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60 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
I'm honest when I review thing I'll say what's on my mind but at the same time I try to stay positive and will always tell you what you did right but this means in no way am I a professional reviewer so take my reviews with a grin of salt please
I'm good at...
looking at everything in a positive light even when telling you what's wrong I'll always tell you how to improve ranther then just telling you what's wrong I'm also ranther good at looking at storyline and seeing whether or not the story makes sense
Favorite Genres
My favorite genres are horror, psychological thrillers, mysteries and fantasy
Least Favorite Genres
My least favorite are romance and overly sexual or overly done gory feasts
Favorite Item Types
Novels, short stories and poems
Least Favorite Item Types
None
I will not review...
I will not review anything that uses sex/rape, harm against minors and animals as simple shock factors if you are going to include such topics please do them well and treat them with respect
Public Reviews
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Review of In moderation  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
First impression

This is clearly about abusing alcohol and a warning to avoid doing so.
Rhyme

It has a good flow and rhymes very well.
Overall

It's a great poem with another strong and important message behind it. Good job.

From,
Jamie


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Rated: E | (4.5)

First impression

A beautifully worded poem with a strong message and rather, if I am reading it correctly, obvious message about how music can change people's lives.

Rhythm

It has a good rhythm to it and flows rather well.


Overall

It's a good free verse poem with a good message behind it. It doesn't lack anything in particular and is nearly perfect. Good job and keep it up

From,
jamie


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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a great short story and it is rather assuming how one simple thought can evolve into something absolutely massive.

You mentioned in the story how you rubbed elbows with many stars. I for one would love to hear about some of the stars you knew and met.

The layout of the story is a little scattered and disconnected but you can still pull the point of the story out of the mess.

Overall an interesting story on how entertainers thought at that time and, while short, it got its point across pretty effectively. Good job and keep it up.

From,
Jamie


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Review of Time Waits  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I'm going to guess this is an ad for a future story. If that is the case then sadly no, it does not draw enough attention.

At first glance it appears to similar to movie trailers.

However if you play around with the wording of it just a little bit more then you could have an interesting ad.

I'd recommend using different sized fonts for certain words.

Also try using a different base font or color to draw more attention to it immediately.

From,
Slime-j


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note* This review reflects the reviewer's opinions only. Take what you see fit from this review and ignore the rest. The story at the end of the day is the author's alone to control.

First impressions


The second chapter continued on with the elegant wording choices and decent descriptions. The characters seemed to get a little more color to them.

What I liked


The descriptions and wording of the story are, once again, beautifully done and give a clear image of what is happening at all times. The characters seemed to have been slightly more fleshed out than the previous chapter and there was less POV swapping, which can lead to confusion to some people.

what I disliked


The story once more suffered from cliches and, while more fleshed out than the previous chapter, still bland characters. One of the biggest cliches is the hero sacrificing their lives for another's, this was done twice in this story and in the first case, it was for a young girl, who he felt pity for. And the second one was for redemption for his sins.

Overall opinion


It's a good addition to the overall story but it suffers from the same faults as the first chapter.

Love,
Jane


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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First impression


At the first glance, it seemed like a well-written and well-worded story (All be it a little too common and cliche of a story plot).

What I liked about it


It was, as I previously stated, a well-written story that the author had clearly put time and effort into researching about some of the more scientific facts within it. It did swapping POV's extremely well and keep interest by doing so throughout the entire story. The twist on a typical war story was rather refreshing as it didn't follow the usual cliche, the cliche being that the main character is a hardened soldier or terrified one who later becomes hardened due to what they see.

What I didn't like


I must admit that starting a Sci-fi story off with action is a big no-no for me. However, it didn't completely turn me off the story. One of my major issues with this story is the main character. My problem with him is how bland and common his personality is. I have similar problems with the two side characters.

Overall opinion


It's a fairly decent start to a good Sci-fi story. However, it suffers from overused cliches and bland characters. These issues I hope will have been repaired in future chapters. I would, however, love to read more of it as it has the potential to be something great.

Love,
Jane


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a nicely written poem about not riding off of other people your entire life.

What I liked:

The rhyming scheme was very please and the message was one that most people could appreciate.

What I don't like:

I believe this poem would benefit quite a lot from having an extra verse or maybe even just one more line.

Overall opinion:

It's a pleasant and overall nicely written poem with a powerful message behind it. Good job


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Review of Slumber  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A beautiful poem about insomnia and the struggles of it. As someone who suffers through the same problem I can relate to wanting to slumber like everyone else can.

The flow and pacing of the poem is perfect and there aren't any grammar mistakes that I can see.

Good job on expressing such a common torture subtly


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This a well written and funny story of your failures of becoming a cowgirl. As a fellow horse lover/cowgirl I understand the thrill and excitement of the wind blowing through your hair and the feeling of freedom that comes with it. Sadly I also understand the sadness of falling off the horse far too well.

The story was humorous and rather engaging and by the time it was over I wanted to read more.

There were no grammar mistakes, as far as I can see anyway, and it was paced perfectly.

My only wish was that there was more but in this case less is more.

Great good Ruwthy


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Review of Muse Got Lost  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem is relatable and cute good job Bon Bon


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Review of Trust Your Gut  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A cute yet scary story
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A beautiful poem that escapes words and has a really good rhythm to it
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A humerus short story that was well written and well work a read


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Review of Lost Within  
Rated: E | (3.5)
an overall nice poem
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Review of Torment  
In affiliation with The Dark Society  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a confusing yet horrific tale of what can only be described as a girl going completely insane.

I adore the fact that you use so few different words they're mostly the same word repeated over and over again yet you feel so many different emotions.

Overall a disturbing piece which I would recommend reading in a dark room at 3am for max spok factor->slime-j


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I must say geoffrey you did an extremely good job at immediately immersing the reader nearly instantly and unlike many other stories you did not use overly technical language when describing any scientific point of the story.

your description of the island so far is very accurate when it comes to island that are outside of normal modern civilization and introducing a translator early in the story in a unique way and not a overly convenient way so as to immerse the reader farther.

So far i have only told you what i enjoyed about this however there is one thing i can think of to immediately improve the story and that is just giving us a better description of the Professor as you mention a bread but we were never told he had a clean and well looked after bread at all.

overall it is a beautifully worded all round nearly perfect story and i would love to see more work done on the same level as this->slime-j


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
It's a good start to a story expect I noticed you placed a lot of full stops a the beginning and while I'm no expert that amount of full stops aren't normally required but other then that I enjoyed it and like your style of writing


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Rated: E | (4.0)
A funny simple but enjoyable poem


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Review of Enduring Flame  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A beautiful poem with pleasant language and a nice, warm feeling after reading it


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
A nice poem that seems to be about the over sexuality of women these days
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Review of Monster  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A great poem all around
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Review of Her First Time  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A common experience that everyone hates having done and also beautifully diverted expectations from a much darker ending that only a dark minded reader will begin to expect


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Review of April  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A well rhymed and worded poem that makes you excited for spring to come rolling again


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A Poem that seems to be about breast cancer which if it is about breast cancer then it is done beautifully subtly


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Review of A Heroes Dream  
Rated: E | (4.0)
An amusing thought


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