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60 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
I'm honest when I review thing I'll say what's on my mind but at the same time I try to stay positive and will always tell you what you did right but this means in no way am I a professional reviewer so take my reviews with a grin of salt please
I'm good at...
looking at everything in a positive light even when telling you what's wrong I'll always tell you how to improve ranther then just telling you what's wrong I'm also ranther good at looking at storyline and seeing whether or not the story makes sense
Favorite Genres
My favorite genres are horror, psychological thrillers, mysteries and fantasy
Least Favorite Genres
My least favorite are romance and overly sexual or overly done gory feasts
Favorite Item Types
Novels, short stories and poems
Least Favorite Item Types
None
I will not review...
I will not review anything that uses sex/rape, harm against minors and animals as simple shock factors if you are going to include such topics please do them well and treat them with respect
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a great short story and it is rather assuming how one simple thought can evolve into something absolutely massive.

You mentioned in the story how you rubbed elbows with many stars. I for one would love to hear about some of the stars you knew and met.

The layout of the story is a little scattered and disconnected but you can still pull the point of the story out of the mess.

Overall an interesting story on how entertainers thought at that time and, while short, it got its point across pretty effectively. Good job and keep it up.

From,
Jamie


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Review of Time Waits  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I'm going to guess this is an ad for a future story. If that is the case then sadly no, it does not draw enough attention.

At first glance it appears to similar to movie trailers.

However if you play around with the wording of it just a little bit more then you could have an interesting ad.

I'd recommend using different sized fonts for certain words.

Also try using a different base font or color to draw more attention to it immediately.

From,
Slime-j


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Review of Slumber  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A beautiful poem about insomnia and the struggles of it. As someone who suffers through the same problem I can relate to wanting to slumber like everyone else can.

The flow and pacing of the poem is perfect and there aren't any grammar mistakes that I can see.

Good job on expressing such a common torture subtly


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This a well written and funny story of your failures of becoming a cowgirl. As a fellow horse lover/cowgirl I understand the thrill and excitement of the wind blowing through your hair and the feeling of freedom that comes with it. Sadly I also understand the sadness of falling off the horse far too well.

The story was humorous and rather engaging and by the time it was over I wanted to read more.

There were no grammar mistakes, as far as I can see anyway, and it was paced perfectly.

My only wish was that there was more but in this case less is more.

Great good Ruwthy


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Review of Muse Got Lost  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem is relatable and cute good job Bon Bon


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Review of Trust Your Gut  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A cute yet scary story
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A beautiful poem that escapes words and has a really good rhythm to it
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A humerus short story that was well written and well work a read


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Review of Lost Within  
Rated: E | (3.5)
an overall nice poem
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Review of Torment  
In affiliation with The Dark Society  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a confusing yet horrific tale of what can only be described as a girl going completely insane.

I adore the fact that you use so few different words they're mostly the same word repeated over and over again yet you feel so many different emotions.

Overall a disturbing piece which I would recommend reading in a dark room at 3am for max spok factor->slime-j


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In affiliation with The Dark Society  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I must say geoffrey you did an extremely good job at immediately immersing the reader nearly instantly and unlike many other stories you did not use overly technical language when describing any scientific point of the story.

your description of the island so far is very accurate when it comes to island that are outside of normal modern civilization and introducing a translator early in the story in a unique way and not a overly convenient way so as to immerse the reader farther.

So far i have only told you what i enjoyed about this however there is one thing i can think of to immediately improve the story and that is just giving us a better description of the Professor as you mention a bread but we were never told he had a clean and well looked after bread at all.

overall it is a beautifully worded all round nearly perfect story and i would love to see more work done on the same level as this->slime-j


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
It's a good start to a story expect I noticed you placed a lot of full stops a the beginning and while I'm no expert that amount of full stops aren't normally required but other then that I enjoyed it and like your style of writing


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Rated: E | (4.0)
A funny simple but enjoyable poem


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Review of Enduring Flame  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A beautiful poem with pleasant language and a nice, warm feeling after reading it


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
A nice poem that seems to be about the over sexuality of women these days
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Review of Monster  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A great poem all around
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Review of Her First Time  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A common experience that everyone hates having done and also beautifully diverted expectations from a much darker ending that only a dark minded reader will begin to expect


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Review of April  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A well rhymed and worded poem that makes you excited for spring to come rolling again


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A Poem that seems to be about breast cancer which if it is about breast cancer then it is done beautifully subtly


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Review of A Heroes Dream  
Rated: E | (4.0)
An amusing thought


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Rated: E | (3.5)
So true


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Review of Motivation  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This would make a great battle speech


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
A poem that could be taken as a happy story or as a sad story deepening on your point of view on the world


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Rated: E | (3.0)
Great inspiration and a good quick lesson good job


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a very true and enjoyable poem seemingly about a men's dying sex life a place everyone finds themselves in at a least one point in their life.

I would how ever would like to see a longer version of this poem.

How ever personally I think the ending is a bit weak so I recommend that you either try ending with a bigger statement or make the poem longer though this is just my personal opinion.


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