a song bursts with birds singing and bees buzzing. Even the trees are bursting to reveal the new season.

Sunflowers sunned and the bluebells jingled.
Even the Robins and Sparrows commingled.
The bumblebees bumbled in their own way.
Yes, thought the chick, it’s a perfect spring day!

I felt ten again with my yellow check cotton dress on and my shoulder length hair tied with a candy stipe clasp and my little legs dancing down the lane after the bunny to see what happens next and to my surprise the magic of the basket comes to life even the butterfly is excited to see the white fluffy bundle of spring joy.

What a special time of ear it is. A time when the old covenant is thrown out and the new story begins, a story that has been told from old. A resurrection of perfect love sprinkles the world and it's miracle joy brings all this new birth, born creation and sorrows takes flight. symbols in egg shells tell children the wonderful story of God's own glory.

Your poem is perfectly formed and ozzes the beauty of love.

I applaud your literary genius on this tale. I was sad that the bunny had to depart but in it's place was a lasting memory in my heart.

Hope you win!
Alexi *Heart*
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